Kanakalackin Posted April 8, 2013 Share Posted April 8, 2013 (edited) This is my first comedy, enjoy! The Toa Nuva had always been enemies. No, Takua, not enemies as Good is with Evil, more along the lines of sibling rivalries. These are their stories of countless house-battles on who gets to turn on the TV first and why they need to go to bed on time. The List of Characters: Tahu, the fiery older brother Gali, the over-reactive second-oldest Lewa, the fun-loving 9-year old Onua, the geology nut Pohatu, the speedy one Kopaka, the No-nonsense, all work, no play guy The Turaga, the grandparents Mata Nui and his wife, Makuta, the tyranical and softie parents And YOU! The occasional Guest Star who gets thrown into the middle of all their fights. Wait, me? Who’s me? Oh, you mean ME, as in the narrator. Nothing really happens to me except the occasional--- Watch out! Lewa is using his dirty clothes as a mace! HEHEHE!!! OUCH! Bad Lewa! Well, we’d better get this over with before someone gets seriously injured . ROLE FILMS! PM Me if you want to guest star! Edited April 8, 2013 by Phantom Terror Quote I have an Instagram page where you can see these pictures and more like them! Just click HERE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Van Hohenheim Posted April 8, 2013 Share Posted April 8, 2013 er....there's nothing much here. an introduction of characters and then Lewa using a mace out of dirty clothes. Quote Previously known as Aiwendil. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kanakalackin Posted April 8, 2013 Author Share Posted April 8, 2013 er....there's nothing much here. Yet. I'm a little busy right now, so I'll be working off and on for this project. This main post will serve as sort of an overview for the time being. Quote I have an Instagram page where you can see these pictures and more like them! Just click HERE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phovos Posted April 8, 2013 Share Posted April 8, 2013 Just so you know, there's the 300 word minimum rule, meaning each chapter must be OVER 300 words, excluding character lists, emoticons and author comments. This comedy isn't 300 words and runs the risk of being closed.A tip from a writer of CCCs (colour-coded comedies), when you are starting out, TAKE YOUR TIME. It is easy to get confused and accidentlly have Pohatu saying Pahrak-Kal's line, for example.Why is there no report button on the mobile site? Quote Click here to read The Bohrok-Kal's Ramblings! Yes, I know there were 7 months between the last two episodes but oh well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kanakalackin Posted April 8, 2013 Author Share Posted April 8, 2013 (edited) Okay, thank you everyone. I'll update it later today Tomorrow. By at least 10:00 PM. Edited April 9, 2013 by Phantom Terror Quote I have an Instagram page where you can see these pictures and more like them! Just click HERE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kanakalackin Posted April 9, 2013 Author Share Posted April 9, 2013 Number One: Babysitting Makuta: I’m going to Wal Mart, we need more protodermis.Mata Nui: I just got some yesterday. Makuta: I don’t care! You didn’t get enough. Lewa: Can I come with you? Makuta: No Mata Nui: Sure Makuta: Why? Mata Nui: Because Lewa needs to learn to manage his money. Makuta: Okay, but it won’t be fun. Lewa: Fun! Fun! Fun! *Knock Knock Knock* Mata Nui: Hello, who are you? GS: I’m Sandstorm, I was told I was needed here. Mata Nui: By who? Sandstorm: The guy up *Points upward* there. Mata Nui: The narrator? ME: Yes, the narrator. It’s in the script: Makuta takes Lewa to Wal Mart, and you’re supposed to take a long nap. Oh wait, that’s part of next week’s story. Whatever. Just make a few changes… Blah blah blah… There! You have a business trip to go on, andSandstorm’s the babysitter. Mata Nui: What!?! The office needs me? On a Sunday? ME: Yeah, sorry man. Sandstorm: Okay, have fun. Bye! Okay, what’s everyone’s name? Tahu: My name’s Tahu Gali: No fair! You always go first. Anyways, I’m Gali Onua: *Reading from book* Rocks are comprised of many minerals… Oh, my names Onua. Pohatu *Runs by* I’m Pohatu! Bye! Sandstorm: Who’s he? Kopaka: My name’s Kopaka. Sandstorm: Alright. Who likes football? Tahu: Me! Sandstorm: Who’s me? ME: I’m me! He’s Tahu! Sandstorm: Oh… Now I get it. *Meanwhile at Wal Mart* Makuta: Okay Lewa, you have $50 for the arcade. Don’t spend it all in one place. Lewa: Fun! Fun! Fun! Makuta: Now to get as far away from here as possible. *Back at home* TV: Metalicus ducks left, and it’s a touch down!!! Looks like the Alpha team is going to the finals. ME: I the narrator approve of this crossover. Kopaka: Hey Sandstorm, everyone’s demanding that they eat. Shouldn’t you get us something? Sandstorm: Yeah yeah yeah, just 2 more games okay. Kopaka: Fine. Just to let you know, Gali’s room is on fire. Sandstorm: YES!!! ANOTHER TOUCH DOWN! *10 football games, 2 Dominos pizza orders, and a fire truck later* Mata Nui: What happened here? Sandstorm: Uhh, the Rahkshi team lost their only chance at the finals. Mata Nui: What! The house is in ruins, and you’re concerned about football? Makuta: Wal Mart can’t ban me from their stores! I ban myself. Mata Nui: What happened, where’s Lewa? Makuta: Lewa had an overdose of videogames. He’s staying at Urgent Care for the night. Mata Nui: LEWA!!! *Runs to the car.* Sandstorm: At least the TV survived! Makuta: Yeah, I think you’re fired. Quote I have an Instagram page where you can see these pictures and more like them! Just click HERE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phovos Posted April 9, 2013 Share Posted April 9, 2013 That was... Very random... And I see you ditched the colour coding already... Quote Click here to read The Bohrok-Kal's Ramblings! Yes, I know there were 7 months between the last two episodes but oh well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kanakalackin Posted April 9, 2013 Author Share Posted April 9, 2013 For now. I'll edit it tomorrow. It's more important that I get the story up than color coding is right now. Quote I have an Instagram page where you can see these pictures and more like them! Just click HERE! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phovos Posted April 10, 2013 Share Posted April 10, 2013 Eh, you don't have to use colour at all if you don't want to or are too lazy. My ability to churn out chapters rather quickly makes BBCode a non-issue. Quote Click here to read The Bohrok-Kal's Ramblings! Yes, I know there were 7 months between the last two episodes but oh well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aquaria Posted May 6, 2013 Share Posted May 6, 2013 I love this, "Gali's Room Is On Fire" got me worried though, is she okay? Anywho, nice story! Quote Read my comic, AoA, Adventures of Aquaria, the story of A. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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