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The Bionicle Mary Sue Litimus Test


Kevin Owens

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It's been long coming, and it's not technically finished. But I kinda get the feeling I'll never get around to finishing it, so here it is.

 

The Bionicle Mary Sue Litimus Test

 

Some notes before we begin. First, the title is a little bit deceptive. Yes, this is a Mary Sue test, but it's also a cliche test. You will be gain points for being cliche. Now how this test works. The test proposes a simple yes or no question. If you answer yes, you take the designated point count. If you answer no, you go onto the next question. Some questions do not have a designated point value. That's because you should just take that as a sign that you've most likely failed. Also, the orginization and spelling aren't exactly top notch. I apologize.

 

So without further ado, let's get started.

 

First of all: Does the character have, and retain throughout the comic, full and complete Author powers? If so, skip this test. What you've got there is an Author character, which isn't what this test is for. Now you just have to decide (and ask the forumers) whether you should use an Author character in your comic... my advice would be no.

Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.)

Does the character have a really cool name, like Hunter, Killer, or Death? Two points (Four points if the name sounds like an AOL user name or a fourteen-year-old wannabe hacker's handle.)

Does the character's name include the name of a weapon? (Darksword, Gunbot, or just being called Scythe) (1 point)

Does the character have more than one name (i.e. a nickname or a pseudonym)? (1 point for each name)

Does the character's name have anything to do with disease? (Plague, Virus, Pox, that sort of thing.) (1 point)

Is the character's name based on an existing character's name? (Mega Tahu, that sort of thing. If the name is based on more than one character, such as "Gopaka", count the points for each character.) (2 points each)

Is the character's name based on a musical term? (1 point)

Does he have a name that sounds like an occidental trying to sound Oriental or American Indian (i.e. "Midnight Tiger")? (1 point)

Did the character choose his name himself?

Does he have a sidekick that meets any of these requirements?

Do you ever, even just to yourself, refer to the character as "me" or "I"? (10 points.)

 

What does he do? Does he:

Fight Evil (1 point)

Own his own lab? (1 point)

sit around all day for no good reason? (1 point)

travel the world Protoman-style? (1 point)

in order to get revenge on an enemy? (2 points)

work for a BoM of OoMN? (3/4 points respectively)

A pirate? (2 Points)

A Pirates of the Carribean esque pirate who really has a heart of gold? (4 Points)

A Ninja (3 Points)

kill people for money? (3 points) (If your character is a bounty hunter, assassin, Dark Hunter, or mercenary, answer "yes.")

have an established character (i.e. Taipu) as a student/flunky? (3 points, 5 points if he happens to be a major character such as Makuta)

hang out with characters from wildly different games/cartoons/movies/TV shows?

Sonic? (7 points)

Mario? (5 points)

Megaman? (3 points)

Kingdom Hearts? (10 points)

Nauroto/Bleach/some other generic anime show (7 points)

 

*What* is your character?

A Matoran? (0 points. If he has Toa powers count him as a Toa)

A Toa (1 point)

A Rackshi (1 point)

A Bohrok (1 point)

A support unit (rahi or something similar)? (0 points)

A some other species (Krekka, Vortixx, etc.) (1 point)

A toa with powers beyond the norm (2 points)

A hybrid of two or more things (2 points, hordika are exempt from this rule)

Something cosmic and/or supernatural (3 points)

 

What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)

...the usual, I guess; nothing to write home about (0 points)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by Toa stones (1 point)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points)

From the future (3 points)

From the past (2 points)

From another dimension (1 point, if he is from one of the universe above in the hanging out question, count those points)

...that just happens to closely resemble, or in fact be, modern-day Earth (5 points)

...where the universe he's in now is fiction (5 points)

Was an ordinary matoran/toa until Something Happened (2 points, and see below)

 

Does your character undergo any physical or metaphysical transformation in the story or backstory? (i.e., was he something else before?) (4 points) Note: MAJOR upgrades count, but most "normal" upgrades don't.

Specifically, a Toa/Matoran into a robot/cyborg/similar? (2 points)

If so, did they die before being "rebuilt" as a robot/cyborg/whatever? (5 points)

Do you wish you could be transformed into something like the character? (2 points)

Does the character angst and/or complain about his new form, despite it being more powerful than his old form? (1 point)

Or, conversely, does the character just cheerfully accept it and move on like nothing happened? (2 points) (There *is* a happy medium for this sort of thing, you know.)

