The story is here. It has eight chapters.

Two people made this story happen, and I am very grateful to both of them.

• Bonehead108, who sent me the banner a couple of months ago and politely asked if I might be able to use it for a story
  
• pohatu jr, who has been bugging me for ages to write a comedy about Po-Koro, her favorite village. And she helped me a lot with ideas, too.
  

Also, for those of you who pleaded for a sequel to "Road Trip With Makuta," and to whom I said, "Eek! No way!", this is as close as I'm going to get (i.e., a couple of passing references to that story). Makuta posted a little epilogue on page 4 of this (the review) topic, with a lovely (fake) photo of me giving Vorahk a kiss.

Enjoy! And I haven't forgotten about Lewa, I'm still working on his epic.


This post has been edited by GaliGee: Jun 28 2003, 01:39 PM

Another story GG!?Oh well, atleast it is something to do between periods of posting Lewa's Epic chapter.

You always post the review topic before the story? Never noticed. I like it how Makuta is grumbling about his new form, it makes a nice addition to your stories and interviews.

This post has been edited by dhik nuva: Jun 19 2003, 06:26 PM

Yipe! What a surprise... of course, I've always noticed that Maku and Makuta are spelled similar... and I've noticed a bit more. If you add Huki to the end of Makuta, the word Tahu appears! Makutahuki... (slaps herself) Why did I say that?

EDIT: Actually, Toa of Muffins... you're the fourth. Lewanut, stop looking over my shoulder!

This post has been edited by Galikat: Jun 19 2003, 06:32 PM

Ooo! fourth to post! This is probably the closest I'll come!
On topic: I just read the first chapter. it's good! I like how now nothing fits makuta anymore and he scraped his mahogany desk.
Hope ch. 2 comes soon!
P.S. in the road trip, there were some "forbidden areas" of makuta's home. will we see those? Of course, since you didn't get too see them, how could you write about them?

This post has been edited by Toa of Muffins: Jun 19 2003, 06:32 PM

Is he gonna infect Maku? Is Makuta gonna be Maku? is Maku Makuta's daughter? Aren't I curious

~TN726

HA! This is great, and its going to get even better! Hehehe...a pink kraata! Oh goody, Maku's going to get a little infected! Hehe...I'll post later after I get over this evil little giggling of mine...hey, what's this pink thing doing on my back?!?
I actually haven't read a GG comedy except for the interviews.. so I'll be eagerly watching this.
Keep it up,

PF was here

*^$#*^$! Stupid Doorway! Stupid Pieces! Stupid...Stupidity!

Great job, GaliGee! I knew you'd put this story idea to good use. I love Makuta destroying everything accidentally, and his Xbox. Great job! Wait, I already said that..hmm, excellent job!

-BH108-

Finally anthor GaliGee story can't wait till theres more Also i would like to take this oppertunity say sorry for misspeling your screen name in every post befor this one i have been spelling it GailGee

like i've said hundreds of times before yet anotehr GG original! HEY! thanks GG you gave me a great i dea for my Toatoron comedy! thanks alot!

Wow another GG classic!I love this,you are really in for it GG.MakuTa,that's a funny way of writing it.So what if the Matorans have discovered that silly little mask? A lot of good it’s going to do them against MY new minions!"That was my favorite part.

Hehe! Great job, GaliGee! Poor Maku..... I hope she doesn't hurt Huki.... Run, Maku! Stay away from your hut! That mean Makuta is at it again. Why won't Mata-Nui wake up and control his deranged brother? Like Bonehead said, in all the stupidness. Either Makuta is stupid, or he just doesn't see the light (pardon the pun, he's the spirit of darkness, duh).

Have a good time thinkin' up a doozy for the fic! It'll probably be really fun, you never know.......

~Prohatu

That was great GG, even if it was just Chapter 1. I love the detail you put into Makuta, especially him trying to adjust to his new form. I guess "Matoran Mode" has some advantages. Of course, it's all about instilling fear... and having a wicked staff

Now we have to think about what MakuTa will do once she's evil. Will Makuta take her to his lair to clean up? Will she go strait to "greening" Po-Koro? Will Makuta accidentally put the pink Kraata into the wrong hut? Maybe it isn't mean enough to infect Maku.

