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[Terra Nuva]

[color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]Table of Contents[/color][/font][color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]-Comics[/color][/font][color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]   -2.0[/color][/font][color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]   -1.0[/color][/font][color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]-Guest Stars[/color][/font][color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]-Credits[/color][/font][color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]Comics[/color][/font] [font="'trebuchet ms';"]2.0[/font][color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]Isolation[/color][/font]

[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"][color=#000000;]The Game[/color][/font]

[font="'trebuchet ms', helvetica, sans-serif;"][color=#000000;]Knock Out[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]1.0[/color][/font][color=#000000;]Introduction[/color][color=#000000;]The New Mask Part 1[/color][color=#000000;]The New Mask Part 2[/color][color=#000000;]The New Mask Part 3[/color][color=#000000;]Introducing PGS FrozenFlash[/color][color=#000000;]Family Members[/color][color=#000000;]It's Alive[/color][color=#000000;]One Final Attempt[/color][color=#000000;]Your Here[/color][color=#000000;]Boring[/color][color=#000000;]Revelations[/color][color=#000000;]Investigation[/color][color=#000000;]PIE[/color][color=#000000;]Terra Nuva is Dead[/color][color=#000000;]Krazon[/color][color=#000000;]SeeKay[/color][color=#000000;]Macku[/color][color=#000000;]FrozenFlash[/color][color=#000000;]TNG Prime[/color][color=#000000;]My Love[/color][color=#000000;]Gavla[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 1[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 2[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 3[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 4[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 5[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 6[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 7[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 8[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 9[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 10[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 11[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 12[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 13[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 14[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 15[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 16[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 17[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 18[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 19[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 20[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 21[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 22[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 23[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 24[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 25[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 26[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 27[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 28[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 29[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 30[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 31[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 32[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 33[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 34[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 35[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 36[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 37[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 38[/color][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 39[/color][color=#000000;]Thanksgiving Special 2012[/color][color=#000000;] (non Canon)[/color][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 40[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 41[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 42[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 43[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]Bio: Kaitiaki[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 44[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 45[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 46[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 47[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 48[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 49[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Part 50[/color][/font][font="'trebuchet ms';"][color=#000000;]The Awakening: Epilogue[/color][/font] [color=#000000;][font="'trebuchet ms';"]Guest StarsI do take Guest Stars but they take a while for me to make so be patient.PGS's will be UCS members only.Send me your--Name.-Bio.-Sprite Sheet.-Powers.-Anything you want me to know.CreditDark709SoranKing LehvakGerlickyVataki TeridaxFeline OnekerTerton the ManyBlade Titan 974[/color][/font]

Edited by Terra Nuva, Mar 17 2013 - 09:50 PM.

[Flux: The Explorer]

It's a nice introduction. The characters are well introduced except the Lerahk who randomly appeared from no where. Also, I'm not quite sure how Macku ended up there though.

Edited by FF Ice Master, Jul 17 2012 - 09:38 PM.

[Terra Nuva]

It's a nice introduction. The characters are well introduced except the Lerahk who randomly appeared from no where. Also, I'm not quite sure how Macku ended up there though.

Thanks.Yeah Lerahk was supposed to be random. But Macku isn't the Macku from metru Nui. It's supposed to be a common name. (Even though that doesn't happen in Bionicles)

Edited by Terra Nuva, Jul 17 2012 - 09:51 PM.

[previnyl]

Not a bad introduction; nothing's really wrong with the series, it's just a very generic introduction. But it's hard to gauge a series based on the first comic, so I'll keep an eye on this series.

[Terra Nuva]

A New Comic

Macku goes for a new mask while Krazon plots to destroy Terra Nuva. Part 1

[The Venom]

I see this series has potential.While I'm not a big fan of the kit choice (almost everyone uses Chimoru nowadays =P), your graphic style isn't too bad.You have some decent looking backgrounds that do alright with the sprites, and it looks like you're doing okay with GIMP effects. The humor isn't too bad either. Kinda random, but it still works.This is a pretty good start for you, and I'll be looking here to see how you do through time. =D-V-

[Terra Nuva]

Not a bad introduction; nothing's really wrong with the series, it's just a very generic introduction. But it's hard to gauge a series based on the first comic, so I'll keep an eye on this series.

