Posted Aug 29 2012 - 10:41 PM
I'm certainly no expert, but personally I thought your story was good considering its shortness. I would have enjoyed it if there had been more to it.Also, as a question, near the beginning of the story the main character makes it sound as though he saw his fellow Toas' retreat as part of their agreed plan, but at the end he calls then traitors. This seems contradictory. I take it that the change could easily be explained as part of his mutation, but I thought I would ask.Once again though, pretty nice job. Keep improving.