 

Does your character use some kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)

can't fight (-1 point)

my own two fists (0 points)

a typical zamor launcher (1 point)

a cordak blaster (2 points)

a knife, stick, or a Wolverine-esque claw (1 point)

an Exo-Toa or similar robot (5 points)

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)

a similar deadly melee weapon (3 points)

a *really powerful* gun (4 points)

I don't lift a finger. I just use my INCREDIBUL POWURZ (7 points. note, Toa powers do not count as this).

 

Toa powers and you

Does your Toa have a traditional power? (Fire, Earth, Rock, Wind, Water, Ice) (0 points)

Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)

Does your toa control gravity? (2 points)

Does your Toa control Light/Shadow (5 points)

Count each element as a separate power. (e.g. Controlling both Gravity and Shadow would net you 7 points. 5 from Shadow and 2 from Gravity)

 

Choosing a Mask

Does your character use an Elda? (-1 Point)

Kaukau, Rau, Ruru, Rode(1 Points)

Hau, Miru, Akaku, Sanok, Iden, Arthron, Zatth(2 Points)

Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)

Jutlin, Avsa, Felnas, Mohtrek, Shelek, Crasy (4 Points)

Olmak, Tryna(5 Points)

Olisi, Krahkan, or Avohki? (7 Points)

 

From here to there. How does your character move about?

Walks? (0 Points)

Ride a Kikalano or something similar? (1 Point)

Takes a Boat/Airship? (1 Point)

That He/She owns? (1 more point)

A personal hover bike ala Ussa-Nui or something similar? (1 Point)

Just how customized is this thing?

Nope. No bells or whistles or this thing. It's got default settings. (0 Points)

I payed a little bit more for a few little doodads. Nothing spectacular. (1 Point)

I bought a regular bike and then tooled it to fit my own style. (2 Points)

I built it from scratch. (3 Points)

 

 

Does the character keep Makuta/The Shadowed One on a leash at home, untying them only to use them as training dummies? Do said training dummies enjoy it? (5 points)

Does your character's normal moves look like an ordinary game character's super moves?

Does the character magically learn an opponent's moves (and/or how to counter them) just by looking at them being used? (One point for each one that applies.)

Does the character dodge everything that gets thrown at him, just 'cause?

Does the character have really impressive sounding move names,such as "Blazing Super High-Speed Whirlwind Kick of Sudden Death?" (1 point.) And does he/she shout them out in full during battle? (2 points. Double points if movenames/shouts are in Japanese and your character's not Japanese. Points added at others' discretion if it's really poor, welfare, gutter Japanese that you learned from too much subtitled anime.)

 

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

Does the character feel guilty about something from the past? (Not just forgetting to send a family member a Christmas card, but guilt over major events) (1 point)

Despite the fact that it wasn't really the character's fault? (2 points)

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point)

Is the amnesia because of something in the character's past? (1 point)

Is the character cured of amnesia sometime during the storyline? (1 point)

Does the character wish that he hadn't been cured? (-1 point)

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death. By close I mean something like a good friend, not an aquantence)

Is the character primarily motivated by revenge for one or more of these deaths? (2 points)

Despite having had an active, strenuous lifestyle that would cause most lifeforms or machines to break down? (2 points)

Is your character easily provoked to anger and/or violence? (One point.)

Especially after "being made fun of?" (One point.)

Has your character ever killed someone after being provoked? (Two points.)

Does your character kill or destroy anyone/thing he pleases? (3 points.)

Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch)

Has your character ever destroyed a fortress, Koro, or similarly major piece of real estate? (It counts even if your character didn't mean to.) (2 points)

Is your character a 21st-century Earth citizen transported to the Bionicle world? (Three points.)

Must they stay in that world? (Two points.)

Is your character's history remarkably like the history of a canon character? (Two points.)

Is your character the sole survivor of anything? (Three Points point)

Does your character get away with doing things that other people would get into serious trouble for? (Like killing others, for instance. Even if it was clearly in self-defense, it would normally at least go to trial...) (Three points.)

Does he or she make authority figures look like bad guys in the process? (Two points.)

