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The Green Ninja? - Short Story Contest


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#1 Offline WhiteNinjaWolf04

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Posted Nov 24 2012 - 09:26 PM

The Green Ninja?

"Hurry up!" yelled Jay from a tree.

"Well, I'm sorry that I can't climb as fast as you!" yelled Cole from somewhere below the tree.

The ninjas were being chased by skeletons and to make it even worse Zane and Kai were lost in the woods. One of the skeletons grabbed Cole's leg and flung him over his shoulder. The skeleton started to tie Cole to another tree. Meanwhile, Jay was making a plan on how to help Cole.

"Looks like you need help" said a voice from the tree.

"Who's there?" yelled Jay slowly inching his way down.

"Just me," replied the voice. From inside the branches of the tree another ninja appeared. He was wearing a green ninja Gi.

"Who are you?" asked Jay.

"Someone" said the green ninja.

Next to Cole another ninja appeared, he was wearing a red ninja Gi. He was trying to talk to Cole.

"Jay, you need to trust me" said the Green ninja.

"How do you know my name?" asked Jay.

"Just trust me" said the green ninja

Jay nodded his head and the green ninja signaled to the other ninja. He jumped down from the tree and started to sneak his way towards the skeletons.

"Hey, skull face" he yelled, every single skeleton turned.

"Not you again" said one of the skeletons.

"Yes me again and unless you want to end up dog chow again I suggest you go away" said the ninja.

A skeleton charged the green ninja. Quickly, the ninja grabbed the skeleton's arm and twisted it until he dropped his weapon. He then quickly threw the weapon into the forest as the skeleton retreated.

"You asked for it" said the ninja.

With the snap of his fingers the red ninja was next to him. That's when the skeletons became really scared. A howl ran through the night's still air and slowly two at a time the skeletons kept disappearing. When there was one left, two huge grey wolves appeared behind the green ninja.

"You have one chance left" he said.

The skeleton ran into the woods and Jay came down from the tree and untied Cole.

"Thanks a lot" said Cole.

"With out you guys we would still be in big trouble" said Kai.

"How do you know my name?" asked Jay.

"I heard it when Cole was yelling at you" said the ninja.

"What is your name?" asked Zane.

"Just call me K" said the green ninja.

"Dude that was awesome, but who are the wolves?" asked Cole.

"Almost forgot about them" said K.

The wolves were engulfed in white light. When the light receded there stood two girls. One was in a black ninja Gi and the other girl in a white ninja Gi.

"Wow girl ninjas, I have never seen that" said Kai.

"What do you mean by that?" said K.

"Well I mean girls are not qualified to be ninjas" replied Kai.

K took off her hood to reveal that she was a girl herself. She had brown hair and silver eyes. The red ninja also took off the hood to reveal herself as a girl.

"That's all I ever hear from boys, that girls can't be powerful and they can't be strong!" yelled K. "That's it I'm out" said K.

She started to walk away when the white ninja stopped her and said something. K kept walking away.

"What's her problem?" said Cole.

"In her village being a girl is bad, really bad. Girls are not allowed to go outside of the house at all" she said.

"You got lucky she took it lightly," she said, "Unlike Sam here." She pointed to the black ninja, "She won't even look at a boy much less help them."

After a few more minutes of talking the girls left and the boys went back to the bounty.

"Jeez sensei, she scared the life out of those skeletons" said Jay.

"What was she wearing?" asked Sensei Wu.

"Green" said Zane.

"Then this might be the legendary green ninja," said Wu.

"Then we will find her again tomorrow," said Zane.

"Yup, that's another adventure for tomorrow, but for today I am going to sleep," said Jay.

As the ninja went to sleep they dreamed about the green ninja and how someday she would defeat darkness or bring it upon Ninjago, but that's another story for another day.


Edited by WhiteNinjaWolf04, Nov 25 2012 - 08:39 PM.

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#2 Offline Dralcax

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Posted Nov 25 2012 - 10:21 AM

I found this story intriguing, and the main ideas to be good, although the writing itself could use a bit of improvement.Also, shouldn't you enter this in the contest?
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#3 Offline WhiteNinjaWolf04

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Posted Nov 25 2012 - 10:32 AM

How do you change the title?
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#4 Offline Velox

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Posted Nov 25 2012 - 12:41 PM

How do you change the title?

You can ask for a topic's title to be changed by using the "Report" button on the first post of this topic. Click that button, and then just ask that you'd like the title to be changed to whatever it is you want it changed to, and a staff member will change it.Posted Image

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#5 Offline Meiko

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Posted Nov 25 2012 - 01:19 PM

Interesting story. The plot is nice, but the grammar could use a bit of fixing. You should definitely post a link to it here so that it is entered in the contest.
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Posted Nov 25 2012 - 02:53 PM

How do you change the title?

You can ask for a topic's title to be changed by using the "Report" button on the first post of this topic. Click that button, and then just ask that you'd like the title to be changed to whatever it is you want it changed to, and a staff member will change it.Posted Image

Somewhat relevant to this, how do you close a topic? is it a admin only thing?

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#7 Offline Sumiki

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Posted Nov 25 2012 - 04:42 PM

How do you change the title?

You can ask for a topic's title to be changed by using the "Report" button on the first post of this topic. Click that button, and then just ask that you'd like the title to be changed to whatever it is you want it changed to, and a staff member will change it.Posted Image

Somewhat relevant to this, how do you close a topic? is it a admin only thing?

The Assistants and Leaders of forums can close topics in their assigned forums. In addition, Global Moderators and Administrators can close topics regardless of what forum they're in.If you wish for the topic to be closed, simply report it.

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Posted Dec 01 2012 - 10:22 PM

the story is ok. the grammar could use some work. I think if you made it a bit longer with a more defined ending it could be better.

good luck!


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