Jump to content

  • Log in with Facebook Log in with Twitter Log In with Google      Sign In   
  • Create Account

Welcome to BZPower!

Hi there, while we hope you enjoy browsing through the site, there's a lot more you can do if you register. The process is easy and you can use your Google, Facebook, or Twitter account to make it even faster. Some perks of joining include:
  • Create your own topics, participate in existing discussions, and vote in polls
  • Show off your creations, stories, art, music, and movies and play member and staff-run games
  • Enter contests to win free LEGO sets and other prizes, and vote to decide the winners
  • Participate in raffles, including exclusive raffles for new members, and win free LEGO sets
  • Send private messages to other members
  • Organize with other members to attend or send your MOCs to LEGO fan events all over the world
  • Much, much more!
Enjoy your visit!

Posted Image


Click to ToggleParticipate in our raffle!

Hi, Guest. Come take a look and participate in our raffle:

Chima 2014 Big Raffle
Chima 2014 New Member Raffle
Chima 2014 Little Raffle

Photo

Second Time's The Charm


  • Please log in to reply
61 replies to this topic

#1 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jun 28 2012 - 12:37 PM

Hey readers, this is my second attempt at comic making. I hope you guys (and girls) like it!credit to all contributors of the six shade chimoru kit.1. It has that new house smell!2.McDonalds!3. BACON4. Cheeseburger catapult5. BLOOD6. Nah.7.Yup.8.Trollympics? credit to Malignus for spriting that wonderful villain using the chimoru R kit for me.9. sad birthday, dude.10. Flumph.PGS1. Soran2. TNG3. Malignus4. Sybre5. Dr. GigglesFillers:Olympics!GS1.2.3.4.5.GS or PGS application:Name to be usedGender:sprite kit: (put a link)personality:notes:Banner: Posted Image
[url=http://custombionicle.wikia.com/wiki/User:RaidenToaofThunder?image=Raiden-27s_Banner-png][img]http://images4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120629021353/custombionicle/images/4/4c/Raiden%27s_Banner.png[/img][/url]
Note: I will start to make comics on a 2 day to 1 week basis, due to a busy schedule.

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Aug 28 2012 - 09:35 AM.

  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#2 Offline Soran

Soran
  • Members
  • Encountering Protodermis

  • 823 posts
  •  

Posted Jun 28 2012 - 12:52 PM

I liked the first comic. It wasn't necessarily funny, but it did lead to a possible funny story arc. Since there is only one comic, theres not much to judge on. The comic seems to have shrunken and made it slightly blurry (probably because its hosted on wikia) and you can't distinguish much details from it. There aren't any other characters shown besides your main character, so I'll await further comics for that. I'm suspecting that this is made in MS Paint, so graphics might be lower quality then using gimp for instance. Also, normally I would appreciate that you don't use my daily strip template or backgrounds (Because those are only for use of fan comics for my comic series) but because of the blurriness I'll allow it since it doesn't really look like my backgrounds. Just the same wall color which a lot of comics have. I hope to expect more soon,~Soran
  • 0

#3 Offline Flux: The Explorer

Flux: The Explorer
  • Members
  • Emerging Fluidic Master

  • 1,277 posts
  •  

Posted Jun 28 2012 - 01:00 PM

Nice job on your first comic. The text is a bit hard to see and maybe there could be an introduction to your character. The comic does look like it could lead into a funny story, which is good. Great job on this!
  • 0

 pWPTu7m.jpg

Credits go to Strack for the awesome sprite.

 

I'm an Emerging Fluidic Master (again). Time to start working on my Waterbending.
I'm still a ninja although I think I'm losing my skills as one.
"You're saying this kingdom will vanish? NOT TODAY! THIS KINGDOM IS ALL MINE! SO YOU VANISH!"

