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#1 Offline Dual Cee

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Posted Mar 26 2013 - 07:20 PM

Six stones united, six energies no longer divided. The Stones started to glow, an ancient energy was soon going to be unleached over the land were all hope had died out.Hope was gone and darkness reigned, old legends were forgotten and trust and unity had turned into fear and hatred.Powers locked away for a thousand years free once again.  A pillar  of a pure bright light shot out of one of the stones and blased itself straight up into the darkness of the night sky.Soon five other pillars formed and joined, together they illuminated the darkness, united they return hope to the hopeless. The six beams in were seen all across the island, and when the villagers saw it their empty hearths were filled with hope, hope that one day, they would be free.A legend, which was forgotten for so long relived as the lights towered higher into the sky.The beams of ancient power splitted up and flew towards the different coasts and the wherever they went, hope sprouted up like flowers in spring, driving away the nothingness of the void.All across the island this glimmer of hope was visible, and that was enough to spark the belief in ancient legends and gather courage to face the darkness.6 Hidden stones where the keys, six stones containing energies a millenia old were finally found. Stumbled across by a brave wanderer, a brave castout. A being who would later become a legend himself.The ancient stones scattered in an explosion of pure heat and light, blasting their shocked discoverer away of the temple. And as the explosion again made place for the darkness, the faint glimmers of light reached objects floating in the water.Six objects casted out by the universe were touched by the light and suddenly started shaking. Acient machinery which had remained unused for centuries suddenly started working again, as gears, motors and tracking systems flashed alive. Slowly but sure the objects recovered from their ancient disuse. All it took was hope, all it took was belief in a legend, all it took was a moment the balance didn't hang over to the all-consuming darkness.And after their castout, after their existance was forgotten, after they had stayed in see due a grave miscalculation, it started moving, moving towards the coast of the island reigned by darkness. Carrying a legend, waiting to be born....A canister washes ashore, as a legend awakes.

Edited by Dual Matrix, Mar 26 2013 - 07:24 PM.

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#2 Offline fishers64

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Posted Apr 01 2013 - 05:24 AM

I liked this "legendary" style retelling of Takua's summoning of the Toa. :) Nice and simple. You do have some spelling and grammar errors, though. 

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]A pillar  of a pure bright light shot out of one of the stones and blased itself straight up into the darkness of the night sky.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]Should be "blasted."[/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]The beams of ancient power splitted up and flew towards the different coasts and the wherever they went, hope sprouted up like flowers in spring, driving away the nothingness of the void.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]Should be "spilt".[/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;][/color]

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]Six objects casted out by the universe were touched by the light and suddenly started shaking. Acient machinery which had remained unused for centuries suddenly started working again, as gears, motors and tracking systems flashed alive. Slowly but sure the objects recovered from their ancient disuse.[/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]Should be "[/color][color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]Six objects cast out by the universe were touched by the light and suddenly started shaking. Ancient machinery which had remained unused for centuries suddenly started working again, as gears, motors and tracking systems flashed alive. Slowly but surely the objects recovered from their ancient disuse." [/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;][/color]

And after their castout, after their existance was forgotten, after they had stayed in see due a grave miscalculation[/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]Should be "at sea".[/color]

 

[color=rgb(40,40,40);font-family:helvetica, arial, sans-serif;font-size:14px;]Good work here. [/color]


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