The Order: Review Options

[Thoketan:BZPower...]

Hey Parugi, you wanted a color description for Dermika it sounds like. Well, since dermika is about 7 feet away from me, I'll give you a description.

He is mainly green, with Iruni's tarnished gold Kualsi stepping in for his mask of Fusion (trust me, my brother and I had a heck of a time attempting to make a good name for tha mask), He has 4 legs and 4 arms. with Piraka and Inika feet. Large staff of Negation that is good for bashing when he isn't gmodding (lol). He's a little taller than the inika, thanks just to a bigger body. 2 of his arms are wings, which also can double as "solar panels."

My little bro has created a giant manster thing, my response was my personal self, Thoketan. But I wont describe myself here.

I have my sweet Vahi that I never talked about!!! I think it's swet.

-=Thoketan=-

This post has been edited by Thoketan: Jun 23 2008, 08:48 AM

[Sergeant of Kalm...]

i haven't posted for so long, you probably don't remember me. but i like all the chapters i've read since i've been gone. waiting for another one.

[SPINAX15]

the most recent chapter, though short was great, what is Kardak up to.

[Muulka: emperor ...]

Finally a new front post I might have an air toa for you, so look in your PM box

[Kovian The Reape...]

[Insert fanatic response at the sight of both a new chapter and Slicer here]
O-M-G, it is Slicer -- again! =O Looooong time, no see, dude. XD

On the chapter: Interesting. I found the whole special-type-of-wood-thing funny -- and once again, Slicer shows his uninterestedness in nature. Kardak (Random fact: I know Siervehen (Kardak's creator) in real life,) Xador and Ror (still know who they are) make an appearance once again. And once more, secrecy occurs.
I found no grammar mistakes in this chapter, so props to you for that. Not much else to say for such a short chapter, but I'm glad to see that TO is still alive and healthy.

Other: I has announcements regarding myself, too!!!
1. I'm a Premier member now!
2. I have a blog -- the KK Radio Station!
3. I've got a JOB! I'm the co-GM for the Tournament of Shadows RPG -- you should check it out (the epic and the RPG (the RPG contains spoilers for Broken Unity.))
Yeah. Randomness. And I've also made a bunch more MOCs (including a new Rodax MOC.)
Randomness. Again. XD

BTW, just wondering, would I be able to use the Arena in a future story?

Yep, Slicer's a #####. He's more like my evil twin than me myself.

A short chapter's better than no chapter, though, right?

Ahh, I'll find time to check that stuff all out. And congrats! How long have you been premier?

You can use it all you want, as long as it's set a LOOOOONG time ago, and you run any major changes past me. That goes for all of you, too.

...

New chapter coming whenever I feel like writing.

-1234

I hadn't noticed. XD

Totally -- I've done that for BU, myself, anyway, so...

I have been a Premier since the 10th, I believe. Woopah!

Kay; awesome. =) Question about that: Does the time that Magnum came to the Arena count as "a long time ago"? 'Cause that's the period of time I was going to be basing it around (JSYK, going by my story timeline, he would have arrived around two or three years before Axonn did.)

Haven't heard that in a while...

As long as it doesn't come across as 'rushed,' it really doesn't matter.

Sweet, again, congratulations are in order. They should be shipping in 6-8 business days.

As long as your story doesn't contradict anything I've written and your happy, I'm happy. Free publicity, woohoo!

Yep.

Ooh -- can't wait! But what of the cake?

Kay. *In mind* I'll be sure to contradict everything. Muahahahah! (Just joking around.... XD)
On a related note, I'm thinking of drawing a map of the Arena... Would you be able to provide a list of rooms and such? Granted, it won't be, say, [insert famous artist's anem here] worthy-of-mention, but it'll be something, at least. XP

*Thinks of a Toa* Maybe I should come up with that Earth Toa I've been meaning to think up... I mean, since Rodax is the only Earth being I've made and all. XD Though I don't know if i will -- I'm taking a break from Guest Stars. =/

On a completely unrelated note, I found the secret to making chapters seem longer when posted: Write them in size 8 and Times New Roman font. =)

This post has been edited by Parugi: Aug 31 2008, 06:37 PM

[Eyru]

OK, it's a little late, and I'm a little grumpy, but I'm determined to review this chapter before I go to bed. So please forgive me for any cutting words or harsh criticism. I'm just tired.

Anyway, I think this Epic is too complex for me. I keep getting lost; especially with so many characters, so many locations, and too little action. C'mon, Slicer! We need a bit more action and a bit less dialogue. No offense, it just seems like everything's moving a little slowly.

This chapter had very few spelling mistakes, so kudos for that.

Now, what's with the 'dear's!!?? "Could you be a dear..." "my dear Ror..." What's with that? In a way it's funny, in another way it's corny, and in yet another way it's way, way out of character. That, or I'm just tired. Again, the 'dear's totally killed me! (As in "ouch")

Okay, I think I'd better get to bed before I tear your Epic apart. Good chapter, Slicer. Keep 'em comin'.

~Eyru~

[LegenderyToaOfFi...]

Wow Eyru, a little harsh aren't you? Though i can't blame you, at this time you must be really tired, but anyway Slicer i have to agree with him, the epic is kind of moving too slowly. Perhaps we can see a little more action?

PS: Please update soon!