~ Bowser, in Bowser's Inside story


#4 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jun 28 2012 - 01:15 PM

@Soran, I did use the template, but it's customized to look like not-yours. (that would be copying)@FF Ice Master, thanks for the feedback, I might get GIMP, and it is going to be a funny story. i just need one or two guest stars...
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#5 Offline Axilus Prime

Axilus Prime
  • Members
  • Kohrak-Kal Shattered

  • 4,798 posts
  •  

Posted Jun 28 2012 - 10:31 PM

So, it is an arc. Good, it would be a shame to see that fail. A good but simple start. Good luck in future, I'll be following this!Oh, and you now have two PGSes.
  • 0

#6 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jun 29 2012 - 11:04 AM

New comic!comic 2
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#7 Offline Soran

Soran
  • Members
  • Encountering Protodermis

  • 823 posts
  •  

Posted Jun 29 2012 - 11:58 AM

Haha, that was entertaining. It reminded me of what those people do in video games once they receive an item of some sort. If I may give a tip, I think you should try to change the wall color different colors when going to different places, and sometimes the floor as well. Otherwise it will end up looking like you're in the same room the whole time.~Soran
  • 0

#8 Offline Axilus Prime

Axilus Prime
  • Members
  • Kohrak-Kal Shattered

  • 4,798 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 06:18 AM

Awesomeness. Reminds me of a prank call I made once...though this is more awesome.More so, it reminds me of the show Level Up, which I find hilarious. Nice work.Keep it coming, Raiden! I'd hate to see your potential go to waste!
  • 0

#9 Offline Sybre the Mental

Sybre the Mental
  • Members
  • Stone Champion Nuva

  • 1,570 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 11:06 AM

Six-Shade Chimoru! You rock! Anyway, you do need a job. But McDonald's?! At least you have drive-thru duty. And Soran works there?! I gotta go to my nearest McD's someday and meet him!Keep it up!
  • 0

Click here to go to Snax, the SybreNetX reboot!

spc_logo.png

chuppy_banner.png

Click the homemade banners to go to Sonic: Pure Chaos and Superiornatural: the Epic!

 

Superiornatural Wiki

The Feline Chronicles | Noobicorn Inc. | Toa Piraka Hakann Comics | Kamen Rider: NoobzlayerDestruction Comics | Toa 95 Comics | Will Most Likely Fail Epicly | Second Time's The Charm | Prototypes

 

Why must all our greatest dreams come to an end? I would have slept for eternity just to keep my favorite one...

 

Worst Movie Quote Ever: "Let's die!"


#10 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 02:09 PM

New comic!
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#11 Offline Makuta Luroka

Makuta Luroka
  • Members
  • Conqueror of the Swarm!

  • 718 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 02:24 PM

heh... showed him. That'll teach ya ta try 'n' steal my bacon!
  • 0

-- :m::a::k::u::t::a: :l::u::r::m_o::k::a:

card_newmat.png


#12 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 02:31 PM

Into the closet he goes!
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#13 Offline Axilus Prime

Axilus Prime
  • Members
  • Kohrak-Kal Shattered

  • 4,798 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 03:46 PM

I believe a large heavy object has been dropped on my head. What exactly happened in Panel 5? P.S. TNG usually gets his pie and bacon by legit methods, not stealing.
  • 0

#14 Offline Sybre the Mental

Sybre the Mental
  • Members
  • Stone Champion Nuva

  • 1,570 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 05:24 PM

New comic!

I should have done that long ago!

  • 0

Click here to go to Snax, the SybreNetX reboot!

spc_logo.png

chuppy_banner.png

Click the homemade banners to go to Sonic: Pure Chaos and Superiornatural: the Epic!

 

Superiornatural Wiki

The Feline Chronicles | Noobicorn Inc. | Toa Piraka Hakann Comics | Kamen Rider: NoobzlayerDestruction Comics | Toa 95 Comics | Will Most Likely Fail Epicly | Second Time's The Charm | Prototypes

 

Why must all our greatest dreams come to an end? I would have slept for eternity just to keep my favorite one...

 

Worst Movie Quote Ever: "Let's die!"


