JPNML Posted June 28, 2012 Share Posted June 28, 2012 (edited) Hey readers, this is my second attempt at comic making. I hope you guys (and girls) like it!credit to all contributors of the six shade chimoru kit.1. It has that new house smell!2.McDonalds!3. BACON4. Cheeseburger catapult5. BLOOD6. Nah.7.Yup.8.Trollympics? credit to Malignus for spriting that wonderful villain using the chimoru R kit for me.9. sad birthday, dude.10. Flumph.PGS1. Soran2. TNG3. Malignus4. Sybre5. Dr. GigglesFillers:Olympics!GS1.2.3.4.5.GS or PGS application:Name to be usedGender:sprite kit: (put a link)personality:notes:Banner: [url=http://custombionicle.wikia.com/wiki/User:RaidenToaofThunder?image=Raiden-27s_Banner-png][img=http://images4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120629021353/custombionicle/images/4/4c/Raiden%27s_Banner.png][/url]Note: I will start to make comics on a 2 day to 1 week basis, due to a busy schedule. Edited August 28, 2012 by Raiden: Toa of Storms Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soran Posted June 28, 2012 Share Posted June 28, 2012 I liked the first comic. It wasn't necessarily funny, but it did lead to a possible funny story arc. Since there is only one comic, theres not much to judge on. The comic seems to have shrunken and made it slightly blurry (probably because its hosted on wikia) and you can't distinguish much details from it. There aren't any other characters shown besides your main character, so I'll await further comics for that. I'm suspecting that this is made in MS Paint, so graphics might be lower quality then using gimp for instance. Also, normally I would appreciate that you don't use my daily strip template or backgrounds (Because those are only for use of fan comics for my comic series) but because of the blurriness I'll allow it since it doesn't really look like my backgrounds. Just the same wall color which a lot of comics have. I hope to expect more soon,~Soran Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrozenFlash Posted June 28, 2012 Share Posted June 28, 2012 Nice job on your first comic. The text is a bit hard to see and maybe there could be an introduction to your character. The comic does look like it could lead into a funny story, which is good. Great job on this! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted June 28, 2012 Author Share Posted June 28, 2012 @Soran, I did use the template, but it's customized to look like not-yours. (that would be copying)@FF Ice Master, thanks for the feedback, I might get GIMP, and it is going to be a funny story. i just need one or two guest stars... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted June 29, 2012 Share Posted June 29, 2012 So, it is an arc. Good, it would be a shame to see that fail. A good but simple start. Good luck in future, I'll be following this!Oh, and you now have two PGSes. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted June 29, 2012 Author Share Posted June 29, 2012 New comic!comic 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soran Posted June 29, 2012 Share Posted June 29, 2012 Haha, that was entertaining. It reminded me of what those people do in video games once they receive an item of some sort. If I may give a tip, I think you should try to change the wall color different colors when going to different places, and sometimes the floor as well. Otherwise it will end up looking like you're in the same room the whole time.~Soran Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted July 2, 2012 Share Posted July 2, 2012 Awesomeness. Reminds me of a prank call I made once...though this is more awesome.More so, it reminds me of the show Level Up, which I find hilarious. Nice work.Keep it coming, Raiden! I'd hate to see your potential go to waste! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted July 2, 2012 Share Posted July 2, 2012 Six-Shade Chimoru! You rock! Anyway, you do need a job. But McDonald's?! At least you have drive-thru duty. And Soran works there?! I gotta go to my nearest McD's someday and meet him!Keep it up! Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 2, 2012 Author Share Posted July 2, 2012 New comic! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted July 2, 2012 Share Posted July 2, 2012 heh... showed him. That'll teach ya ta try 'n' steal my bacon! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 2, 2012 Author Share Posted July 2, 2012 Into the closet he goes! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted July 2, 2012 Share Posted July 2, 2012 I believe a large heavy object has been dropped on my head. What exactly happened in Panel 5? P.S. TNG usually gets his pie and bacon by legit methods, not stealing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted July 2, 2012 Share Posted July 2, 2012 New comic!I should have done that long ago! Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrozenFlash Posted July 2, 2012 Share Posted July 2, 2012 In comic 3, some of the text is a bit hard to see. It took me a while to notice that there's a "no" in panel 4. Also, what happened in panel 5? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 3, 2012 Author Share Posted July 3, 2012 (edited) solving the confusion:what happened in panel five was the glitch in my programming enabling me to go into a super-saiyan type mode.ALSO: the link that is in the post leads to a mistake version of the comic. to read the actual thing, read from topic post. Edited July 3, 2012 by Raiden: Toa of Storms Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 3, 2012 Author Share Posted July 3, 2012 New comic! