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 Aug 8 2003, 05:34 AM
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 Mata Nuian Protector Nuva  Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653 
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 Well as promised, I have posted the Prologue of the FotR Epic, which you can see here. Please don't hassle me to write, I have to be in a certain mood to write, I find it very boring otherwise. Please post what you think here, hopefully you'll like it  . Please credit both me and Kanohi Akaku, as some of KA's epic the Biological Chronicles has been woven into the new story. Enjoy! Complete: 14/03/04 - Notes about Mata Nui and its Inhabitants (For Newbies to Bionicle) 01/09/03 - Prologue 04/09/03 - Chapter 1 A Quest Begins 07/09/03 - Chapter 2 Old Legends 15/09/03 - Chapter 3 The Chosen 19/09/03 - Chapter 4 A Journey Through the Ages 26/09/03 - Chapter 5 Doubt 26/09/03 - Chapter 6 Rama 27/09/03 - Chapter 7 Chosen of Fire 27/09/03 - Chapter 8 Makutas Outrage 27/09/03 - Chapter 9 A Trip to Ga-Wahi 06/10/03 - Chapter 10 Makus Plan 30/10/03 - Chapter 11 The Lake Below 01/11/03 - Chapter 12 Kidnapped 29/11/03 - Chapter 13 Kaiweras Illness 29/11/03 - Chapter 14 Snowstorm 29/11/03 - Chapter 15 Rations 30/11/03 - Chapter 16 The Trees of Ko-Wahi 01/12/03 - Chapter 17 Koli Balls 12/01/04 - Chapter 18 Apples 13/01/04 - Chapter 19 A Village Clensed 25/01/04 - Chapter 20 Firesword 15/02/04 - Chapter 21 Plans 17/02/04 - Chapter 22 Drumbeat 17/02/04 - Chapter 23 Nikkis Escape 17/02/04 - Chapter 24 The Journey of the Hau 17/02/04 - Chapter 25 Pillars 17/02/04 - Chapter 26 Equipment 14/03/04 - Chapter 27 The Chosen and their Elements 11/07/04 - Chapter 28 Empty New! 11/07/04 - Chapter 29 Walking New! 11/07/04 - Chapter 30 Awakening New! 11/07/04 - Chapter 31 The Final Chapter New! 11/07/04 - Authors Note New! Notes: Well, it's done. Yes, there was a big break, yes, I kept you waiting. But now it's done. ENJOY! 
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Aug 8 2003, 06:25 AM
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  Toa Nuva Defeated  Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980 
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awesome start! I never realised you were such a good writer.
 If the rest is as good as that, this'll be one of the best epics I'll have ever read!so are both of you going to be writing this? -------------------- |
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Aug 8 2003, 07:24 AM
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 Scavenger Va  Group: Premier Members Posts: 650 Joined: 20-December 01 Member No.: 1018
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WOW - that's all I have to say... no wait, there's more.
I like the way you describe every move, every attack that came, all of the Warrior Tohunga fighting valiantly for the spirit of their villages! It was so sad when Pirihi fell off the cliff... I was just thinking he would be the hero of the story...  But it's your epic, I'm not here to tell you how to write it. Question: Are you taking guest stars? If so, I'd like to be Ihorei, a brave Tohunga from Ko-Koro... that is, if you are doing guest stars 
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Aug 8 2003, 12:11 PM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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No, we won't be doing guest stars. Also DKM, I will be writing the new epic, but taking chunks from the original by Kanohi Akaku and putting them in too. So in a way, we are both writing it!
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Aug 8 2003, 05:57 PM
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 Descending into Protodermis  Group: Premier Members Posts: 911 Joined: 13-May 03 Member No.: 8676 
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Darn! I was going to ask you guys if I could do this... Oh well, you made the game, you make the epic. Anyway, great start! I almost cried when Pirihi died... Although from playing the game I knew he would. I can't wait for the next chapter! This epic has given me the courage I need to beat v6 of the game!
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Aug 8 2003, 06:32 PM
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 Descending into Protodermis Group: New Members Posts: 910 Joined: 27-July 03 Member No.: 12541
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This is awsome! I have flow of the river it's just as good!
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Aug 8 2003, 07:07 PM
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Hm,this one of the better one's i guessing...
It's very discriptive,the fights are be fought in my mind over and over...The characters haw feeling and the story is very well put together,and hooks the reader and keeps them waiting for the next sentance! -KOoI- 10/10 -------------------- |
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Aug 9 2003, 10:41 PM
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 Toa Group: New Members Posts: 127 Joined: 28-January 03 Member No.: 4816
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wow. so thats what those tombstones were all about. i figured they had somethin to do w/ the tohungas past lives, but otherwise it was a bit confusing.
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Aug 12 2003, 01:59 PM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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I'm on holiday now, so I won't be able to post another chapter for a week or so.
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Aug 23 2003, 02:50 AM
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 Toa Group: New Members Posts: 180 Joined: 13-April 03 Member No.: 7734
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wow.
 a bit scary.wait....I reconize the last phrase:because time flows like a river.... and history repeats..... well,it's certantly going to do this time. 
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Aug 28 2003, 05:02 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Sorry guys I've been on holiday, I will be trying to write the next chapter soon.
EDIT - Chapter 2 is now up for you enjoy. This post has been edited by Lewaswingin: Aug 30 2003, 05:28 AM |
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Aug 30 2003, 05:33 AM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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yaaay! chapter 2! let's celebrate!
er, maybe not. but yeah, cool chapter! but I never knew they had Star Wars on Mata Nui. but yeah, anyway, looks like the next chapter's gonna be pretty cool!  good work.
