this one of the stories i made up and what could happen after the Rahkshi!

Just tell me what u thinnk about my story! Ps. tell me if this is Ilegal.
Part1 Metal?

way underneath onua-koro some researchers and Takua were digging and found a fossil that said XA-Koro and next to the fossil was a toa fossil Takua put his torch a little closer to the fossil and it said The ground moves The reaserchers run out of the cave yelling earthQuake Takua follows dropping his torch.Later takua tells onua nuva about the symbols and fossils onua said ill grab the gang! At night Takua meets them where he found the fossils and the cave colapsed Everybody starts to dig except for onua.

so what do u think of part 1? And Are u ready for part 2?

Moving to Short Stories...

Nice but put "lalala"(example)when they talk(in other words put the ")Its easier to understand

You need to work on your writing skills, such as paragraphing and the use of periods. Looks good storywise so far.

QUOTE (KatanaWielder @ May 26 2003, 02:22 PM)

You need to work on your writing skills, such as paragraphing and the use of periods. Looks good storywise so far.

sorry if this is mean, but i agree with him, i bet its good for your age though
-Hottoco