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#321 Offline Watcher on the Walls

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Posted Apr 26 2013 - 08:33 PM

Alright, let's try this out. Thanks in advance.Foundations from Unity - Takua Dragonstar7
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#322 Offline Velox

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Posted Apr 27 2013 - 09:23 PM

Alright, let's try this out. Thanks in advance.Foundations from Unity - Takua Dragonstar7

 

Assigned to Tolkien. Thank you for choosing the SSCC! 


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#323 Offline Zaxvo

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Posted May 01 2013 - 11:17 PM

Oh dear I'm a tad late...sorry. Here's the review for Somewhere.


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#324 Offline Velox

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Posted May 02 2013 - 02:38 AM

[color=#000080;][font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Through the Gate of Eternity, reviewed. And this week's charity reviews:[/color][/font]

 

[color=#000080;][font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Velox: I'm really sorry, but I'm going to have to take one more week off. [/color][/font]

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"][color=#000080;]Nuile: [/color][color=#000080;]Fat and Greasy[/color][color=#000080;], by iBrow[/color][/font]

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"][color=#000080;]Yukiko: [/color][color=#000080;]The Little Elf that Lived in a Pocket[/color][color=#000080;], by Tekulo[/color][/font]

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"][color=#000080;]Zaxvo: [/color][color=#000080;]The House on the Snow[/color][color=#000080;], by Tekulo[/color][/font]

[color=#000080;][font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Dual Matrix: exempt due to having an assigned review[/color][/font]

 

[color=#000080;][font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Due 5/8 as usual. Thanks guys![/color][/font]

 

[color=#000080;][font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Posted Image[/color][/font]


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#325 Offline Dual Cee

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Posted May 02 2013 - 05:04 PM

Ah victory, The Eye of the Storm reviewed.
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#326 Offline Yukiko

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Posted May 02 2013 - 09:32 PM

Attic Treasure has been reviewed.  Thanks for the extension.


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#327 Offline Tolkien

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Posted May 03 2013 - 10:22 PM

Reviewed "Foundations from Unity", by Takua Dragonstar7.

 

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Posted May 08 2013 - 12:59 PM

I'm not sure, I really don't have a review to accomplish till tonight? Because I go on holiday within a hour or three and would not be able to acces internet, so if I have a review to do, please tell, also Velox would you mind giving me the story to review within the next week now? So I can take it with me...


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#329 Offline Velox

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Posted May 08 2013 - 01:44 PM

Nope, you don't have a review due today because you had an assigned requested review. For this week's charity review, you can do Unpopular, by Nick Silverpen.


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#330 Offline Yukiko

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Posted May 08 2013 - 08:43 PM

The Little Elf that Lived in a Pocket has been reviewed.

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#331 Offline Nuile the Paracosmic Tulpa

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Posted May 08 2013 - 08:46 PM

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]I remember a time when I was quick about doing my reviews. When I was the first to complete my assignments. When I was young and eager . . . I'll have to try that again one of these days.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]But for now, [/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]The Hardest Thing to Hold[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);] and [/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]Fat and Greasy[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);], reviewed and re-reviewed.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:[/color]


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Posted May 08 2013 - 09:56 PM

And The House on the Snow has been reviewed.
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Posted May 08 2013 - 09:59 PM

Since you guys are now doing OTC story reviews, I like to have my first work of the topic. Doomsday


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Posted May 09 2013 - 12:59 AM

Since you guys are now doing OTC story reviews, I like to have my first work of the topic. Doomsday

 

Assigned to Nuile. And charity reviews for this week:

 

Velox: Lonesome Spirits by Tahuaka

Nuile: Through the Mirror by Nick Silverpen

Yukiko: Balloon Sky At Night by SkyLandOceAnna

Zaxvo: Rinse Cycle by Legolover

Dual Matrix: already assigned


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Posted May 14 2013 - 07:07 PM

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"][color=#000080;]In lieu of the forums being offline, I'm extending the deadline for charity reviews to Friday, May 17th. I'll then just give you guys the rest of the week off until next Wednesday (the 22nd) when I'll assign new charity reviews. =][/color][/font]


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Posted May 17 2013 - 11:58 AM

Hello, I'd like to request a review please?

 

A Recluse's Dilemma, Pahrak #0579


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Posted May 17 2013 - 05:17 PM

Ok done reviewing "Unpopular", wow, I'm first, thats new, yeey.
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Posted May 17 2013 - 09:14 PM

Balloon Sky at Night is reviewed.


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Posted May 17 2013 - 10:56 PM

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Doomsday[/color][color=rgb(0,128,0);]. No more late-night reviews for me. XD[/color]

 

[color=rgb(0,128,0);]Sincerely, Nuile: Lunatic Wordsmith :smilemirunu:[/color]


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Posted May 17 2013 - 11:50 PM

Hello, I'd like to request a review please?

 

A Recluse's Dilemma, Pahrak #0579

 

Assigned to Yukiko. 

