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#81 Offline Alex Turner

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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 03:41 PM

Actually, yes, Bong would have been much better :lol:Raking Back is funnier (yep, props to good ol' TD :D).
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 03:59 PM

@Scrathor: Whose twin is this? I assure you that he is an original character, and a truly threatening villain.Not much longer. I wrote the Prologue ages ago, and I'll soon have touched it up.@Wotz: Dun is more climactic.I don't care, we're sticking with TD's. (Props indeed)
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#83 Offline Alex Turner

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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 04:03 PM

Dun isn't very... Well, y'know, like, you wouldn't see it written in an actual book or piece of literature. Onomatopoeia doesn't work when you use imaginary words ;) (well, it is a word, but it's meaning is nothing like this :P)You know TD made Raking Back as well? :P Just recently in the RPG, actually.
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 04:06 PM

I don't care, it's as onomatopoeic as I can be arsed with. XPWas that in the BZPRPG? I ought to catch up on the BC stuff...
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 04:15 PM

Eventually the banner for this story will be finished. I hope
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 04:17 PM

I'm seriously considering cancelling it altogether. XP
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 04:36 PM

I mean, are they swamped with requests or something?
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 05:06 PM

Not really. He's only working on my request ATM AFAIK (but we're getting sorta off-topic here).
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 10:30 PM

I agree with Wotz. 'Dun' isn't a good sound effect.It's more of a Booooonnnnngggg sound.
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Posted Jun 16 2012 - 11:31 PM

I agree with Wotz. 'Dun' isn't a good sound effect.It's more of a Booooonnnnngggg sound.

I third this assertion. What is with all the randomly assorted mirror-smashing? Why are all of these people smashing things for no apparent reason? This isn't a comedy - you kind of have to explain that sort of thing. :)The Shadows characterization was good, however (He reminds me of the super-suit vendor from the Incredibles :)).And of course, the Apocalypse is postponed just long enough for Inc to save the universe. Or at least survive it's end. Because plot-armor never fails.

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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 03:55 AM

@EVERYONE: I chose 'dun'. Not 'bong', 'dun'.@fishers: It's the whole 'can't change the future' stuff. The mirror shows a person their darkest day, and if they see themselves smashing the mirror, chances are that they will either be driven insane or break it to stop it going any further.He'll be playing a big part later on.Actually, this time around, plot armour means absolutely nothing. If a hero goes up against a villain that could easily kill them, they're going to die, unless they do something very clever. But there will be hero-deaths. Lots of hero-deaths.
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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 04:36 AM

Actually, this time around, plot armour means absolutely nothing. If a hero goes up against a villain that could easily kill them, they're going to die, unless they do something very clever. But there will be hero-deaths. Lots of hero-deaths.

Oh, boy. *Prepares Brainy-specs, and notebook for storyline notes*

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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 07:41 AM

Yup. The Eleventh Hour is set to be pretty dark.By the way, the characters who I can tell you are returning without spoiling the plot are Pirok, Proditor, and Frustro. I know a lot of you people like Pirok best out of all the characters, so there ya go. XP
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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 07:42 AM

YES, PIROK'S RETURNING :happydance:
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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 08:05 AM

Pirok will be playing a very big part in The Eleventh Hour. He'll be AT LEAST equal to Incommodo in terms of plot importance.
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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 04:17 PM

The return of Pirok the Va-Matoran...excuse me, Toa of Fire...will be an interesting advent. Maybe once you've finished the series I'll reread over it and try to figure out what logic you used to piece this together, as it currently escapes me. I don't really want Inc or Pirok to die. :( Oh, well, the matter only increases my fascination with your next work...otherwise it would just be boring. :)
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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 05:09 PM

Shadows isn't all that logical, but from Dark Mirror onwards I have thought everything through perfectly. So, while some of the stuff in Shadows might not quite fit, the rest is explained.Well, Inc you already know is going to be both shot and incinerated (yay for multiple lives gained from Time-Keeper-ness), and I guarantee you that Pirok (at least, this timeline's Pirok) will have a heroic death. Kinda.
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Posted Jun 17 2012 - 09:55 PM

So the return of your original, original character?I see.
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Posted Jun 18 2012 - 01:28 AM

Actually, I thought up Proditor long before Pirok.
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Posted Jun 18 2012 - 05:16 PM

Ah, I see.Tell me, why does the Eleventh Hour's banner have a guy with hair? Pretty sure Toa don't have hair.
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Posted Jun 19 2012 - 12:55 AM

@Hub: Shadows appear more humanoid than Toa-like. Scrathor drew the image (it was meant to be of a Shadow), but it was surprisingly close to the appearance of a Shadow, so I used it.
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Posted Jun 19 2012 - 06:36 AM

@Hub: Shadows appear more humanoid than Toa-like. Scrathor drew the image (it was meant to be of a Shadow), but it was surprisingly close to the appearance of a Shadow, so I used it.

Might help if you used my new name. Confuses people if they can't find me...

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Posted Jun 19 2012 - 07:49 AM

Ah, I see.Looks pretty animesque though.Also, could you provide us a general time span for when The Eleventh Hour might be coming out?
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Posted Jun 19 2012 - 10:44 AM

Ah, I see.Looks pretty animesque though.Also, could you provide us a general time span for when The Eleventh Hour might be coming out?

Just about right now. :PAlso, there's a particular Shadow (the one from the Epilogue) who looks a whole lot like that (even the animé-esque-ness), and since he has major plot importance I thought it'd work well.

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Posted Jun 19 2012 - 10:54 AM

Need T.E.H now! Haven't been this excited since the DW Series 6 premiere!

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Posted Jun 19 2012 - 11:12 AM

Need T.E.H now! Haven't been this excited since the DW Series 6 premiere!

I NO, RITE?

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Posted Aug 13 2012 - 03:36 PM

Nice banner! *Smirks*
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Posted Aug 13 2012 - 03:40 PM

Nice banner! *Smirks*

Thanks for making it. :lol:- Vorex

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