#15 Offline Flux: The Explorer

Flux: The Explorer
  • Members
  • Emerging Fluidic Master

  • 1,277 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 05:37 PM

In comic 3, some of the text is a bit hard to see. It took me a while to notice that there's a "no" in panel 4. Also, what happened in panel 5?
  • 0

 pWPTu7m.jpg

Credits go to Strack for the awesome sprite.

 

I'm an Emerging Fluidic Master (again). Time to start working on my Waterbending.
I'm still a ninja although I think I'm losing my skills as one.
"You're saying this kingdom will vanish? NOT TODAY! THIS KINGDOM IS ALL MINE! SO YOU VANISH!"

~ Bowser, in Bowser's Inside story


#16 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 02 2012 - 08:33 PM

solving the confusion:what happened in panel five was the glitch in my programming enabling me to go into a super-saiyan type mode.ALSO: the link that is in the post leads to a mistake version of the comic. to read the actual thing, read from topic post.

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Jul 02 2012 - 08:34 PM.

  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#17 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 03 2012 - 10:32 AM

New comic!
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#18 Offline Makuta Luroka

Makuta Luroka
  • Members
  • Conqueror of the Swarm!

  • 718 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 03 2012 - 11:09 AM

Ha!Are you, by any chance, Arga in disguise. I'm enjoying these comics so far. However I'm actually significantly smarter and somewhat wiser than that. Other than that, KUTGW.
  • 0

-- :m::a::k::u::t::a: :l::u::r::m_o::k::a:

card_newmat.png


#19 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 03 2012 - 11:20 AM

Yes, Malignus, I understand you are smarter than that, but the power of cheeseburgers hold the cheese rules out all implications.
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#20 Offline Makuta Luroka

Makuta Luroka
  • Members
  • Conqueror of the Swarm!

  • 718 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 03 2012 - 11:27 AM

Point taken, but I prefer my burgers with cheese, although I occasionally go without. Very well, I'll ring with it.
  • 0

-- :m::a::k::u::t::a: :l::u::r::m_o::k::a:

card_newmat.png


#21 Offline Sybre the Mental

Sybre the Mental
  • Members
  • Stone Champion Nuva

  • 1,570 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 03 2012 - 06:11 PM

New comic!

Again, should have done that long ago.And nice joke. However, there are people who will do that.

  • 0

Click here to go to Snax, the SybreNetX reboot!

spc_logo.png

chuppy_banner.png

Click the homemade banners to go to Sonic: Pure Chaos and Superiornatural: the Epic!

 

Superiornatural Wiki

The Feline Chronicles | Noobicorn Inc. | Toa Piraka Hakann Comics | Kamen Rider: NoobzlayerDestruction Comics | Toa 95 Comics | Will Most Likely Fail Epicly | Second Time's The Charm | Prototypes

 

Why must all our greatest dreams come to an end? I would have slept for eternity just to keep my favorite one...

 

Worst Movie Quote Ever: "Let's die!"


#22 Offline Axilus Prime

Axilus Prime
  • Members
  • Kohrak-Kal Shattered

  • 4,798 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 03 2012 - 07:38 PM

Still trying to figure out what cheeseburger hold the cheese is. XDThat was rather hilarious, and though it is wunshaed and simple, the catapult is well-detailed and looks ready to spring at any moment.Uh-oh. Last panel is scary. Malignus weighs 2000 tons or so.
  • 0

#23 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 03 2012 - 09:03 PM

@TNGI learned from Malignus himself that he weighs like, 5000 pounds.and thanks to all for the feedback!
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#24 Offline Makuta Luroka

Makuta Luroka
  • Members
  • Conqueror of the Swarm!

  • 718 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 04 2012 - 09:41 AM

:evilbiggrin: I weigh 5,721 lbs and my original form stands 14 bio(63 ft) tall

Edited by Malignus, Jul 04 2012 - 09:42 AM.