Is your character undeservingly despised by the majority? (One point.)

Is your character adored by the majority, undeservingly or otherwise? (Two points.)

 

Does the character happen to be or has been a student of one or more of the major (or even minor) characters in the series?

If your character has an established character as a mentor, are you deliberately mischaracterizing the mentor to account for her tutelage? (One point per teacher; three points if this includes the character actually having to not be dead.)

Does said teacher/teachers respect said student, or even consider him their "successor" and/or newest "rival"? (One point (and one pint,too) per applicable teacher and quoted thingie that applies)

What other kinds of relationships does your character have with established characters, if any? Add the points up for each character who qualifies.

I don't know him (0 points)

I saw him once (0 points)

an acquaintance (0 points)

a good acquaintance, not quite a friend (0 points)

a friend (1 point)

a good friend (2 points)

a childhood friend (2 points)

I'd take a bullet for him (2 points)

he'd take a bullet for me (3 points)

he *has* taken a bullet for me (4 points)

a friendly rivalry (1 point)

a friendly rivalry that he's winning (0 points)

a friendly rivalry that I'm winning (2 points)

a bitter rivalry over a woman (2 points)

a bitter rivalry that will only end in one of our deaths (4 points)

look, the rivalry's bitter, okay? Don't ask why (4 points)

I...will...have...REVENNNNNNGGGGGGEEEEEEE!!! (5 points)

he respects my incredible skillz (6 points)

we fought once, and:

I lost (0 points)

I won (1 point)

I lost, but it was a long time ago (1 point)

I lost very badly (0 points)

I lost very badly, just now (-1 point)

I won, just now (2 points)

I won, easily, and my opponent nearly died (3 points)

I killed him (4 points)

Triple all points for this section if your character is a newly created Toa

 

Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.)

The Koro/Wahi? (2 points.)

The island that he inhabits? (3 points.)

The world? (4 points)

At the last minute? (+1 point.)

Using a newly-developed move which "takes a lot out of them?"

Does he then proceed to pick himself up and repeat the move several times, taking less and less time to recover every time?

Is said move capable of seriously damaging a robot with one hit (i.e. would do 50% damage or more if it was actually in real life)?

Was that "newly-developed move" literally thought of in the last couple of seconds?

Does said move kill your character?

 

Acomplishments:

Is the character the son/daughter/creation of a standard character? (2 points)

Is your character a distant relative of an existing character?

Does the character fight/oppose an army of bad guys?

And whoop them all with one hand?

This time, is it personal?

Does the character rehabilitate a villain?

Any BoM/DH members? (1 point)

Roodaka, Lariska, any of the Barraki members?(3 points)

A Makuta? (8 points)

Does your character accomplish something singlehandadly that others have not been able to accomplish, or have been able to accomplish only at great cost? (Such as eliminating a Makuta, for instance.) (5 points)

Does your character die? (1 point)

Heroically? (2 points)

At the hands of the ultimate villain? (3 points)

Are the other characters deeply shaken by your character's death? (1 point)

Even though they're professional fighters, knew this sort of thing was going to happen sooner or later, and have probably lost comrades in battle before? (2 points)

Does the character return from death or apparent death? (5 points per "ressurrection")

With more power than before? (+3 points)

 

0-15 Points

Most likely Not-Sue. Characters at this level could probably take a little spicing up without hurting them any.

 

16-25

A character can go either way at this point, so Authors should pay attention to ensure that their characters aren't getting too Sue-ish. For an RPG or original fiction character, however, you're probably perfectly fine.

 

26+

Fanfiction authors beware - Mary's on the loose. There's still a chance you can save this character with some TLC, though. Role-players, you should also strongly consider giving your character a workover.

 

33+

Fanfiction authors, you might just want to start over. Role-players and original fiction authors, at this point your characters are likely to provoke eye-rolling and exclaimations of "yeah, right!" from your readers. (Well, at least from me.) Immediate workover is probably in order.

 

38+

Kill it dead. Or make sure you read the instructions properly (some people don't do this, which causes freakishly high scores) and take the test again.

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Is the character's name based on an existing character's name? (Mega Tahu, that sort of thing. If the name is based on more than one character, such as "Gopaka", count the points for each character.) (2 points each) If it means Bionicle-only, then skip.

