Mushy the Mushroom Posted June 13, 2012 Share Posted June 13, 2012 (edited) i have decided to start making comics. thanks to Toa of Smooth Jazz for making it possible. credit to Roablin for the kit.an introduction 1 DO_NOT_CLICK_THISan intoduction 2 DO_NOT_CLICK_THIS#1 DO_NOT_CLICK_THIS#2DO_NOT_CLICK_THIS#3 DO_NOT_CLICK_THIS i can't wait for this topic to die!!!!!! if any staff members happen to be looking at this topic please close it. Edited June 23, 2012 by Mushy the Mushroom Member-Made Emote Topic Original Mush art thanks to @Bambi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrozenFlash Posted June 13, 2012 Share Posted June 13, 2012 The text could be in a different color since it's a bit hard to see but the comics look like it could lead up to a great story! Great job on your first comic, Mushy! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted June 13, 2012 Share Posted June 13, 2012 You started out something like me! Seems like a good plot unfolding, but could use more panels.And VS was right about the text. mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Control_Vee Posted June 14, 2012 Share Posted June 14, 2012 For a quick example about the above mentioning of text issues, which i can agree on, try making a slightly larger version of the text in some other color, then make the real text in front of it in the correct color. Sometimes this can give some... alignment issues, actually. But it's a basic start to get you going in the right direction. Sisen said:Let's focus on Snail! Snail is the bombdiggity. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mushy the Mushroom Posted June 14, 2012 Author Share Posted June 14, 2012 comic #2 is up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D Member-Made Emote Topic Original Mush art thanks to @Bambi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted June 14, 2012 Share Posted June 14, 2012 First one isn't really worth reviewing. It doesn't even introduce anyone. But, good size panels, makes it very easy to read.Second one is too random. I don't get it.Graphical Tip: Use the fill tool on those gray spaces inside their arms, and those cheesy round shadows to turn them white. Then you can have clearer, better comics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mushy the Mushroom Posted June 14, 2012 Author Share Posted June 14, 2012 (edited) the introduction is up and comic #3 Edited June 14, 2012 by Mushy the Mushroom Member-Made Emote Topic Original Mush art thanks to @Bambi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted June 14, 2012 Share Posted June 14, 2012 The intro only introduced Mushy. The coffee thing was, honestly, boring.@Comic 3 Because it's Patrick Star. 'Nuff said. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mushy the Mushroom Posted June 14, 2012 Author Share Posted June 14, 2012 a new intro is up Member-Made Emote Topic Original Mush art thanks to @Bambi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted June 14, 2012 Share Posted June 14, 2012 Good, he's a permanent character. I hate random background characters being the center of a comic.Still, your comics need some...work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taka Nuvia Posted June 14, 2012 Share Posted June 14, 2012 Okay to be honest that's quite a coincidence that you've got a character that's a 'matoran of powers', because I've had a 'Toa of powers' in my own comics for quite a while now... but okay.Anyways, is there a reason while your files are so much bigger than the actual comics? All that white space is a bit... distracting. My art collection topic - updated! (21/09/2021) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrozenFlash Posted June 14, 2012 Share Posted June 14, 2012 Comic 3 is okay but it doesn't look like it could lead up to a story since the comic is a bit short to explain anything. Also, I do like how "Pow!" is one of the main characters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mushy the Mushroom Posted June 16, 2012 Author Share Posted June 16, 2012 i'm going to stop making comics mine are realy lame Member-Made Emote Topic Original Mush art thanks to @Bambi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted June 16, 2012 Share Posted June 16, 2012 No, Mushy! I do agree, they are lame right now, but look at all these comments! They show ways to fix said lameness, and show the good parts. Giving up in the face of criticism is never the answer. Remember that stopmotion you made? You could try out similar humor here and see how it goes.Just don't give up. TPH, with all his past failures, never did. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mushy the Mushroom Posted June 16, 2012 Author Share Posted June 16, 2012 No, Mushy! I do agree, they are lame right now, but look at all these comments! They show ways to fix said lameness, and show the good parts. Giving up in the face of criticism is never the answer. Remember that stopmotion you made? You could try out similar humor here and see how it goes.Just don't give up. TPH, with all his past failures, never did.okay, i will keep making them and try to fix the lameness Member-Made Emote Topic Original Mush art thanks to @Bambi Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
iPenguin Posted June 16, 2012 Share Posted June 16, 2012 I don't get any of the comics. It just seems to be these motionless and oversized matoran teleporting everywhere. The text is hard to read, and the grammar is poor. I don't really see any humour or plot. I have made many, many bad comics in the past. But no one told me they were bad, so I kept making them. Catch my drift? Majhost sucks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tomaku Posted June 16, 2012 Share Posted June 16, 2012 Yep listen to Floyd, try to put the text through some spell check before you publish. http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=8708 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
No longer active Posted June 16, 2012 Share Posted June 16, 2012 These comics remind me of when I first started comic making. 2020 STATUS UPDATE: If you've come across any of my topics such, as my comic series which are now lost, I just want to say is I have since DISOWNED them as of 2020. Looking back at them I'm no longer proud of what I've made here on BZPower. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wade. Posted June 17, 2012 Share Posted June 17, 2012 If you want a good tip, I would recommend you ask yourself this while making comics:If I were someone else, would I find this funny? Does this have any real plot which I could continue? Does it make sense?Technical difficulties and such can be rectified with time and experience although I do agree that you'll want to take care of spelling, grammar and the text colour. Not what I'd call a decent start but we all hope you'll improve.Another good tip is to go look at other successful comics and try to figure out what made them good. Of course, that doesn't mean you can completely copy their stuff since that's kind of asking for... unpleasantness. BZPRPG Profiles Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted June 17, 2012 Share Posted June 17, 2012 All valid points. Mushy, take them into account and do not contradict them, but use them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
iPenguin Posted June 20, 2012 Share Posted June 20, 2012 (edited) I just reread my post and I apologise for how harsh it sounded. Though my points still stand and these do need work. It's better to know what's wrong now so you can fix it rather than have a series of failing comics at only seem to slightly get better from the last. Again, sorry for sounding a little cynical, but please try to improve. Edited June 20, 2012 by Peng Floyd Majhost sucks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ziko Posted June 25, 2012 Share Posted June 25, 2012 Topic closed as requested. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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