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UnSung Hero: Review topic
Posted Apr 30 2013 - 06:54 AM
Well the story was nice but you have to be careful with your writing. The first letter in Vahki is supposed to be in caps.
The [color=#ff0000;]vahki[/color] came. [color=#ff0000;]because [/color]he ate their sandwiches.
See? Next time be careful with that.
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