Fight Evil (1 point)

A some other species (Krekka, Vortixx, etc.) (1 point)

...the usual, I guess; nothing to write home about (0 points)

a cordak blaster (2 points)

a knife, stick, or a Wolverine-esque claw (1 point)

Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)

Walks? (0 Points)

Does the character feel guilty about something from the past? (Not just forgetting to send a family member a Christmas card, but guilt over major events) (1 point)

Despite the fact that it wasn't really the character's fault? (2 points)

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.), but it's actually .5, since it's in an RPG

 

Alright, 13.5.

 

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I've elected my RPG character Jannifai

 

First of all: Does the character have, and retain throughout the comic, full and complete Author powers? If so, skip this test. What you've got there is an Author character, which isn't what this test is for. Now you just have to decide (and ask the forumers) whether you should use an Author character in your comic... my advice would be no.

Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.)

Does the character have a really cool name, like Hunter, Killer, or Death? Two points (Four points if the name sounds like an AOL user name or a fourteen-year-old wannabe hacker's handle.)

Does the character's name include the name of a weapon? (Darksword, Gunbot, or just being called Scythe) (1 point)

Does the character have more than one name (i.e. a nickname or a pseudonym)? (1 point for each name)

Does the character's name have anything to do with disease? (Plague, Virus, Pox, that sort of thing.) (1 point)

Is the character's name based on an existing character's name? (Mega Tahu, that sort of thing. If the name is based on more than one character, such as "Gopaka", count the points for each character.) (2 points each)

Is the character's name based on a musical term? (1 point)

Does he have a name that sounds like an occidental trying to sound Oriental or American Indian (i.e. "Midnight Tiger")? (1 point)

Did the character choose his name himself?

Is the character a ninja at all? (3 points.)

Does he have a sidekick that meets any of these requirements?

Do you ever, even just to yourself, refer to the character as "me" or "I"? (10 points.)

No points

 

What does he do? Does he:

Fight Evil (1 point)

Own his own lab? (1 point)

sit around all day for no good reason? (1 point)

travel the world Protoman-style? (1 point)

in order to get revenge on an enemy? (2 points)

work for a BoM of OoMN? (3/4 points respectively)

A pirate? (2 Points)

A Pirates of the Carribean esque pirate who really has a heart of gold? (4 Points)

A Ninja (3 Points)

kill people for money? (3 points) (If your character is a bounty hunter, assassin, Dark Hunter, or mercenary, answer "yes.")

have an established character (i.e. Taipu) as a student/flunky? (3 points, 5 points if he happens to be a major character such as Makuta)

hang out with characters from wildly different games/cartoons/movies/TV shows?

Sonic? (7 points)

Mario? (5 points)

Megaman? (3 points)

Kingdom Hearts? (10 points)

Nauroto/Bleach/some other generic anime show (7 points)

1 point

 

*What* is your character?

A Matoran? (0 points. If he has Toa powers count him as a Toa)

A Toa (1 point)

A Rackshi (1 point)

A Bohrok (1 point)

A support unit for such a robot (0 points)

A some other species (Krekka, Vortixx, etc.) (1 point)

A toa with powers beyond the norm (2 points)

A hybrid of two or more things (2 points, hordika are exempt from this rule)

Something cosmic and/or supernatural (3 points)

1 point

 

What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)

...the usual, I guess; nothing to write home about (0 points)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by Toa stones (1 point)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points)

From the future (3 points)

From the past (2 points)

From another dimension (1 point, if he is from one of the universe above in the hanging out question, count those points)

...that just happens to closely resemble, or in fact be, modern-day Earth (5 points)

...where the universe he's in now is fiction (5 points)

Was an ordinary matoran/toa until Something Happened (2 points, and see below)

No points

 

Does your character undergo any physical or metaphysical transformation in the story or backstory? (i.e., was he something else before?) (4 points) Note: MAJOR upgrades count, but most "normal" upgrades don't.

Specifically, a Toa/Matoran into a robot/cyborg/similar? (2 points)

If so, did they die before being "rebuilt" as a robot/cyborg/whatever? (5 points)

Do you wish you could be transformed into something like the character? (2 points)

Does the character angst and/or complain about his new form, despite it being more powerful than his old form? (1 point)

Or, conversely, does the character just cheerfully accept it and move on like nothing happened? (2 points) (There *is* a happy medium for this sort of thing, you know.)