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Sep 1 2003, 05:19 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Thanks DKM, I took apart my laptop and one of the motors in the Floppy has gone "phut" so I'm looking around for a new one.
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Sep 1 2003, 05:20 AM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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you took it apart?
 woah!so you looking for a new floppy hey? will that delay the next chapter at all? 
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Sep 1 2003, 05:22 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Um... well I typed most of the next chapter on it, so It'll be slow coping it from the laptop to the PC. I'll try.
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Sep 1 2003, 05:23 AM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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oh, that don't sound good. so it could be a while then? oh well, good things come to those who wait.
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Sep 1 2003, 05:24 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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As we have frequently found out on FotR yes. For anyone who wants to know, I have actually written the last chapter already, following in the footsteps of JK.
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Sep 1 2003, 05:26 AM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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the last chapter?
already? gah! me wanna see it!  ah well, only a few.....however many 10s of chapters till I do.
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Sep 1 2003, 05:27 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Lol DKM, yes I thought that might upset you a bit. Well, I'm gonna aim to write a chapter a day from now on, so it shouldn't be too long.
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Sep 1 2003, 05:30 AM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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a chapter a day? yay! this is gonna be good. maybe I will get to see that chapter after all.
I'm looking forward to this.
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Sep 2 2003, 01:44 PM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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I'll start on the first today, perhaps once per day was a little ambitious, once a week may be better
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Sep 2 2003, 01:51 PM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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NOOOOOOO! that too infrequent!  one every two days at least. please?ah well, 's long as I get ta see the epic....I'm not fussed. -------------------- |
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Sep 3 2003, 01:49 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Ok, I'll try and get one out every 3 days, does that sound fair?
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Sep 6 2003, 02:43 AM
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That sounds perfectly fair LS
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Sep 6 2003, 03:34 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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The next chapter is up, and chapter 3 is almost done.
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Sep 6 2003, 05:57 AM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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*whoops* yaaay! heehee, poor vakama. I'd hate to see what his day to day life is like.
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Sep 6 2003, 08:44 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Haha yes Vakama. You'll be reading a bit more about him in the next chapter, and what he's thinking... he's scared people, really scared. But what of...?
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Sep 20 2003, 02:36 PM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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ooo, Kaiwara's in for a good beating from those Nui Rama.
as if! they can't even spell their own names! I can't wait to see how 'lil Kaiwara fares against Makuta's missing idiots.
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Sep 21 2003, 03:48 PM
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 Descending into Protodermis Group: New Members Posts: 1046 Joined: 20-April 03 Member No.: 7985
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I think it would be great if you could make more of the epic.
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Sep 22 2003, 02:08 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Taco - chapter 5 will be up by Friday, I promise
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Sep 25 2003, 01:51 PM
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Descending into Protodermis Group: New Members Posts: 1046 Joined: 20-April 03 Member No.: 7985
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I wish you would make it at least two days of the week rather than one.One day a week wont get the story that far.Only four chapters a month!
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Sep 25 2003, 02:27 PM
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 Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: New Members Posts: 1765 Joined: 22-August 03 Member No.: 13566
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Thats soooooooooooooo coooooooooooool i can't wait for chapter 5 it's gonna rock!!!!!!!!!
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Sep 27 2003, 03:00 AM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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you were right, it is. so was chapter 7 it seems, cool!
man, those nui rama really are stupid! I mean, even I'm cleverer than that! wait a sec, did I just insult myself?
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Sep 27 2003, 02:19 PM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: New Members Posts: 1765 Joined: 22-August 03 Member No.: 13566
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Why don't you get all the cool stuff in the game that they get in the epic i probably know why cause that would make it too easy or something???
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Sep 28 2003, 11:00 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Lol, it would be an incredible ammount of work to put all that speach into the game, and also you wouldn't be able to see the items would you? The epic can be a little more accurate about evens and how people feel, like the difference between a book and a film.
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Sep 28 2003, 12:13 PM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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an incredible amount of work? nah, speech is the easiest part of RPG making.
but I get what ya mean. (it'd be boring for the player anyway)is it just me, or have you gone on a mass writing spree? you've what, doubled the epic's size already? it's getting good! -------------------- |
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Oct 1 2003, 03:19 PM
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 Descending into Protodermis Group: Banned Members Posts: 1078 Joined: 5-July 03 Member No.: 11335
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Reading this brings back strange and untold memories, good writing though.
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 Oct 21 2003, 05:33 PM
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Descending into Protodermis Group: New Members Posts: 910 Joined: 27-July 03 Member No.: 12541
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So far, this epic is still really good! I wonder how they will react to a floating Takea.
BLT- 
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Oct 25 2003, 04:36 AM
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Mata Nuian Protector Nuva Group: Outstanding BZPower Citizens Posts: 1787 Joined: 25-October 01 Member No.: 653
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Ok people, sorry for the "writers block" I've been overloaded with work the last few weeks, but I have cleared the backlog and will begin writing again soon. It's my half term week so I have a lot of free time!
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Oct 30 2003, 03:06 PM
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Toa Nuva Defeated Group: Premier Outstanding BZP Citizens Posts: 3804 Joined: 12-October 02 Member No.: 1980
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that's.....a long chapter.
very good though. long chapters are always the best I find. Glad to see you haven't forgotten about this.
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