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[The Porcupine]

Now that I have finally joined , I can comment on how much you can make me laugh. You also inspire me to do comedies of my own, one of them soon to be finished. My only suggestion would be that you indent your quotations. I think it gives "Story!" more character. Other than that, good job!

(by indentations, I mean only when someone is talking.)

This post has been edited by The Porcupine: Jul 5 2007, 10:41 PM

[Half-Dragon]

Wow The story (aptly named "Story!") is beginning to take a pseudo-epic twist. Tooli missing, Jalika walking off on his own in a fit of... well, actually he was just disgruntled, but even more so than usual... and leaving his makeshift companions behind, and I think there's the slightest chance Hakuna may make another appearance, though I sincerely doubt it. Yep, ten pounds of pseudo-epic in a five-pound bag.

Frankly I was surprised Freud was so accurate, though a closer inspection reveals chapter 5 had nothing but Hakuna and a song that would probably have counted as traumatic if Jalika had even heard it. But nobody's perfect, and he said "might".

Once again, I run out of things to say, so I say only this: Good to see you again, and keep up the good work.

=VM=

[Toa of Pi]

I know I'm very late, but since there hadn't been a update for such a long time, I had stopped looking at this thread regularly. I just found out you have completed your story, so I (re-)read it... And I loved it. I think the first chapters were the best and funniest ones, but the rest of the story is great, too! I didn't expect Toolie would be the villain, I had liked him very much. When you said the story is nearly over, I thought he'd either just reappear at some point, like he'd never been away, or just never appear again. Anyway, I hope you will write many more great comedies like this one... I'm looking forward to the sequel.

Its ok to be late. Sometimes, it can be more fun to just read everything at once instead of coming back again and again. Whatever the case, I'm just glad you stopped by.

Its nice to know that not everybody realized that Toolie was the main villain. I didn't even know that until around chapter 14 (it was a late decision), so I was kinda surprised that people were able to figure that out.

As for the sequel, you won't have to wait long. I'm posting the first chapter tommorow, and I'll edit this post with a link when I do that. I'll try to post that one a bit more regularly (I'm aiming for a weekly release, with a new chapter every monday), so hopefully you won't have to deal with extra long hiatuses (Hiatusi?).


Edit: The first chapter of Story 2! is officially up, and can be located here.

This post has been edited by Toa of Pi: Sep 1 2008, 09:27 AM