Thanks for viewing

I see this series has potential.While I'm not a big fan of the kit choice (almost everyone uses Chimoru nowadays =P), your graphic style isn't too bad.You have some decent looking backgrounds that do alright with the sprites, and it looks like you're doing okay with GIMP effects. The humor isn't too bad either. Kinda random, but it still works.This is a pretty good start for you, and I'll be looking here to see how you do through time. =D-V-

Thank you very much. I will try not to disappoint The New Mask Part 2

Edited by Terra Nuva, Jul 19 2012 - 11:22 PM.

[-Absorba-]

Ah, self deprication. Always a nice thing. :)Yeah, not looking so bad!

[Terra Nuva]

The New Mask Part 3

Find out if Krazons plan will work

Introducing PGS FrozenFlash

Introducing the first PGS FF. Can he survive the randomness?

[Flux: The Explorer]

Haha. The random things happening are actually pretty entertaining. I wonder if the comic actually has a place in the story though. Now hopefully, I can survive the randomness.

[Terra Nuva]

New Comic

Family Members

[Terra Nuva]

It's Alive

So, It's back

[Flux: The Explorer]

It's Alive

So, It's back

Something good is going to happen. I like this! It's great on how it makes me wonder what's going to happen in the next comic.

[Axilus Prime]

An excellent positioning of Lerahk in comic 4, great work. It was funny, and evidently he needs to make more instantaneous masks.Now that is a lot of randomness, but it was well-positioned and used as a plot device. (Sort of.) Not much to do there? High standards indeed.WAIT, LERAHK'S FAMILY?! WE'RE ALL DOOMED.Aw, wanted to see Lerahk's family. Still, that's quite a suspenseful comic...

[Terra Nuva]

An excellent positioning of Lerahk in comic 4, great work. It was funny, and evidently he needs to make more instantaneous masks.Now that is a lot of randomness, but it was well-positioned and used as a plot device. (Sort of.) Not much to do there? High standards indeed.WAIT, LERAHK'S FAMILY?! WE'RE ALL DOOMED.Aw, wanted to see Lerahk's family. Still, that's quite a suspenseful comic...

Thanks for the positive review. I hope to improve everything in the future One Final AttemptWill we see Lerahks family this time?

[Axilus Prime]

Whoa, is that Makuta or something? Avak's weapon might work...but can a Matoran lift it? XDSo there is a less generic reason for him wanting him dead. Great job there. And that can't be good...first the mask is alive, then he's gonna put it on?Another great comic.

[Terra Nuva]

Your Here

All cliffhangers will be resolved in the next comic

Edited by Terra Nuva, Jul 25 2012 - 11:51 PM.

[Axilus Prime]

Now that is just cool. A defense program of some sort in a toybox! For a simple comic like this, you could have done with some closeups and maybe a shot of the inside of his brain. But, oh well. Awesome anyway.

[Terra Nuva]

Yeah. I thought about that. But the next comic is going to be massive, so I am trying to make small fillers just to keep people wondering. Then I will do some close ups and end all of the cliffhangers.

[Terra Nuva]

Filler-Boring

Just a filler until the next Comic (Comic 10)

[Axilus Prime]

So, FF really is bored that much. XDI thought that was a one-time only joke.

[Terra Nuva]

Preview-Revelations

This is just a minor preview of the big Comic #10. Hope you like it

[Terra Nuva]

Revelations

At last, the epic comic #10 is here.

What will happen?

Read it, and find out

[Axilus Prime]

Wow, huge comic. That mind control mask is stronger than its creator...wow!Was that a Batman reference when he hung from the ceiling? I know what the sword is a reference to...lol.Wow, Gavla just saved your life? The way he did it was epic for a comic.And then...wow. Looks like a Comic Villain is actually worthy of his villainship for once!So SeeKay is the one who's being controlled? Oh no.By the way, I see you picked my Mahri Form. It was unexpected, but cool. I'm guessing you picked it because it has shading?

