War For Omnimata, Review for the Epic Options

[Bolt: The Guardi...]

I'll make the third vote for final convergance. It really goes well together. If I come up with a name, I'll edit this post. Can't wait for the third book.

[Toa of the Stars]

'K again! We've got three for Final Convergence! I need votes from a few more people, but as of now, final convergence looks like its going to be the title of the next book. Thanks, guys!

This post has been edited by Toa of the Stars: Oct 10 2003, 02:33 PM

[Toa of the Stars]

Still waiting for some votes, I PMed <daydreamer> and HN to make sure they stopped by. Oh! I forgot to PM Nighthunter and Dark Wairuha! I gotta make sure they vote!

HN, you told me that you'd give me a really big review. I'd like you to tell me what you think of the last chapter, and the book overall. Thanks!

[Toa of the Stars]

Well, a big ugly void stabbed him in the back.

He'll come back though, very soon.

[Nighthunter]

Wonderful chappie! As for the vote, I like Final Convergence. I don't have any better idea.
I loved the 2 books and read every chapter, but I didn't have enough time lately to review them....
I can't wait for the next book!

[Rangi42]

Hey, TotS! I got your PM, and I, too, think "Final Convergence" would be a good title (although if "cathexis" means the same thing as "convergance", then "Final Cathexis" would be better). Now, on to the review:

I like the way you go back and forth from Pohatu's point of view to Hanri's - it shows just when everything's happening. The battle between Pohatu and Desh Narizan was well written, especially when Pohatu threw his Kodan ball, and when Desh Narizan was hurled off the platform. The end is a gerat cliffhanger. Was the white being Mata Nui, or an opposite to Desh Narizan? And when Pohatu and Hanri get pack to the right space/time, will the other Toa be there too? Or could the wite being have been Death, and that's why Antati has met him? That would be interesting... I can't wait for the third book (don't take me wrong, though - books 1 and 2 were great! ).

Oh, that reminds me - I'll be editing & posting more in Makuta's Return today, so please review it. Thanks!

[Toa of the Stars]

More Makuta's Return? I'll be sure to check it out! Or, at least, I'll try, very hard. The white being was Desh Narizan's opposite, remember how Antati met him a little while ago in his own mini-universe? Antati hasn't met Mata Nui yet.

Thanks for reviewing! By the way, Nighthunter, your new short story was great!

'k, I just need two more votes...

[HauNuva]

Final Convergence is my vote, because nobody knows what Cathexis means.

Anyway, I'd love to do that big review now, but my brother really needs me to get off! Sorry. I promise more soon.

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[Toa of the Stars]

Its definately ok!

The miniature review you gave me in your epic center is enough! I'm so glad I have you guys advertising for me.

I'd post the new chapter now, but it isn't quite done, and I have some homework to do... I have to look for two poems about amoebae... I swear, my teachers are insane.

HN, I was thinking about making my own epic center, once I start the third book, and stuff. What topic do you post it in?

Oh yeah! Just so you know, the title is now Final Convergence. The new chapter should be up soon.

[Bolt: The Guardi...]

Hooray for Final Convergance! For an epics center, I'm pretty sure it's just in the epics topic, or did you mean something else? Hope you get the next chap. up soon! Do you know if you'll make anything else when all three books are done?

[<daydreamer...]

Got here as fast as I can. And I got my vote for Final Convergance! Well, cathexis sounded more chim so why not convergance?

And about the epics center, I have one too but not so popular and hey, maybe a comedy might be a good one to write on. I'm gonna start mine after the exams but you know, It's all up to you. See ya after the x-xams and all the best to you.

[Toa of the Stars]

OK! Everybody voted Final Convergence, so thats what its gonna be. Unfortuantely, the computer ate my chapter whole and with mustard, so I need to re-write it.

I'm already writing a not-so-short short story for when I'm done with Masters of the Void. I'm aiming for it to be pretty scary.

[Toa of the Stars]

Sorry I haven't updated in a while, I've had all kinds of problems. I've had so many tests and so much homework that by the end of the day I can barely move my hand. The weekends are no exception.

Whether I post the next book tomorrow or not is all up to my teachers. All I can do is hope, because I can tell people are eagerly awaiting it, (I hope so, anyway), and 'cuz everyone else has posted stuff in their epics.

HN, 24 posts in your epic already! Incredible! You are so prolific! I just wish I had some time to read it.

Edit: Make that, all of your epics. They're all so good, and I never have any time to read any of them. I've promised to read Makuta's Return several times now, and I haven't had a chance. I'd read it now, but I have laryngitis, and my parents want me to go to bed early. I'll probably have to go to school anyway tomorrow.

This post has been edited by Toa of the Stars: Oct 19 2003, 08:04 PM

[Bolt: The Guardi...]

Up to your TEACHERS!*dramatic music plays* Well....let's just hope they will lighten the homework sometime soon. I can wait, but I want to see Lewa back in action, and the three new light Gods. Will Takanuva be one of them? I think we can be patient. Good luck with Final Convergence.

[HauNuva]

Thank you for your kind words, , you're very flattering. It's OK if you don't have time to read my epics, although I think you'll like 'em. But oddly enough, I don't have an epic called Makuta's Return. You must be confusing me with someone else.

And yes, I am surprised by the number of reviews I get, and the amount of posts I...uh...post.

Looking forward to Final Convergence. How's it coming?

-, who is currently, has been, and always will be an adoring fan of all of TotS' epics.

BTW, you can post an epic center right here in epics.

[<daydreamer...]

Get a glass of orange juice and rid of that largy-thing of yours.