No points

 

Does your character use some kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)

can't fight (-1 point)

my own two fists (0 points)

a typical zamor launcher (1 point)

a cordak blaster (2 points)

a knife, stick, or a Wolverine-esque claw (1 point)

an Exo-Toa or similar robot (5 points)

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)

a similar deadly melee weapon (3 points)

a *really powerful* gun (3 points)

I don't lift a finger. I just use my INCREDIBUL POWURZ (7 points. note, Toa powers do not count as this).

3 Points

 

Toa powers and you

Does your Toa have a traditional power? (Fire, Earth, Rock, Wind, Water, Ice) (0 points)

Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)

Does your toa control gravity? (2 points)

Does your Toa control Light/Shadow (5 points)

Count each element as a separate power. (e.g. Controlling both Gravity and Shadow would net you 7 points. 5 from Shadow and 2 from Gravity)

1 point

 

Choosing a Mask

Does your character use an Elda? (-1 Point)

Kaukau, Rau, Ruru, Rode(1 Points)

Hau, Miru, Akaku, Sanok, Iden, Arthron, Zatth(2 Points)

Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)

Jutlin, Avsa, Felnas, Mohtrek, Shelek, Crasy (4 Points)

Olmak, Tryna(5 Points)

Olisi, Krahkan, or Avohki? (7 Points)

She has a custom Mask, so I don't know how to score it here

 

From here to there. How does your character move about?

Walks? (0 Points)

Ride a Kikalano or something similar? (1 Point)

Takes a Boat/Airship? (1 Point)

That He/She owns? (1 more point)

A personal hover bike ala Ussa-Nui or something similar? (1 Point)

Just how customized is this thing?

Nope. No bells or whistles or this thing. It's got default settings. (0 Points)

I payed a little bit more for a few little doodads. Nothing spectacular. (1 Point)

I bought a regular bike and then tooled it to fit my own style. (2 Points)

I built it from scratch. (3 Points)

No points

 

Does the character keep Makuta/The Shadowed One on a leash at home, untying them only to use them as training dummies? Do said training dummies enjoy it? (5 points)

Does your character's normal moves look like an ordinary game character's super moves?

Does the character magically learn an opponent's moves (and/or how to counter them) just by looking at them being used? (One point for each one that applies.)

Does the character dodge everything that gets thrown at him, just 'cause?

Does the character have really impressive sounding move names,such as "Blazing Super High-Speed Whirlwind Kick of Sudden Death?" (1 point.) And does he/she shout them out in full during battle? (2 points. Double points if movenames/shouts are in Japanese and your character's not Japanese. Points added at others' discretion if it's really poor, welfare, gutter Japanese that you learned from too much subtitled anime.)

No points

 

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

Does the character feel guilty about something from the past? (Not just forgetting to send a family member a Christmas card, but guilt over major events) (1 point)

Despite the fact that it wasn't really the character's fault? (2 points)

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point)

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death)

Is the character primarily motivated by revenge for one or more of these deaths? (2 points)

Despite having had an active, strenuous lifestyle that would cause most lifeforms or machines to break down? (2 points)

Is your character easily provoked to anger and/or violence? (One point.)

Especially after "being made fun of?" (One point.)

Has your character ever killed someone after being provoked? (Two points.)

Does your character kill or destroy anyone/thing he pleases? (3 points.)

Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch)

Has your character ever destroyed a fortress, Koro, or similarly major piece of real estate? (It counts even if your character didn't mean to.) (2 points)

Is your character a 21st-century Earth citizen transported to the Bionicle world? (One point.)

Must they stay in that world? (Two points.)

Is your character's history remarkably like the history of a canon character? (Two points.)

Is your character the sole survivor of anything? (1 point)

Does your character get away with doing things that other people would get into serious trouble for? (Like killing others, for instance. Even if it was clearly in self-defense, it would normally at least go to trial...) (Three points.)

Does he or she make authority figures look like bad guys in the process? (Two points.)

Is your character undeservingly despised by the majority? (One point.)

Is your character adored by the majority, undeservingly or otherwise? (Two points.)

No points

 

Does the character happen to be or has been a student of one or more of the major (or even minor) characters in the series?