[Terra Nuva]

Yes, that is exactly why I picked it. I might actually six shade one of your other forms of I have time.Yup Batman reference.Glad you liked it. I wish my panels were big enough for your "true" form. Maybe in 2.0 lol.

[Flux: The Explorer]

I like that surprise appearance by Gavla. Also, I think we could say good bye to Seekay and the Rahkshi.

[The Venom]

Huh. That last comic was... Interesting. Gavla's appearance was definitely far from expected.I appreciate the fact you're doing plot-driven comics, Terra! The style reminds me of my first comics.Since it seems you're looking to changing some things in your next season, I would recommend working on the text.I suggest making it a bit smaller so it fits in the panels more easily, and make sure none of it gets cut off from the panels and that it doesn't blend in with the backgrounds. This will make your story-telling a lot easier for yourself and the readers. Trust me.Good work overall.-V-

[Terra Nuva]

I like that surprise appearance by Gavla. Also, I think we could say good bye to Seekay and the Rahkshi.

InvestigationWhy don't you read this

Huh. That last comic was... Interesting. Gavla's appearance was definitely far from expected.I appreciate the fact you're doing plot-driven comics, Terra! The style reminds me of my first comics.Since it seems you're looking to changing some things in your next season, I would recommend working on the text.I suggest making it a bit smaller so it fits in the panels more easily, and make sure none of it gets cut off from the panels and that it doesn't blend in with the backgrounds. This will make your story-telling a lot easier for yourself and the readers. Trust me.Good work overall.-V-

I intended to do story comics from the beginning because I just love media with a good story.I will definitely change the text in 2.0 and thanks for the advice ;D

[Flux: The Explorer]

The way Seekay got revived reminds me of Darth Vader. Was that intended? Also, is Krazon really that small? That looks a lot like TNG's leg in panel 22. Great comic by the way.

[Axilus Prime]

Oh wow. Didn't expect that to happen to Seekay. Looks like he's getting roasted by a Toa instead. Overall good comic, lots of action.

[Terra Nuva]

PIELet's see if you can find the homage in this oneand BTW the reason Krazon does not move in the last 3 panels is because his feet are melted to the floor.

[Axilus Prime]

Awesome how I forced him to give me pie. HOW DARE HE STEAL IT HYAAAAAAA--And yes, awesome reference. Especially since I love TF. Starscream! XDAnd it seems I just OWNED everyone! Thanks for putting that in!

[Toatapio Nuva]

I read the comics and here's what I think:The graphics are great and solid. Clean panels and clear backgrounds are always a good thing. And although the Chimoru kit is used by many, it doesn't matter. It's a good-looking and easy-to-use kit, after all.Then there is the content. There is clearly a unified story binding all the comics together, meaning it's not just a series of random comic strips. It works well. I found Lerahk and the two main characters (Terra and the EVIL GUY) a little too similar to Dark709's characters. I didn't notice it until Lerahk came in. Also, Macku is a lot like Zacku. It's not a serious thing, really, but you might want to add some unique personal traits to the characters and create totally original ones (not that there wouldn't be any of those even now). It's good you don't have too many characters, though. Too many characters could make reading the comics hard. The amount of characters you are using seems to be sufficient enough.There's definately action and drama going on with these comics. Kind of clashes with the humor some times, but sure makes the series more interesting in a way. The mask plot was good, and I especially like the fact it was not abandoned after the three comics detailing its birth. It was funny how Macku wasn't affected by it while the other guy was.As for the humor, I think the dramatic events and the epic plotline sort of restrict it. It's all about a matter of taste, though. More epicness than humor might work as well. If you want to add to the humor though, I suggest you develop your characters further and try basing the jokes more on their personalities and their differences. Not sure if you understand what I mean, this might be confusing to read and comprehend. :PAll in all: The graphics are fantastic, the plotline works (it's kind of fast-paced now, you might want to slow things down a bit depending on how much you want to exite the reader). There is plenty of humor based on randomness, you could try different kind of humor as well, just to flesh the comics out. Still, it's not bad now. By putting more depth into the characters and creating new and original ones (you could use someone you know as a template for a new comic character) you could make the comics even better.Besides the few things I tried to give constructive criticism about, these comics are not bad at all. Very interesting, actually. Keep up the good work and make more.

