LSO 2012 Team Four Review Topic

[Hahli Husky]

If you guys would like both the epic and review topic names changed, please send me a PM with whatever name you decide on and I'll change them. ;)Once the epic topic reopens, feel free to switch up your writing order, collaborate, or even drop out of writing if you wish. Have fun!Epic topic

[Ballom Nom Nom]

Well, I have to say that I certainly enjoyed writing this with you guys. The additions that everyone contributed all made for a very interesting story, for which I had a lot of fun working with. In particular, Kodan was a very interesting character to write (big thanks to What? for choosing such an interesting main character), and I think we all did a pretty good job in handling the treatment of our protagonist. :)That being said, I do apologise if I was railroading the plot a bit for the Epic overall, particularly with the ending. However, I thought fitting the characters into

their canon deaths

worked very well for a conclusion. In fact, it was my initial plan for things, and it just turned out that Grant-Sud leaving the last chapter to me allowed it to happen.Anyway, I look forward to hearing what opinions my fellow authors have, as well as what other readers may think. Oh, and we still need a name for the Epic, eventually. ~B~

Edited July 28, 2012 by Ballom

[Toa Smoke Monster]

Epic name suggestion: A Tale from a Chronicler. Who thinks that is a good name?Anyway, I also had a lot of fun with this. I really enjoyed reading what everyone added to the story, then adding my own portion to it. I'm happy with where it went. And I like to thank Ballom concluding the story the way you did. It was really cool to connect the epic to the Bionicle canon. And I'm glad you had Teridax disguised as Dume. I was actually thinking about adding that to the story if I had had the chance to write one of the last chapters, so I'm glad you included it. :)It has been a pleasure writing with all of you, my fellow authors, and I look forward to seeing what others think of our epic.

Edited July 29, 2012 by The Smoke Monster

[Grant-Sud]

The only thing I didn't enjoy was the jump to Karzahni. At that point I was like "Okay... where are we going?" But really the story did conclude well and I thank Ballom for that and What? for writing a great character personality. Hopefully I didn't put us all behind woth my couple day delays. :B But I had a great time and I'm proud to be with these talented writers. : D

[Ballom Nom Nom]

The only thing I didn't enjoy was the jump to Karzahni. At that point I was like "Okay... where are we going?"

I was hoping that a longer section could be spent in Karzahni, to have more areas represented in the Epic. However, it didn't really end up working out, as there were a couple of days where no chapters were added, and Toa Onarax's chapter concentrated on the Makuta rather than Karzahni. Which was fine, it's just that instead of five or so chapters there it was only two, which made the whole part seem out of place just a tad.I was also planning on having the stint in Karzahni be more relevant by having the Builder of the Toa Canisters help Kodan and Ihu escape, but when it came time for the last chapter the airship had been established as nigh-indestructible, so I just went with a simpler alternative.~B~ Edited July 28, 2012 by Ballom

[Let's Henshin!]

Yeah sorry about that focus on the Villains, I just didn't know where to take things from the Karzhani standpoint, so I jumped to the Villains, didn't realize we'd only have a few more chapters after that.Also I'm particularly happy about the way you ended with their deaths, that was my plan as well. Although Admittedly, I only wanted Kodan to be heading towards the gates, and leave it somewhat ambiguous at the end.

[Ballom Nom Nom]

I do think it would be good to select a name, given that we still haven't done so. Personally, I would support A Tale From a Chronicler, as it's simple and captures the general idea of the story well enough. What do you guys think?~B~