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#41 Offline Noise #0579

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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 01:56 PM

War Machine and Death are the two Knights I tried the hardest to gather sympathy for. Not to say I didn't try at all for the others, of course...Corruption's killer...well, I'll just say his death will happen in an unexpected way. We should get to that next week, I believe... I actually did, at one point, think of what jobs the characters may have. At that time, I wrote that Khadaz tested video games for a living, since that's my dream job, but I've considered changing it to something more...realistic. Amy has a job as a teacher, though--I don't think I'll be changing that one.
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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 02:10 PM

Let me guess, Experita will go nuts and kill him, right?
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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 06:05 PM

*shrug* I guess we'll have to wait and see.
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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 06:18 PM

I guess we will, How was the vacation? I remember my vacation to Mt. Rushmore and the Crazy Horse statue.
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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 06:42 PM

I was at a cousin's wedding. Not really a wedding person, so...sort of a neutral opinion of it. Also, for any who may be reading this and are not aware, I've made a new Bioni-Lords announcement in my blog. The link in my signature, "A New Bioni-Lords Legend!", leads right to it if you're interested.
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Posted Oct 27 2011 - 09:18 PM

It's interesting that you say that you had trouble gathering sympathy for Death...I guess a lot of his motivation got explained in this chapter. Overall, however, I think he was a well-developed character. Also, nice Godzilla-like clash there between Death and Librum.
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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 11:58 AM

Nk and CTK were the ones who recommended the Godzilla clash, actually. It seemed like a neat twist, so I used it. The new chapters are up, and Saigo Zadakh is finally on the website (although I may expand the description at some point...it's kind of lacking something, I think). Tomorrow will be our last double-feature for a while: Khadaz and Amy catch up to Darkhadaz, but to get to him they have to go through his remaining minions. Khadaz vs. Kikanalo, and Amy vs. Union! It ends with an ominous transformation...
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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 12:30 PM

Ahh well I had hoped that Konpaku would do something when I saw he was in the chapter, but no such luck. Good chapter, Miserix was pretty strong but Kharuun is stronger.Who is stronger Aile or Norscu? And could Aile really defeat a Hapori if she wnt all out?
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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 12:57 PM

Sorry, Konpaku really only makes cryptic remarks in this Book. But he'll do much more in others... Well, Norscu was chosen to lead the Element-Lords instead of Aile, which could mean he's stronger...but then again, Aile is too goofy to be a leader, so maybe that's not it. We've yet to see Aile actually be defeated, so perhaps she could defeat the Hapori...but she always seems like she's kidding around, so it's tough to tell for sure. Um...*shrug* Aile's true power remains unknown. She does seem powerful, but it's tough to tell when to take what she says seriously.
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Posted Oct 28 2011 - 02:23 PM

Ah, I was starting to miss that sweet, sadistic robot voice. :sigh: Anyway, the dialogue in both battles was good. I've noticed Keizah has a tendency for ironic one-liners, which helps prove that he isn't entirely lacking a sense of humor. I feel sorry for Miserex, especially since it sounds like he was brainwashed by that master of his.
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Posted Oct 29 2011 - 12:07 PM

The new chapters are up. Next week will be one chapter a day, except maybe next Saturday. On Monday the Enterprise reaches the Lost Continent, and you can probably guess who catches up to them there... Also, I've made another blog post with VioletRose and HonoredSoul info!
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Posted Oct 29 2011 - 03:10 PM

Nice, finally Rahksean is back! And we have yet another diabolical plot to role the world from an evil villain. Not complaining but they always try to rule the world, I mean it's in the mission statement of the Dark Knights, "We strive to conquer the world and destroy all light-aligned Gahu and their Vassals." Why can't they just settle for the city or tri-state area?
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Posted Oct 29 2011 - 03:20 PM

Oh, you know those villains--their ambitions are bigger than their health meters...Hey, at least the 10th settled for the Bioni-Lords civilization rather than spreading out to the Lost Continent!
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Posted Oct 29 2011 - 05:59 PM

I knew there was something I liked about him. If you want to be really good at sad parts of the story and being enigmatic, try reading "A Series of Unfortunate Events" and "The Unauthorized Autobiography" both by Lemony Snicket.
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Posted Oct 30 2011 - 11:11 AM

I have read a few of those, just not all of them. Very interesting stories...
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Posted Oct 31 2011 - 07:44 AM