And up to the TEACHERS?! Bolt, I agree with you, and maybe we can see the new book soon after that!

[Toa of the Stars]

I know that I've kept you waiting. But now, as we speak, I'm writing the 1st chapter of Final Convergance!

Oh, HN, I was confusing you with someone else. I really need to get more sleep!

[HauNuva]

Well, we're all eagerly awaiting it. My nerves are on edge, my typing fingers are tensed, and my mind is humming! Do you have a release date set? What 'percent' have you got? Will I ever stop babbling?

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[Toa of the Stars]

Well I'm about 1/2 through. I hope its gonna be a cool chapter. Tonight isn't the night of completion, but it should be the last mega-workload night.

I'm going to read all of your epics once I have time! I am eagerly awaiting the cance to catch up with Bolt's story, (which he tells me has voids in it), <daydreamer>'s, which I haven't posted in for so long, and Dark Whairua's, which I promised to read a million times, and still haven't gotten around to. Don't let me forget HN's! I've been reading it for such a long time, and I haven't finished it! I just want to finish the 1st chaper of Final Convergence.

That reminds me, Nighthunter, what happened to your epic? I don't think you've posted in it for a long time.

[HauNuva]

Well, we're all just waiting for the starters gun! Looking for the flag! Err...I'm out of really stupid metaphors. In any case, I don't think any of us can wait.

So, any epics besides your you'd really recommend?

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[Toa of the Stars]

Sorry, me again... my power went out again and everything, and it took my file with it. But I'm going to try to write it now!

Once I'm done, I'll read all your epics! I PROMISE!

HN, check out Bolt, Toa of Ligntning's story. And <daydreamer>'s. and Dark Whairuha's. And Nighthunter's. And well, nearly everybody who has posted in this topic has cool epics. Check them out while you're waiting. I know they'd like it.

Any way, wish me luck! I have mood music cranked up high, and my word processor it ready!

Oh, and I'd like all you guys to PM me, if you'd like, and talk. I haven't talked to you in a while...

[<daydreamer...]

Oh yeah, I'll be waiting. And be waiting for new readers.

And I agree with HN. When will the door open? And I sent a PM already. Waiting for a reply.

-Mabel

[HauNuva]

IT'S UP! IT'S UP!

Yes, The Final Convergence has in fact been posted!

Amazing. Simply amazing. Your first chapter was wonderful; I don't remember this Toa, but I do remember Chrunus (spelling?). Presumably that chapter was set on the world where Kopaka was sent...it's amazing that you can keep all these plot threads going! I can't wait to find out what's happened to Antati and Co, last I heard they picked up those void-slaying weapons...

Your descriptions were are as stunning as always. The images of 'verdant novas' and 'domes of blue fire' crackled with the energy of a high-budget movie. It's amazing how high-quality you've made this story! I could imagine the frantic battle going on, and in the midst of it, the one character debating if it's really worth it.

Your character depictions were so incredibly realistic. I love the 'variation' in the way you portray emotion. Some of your characters despair; others burn with anger and a desire for revenge; others simply soldier on in the face of adversity. This person was definitely near despair, and I thought you portrayed that marvelously well. The way he kept wondering if 'it was still worth it' was stunningly realistic.

And the plot seems to be developing...the Dark Gods are going for the Source around here, whatever that is. Your convoluted and wonderful plot may be a bit...confusing to new readers, though, because it has so much depth and tone. You could post a sort of 'lexicon' explaining terms, gods, and Toa, so readers could keep the new Gods and Toa straight.

BTW, I'd like to say that I think Desh Narizan is one of the coolest villains BZP has ever seen.

Well, looking forward to more! I really cannot wait!

I've read Dark Wairuha's epic, 'Makuta's Return', which is really great. I'll try to get the others as soon as I can, but I'm really busy reading stories right now. Thanks for the references, though, I'll put it on my To Do list.

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This post has been edited by HauNuva: Nov 6 2003, 06:07 AM

[Toa of the Stars]

Wow! Thank you so much!

Karon is a new toa. You'll learn more about him later.

Remember, after Antati and co. picked up the voidslaying weapons, they were crushed under an avalanche. Karon is standing over their bodies, which are right above the entrance to the temple for the great meeting, which is were all the toa are trying to get to. Home this untangles a few threads of plot!

A lexicon is a wonderful idea!

[Bolt: The Guardi...]

I just finished reading it. Awesome job man! Those beasts are incredible. How many voids do you think there are? Final Convergance has made a good start so far. I hope to see Lewa again soon. Karon sounds like a strong Toa. Is his elemental power a type of blue fire? I got confused on what he looked like. I hope the second chap. will be just as good.

Edit: I agree on the lexicon, that would be nice.

This post has been edited by Bolt toa of lightning: Nov 6 2003, 03:16 PM

[WeirdBionicleDud...]

Look at my awesome new name. lol Anyways, I'm too lazy to find the epic myself so can you post a link to it?

P.S. Tell me if you like my new name.

[Toa of the Stars]

QUOTE (WeirdBionicleDude @ Nov 6 2003, 05:01 PM)

Look at my awesome new name. lol Anyways, I'm too lazy to find the epic myself so can you post a link to it? P.S. Tell me if you like my new name.

To be honest, I really liked your old name better. It had more... texture. Naw, i guess I'm just too ues to your old name. The new one is fine.

I got a review topic up: Final Convergence Review
From now on, I'd like the comments for Final Convergence to go here.

A link to the epic is in the review topic, but because its not much trouble, here's another link to the epic: Final Convergence

I'll be posting the lexicon in a bit.