[Terra Nuva]

I read the comics and here's what I think:The graphics are great and solid. Clean panels and clear backgrounds are always a good thing. And although the Chimoru kit is used by many, it doesn't matter. It's a good-looking and easy-to-use kit, after all.Then there is the content. There is clearly a unified story binding all the comics together, meaning it's not just a series of random comic strips. It works well. I found Lerahk and the two main characters (Terra and the EVIL GUY) a little too similar to Dark709's characters. I didn't notice it until Lerahk came in. Also, Macku is a lot like Zacku. It's not a serious thing, really, but you might want to add some unique personal traits to the characters and create totally original ones (not that there wouldn't be any of those even now). It's good you don't have too many characters, though. Too many characters could make reading the comics hard. The amount of characters you are using seems to be sufficient enough.There's definately action and drama going on with these comics. Kind of clashes with the humor some times, but sure makes the series more interesting in a way. The mask plot was good, and I especially like the fact it was not abandoned after the three comics detailing its birth. It was funny how Macku wasn't affected by it while the other guy was.As for the humor, I think the dramatic events and the epic plotline sort of restrict it. It's all about a matter of taste, though. More epicness than humor might work as well. If you want to add to the humor though, I suggest you develop your characters further and try basing the jokes more on their personalities and their differences. Not sure if you understand what I mean, this might be confusing to read and comprehend. :PAll in all: The graphics are fantastic, the plotline works (it's kind of fast-paced now, you might want to slow things down a bit depending on how much you want to exite the reader). There is plenty of humor based on randomness, you could try different kind of humor as well, just to flesh the comics out. Still, it's not bad now. By putting more depth into the characters and creating new and original ones (you could use someone you know as a template for a new comic character) you could make the comics even better.Besides the few things I tried to give constructive criticism about, these comics are not bad at all. Very interesting, actually. Keep up the good work and make more.

Everything you mentioned is valid and I get what you are saying 100%Here,s the thing about Dark709's characters. I originally started making comics 2 years ago and I think I might have been kinda obsessed with Dark709 so I might have based some characters on his comics (originally I had like 10 more characters) so when I picked up making comics again, I took a few characters that seemed promising and used them in the comics now. (originally the comics were almost like your old comics but maybe a lot worse ). I only just realized that I and Krazon (evil one) look like Dark709's characters switched (Sir Pickles is red and Dark is infected). I don't think that was originally planned (I don't remember). Originally SeeKay was a character named Chibi Killer who hated chibi style sprites. (very shallow, as was SeeKay that's why I killed him off). I had Onepu, Vakama (who was a mentally deranged turaga obsessed with fire, and a whole host of Krazon clones. Originally this was going to be a humor series with an epic in between seasons but I decided I liked epic better and I will try to develop the characters more, which is one of my problems. I tend to develop the two main characters more than supporting main characters.The only big problem that I think I have is I have a hard time slowing down the pace. I find that I have great stories in my head but after the comic is finished It is way sped up. I need to work on that because I am planning a huge improvement in the comics soon (very soon). Thank you for the critique and I really love the constructive criticism from you and Venom because it is really helping me improve. oh, and thanks for being my inspiration LOL Terra Nuva is Deadoh and here is a new comic

Edited by Terra Nuva, Jul 31 2012 - 10:36 AM.