If your character has an established character as a mentor, are you deliberately mischaracterizing the mentor to account for her tutelage? (One point per teacher; three points if this includes the character actually having to not be dead.)

Does said teacher/teachers respect said student, or even consider him their "successor" and/or newest "rival"? (One point (and one pint,too) per applicable teacher and quoted thingie that applies)

What other kinds of relationships does your character have with established characters, if any? Add the points up for each character who qualifies.

I don't know him (0 points)

I saw him once (0 points)

an acquaintance (0 points)

a good acquaintance, not quite a friend (0 points)

a friend (1 point)

a good friend (2 points)

a childhood friend (2 points)

I'd take a bullet for him (2 points)

he'd take a bullet for me (3 points)

he *has* taken a bullet for me (4 points)

a friendly rivalry (1 point)

a friendly rivalry that he's winning (0 points)

a friendly rivalry that I'm winning (2 points)

a bitter rivalry over a woman (2 points)

a bitter rivalry that will only end in one of our deaths (4 points)

look, the rivalry's bitter, okay? Don't ask why (4 points)

I...will...have...REVENNNNNNGGGGGGEEEEEEE!!! (5 points)

he respects my incredible skillz (6 points)

we fought once, and:

I lost (0 points)

I won (1 point)

I lost, but it was a long time ago (1 point)

I lost very badly (0 points)

I lost very badly, just now (-1 point)

I won, just now (2 points)

I won, easily, and my opponent nearly died (3 points)

I killed him (4 points)

Triple all points for this section if your character is a newly created Toa

Assuming that by 'established characters' you mean storyline characters (eg, Tahu, Kopaka), then no points

 

Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.)

The Koro/Wahi? (2 points.)

The island that he inhabits? (3 points.)

The world? (4 points)

At the last minute? (+1 point.)

Using a newly-developed move which "takes a lot out of them?"

Does he then proceed to pick himself up and repeat the move several times, taking less and less time to recover every time?

Is said move capable of seriously damaging a robot with one hit (i.e. would do 50% damage or more if it was actually in real life)?

Was that "newly-developed move" literally thought of in the last couple of seconds?

Does said move kill your character?

Is the character the son/daughter/creation of a standard character? (2 points)

Is your character a distant relative of an existing character?

Does the character fight/oppose an army of bad guys?

And whoop them all with one hand?

This time, is it personal?

Does the character rehabilitate a villain?

Any BoM/DH members? (1 point)

Roodaka, Lariska, any of the Barraki members?(3 points)

A Makuta? (8 points)

Does your character accomplish something singlehandadly that others have not been able to accomplish, or have been able to accomplish only at great cost? (Such as eliminating a Makuta, for instance.) (5 points)

Does your character die? (1 point)

Heroically? (2 points)

At the hands of the ultimate villain? (3 points)

Are the other characters deeply shaken by your character's death? (1 point)

Even though they're professional fighters, knew this sort of thing was going to happen sooner or later, and have probably lost comrades in battle before? (2 points)

Does the character return from death or apparent death? (5 points per "ressurrection")

With more power than before? (+3 points)

Altogether that's 3.5 :lookaround:

 

Negative Points Section

(Disclaimer: I'm not saying that the "perfect character" has to have all of these traits. I'm not even saying that all characters have to have one or more of these traits. I'm just saying that possessing any of these traits moves your character away from being a Sue.)

Does your character look up to and respect some other character, throughout the entire story? (-1 point)

Does your character ever apologize for something, and really mean it? (-1 point)

Does the character ever commit some humorously stupid blunder, such as tripping over his shoelaces or attacking an "enemy tank" that everyone else knows is a boulder, in public? (-1 point)

Do the other characters (ones who are not the character's rivals or eventually shown the error of his ways) laugh at him for it? (-1 point)

Does he laugh at himself for it? (-1 point)

Do YOU laugh at him for it? (-2 points)

Are there any major characters in your story who don't love, despise, or otherwise feel strongly about your character, but just *don't care* about him? (-1 point)

Is your character ever really, seriously wrong about something? (Things that he was deliberately misled about, or things relating to any Dark Past he may possess, don't count; this is for things that the character really should have known better about, if he wasn't so blind/such an cool dude/so biased/whatever.) (-2 points)

