 The Tales Of Precipitação-nui Review topic, An epic about a team of toa who must battle an evil monstosity |
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 Jul 17 2009, 04:46 PM
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Well Im here to quickly reveiw your story so far.
Now story wise, its an intresting story so far and I look foward to deeing more of this story, It has a lot of potential. However the length of the chapters need to be improved. Though some of the latest chapters are a bit longer which is good. Also i think spacing out your dialouge would also make a great improvement. Now if you follow the suggestions of our fellow BZPower members in this topic, this topic will be exelent. Toa Zahaku -------------------- |
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