[Toatapio Nuva]

I read the comics and here's what I think:The graphics are great and solid. Clean panels and clear backgrounds are always a good thing. And although the Chimoru kit is used by many, it doesn't matter. It's a good-looking and easy-to-use kit, after all.Then there is the content. There is clearly a unified story binding all the comics together, meaning it's not just a series of random comic strips. It works well. I found Lerahk and the two main characters (Terra and the EVIL GUY) a little too similar to Dark709's characters. I didn't notice it until Lerahk came in. Also, Macku is a lot like Zacku. It's not a serious thing, really, but you might want to add some unique personal traits to the characters and create totally original ones (not that there wouldn't be any of those even now). It's good you don't have too many characters, though. Too many characters could make reading the comics hard. The amount of characters you are using seems to be sufficient enough.There's definately action and drama going on with these comics. Kind of clashes with the humor some times, but sure makes the series more interesting in a way. The mask plot was good, and I especially like the fact it was not abandoned after the three comics detailing its birth. It was funny how Macku wasn't affected by it while the other guy was.As for the humor, I think the dramatic events and the epic plotline sort of restrict it. It's all about a matter of taste, though. More epicness than humor might work as well. If you want to add to the humor though, I suggest you develop your characters further and try basing the jokes more on their personalities and their differences. Not sure if you understand what I mean, this might be confusing to read and comprehend. :PAll in all: The graphics are fantastic, the plotline works (it's kind of fast-paced now, you might want to slow things down a bit depending on how much you want to exite the reader). There is plenty of humor based on randomness, you could try different kind of humor as well, just to flesh the comics out. Still, it's not bad now. By putting more depth into the characters and creating new and original ones (you could use someone you know as a template for a new comic character) you could make the comics even better.Besides the few things I tried to give constructive criticism about, these comics are not bad at all. Very interesting, actually. Keep up the good work and make more.

Everything you mentioned is valid and I get what you are saying 100%Here,s the thing about Dark709's characters. I originally started making comics 2 years ago and I think I might have been kinda obsessed with Dark709 so I might have based some characters on his comics (originally I had like 10 more characters) so when I picked up making comics again, I took a few characters that seemed promising and used them in the comics now. (originally the comics were almost like your old comics but maybe a lot worse ). I only just realized that I and Krazon (evil one) look like Dark709's characters switched (Sir Pickles is red and Dark is infected). I don't think that was originally planned (I don't remember). Originally SeeKay was a character named Chibi Killer who hated chibi style sprites. (very shallow, as was SeeKay that's why I killed him off). I had Onepu, Vakama (who was a mentally deranged turaga obsessed with fire, and a whole host of Krazon clones.Originally this was going to be a humor series with an epic in between seasons but I decided I liked epic better and I will try to develop the characters more, which is one of my problems. I tend to develop the two main characters more than supporting main characters.The only big problem that I think I have is I have a hard time slowing down the pace. I find that I have great stories in my head but after the comic is finished It is way sped up. I need to work on that because I am planning a huge improvement in the comics soon (very soon).Thank you for the critique and I really love the constructive criticism from you and Venom because it is really helping me improve. oh, and thanks for being my inspiration LOL Terra Nuva is Deadoh and here is a new comic

I understand the Dark thing, I remember being possessed by his comics as well. The movie had... too much similarities with Dark's first one. :PHaving an epic comic series with some humor in between works just as well as the other way around, so embrace it! That way you can concentrate on the adventure and the plot a lot more. But I see you've already done that.@ the new comic: Noo, you're dead!

[Axilus Prime]

HOLY SLAG. I didn't see that coming. Though with the manner of your death...BRING YOU BACK WITH THE MATRIX OF LEADERSHIP--Oh wait. That'd only work on TNG.

[Terra Nuva]

HOLY SLAG. I didn't see that coming. Though with the manner of your death...BRING YOU BACK WITH THE MATRIX OF LEADERSHIP--Oh wait. That'd only work on TNG.

Hahah Lol.KrazonThis is part of a new series based on each character.

[Axilus Prime]

Wow, Krazon's a lot stronger than I thought. I wonder what Krazon will do now that his one dream and aspiration was stolen..XD

[Terra Nuva]

Yes, Krazon is extremely strong. He has been training for years but his plans are usually ruined so he does not try very hard.That will play into the story as the only thing that he has driving him is his wanting to destroy you ;PSeeKayThree Comics in one day....I have too much time LOL

[Axilus Prime]

Not much to say here, but it does provide some insight. He has such a sad life..