For anyone who wants to comment on the Ohehlo stories.

You need to post a link to the review topic in you story for every chapter. But anyways, I really like it.

Thank you, I will do that.

I don't understand why nobody's replied. It's a very good story and is well-written, though there are parts that could be better. Try to fix some of the spelling/grammar errors as they may be distracting. I was never interested in Bara Magna but now reading this it has inspired me to go back and read some of the 2009 stuff.

The story is very intriguing and the various planets and life you introduce throughout the chapters seem like very good ideas and it would be nice to see more than just descriptions.

The T.O.A. are an interesting concept and as I'm reading Frankenstein in school, it is interesting to see the parallels.

I'll be following this story!

-Lewa Krom

Thank you, only just noticed someone had actually replied. Yeah my grammar and spelling are not always my best points, I will try to work on that. I actually have at least two more aliens planned, both with natural elemental powers. I also will be adding a chapter tomorrow, if all goes as planned.