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#161 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 12 2012 - 11:12 PM

And I have reviewed Sherlock Holmes and the Missing Christmas Presents by Kumata. Posted Image
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#162 Offline Chro

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Posted Oct 14 2012 - 04:00 PM

Hello all.I'm not exactly sure how the request process works, so bear with me if I'm wrong here.Anyways, could I please get some critique on Snowfall?Thanks. :D
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#163 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 14 2012 - 04:48 PM

Hello all.I'm not exactly sure how the request process works, so bear with me if I'm wrong here.Anyways, could I please get some critique on Snowfall?Thanks. :biggrin:

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#164 Offline Zaxvo

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Posted Oct 15 2012 - 08:24 PM

Just reviewed Return. Fantastic piece of writing, I highly recommend to to everyone, regardless of what you like to write, this is how emotions should be described.
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#165 Offline Nuile the Paracosmic Tulpa

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 06:53 PM

I'd like to request a review for Rugged Explorers, by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith. My thanks in advance.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:


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#166 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 11:27 PM

I'd like to request a review for Rugged Explorers, by Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith. My thanks in advance.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:

Of course! Assigned to Zaxvo. Posted Image

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#167 Offline Toa Smoke Monster

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 11:36 PM

I would like to request a review for my short story Prisoner of the Red Star by yours truly, Toa Smoke Monster. Thanks in advance.
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#168 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 16 2012 - 11:45 PM

I would like to request a review for my short story Prisoner of the Red Star by yours truly, Toa Smoke Monster. Thanks in advance.

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#169 Offline Cederak

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 12:03 AM

May I have a critique of my short story, Chronicle? :)-Ced
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#170 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 12:06 AM

May I have a critique of my short story, Chronicle? :)-Ced

Looks like it's review-requesting day. But of course! Assigned to Proud Stigma. =] Posted Image

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#171 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 11:00 PM

And The Forest is reviewed.
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#172 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 18 2012 - 02:18 AM

And I have reviewed "Unsung" by Nuile.Assignments for this week:Velox: Rules of Engagement, by AderiaNuile: Warm, by Grant SudYukiko: Flash Fiction Marathon Entries by Space: Ocean of Awe (you only need to review 3)Zaxvo: The Bodyguard, by Takuma NuvaProud Stigma: An Assassin's Reflections, by Zarayna(Page 11)I know that some of these have already had an SSCC review, but there is always more to say, even if it is just praise. Those with assigned requests may have two weeks for their charity reviews -- let me know if you need the two weeks, otherwise you will be assigned a new one next week. As usual, reviews are due by next Wednesday, October 24th. Posted Image

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#173 Offline The Lord Of Wednesday

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Posted Oct 18 2012 - 02:24 PM

I have completed the following...To Fly By Peach 00Chronicle By Cederak.
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#174 Offline LewaLew

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Posted Oct 20 2012 - 02:28 PM

It's not your traditional short story (It's actually a free verse poem) but I would appreciate if one of you guys could review "Ahkmou", by yours truly, LewaLew.
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#175 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 20 2012 - 03:08 PM

It's not your traditional short story (It's actually a free verse poem) but I would appreciate if one of you guys could review "Ahkmou", by yours truly, LewaLew.

Looks like it's my turn to review -- assigned to myself.Posted Image

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Posted Oct 22 2012 - 09:42 PM

And I've reviewed my assigned story. I may need an extra week for the charity review.
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#177 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Oct 22 2012 - 11:13 PM

Snowfall has been reviewed.I will definitely need the extra week. Also, I would like to request a two week break after this assignment. This has been an incredibly stressful time for me and I need to rest.
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#178 Offline Grantaire

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Posted Oct 25 2012 - 03:14 PM

Reviewed Prisoner of the Red Star. Sorry for the lateness, I had some severe reviewer's block on that story.
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#179 Offline The Lord Of Wednesday

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Posted Oct 25 2012 - 08:13 PM

An Assassin's Reflections by Zarayna, Completed.
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#180 Offline Nuile the Paracosmic Tulpa

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Posted Oct 25 2012 - 08:48 PM

I apologize for being so late on this one. But Grant-Sud's Warm, reviewed.