  • 0

-- :m::a::k::u::t::a: :l::u::r::m_o::k::a:

card_newmat.png


#25 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 04 2012 - 10:37 AM

New comic!
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#26 Offline Axilus Prime

Axilus Prime
  • Members
  • Kohrak-Kal Shattered

  • 4,798 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 04 2012 - 08:09 PM

Wow, you fit everyone into the comic!First time I've seen Sybre in Soul Devourer Shinipire mode as a PGS...uh-oh.
  • 0

#27 Offline Makuta Luroka

Makuta Luroka
  • Members
  • Conqueror of the Swarm!

  • 718 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 04 2012 - 09:07 PM

Malignus wouldn't be frightened by that.
  • 0

-- :m::a::k::u::t::a: :l::u::r::m_o::k::a:

card_newmat.png


#28 Offline Sybre the Mental

Sybre the Mental
  • Members
  • Stone Champion Nuva

  • 1,570 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 12 2012 - 07:13 PM

New comic!

Blood is one of my most favorite beverages! It's even better on a soul! To die for!And, Mal, you're next!

  • 0

Click here to go to Snax, the SybreNetX reboot!

spc_logo.png

chuppy_banner.png

Click the homemade banners to go to Sonic: Pure Chaos and Superiornatural: the Epic!

 

Superiornatural Wiki

The Feline Chronicles | Noobicorn Inc. | Toa Piraka Hakann Comics | Kamen Rider: NoobzlayerDestruction Comics | Toa 95 Comics | Will Most Likely Fail Epicly | Second Time's The Charm | Prototypes

 

Why must all our greatest dreams come to an end? I would have slept for eternity just to keep my favorite one...

 

Worst Movie Quote Ever: "Let's die!"


#29 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 15 2012 - 10:04 PM

New comic!
  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#30 Offline Sybre the Mental

Sybre the Mental
  • Members
  • Stone Champion Nuva

  • 1,570 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 20 2012 - 05:55 PM

New comic!

Yeah, don't check. It's for your own good.

  • 0

Click here to go to Snax, the SybreNetX reboot!

spc_logo.png

chuppy_banner.png

Click the homemade banners to go to Sonic: Pure Chaos and Superiornatural: the Epic!

 

Superiornatural Wiki

The Feline Chronicles | Noobicorn Inc. | Toa Piraka Hakann Comics | Kamen Rider: NoobzlayerDestruction Comics | Toa 95 Comics | Will Most Likely Fail Epicly | Second Time's The Charm | Prototypes

 

Why must all our greatest dreams come to an end? I would have slept for eternity just to keep my favorite one...

 

Worst Movie Quote Ever: "Let's die!"


#31 Offline Flux: The Explorer

Flux: The Explorer
  • Members
  • Emerging Fluidic Master

  • 1,277 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 20 2012 - 06:03 PM

Raiden said "nah" to checking what's going on outside. He's safe... for now.
  • 0

 pWPTu7m.jpg

Credits go to Strack for the awesome sprite.

 

I'm an Emerging Fluidic Master (again). Time to start working on my Waterbending.
I'm still a ninja although I think I'm losing my skills as one.
"You're saying this kingdom will vanish? NOT TODAY! THIS KINGDOM IS ALL MINE! SO YOU VANISH!"

~ Bowser, in Bowser's Inside story


#32 Offline Makuta Luroka

Makuta Luroka
  • Members
  • Conqueror of the Swarm!

  • 718 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 20 2012 - 09:05 PM

Yeah. everythings fineYeah. everythings fine
  • 0

-- :m::a::k::u::t::a: :l::u::r::m_o::k::a:

card_newmat.png


#33 Offline Axilus Prime

Axilus Prime
  • Members
  • Kohrak-Kal Shattered

  • 4,798 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 20 2012 - 10:22 PM

Well that was humiliating for me, but probably awesome for Malignus! XDCue Raiden opening the basement to get an old photo album and finding a few skeletons.
  • 0

#34 Offline Tenuk

Tenuk
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 107 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 27 2012 - 11:23 AM

In blood I can't understand anything that is going on so maybe you shouldn't totally black it out but just darken it and draw lines from character to text.
  • 0

Don't Click It


#35 Offline Sybre the Mental

Sybre the Mental
  • Members
  • Stone Champion Nuva

  • 1,570 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 27 2012 - 07:13 PM

In blood I can't understand anything that is going on so maybe you shouldn't totally black it out but just darken it and draw lines from character to text.