I like them because they are unique and the good guys don't win!
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Posted Oct 31 2011 - 02:06 PM

The new chapter is up. It could be seen as a special thing for Halloween--Stained Glass is back, and more powerful than ever. What's scarier than that?! Tomorrow we turn back to Khadaz and Gahu Darkhadaz. It's a rather lengthy chapter.
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Posted Oct 31 2011 - 02:30 PM

Oooohh! I like that! Stained Glass is epic, thats the only word that describes it, EPIC! And shouldn't Stained Glass be on the Super Spirits page as a Super Spirit or Pseudo-Super Spirit?
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Posted Oct 31 2011 - 04:51 PM

I have considered moving Stained Glass to the Pseudo-Super Spirit page, but I haven't quite decided yet. I'll wait until I update its file, which might be later this week. It's nice to know good ol' Stained Glass is still so popular! (...It's one of the few original ideas I have...)
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Posted Oct 31 2011 - 04:58 PM

And you should also give a list of its powers, I really like Stained Glass. <-<>->(Shifty glances)

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Posted Nov 01 2011 - 01:10 PM

Alright, I will do that. As usual, the chapter's up, and the site has been updated, this time with Gahu Darkhadaz. Tomorrow we turn back to Stained Glass, who only grows stronger while its foes lose power...
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Posted Nov 01 2011 - 01:24 PM

Nice, there's no end to what Khadaz can do. I wonder who would win if Khadaz and Aile fought? And what would happen if Aile used Chikara Compression and her Masters Aura?Marigold will have her hands full with healing Khadaz, NK, Zagrin and Kharzani.

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Posted Nov 01 2011 - 02:00 PM

Indeed, Khadaz's powers do seem unlimited. For now, at least...<.<>.> I intend to at some point (though it may be a while) have Khadaz and Aile go all out, and I think I will have Aile Compress her Master's Aura--I had not thought of that, thank you for suggesting it! It'll probably make her EVEN MORE overpowered...Khadaz and Aile have fought--when the new islands were discovered, Khadaz and friends went to go get the new Medallions--but it was called off before a true winner could be decided, like all Medallion Battles against Aile. Plus, they've both grown more powerful since then... And Marigold will be sure to let them know how busy they're keeping her!
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Posted Nov 01 2011 - 02:16 PM

Thanks! :biggrin: Overpowered fights are FUN!I like Marigold, she's kinda like me, humor-wise that is.
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Posted Nov 01 2011 - 02:52 PM

Marigold is a fun character to use. Keizah submitted her, and I'm trying to use her as best as I can with so little opportunity for screen time. She will appear a few more times before the end of the Book, though... On a side note, I've begun typing the Kako Previews I prepared. I may have a tentative schedule by the time Sekai is over!
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The Blade of Valor: Short Stories.  When the Spirits of the Elements are in danger, Tahra must take up a legendary weapon and challenge the creature waiting inside Lewa's temple.  Testing a concept, so please respond if you'd like to see more of this.


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Posted Nov 01 2011 - 07:54 PM

I'm a little curious about what would have happened if Darkhadaz had won that battle. Would have Khadaz been absorbed into Darkhadaz? Also, wouldn't killing Khadaz just make Darkhadaz more vulnerable? I guess he either didn't think of that, or was confident enough in the Gahu-Magna spell to risk it. The battle felt a little short considering the amount of time built up towards it, but it's still a satisfying read. Also, I liked how the battle ultimately came down to Khadaz creating a new technique, then Darkhadaz failing to duplicate the same technique (i.e. highlighting the differences between them). Interestingly, marigolds apparently mean "pain and grief" in the language of flowers. I didn't know that when I drafted Marigold, the character, but it fits her pretty well. ^_^ Keizah, signing out~!

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Posted Nov 02 2011 - 02:07 PM

Darkhadaz felt that, with the Gahu Magna spell, no one could kill him, so he would have no use for Khadaz. If he had beaten Khadaz, it may not have happened that way (Selina, by using Aile's Aura, may have stood a chance of defeating him), but he wasn't worried.That does fit Marigold quite well...The new chapter is up...although for some reason, the text is smaller than usual...until you get to the last few lines...I have no idea what happened. I tried fixing it, but that ended badly...sorry.I'll add artwork of Stained Glass Inmacula to the first post, along with a piece that depicts it with an alternate color scheme. The second piece was created when I was trying to decide which color scheme to use for Inmacula, and while it is currently just a hypothetical "shiny" variation, I plan to use an alternate Inmacula with this color scheme in the (rather distant) future.Tomorrow we catch up to Dranes and Azara. They've gotten pretty far into the Dark Knights' castle, but Barometz has showed up, intending to finish Dranes off once and for all.
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Posted Nov 02 2011 - 02:52 PM

