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Tales of the Wanderer: Review Topic

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#1 Offline thelonewander

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Posted Oct 15 2012 - 03:31 PM

This is the review topic for my first epic. Comments welcome.Link to epic: Here
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War...war never changes.

A wanderer always walks the lonesome road at some point. always

Tales of the Wanderer

We crawl, on our knees for you,
under, a sky no longer blue,
we sweat, all day long for you.

But we sow, seeds to see us though,
cause sometimes dreams just don't come true,
we wait, to reap what we are due.

Everything I touch turns to Ashes,

...It slips right though my hands


#2 Offline The_Shawn_Legend

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 10:10 AM

Finished reading your epic like I said and there are a few things I want to point out1) I loved the way the story was told, The Lone Wanderer's point of view.2) I also loved your other characters being in the story, and while I read their bio's, this gave me a different point of view. I got to see Blake and Lexie through someone elses eyes.3)I also very much appreciate their interaction, they feel like real people having a conversation about a group name among other things. Good job.All In all I appreciated this story greatly. ;-) It was a nice read before I go to work. Keep it up man. Have a good one!

Edited by The_Shawn_Legend, Oct 17 2012 - 10:10 AM.

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Close enough to my Shawn is...Zelos Wilder.

#3 Offline Flex Till Death

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 12:46 PM

Seems like it has potential. Heh I think its cool that you decided to write an epic that takes place in the world of my RP. Jut gives me a cool feeling, I never thought about writing an epic in our X-Men universe, tis a cool idea.
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#4 Offline thelonewander

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Posted Oct 17 2012 - 09:15 PM

Thanks for the comments guys! I'm going to try and post a chapter at the end of the week., most likely on Friday, if all goes to plan. :cheesy:
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War...war never changes.

A wanderer always walks the lonesome road at some point. always

Tales of the Wanderer

We crawl, on our knees for you,
under, a sky no longer blue,
we sweat, all day long for you.

But we sow, seeds to see us though,
cause sometimes dreams just don't come true,
we wait, to reap what we are due.

Everything I touch turns to Ashes,

...It slips right though my hands


#5 Offline Fount

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Posted Oct 18 2012 - 04:14 AM

Oh my. What an epic epic. (That's deliberate.)I am impressed, and wondered why I didn't pick up the courage to post mine.And thanks for making me wanting to post one too.

Edited by TradTheMentalist, Oct 18 2012 - 10:35 AM.

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#6 Offline thelonewander

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Posted Oct 19 2012 - 07:10 PM

Second Chapter is now out.Link: here
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War...war never changes.

A wanderer always walks the lonesome road at some point. always

Tales of the Wanderer

We crawl, on our knees for you,
under, a sky no longer blue,
we sweat, all day long for you.

But we sow, seeds to see us though,
cause sometimes dreams just don't come true,
we wait, to reap what we are due.

Everything I touch turns to Ashes,

...It slips right though my hands


#7 Offline The_Shawn_Legend

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Posted Oct 19 2012 - 08:35 PM

Just finished chapter 2, nice on their lives. I like reading about what they did I can also relate to (at least trying) To Learn some Elvish lol.
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Close enough to my Shawn is...Zelos Wilder.

#8 Offline thelonewander

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Posted Oct 26 2012 - 09:53 PM

third chapter out now. Link: Here
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War...war never changes.

A wanderer always walks the lonesome road at some point. always

Tales of the Wanderer

We crawl, on our knees for you,
under, a sky no longer blue,
we sweat, all day long for you.

But we sow, seeds to see us though,
cause sometimes dreams just don't come true,
we wait, to reap what we are due.

Everything I touch turns to Ashes,

...It slips right though my hands


#9 Offline The_Shawn_Legend

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Posted Oct 27 2012 - 08:45 AM

Finished chapter 3 this was a good one, now we are starting to see why he is the wanderer. We got to view his young life, now to see his adventures.
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Close enough to my Shawn is...Zelos Wilder.




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