In any case, I'm sure the results will be humorous, as always. Just make sure she becomes good again in the end, and make sure Makuta doesn't have an alternate ending planned. I'd hate to see what a creepy old guy like him would have of MakuTa if his alternate ending came to fruitation

-Elzaban

Hey, not bad. He's going to infect you? yeesh.
But why does your banner show Maku? infected?

Ahhh another story about Makuta. You must really love him to be writing all these storieslove stories to him. The story is off to a great start it sounds like Makuta's lair could use a good cleaning. Everyone down here is always working so hard on the downfall of the Matorans we never have time for cleaning.

Story going great! keep goining

Another good chapter GG. Figures that those Po-Koronans would have breakfast Tacos

I wonder why Maku made Kotu come with her? Seems like Kotu didn't do anything. Was she just there to make sure Maku didn't die or anything?

And now, what might this ceremony be? Perhaps it's about that Koli match. *gasp* So that's when Makuta's going to strike, isn't it? Maybe he'll put the Kraata into Huki's statue? Maybe he'll sneak into Maku's hut and put it in there?

Anyway, good chapter, and I can't wait to see what Makuta has in store for them all

-Elzaban

QUOTE (Comet Ball Traitor @ Jun 20 2003, 08:24 AM)

it sounds like Makuta's lair could use a good cleaning.

Makuta must not have noticed... my house is just as messy as his lair. How do you think I know about tripping over LEGO s?

Thanks, guys! Chapter 2 is up!


Edit: Elzaban, yeah, Kotu is just along for safety and companionship. And check out Bonehead's new picture at the top of the story! Is that guy good, or what?

This post has been edited by GaliGee: Jun 20 2003, 10:27 AM

Mukau tacos for breakfast??? Blaugh, I'd rather have a husi egg burrito. Hmmmm, and Bacon....... I really like it! Keep it up! Poor Huki, he forgot about his and Maku's anniversary.
Hey, don't look at me! I don't just forget something like that!

Wonderful job, GaliGee 9/10 so far......

~Prohatu

Oh that was another great chapter GG.Mukau breakfast tacoes was one of the funnest parts.And,don't you just love maku's huki stuff toy?I also like it how they are having an anniversary just for that poster.Hope the new chapter is up soon.

Haha! That's another GG original funny comedy! I like that little Huki plush toy that Maku has in the game.
Wonder where she got it...

Weeeeeeeeeee... *zooms across the room* New story. Awsome

Yay! Chapter 2 is up! Mukau tacos? They eat weird food for breakfast. I thought macku would be infected... I guess that happens later. I liked how Huki banged his head on the roof
I geuss they all need to get used to their new forms.

QUOTE

I missed the part where that's my problem

,lol. I never thought about Muaka tacos, a good chapter.

This ought to turn out another GG work of genious! So it's already mostly written out . . . well . . . Good! As much as I really like this . . . LGD rules supreme!

So on with review this story. Makuta's really a funny guy when there aren't any Toa/Matoran/Rahi . . . free beings, to sum it all up, around. I love how he hasn't gotten used to his new body yet!

Huki's another funny guy. Letting his dreams carry him away, forgeting to do things (or perhaps not wanting to do things) until the last minute (sounds like me. Thank the Great Beings school's over!), and that funky food he eats.

BTW, shouldn't Maku and Huki have become Macku and Hewkii now, since they're in new form?

Overall, awsome new fic, GG! I stumbled upon it while checking out LDG and seeing a "freaky" picture in your sig. Glad I realized it was a link!

-<)->Tovnu<-(>-

awsome story!

Very cool story. GG, how do you come up with such good stories? oh well, I'll never write like that. Anyway, I cant wait till theres more.

QUOTE (Tovnu @ Jun 20 2003, 04:14 PM)

BTW, shouldn't Maku and Huki have become Macku and Hewkii now, since they're in new form?

The important ceremony at Kini Nui will be the naming ceremony, when Maku becomes Macku.