Does your character hold any opinions that are strongly different from your own? (Likes music you hate, or vice versa, for instance.) (-1 point)

Any MAJOR opinions, like about religion or politics or philosophy, that you strongly disagree with? (Only counts if he retains those opinions throughout the whole story.) (-2 points)

Is your character ever offstage or in the background for long periods of time, while the other characters do things that have nothing to do with him? (-2 points)

Is your character a pacifist who actually refuses to fight because of this? (If the character ends up fighting anyway disregard this.) (-1 point)

Does your character ever take the time to comfort and console an emotionally distraught other character? (-1 point)

Does your character do this *without* making references to how he (your character, the one taking the test) has faced similar situations in the past? (-2 points)

Is the other character still upset despite your character's best efforts? (-1 point)

Does your character have a normal, loving relationship with his real family? (-1 point)

Is your character ever embarrassed in front of someone he wants to impress? (Either by doing something stupid like spilling his coffee or humorously misspeaking a word, or by something like having a large and conspicuous pimple.) (-1 point)

-5 points

 

 

Let's see, I think altogether that comes to...4.5

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And once again my sub-par orginization skills rear their ugly heads. I only meant half-points for the whole save the island/koro stuff. You would have taken full points for the death stuff. I'll fix that now.

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Uuh... I totally didn't just stumble upon this and score a 46.5 for my main BZPRPG character or anything... >.>

Character in question and actualy questions answered yes to please. YOu might just be answering the question wrong hence the high score.

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I did Tommi, from the BZPRPG.

Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.) 10 points there... XP

 

What does he do? Does he:

Fight Evil (1 point)

 

*What* is your character?

A toa with powers beyond the norm (2 points)

 

What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points) Other means, but not bizarre enough to qualify for those other options I think.

 

Does your character use sole kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)

 

Toa powers and you

Does your Toa have a traditional power? (Fire, Earth, Rock, Wind, Water, Ice) (0 points)

 

Choosing a Mask

Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)

MATATU ISN'T ON HERE. D: I put it in the 3 points tier, though.

 

From here to there. How does your character move about?

Uh, flying isn't on here either. I just gave myself a point. XP

 

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point) I missed this one the first time around...

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death) Oh wow, I wonder if I missed this too... well this adds up to 6.

Is the character primarily motivated by revenge for one or more of these deaths? (2 points)

Despite having had an active, strenuous lifestyle that would cause most lifeforms or machines to break down? (2 points)

Has your character ever destroyed a fortress, Koro, or similarly major piece of real estate? (It counts even if your character didn't mean to.) (2 points)

Does your character get away with doing things that other people would get into serious trouble for? (Like killing others, for instance. Even if it was clearly in self-defense, it would normally at least go to trial...) (Three points.)

 

What other kinds of relationships does your character have with established characters, if any? Add the points up for each character who qualifies.

I don't know him (0 points)

I saw him once (0 points)

an acquaintance (0 points)

a good acquaintance, not quite a friend (0 points)

a friend (1 point)

I'd take a bullet for him (2 points)

he'd take a bullet for me (3 points)

he *has* taken a bullet for me (4 points)

a friendly rivalry (1 point)

a bitter rivalry over a woman (2 points)

I won (1 point)

I killed him (4 points)

This doesn't mean canon characters, right? If so, then it adds up to... well, lets just say there's probably enough points here to flunk my character in itself. RPG's been going for quite a while now.

 

Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.)

The Koro/Wahi? (2 points.)

The island that he inhabits? (3 points.)

Half points.

 

Acomplishments:

Does the character fight/oppose an army of bad guys?

2 points right?

 

Negative Points Section

Does your character look up to and respect some other character, throughout the entire story? (-1 point)

Does your character ever apologize for something, and really mean it? (-1 point)

Does the character ever commit some humorously stupid blunder, such as tripping over his shoelaces or attacking an "enemy tank" that everyone else knows is a boulder, in public? (-1 point)

Do the other characters (ones who are not the character's rivals or eventually shown the error of his ways) laugh at him for it? (-1 point)

Do YOU laugh at him for it? (-2 points)

Are there any major characters in your story who don't love, despise, or otherwise feel strongly about your character, but just *don't care* about him? (-1 point)

