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2006 Goes Horribly Wrong!


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A normal day in Metru Nui. Oh, did I say normal? Well, this is a normal day for them.Vakama: TOA NUVA, REPORT!Tahu: STOP YELLINGVakama: NOGali: Why are you yelling?Vakama: BECAUSE I FEEL LIKE ITLewa: Argh. Old people are so cranky sometimes.Kopaka: For once, I agree.Vakama: I HEARD THAT!Pohatu: Sir, could you kindly have hearing loss due to age?Vakama: I WILL TAKE NO SARCASM!Pohatu: I wasn't being sarcastic, I was being nice!Tahu: ...he does that. A lot.(An extremely long series of flashbacks that no one really cares about plays by)Nokama: What is with all the flashbacks?Whenua: Every show has them. Trust me. I know. (awkward silence) You do trust me right? PLEASE TELL ME YOU TRUST ME! Onewa: I TRUST YOU!Whenua: YOU'RE LYING! IN THE PAST YOU DIDN'T TRUST ME!Vakama: THIS IS NOW NOT THE PASTWhenua: I CAN'T HELP IT I'M AN ONU-TURAGA AND YOU USED TO HAVE DEPRESSION AND ZERO SELF CONFIDENCE(The Toa Nuva burst out laughing, while Vakama is left to be extremely embarrassed)Vakama: ENOUGH GO TO VOYA NUI AND GET THE IGNIKA!!!!!!!!!! (shoves them out the door to avoid more embarrassment)Matoro: O_o (leaves)Matau: WHO SAID YOU COULD LEAVE?!Matoro: You want me to stay? You guys really like me? Matau: NO! NOW GET OUT! YOU SUCK!Matoro: Aw. (leaves sad, which starts all the doubt of self-worth he has)(At Voya Nui...)Reidak: ME REIDAK SMASH SOMETHING.Thok: GO SMASH HAKANN, SHEESH! LEAVE ME ALONE! (spits and starts eating popcorn)Vezok: How do you get popcorn on this island?!Thok: I have the power of plot holes. You do not.Vezok: RAAAAAARGH! (storms off)Thok: That's what they all say...(huge explosions are heard)Hakann: WHAT THE KARZ, REIDAK!Reidak: Me Reidak want to smash something, so Thok tell Reidak smash you!Hakann: WELL WHY DID YOU LISTEN TO HIM?!Inappropriate content removed. -B6Thok: ARGH WHY'D YOU RUIN IT?!Zaktan: BECAUSE I HATE YOU! Come to think of it, I hate all of you.Vezok: The feeling is mutual.Zaktan: I'm gonna pretend I didn't hear that. Anyway Reidak, DON'T TAKE ORDERS FROM PEOPLE. Now go make me a sandwich.Reidak: Ok. (goes)Vezok: Hypocrite...(spits)...now how do YOU get sandwiches?Zaktan: Plot Hole Power.Vezok: WHAT?!Hakann: I'M HEALED!Vezok: HOW DID YOU RECOVER FROM A BUZZSAW ATTACK THAT FAST?!Hakann: Plot Hole Power.Reidak: (comes out with a super HUGE sandwich much larger than the time it took to make it would suggest) I have it too.Vezok: DOES EVERYONE BUT ME HAVE PLOT HOLE POWER?!Avak: Yes. I made a RAIL GUN SOMEHOW!(Vezok slams the gun on Avak's head)Avak: NOO! MY BABY! (tries to fix it)Vezok: Heh Heh Heh. Zaktan: I hate to interrupt your little romance, Vezok and Avak, but some Toa showed up on the coast.(All Piraka come out to attack)Tahu: We're here to beat you all to a pulp now.Zaktan: ...sure, sure, remove all the drama of dialogue just like that.Tahu: Ok. We're here for the Ignika.Zaktan: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARGH! CAN'T ANYONE DETECT SARCASM TODAY?!Reidak: What's Sore Plasm?(everyone jumps off a cliff in frustration, which Reidak follows due to being a fool, and yet Plot Hole Power lets them survive to fight in the next chapter!)

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Errr.....Lots of grammatical, punctuation and spelling errors, far too random, no plot development, not at all relevant to 2006. Too many in real life offensive things are being brought up and used as jokes on a site such as this, and used in a...less than good comedic way. I have to say, I didn't fully enjoy all the jokes being used. And enough with dumb, random capital lettered words. Usually, its the internet equivalent of screaming. Your randomness in using it on certain words translates itself to me as...Invading private space.

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Hmmm, let's see. You are doing a canon rehash of the 2006 storyline, except with nearly no plot development, too much randomness and terrible jokes. It doesn't flow that well, and I don't really get anything, nor do I understand the strange jokes.Also, I rather dislike the attempt at making racism funny.To improve, I suggest you make it more relevant to 2006. It doesn't seem very relevant at the moment.

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