The Iron Ghost, the Last and the First Options

Great story.

I like the description on what the story was about and how Angara has been invisible for most of his time as a toa.

10/10

Well ToM, this was definitely a joy to read - much like your other work. However, unlike your other work, this gave off a very 'non-ToM' feeling to it. And, the worst part is, I'm not even sure why. Perhaps it's just the setting you placed this in, and the fact that it has to be more 'magical' because he's invisible. Or, like you mentioned, it may just be that you focused on dialogue and emotions more than usual - which you accomplished magnificently.

I love the incredible amount of detail. The smallest of things that would have been overlooked by any writer, you somehow see and know to write about it - in depth too. But, you never go into too much detail - which again is often overlooked.

I love how he is unable to not be invisible. I think that if you really wanted to, you could write a whole epic about this one Toa of Iron [I actually think it would be cool, even though you are writing two epics at the moment - possibly when you finish those?]. I hope you at least write another short story or two about Angara, who seems to be a very interesting character. It would be interesting to see what he does, but it's totally up to you.

Well, now that I've replied to this, I will go review your BBC50 entry.

Great job again ToM, I look forward to more literature of yours in the near future [preferably on your two epics].

[Wrinkledlion X]

Velox is right. I'd like to see a lot of him.