Review: Glitch In The System Options

[Lady Kopaka]

Glitch in the System is still under construction. But you can still review the story here, and I'm trying my best to get it all up again.

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This post has been edited by Lady Kopaka: Sep 5 2009, 02:50 PM

[Uncle K.com]

Yo-ho, yo-ho,
A Pirate's Life for me.

Besides the obvious PoTC reference that is pardoned for being from the first one, I loved the most recent chapter. Granted, not as much as the end of chapter four (dunno why, just do) but it's great. I'm glad the focus and perspective was still Tachi's, as her reaction to the Pirates and Komas's relationship with the captain if pulled off expertly. Drunken pirates are always the best pirates.
Looking back to the sixth chapter, this was one of the best written ones. The way Tachi lashes out at Komas is pretty darn realistic to how a lot of us would respond, and it was entirely believable. The Glitch is more widely known... hmm. Maybe we'll get more hints as to what the glitch is later. (Well, I guess to wrap up the story you'll eventually have to come out with it)
Chapter five; a good chapter. Looking back, am I safe to say that the bit before the narrative was talking about Tachi being in a similar state like her brother? Will there be another flashback explaining the glitch, or was that a one-time thing to start off the journey to Szian's island? And man! When you said a loooong time ago one of them used to be a cop, I had my money on Tachi, until I forgot about that and then read this chapter. Hopefully we'll hear more about why the circumstances turned Komas like he is. Secondary character origins are just as important you know.
Anyway, wonderful, excellent writing.
Moarmoarmoar.
Nownownow.
Please.