Posted May 15 2012 - 06:34 AM
Very neat drawing! However, I don't know if it's quite as good as your other entry. It just doesn't feel as full of detail. I think perhaps this could have been helped by changing the composition slightly-- as it is, I don't think the dark areas on the right and left sides of the image are accomplishing much, and in fact they sort of distract from the image's focal point, that being the "true" figure in the middle and the space between the two warring personalities.I'm also not sure I like the way the "personalities" are drawn, with well-defined lineart but faded, nebulous colors. I think they might have looked better if they had been colored entirely the way you colored Vezok's sword and Vezon's staff. On those, I think the lack of well-defined lineart and the simplified shading gives them a "ghostly" look that would have suited both personalities as a whole. Some parts of the figures do show this type of shading-- it's the faces where I feel the lineart might be a bit too well-defined.Don't get the impression that I don't like this image, though. The place where I think it is most outstanding is the "true" figure in the center. The stark shading, separated into light and dark areas, is stunning, and definitely accomplishes your goal of trying to capture the best parts of Stuart Sayger's illustrative style. This part of the drawing is also well-framed by the two conflicting personalities, although perhaps Vezon's personality could have been scooted a bit further towards the center for greater symmetry. The shading of the background is excellent, with a white glow cast against a greenish-black background, though as I mentioned before it might have helped to have a closer-cropped composition with less empty space around the margins.Overall, I'm sure this will do fairly well in the contest, and it definitely deserves to. But I think the most important thing it accomplishes, through its contrast with your other entry, is demonstrating just how versatile your creative vision of the BIONICLE story can be. Even looking beyond the difference in the aesthetic style, the other drawing, with its firm placement in the reality of the story, sharply contrasts with this one which portrays a symbolic battle representing the psychological state of its subjects. Great work here, and I look forward to seeing much more of your work once this contest is over!