Basically, people in the dark are being attacked by me, a vampire.Yes, it was a little strange.

  • 0

Click here to go to Snax, the SybreNetX reboot!

spc_logo.png

chuppy_banner.png

Click the homemade banners to go to Sonic: Pure Chaos and Superiornatural: the Epic!

 

Superiornatural Wiki

The Feline Chronicles | Noobicorn Inc. | Toa Piraka Hakann Comics | Kamen Rider: NoobzlayerDestruction Comics | Toa 95 Comics | Will Most Likely Fail Epicly | Second Time's The Charm | Prototypes

 

Why must all our greatest dreams come to an end? I would have slept for eternity just to keep my favorite one...

 

Worst Movie Quote Ever: "Let's die!"


#36 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 27 2012 - 08:17 PM

strange? that's like calling bionicle a lump of plastic!THIS IS MADNESS!aaaaanyways, new comic!

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Jul 27 2012 - 08:21 PM.

  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 


#37 Offline Makuta Luroka

Makuta Luroka
  • Members
  • Conqueror of the Swarm!

  • 718 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 27 2012 - 09:36 PM

A THUMBNAIL!the comic is here
  • 0

-- :m::a::k::u::t::a: :l::u::r::m_o::k::a:

card_newmat.png


#38 Offline Axilus Prime

Axilus Prime
  • Members
  • Kohrak-Kal Shattered

  • 4,798 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 28 2012 - 12:24 AM

LOL. Fail. Thanks Malignus, and good to see you back, Raiden!TNG is weak? Where did that come from? He's the strongest out of the people being attacked! (He's part robot, and a Prime at that.)Oh well, the glowstick thing was funny and he wasn't shown defeated.Just try to keep people in character, that's my advice to you. Good work overall, 8/10.
  • 0

#39 Offline Sybre the Mental

Sybre the Mental
  • Members
  • Stone Champion Nuva

  • 1,570 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 28 2012 - 10:11 AM

That was funny, although I could barely tell the difference between the red-eyed dudes.And yes. The soul is mine.
  • 0

Click here to go to Snax, the SybreNetX reboot!

spc_logo.png

chuppy_banner.png

Click the homemade banners to go to Sonic: Pure Chaos and Superiornatural: the Epic!

 

Superiornatural Wiki

The Feline Chronicles | Noobicorn Inc. | Toa Piraka Hakann Comics | Kamen Rider: NoobzlayerDestruction Comics | Toa 95 Comics | Will Most Likely Fail Epicly | Second Time's The Charm | Prototypes

 

Why must all our greatest dreams come to an end? I would have slept for eternity just to keep my favorite one...

 

Worst Movie Quote Ever: "Let's die!"


#40 Offline Raiden: Toa of Storms

Raiden: Toa of Storms
  • Members
  • Toa

  • 199 posts
  •  

Posted Jul 29 2012 - 08:48 AM

@TNG, you were weak because you were sleeping. awake, you are a force to be reckoned with. sorry for the confusion. the lights in the closet will come on soon, so no more dark.

Edited by Raiden: Toa of Storms, Jul 31 2012 - 11:51 AM.

  • 0

I could be still alive, or I could be dead. I don't even know myself...

Whoa. My brain hurt thinking about that.

To put it short, I'm kind if like Ciel Phantomhive, but:

+ parents

+ lego

- demon butler

- mansion

+ happy mood 





0 user(s) are browsing this forum

0 members, 0 guests, 0 anonymous users