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted July 3, 2012 Share Posted July 3, 2012 Ha!Are you, by any chance, Arga in disguise. I'm enjoying these comics so far. However I'm actually significantly smarter and somewhat wiser than that. Other than that, KUTGW. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 3, 2012 Author Share Posted July 3, 2012 Yes, Malignus, I understand you are smarter than that, but the power of cheeseburgers hold the cheese rules out all implications. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted July 3, 2012 Share Posted July 3, 2012 Point taken, but I prefer my burgers with cheese, although I occasionally go without. Very well, I'll ring with it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted July 3, 2012 Share Posted July 3, 2012 New comic!Again, should have done that long ago.And nice joke. However, there are people who will do that. Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted July 4, 2012 Share Posted July 4, 2012 Still trying to figure out what cheeseburger hold the cheese is. XDThat was rather hilarious, and though it is wunshaed and simple, the catapult is well-detailed and looks ready to spring at any moment.Uh-oh. Last panel is scary. Malignus weighs 2000 tons or so. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 4, 2012 Author Share Posted July 4, 2012 @TNGI learned from Malignus himself that he weighs like, 5000 pounds.and thanks to all for the feedback! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted July 4, 2012 Share Posted July 4, 2012 (edited) I weigh 5,721 lbs and my original form stands 14 bio(63 ft) tall Edited July 4, 2012 by Malignus Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 4, 2012 Author Share Posted July 4, 2012 New comic! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted July 5, 2012 Share Posted July 5, 2012 Wow, you fit everyone into the comic!First time I've seen Sybre in Soul Devourer Shinipire mode as a PGS...uh-oh. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted July 5, 2012 Share Posted July 5, 2012 Malignus wouldn't be frightened by that. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted July 13, 2012 Share Posted July 13, 2012 New comic!Blood is one of my most favorite beverages! It's even better on a soul! To die for!And, Mal, you're next! Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 16, 2012 Author Share Posted July 16, 2012 New comic! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted July 20, 2012 Share Posted July 20, 2012 New comic!Yeah, don't check. It's for your own good. Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrozenFlash Posted July 20, 2012 Share Posted July 20, 2012 Raiden said "nah" to checking what's going on outside. He's safe... for now. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted July 21, 2012 Share Posted July 21, 2012 Yeah. everythings fineYeah. everythings fine Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted July 21, 2012 Share Posted July 21, 2012 Well that was humiliating for me, but probably awesome for Malignus! XDCue Raiden opening the basement to get an old photo album and finding a few skeletons. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tenuk Posted July 27, 2012 Share Posted July 27, 2012 In blood I can't understand anything that is going on so maybe you shouldn't totally black it out but just darken it and draw lines from character to text. Quote Don't Click It Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted July 28, 2012 Share Posted July 28, 2012 In blood I can't understand anything that is going on so maybe you shouldn't totally black it out but just darken it and draw lines from character to text.Basically, people in the dark are being attacked by me, a vampire.Yes, it was a little strange. Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 28, 2012 Author Share Posted July 28, 2012 (edited) strange? that's like calling bionicle a lump of plastic!THIS IS MADNESS!aaaaanyways, new comic! Edited July 28, 2012 by Raiden: Toa of Storms Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makuta Luroka Posted July 28, 2012 Share Posted July 28, 2012 A THUMBNAIL!the comic is here Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axilus Prime Posted July 28, 2012 Share Posted July 28, 2012 LOL. Fail. Thanks Malignus, and good to see you back, Raiden!TNG is weak? Where did that come from? He's the strongest out of the people being attacked! (He's part robot, and a Prime at that.)Oh well, the glowstick thing was funny and he wasn't shown defeated.Just try to keep people in character, that's my advice to you. Good work overall, 8/10. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sybre Posted July 28, 2012 Share Posted July 28, 2012 That was funny, although I could barely tell the difference between the red-eyed dudes.And yes. The soul is mine. Quote mindeth the cobwebs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JPNML Posted July 29, 2012 Author Share Posted July 29, 2012 (edited) @TNG, you were weak because you were sleeping. awake, you are a force to be reckoned with. sorry for the confusion. the lights in the closet will come on soon, so no more dark. Edited July 31, 2012 by Raiden: Toa of Storms Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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