Well, another GG fanfic! How does she find all the time? Well, it's pretty good so far. I'm guessing I know why Makuta is going to use the pink kraata to infect Macku. You know, if they have found the MOL and they're in their new forms, they would have their new names. Sorry to be nitpicky, but Hewkii wanted me to remind you.

Edit: Hey, what are the purple parts doing in Makuta's lair? Those aren't leftovers from a purple Rahkshi, are they? Just in case, I'M COMING, GUYS!!

And if you're reading my epic, Chapter 2 is up!

This post has been edited by Purple Pohatu: Jun 20 2003, 04:36 PM

I never notice that before! I wonder whats gonna happen if there is a Matoran named Mata?

GG you make some of the funniest storys on bzp i like them a lot there awesome, keep at it


~*DS*~

Hoi hoi hoi! *everybody on BZP stares at Bonehead and his freaky laugh*

Oops.
This is getting better already, dang it. Calm down, people, Maku isn't outright evil. We made sure of that. *Bonehead's pink Kraata #2 winks*She's just overly mischevious now, as far as I can say without giving up the storyline.

-BH108-

Man, this is funny! I like it when Matukia hits the doorway.

Very good,just like a real book.i can't wait to see what happens next!

Chapter 3 was good, as always. So she isn't totally evil, just being sorta... I dunno... mischievious... It's funny how they -just- realized that her name is two letters away from Makuta. Lewa's reference to him being dead was good.

QUOTE

"Good thing he's dead," shrugged Lewa. "Watching his ugly head spin off into oblivion was one of the highlights of my life."

Now, I wonder how Lewa's going to talk Gali into this. And furthermore, whether or not we'll her her tree lecture.

-Elzaban

I think you're giving the plot away too soon but you are a master storywriter. Did Lewa have his old Akaku or the Akaku Nuva?

If you notice, GaliGee did say she had most of it already written, so it can be updated it quickly.

Also, I'm pretty sure GregF said the Toa Nuva collected all their Kanohi Nuva, and either way, GaliGee probably made it the Akaku Nuva.

-Elzaban

I really should check out the Comedies Forum more often! How could I miss this? Well, yet another stupendous comedy by GG! And, GG, you really should stop writing comedies involving Makuta while in the process of writing other epics...Makuta's going to think you're enamored with him! And another story that Lewa plays a prank in! YES! The other one, Gali Loses Her Head, is my all time favorite GG comedy!

That was so funny, how Makuta was breaking everything in his lair! I think he needs some remodeling done in his lair... Pink Kraata? Ok...that's...weird. Cute? Kraata? And Makuta, 27 flights of stairs isn't that bad...it could be worse! GG, I just love how you show Makuta as such an...regular guy! Except he isn't.

Huki and Maku's "anniversary day" was terrific, GG! So classic! Maku writing love poems...and sneaking them into Huki's hut...Huki dreaming about Koli...Huki waking up, and then going into a frantic whirlwind of activity, trying to make Maku's anniversary gift! Fantastic description, GG! And that Mukau taco...I KNOW I've heard that somewhere before...I think it was in another of your comedies.

Then, the "infecting" of Maku's Huna...uh-oh. It seems like the pink Kraata isn't powerful enough to do more than make Maku act...different, for lack of a better word. And then, Lewa's part in The Plan. It seems Po-Koro will be quite...changed by the time he's through!

GG, I love the title of this comedy! Very unique, a very classic title! And B108's banner is awesome! Very interesting...MakuTa! Keep on writing, GG!

-IT

this is one of the best comedies I've ever read!

Well, actually, I don't come in here very often.

Good job!

I can't wait until part 4 is done

Whee! It's chapter three!
Uh oh... Macku's infected now? Gulp...
I have a feeling this "prank" may result in disaster...

How did I miss this story! Oh well, I'd better catch up on it!

GG makes another supree epic- trailing off from where RTWM ends. Makuta is very funny with his new big body, and all the other Matoran are funny too. But the epic is a bit seriouse, (which is good) and everybody isn't insulting eachother ever other word.
Hey, why would Lewa go along with such a thing. You'd think a Toa that has been infected before would reconize an infected Matoran- wouldn't he?

Oh well, keep up the exelent work!