 

And I've reviewed Lonesome Spirits--I'll be posting new Charity Reviews this Wednesday.


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Posted May 20 2013 - 09:41 PM

Well...I'm late for this. My apologies. Here's the review for Rinse Cycle


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#342 Offline Yukiko

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Posted May 25 2013 - 10:08 PM

A Recluse's Dilemma has been reviewed.


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#343 Offline Velox

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Posted May 26 2013 - 12:04 AM

Oh, dang, I seem to have completely forgotten about the Charity Reviews. >_< I guess we'll just take the rest of this week off, and I'll assign new ones this Wednesday. Really sorry about that (though I'm not sure you guys mind a break =P)--I'll try my best to be more on top of things in the future. 


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Posted May 26 2013 - 09:29 AM

A Recluse's Dilemma has been reviewed.

 

Thank you very much!


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Posted May 28 2013 - 08:52 AM

Could you guys review The Legend of Time and Life?

 

And also, I would like to apply to become a critic. PM sent.


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Posted May 29 2013 - 01:21 AM

Could you guys review The Legend of Time and Life?

 

And also, I would like to apply to become a critic. PM sent.

 

 

Assigned to Zaxvo. As for your PM, sorry if I don't get around to replying for a few days, just as a warning.

 

Now then, charity reviews. Believe it or not, there's only 10 more stories to review for the OTC forum! So I'm going to assign them all now; the first batch will be due next Wednesday, and the second batch will be due the week after. If you want to just get them done with, however, more power to you. There's a good chance the charity reviews will be discontinued after this, so make 'em count! ^_^

 

Batch 1:

Velox: Ether, by Nuile

Nuile: Under the Stars, by Kraggh

Yukiko: City, by Baltarc

Zaxvo: Climbing the Tree of Life, by Nuile

Dual Matrix: Three Minutes, by Ilyusha Blokfase

 

Batch 2:

Velox: Weaver, Seeker, and Spark, by Death of the Endless

Nuile: Land and Liberty, by Eduard Bernstein

Yukiko: Battle Scars, by Naina

Zaxvo: Rock, Paper, Scissors, by Eduard Bernstein

Dual Matrix: Exit Number 117, by Eyru


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Posted Jun 04 2013 - 04:54 PM

Story I had to review is reviewed...
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Posted Jun 04 2013 - 05:30 PM

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"][color=#000080;]Oops, nevermind. [/color][/font]


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#349 Offline Yukiko

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Posted Jun 05 2013 - 07:32 PM

City has been reviewed.


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Posted Jun 06 2013 - 07:46 AM

And here's the review for The Legend of time and Light.
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Posted Jun 07 2013 - 12:24 PM

I'd like to request a review, if possible.

 

Fruitful - Haecceity

 

 


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Posted Jun 07 2013 - 07:15 PM

I'd like to request a review, if possible.

 

Fruitful - Haecceity

 

Sure thing! Assigned to Dual Matrix. 


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Posted Jun 12 2013 - 09:48 PM

Battle Scars has been reviewed.


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Posted Jun 13 2013 - 03:08 PM

And I have reviewed "Ether" and "Weaver, Seeker, and Spark." Really sorry for being late on these. 

 

Anyway, congratulations! We're finished with the Charity Reviews. ^_^ Thanks to everyone for all the reviews you've done. I still recommend going out and trying to review stories, but I won't be assigning them any more (with the exception of official requests, of course). 

 

 

And on another note, I've got some good news: Both Tyler Durden and Zarayna are coming back as active critics! They've done great work for us in the past, so it's great to have them back.


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Posted Jun 13 2013 - 05:05 PM

Here's my entrance review!


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Posted Jun 13 2013 - 06:09 PM

Tyler!! Welcome back!


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Posted Jun 13 2013 - 08:05 PM

If there is a critic brave enough to stare upon an aberrant horror of obscenely rushed flash fiction, I would enjoyed have the following story reviewed. 

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Prelude to Darkness[/font] - Replicant


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Posted Jun 13 2013 - 08:11 PM

Tyler!! Welcome back!

 

Surprised? Me, too.

 

-Tyler


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Posted Jun 13 2013 - 08:27 PM

Here's my entrance review!

 

Oh, you could've just PM'd me, but this is fine too--like I said in my PM, Tolkien and I will discuss it and you'll hear back from one of us at that point as to whether or not you're accepted. Probably will take a few days at least, unfortunately--we've got several other things going on too. 

 

If there is a critic brave enough to stare upon an aberrant horror of obscenely rushed flash fiction, I would enjoyed have the following story reviewed. 

 

[font="'times new roman', times, serif;"]Prelude to Darkness[/font] - Replicant

 

Sure thing--assigned to...Grantaire. His first assignment after being on a long hiatus. 


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Posted Jun 16 2013 - 02:00 AM

Might as well see what people think of my first attempt at Bionicle-themed writing.

 

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