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:


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#181 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 03:38 AM

And I have reviewed "Rules of Engagement", by Aderia, and "Ahkmou", by LewaLew. I'd also like to announce our latest critic: Jerzy. Tolkien and I both think that he'll be a good addition to our team, so let's give him a warm welcome! Good to work with you again, Jerzy. Posted Image
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#182 Offline Cederak

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 07:49 PM

Hoping I could get a review for this. Thanks. :)Nascent - Cederak
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#183 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 08:02 PM

Hoping I could get a review for this. Thanks. :)Nascent - Cederak

With pleasure! Assigned to our newest critic, Jerzy. Posted Image

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#184 Offline Hawkeye

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 11:59 PM

Guess what I got done: http://www.bzpower.c...83
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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 03:13 PM

Thank you much for your timely response to my request, and congrats on joining the SSCC, Jerzy. :)-Ced
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#186 Offline Hawkeye

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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 04:52 PM

It's no problem at all.
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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 05:34 PM

Requesting a review of:Shredded Radiance by Zarayna.
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#188 Offline Velox

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Posted Oct 28 2012 - 08:07 PM

Requesting a review of:Shredded Radiance by Zarayna.

I'll be assigning this to our latest critic, Jerzy, as well. Posted Image

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#189 Offline Hawkeye

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Posted Oct 30 2012 - 01:17 AM

Finished my review of Mr. Zaranya's story: http://www.bzpower.c...79
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Posted Oct 30 2012 - 08:26 PM

Well, The Bodyguard has been reviewed.
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Posted Oct 31 2012 - 02:35 AM

Due to Holiday festivities tomorrow, I wish to inform everyone here that I will not be able to review as quickly as I would be able to normally. Just a heads up.
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#192 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Oct 31 2012 - 11:02 PM

I have reviewed my assignment.With that, I would like to request a month break. I have too many things on my mind right now, and I really need the time off.Have a Happy Halloween, if it's not over already, lulz.
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Posted Nov 01 2012 - 02:40 AM

Velox: FFC Compilation, by DespairNuile: Meanwhere, Elsewhile by MultiverseZaxvo: Love Conquers All, by NuileProud Stigma: Moment of Fragile Courage, by Grant-Sud Jerzy: Non-Bionicle Flash Fiction Entries by Danska: Shadow Master(page 12, the Cybernaut)Due by next Wednesday, November 7th. As usual, for flash fiction compilations, you only need to review three of them (but can, of course, review more if you wish). Posted Image
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Posted Nov 05 2012 - 03:15 PM

Your advice would be much-appreciated on Danse Macabre with a Contract, by Giant of Lannister.
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Posted Nov 05 2012 - 03:56 PM

Betrayed by iBrow Voltex - review has been requested, please.
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Posted Nov 05 2012 - 07:07 PM

Your advice would be much-appreciated on Danse Macabre with a Contract, by Giant of Lannister.

Assigned to Tolkien.

Betrayed by iBrow Voltex - review has been requested, please.

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#197 Offline Nuile the Paracosmic Tulpa

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Posted Nov 07 2012 - 10:07 PM

Meanwhile, Elsewhere, reviewed.And welcome to the team, Jerzy!

Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:


Edited by My Name is Nuile, Nov 07 2012 - 10:08 PM.

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Posted Nov 08 2012 - 06:06 PM

Moment Of Fragile Courage by Quote (The Traveler) Completed.
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Posted Nov 11 2012 - 01:14 AM

Reviewed Danse Macabre with a Contract, by Giant of Lannister.JRRT
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Posted Nov 12 2012 - 08:25 AM

I would like to ask if my Short Story could be reviewed. :)It's called Darkness - by me, Tehurye, of course.Thank you!
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