Stained Glass Inmacula is doomed, it can't beat Khadaz, not with his Chikara Compression Burst! ...Can it? I can't wait for tomorrow, I LOVE NARAKU!
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Posted Nov 02 2011 - 03:46 PM

I wouldn't put anything past Stained Glass, especially in its Inmacula form. Also, Khadaz hasn't been healed yet, plus Chikara Compression Burst is experimental and risky, so there's no garuntee that this plan will work...If you love Naraku now, just wait...<.<>.>
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Posted Nov 02 2011 - 04:13 PM

Spoiler alert! Spoiler alert! Analysis: Human Male; Spirit: None; Resistance Level: 0; Victory is assured with 1/110,000,000 chance of defeat. Heheheh. How was that for Stained Glass speech? Goody, goody! Dranes is gonna own somebody!
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 12:50 PM

Excellent use of Stained Glass notation!It seems the Forums have decided to make copy-pasting from Microsoft Word difficult, because there are some problems with Chapter 156 as well...and there were some issues with the Review link, too. I dearly hope these are temporary...Tomorrow, Azara reaches Corruption's lab, finally coming face-to-face with D7!
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 02:08 PM

Is Naraku turning into a Super Spirit? And is he is then what will he be called?Not bad but the battle seemed to be lacking a bit in excitement, it needs a bit more of Dranes losing control and using overpowered techniques and stuff like that.Sorry if I seem over-critical, I think I have a fever...

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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 02:32 PM

Naraku is turning into a Super Spirit, but the transformation is still incomplete. His moveset has changed, and the new moveset will be put the Exo's Desk when the transformation is complete. The name of the Super Spirit will be revealed in a few chapters.Don't apologize, I thank you for the opinion! Dranes has a later battle where he really loses control and becomes completely overpowered, so I hope that will help make up for the lack of excitement in this chapter.
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 04:01 PM

Another Super Spirit! That makes something like twenty Super Spirits introduced in one book!That should do it, battles are more exciting when somebody loses control and becomes completely overpowered.
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 05:03 PM

Good job on the chapters, Zadakh, most of them have turned out to be excellent reads.I really was expecting Dranes to go beserk there tho, too bad he didn't. Looking forward to the chapter that he does though.
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Posted Nov 03 2011 - 05:24 PM

Yes, there are an excessive number of Super Spirits in Book 2...Thanks for the feedback!
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Posted Nov 04 2011 - 04:25 PM

Nice chapter, I agree with Dranes's comment about D7 Pyrami, who I am guessing has not made her last appearance?
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Posted Nov 04 2011 - 06:37 PM

Pyrami will appear again in Book 2, yes, but anything beyond that I cannot discuss yet.Tomorrow I'm planning one last double feature, Chapters 158 and 159! Norscu and Khadaz reach the Enterprise and put their plan into motion....but anything after that, I can't give away. SUSPENSE!
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Posted Nov 07 2011 - 08:38 AM

Thats a brilliant idea! Sealing Stained Glass into a stained glass window is the perfect solution.Man, it must hurt to have broken bones, I don't know what it feels like but it must hurt, but Keizah's a good medic.Darn! Just when I thought I had guessed how Corruption would die you did an expert plot twist! If Naraku isn't bound to Dranes's soul then can he still use him like any other orb?
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Posted Nov 07 2011 - 03:01 PM

Glad you liked how they took down Inmacula!I told you Corruption's death would be unexpected! Granted, 159 isn't all that exciting...sorry about that.Dranes can still use Naraku like a normal Spirit--anyone can. All that's changed is that Dranes doesn't need to keep Naraku anymore...we'll have to see what happens with that.Chapter 160 is up, showing Khadaz vs. Shadow Knight, and with that we begin (what will hopefully be) the final week of updates! If I can keep on schedule, the Epilogue should be up this Saturday!
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The Blade of Valor: Short Stories.  When the Spirits of the Elements are in danger, Tahra must take up a legendary weapon and challenge the creature waiting inside Lewa's temple.  Testing a concept, so please respond if you'd like to see more of this.





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