Is your character ever really, seriously wrong about something? (Things that he was deliberately misled about, or things relating to any Dark Past he may possess, don't count; this is for things that the character really should have known better about, if he wasn't so blind/such an cool dude/so biased/whatever.) (-2 points)

Does your character hold any opinions that are strongly different from your own? (Likes music you hate, or vice versa, for instance.) (-1 point)

Is your character ever offstage or in the background for long periods of time, while the other characters do things that have nothing to do with him? (-2 points)

Does your character ever take the time to comfort and console an emotionally distraught other character? (-1 point)

Does your character do this *without* making references to how he (your character, the one taking the test) has faced similar situations in the past? (-2 points)

Is the other character still upset despite your character's best efforts? (-1 point)

Is your character ever embarrassed in front of someone he wants to impress? (Either by doing something stupid like spilling his coffee or humorously misspeaking a word, or by something like having a large and conspicuous pimple.) (-1 point)

I think the bulk of it came from character relationships, now that I look at it... I should've written down the questions I answered to the first time, darnit.

 

EDIT: Tallied it up without doing the character relationships part, it came down to 27, lol.

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The whole relationship questions refer to established characters both in bionicle canon and NPCs of the GM. So people like Tahu, Gorast, Taipu, and Zyrul from the Academy. Stuff like that.

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Ah, phew. Well in that case, I'd probably only qualify with about two of the main TA characters. That'd keep me in the same zone, though, so not much of a difference...

 

Anyway, thanks for putting this up. I think I've learned a thing or two from it. =D

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No problem. Also remember, this is just on how original your character is in addition to overpowered. So if you start scoring high, just stop yourself and ask, "What is this character bringing to the table in this RPG/Fic/Whatever?" If you can come up with enough to justify your score, then feel free to go ahead. Just don't decieve yourself and you'll be fine.

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Alrighty then. I better do this later, when I have time. Seems like an interesting test; looking forward to seeing my score on three of my major characters. Characters in question being Takrah, Loki, and Rolden.

 

Takrah first:

 

Does the character have more than one name (i.e. a nickname or a pseudonym)? (1 point for each name)

You have me here. Kain be his other name.

 

What does he do? Does he:

kill people for money? (3 points) (If your character is a bounty hunter, assassin, Dark Hunter, or mercenary, answer "yes.")

Urm...do I still take points for former merc/assassin status?

 

*What* is your character?

Something cosmic and/or supernatural (3 points)

Meh. Unique species, which I suppose is cosmic/supernatural.

 

What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)

 

From another dimension (1 point, if he is from one of the universe above in the hanging out question, count those points)

This is the best one I could find. He's not from any dimension, but I suppose this is the best one I could find.

 

I should note that I didn't take any points in the physical change category due to all his changing being mental in nature.

 

Does your character use some kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)

a cordak blaster (2 points)

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)

Ouch. I took some serious points here.

 

Toa powers and you

Does your Toa control Light/Shadow (5 points)

Count each element as a separate power. (e.g. Controlling both Gravity and Shadow would net you 7 points. 5 from Shadow and 2 from Gravity)

I should consider myself lucky I'm not eating more points right now. I'm glad I got rid of his shadow/time powers earlier. I suppose I could take points for each of his seperate 'dominant soul' powers, but none of those are elements. Loopholes FTW!

 

Choosing a Mask

Kulasi(3 Points)

I can take points for this. He has an Avhokki-shaped mask because the Kualsi is ugly.

 

From here to there. How does your character move about?

Walks? (0 Points)

No points! *dances around in glee

 

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

...yes...pasts. Plural.

 

Does the character feel guilty about something from the past? (Not just forgetting to send a family member a Christmas card, but guilt over major events) (1 point)

He was a serial killer.

 

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point)

DANGIT! I knew this would come up. I'm just surprised I'm not taking more points.

 

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death)

Does it count if one of the characters came back to life soon afterwards? Because I'm not counting that. I take 1 point.

Is your character easily provoked to anger and/or violence? (One point)

Especially after "being made fun of?" (One point.)

Yes and yes. Also, I didn't take points for switching because good and evil are in the eye of the beholder.

 

Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.)

...yes.

At the last minute? (+1 point.)

...so what? I have a flair for the dramatic.

 

Acomplishments:

Does your character die? (1 point)

Heroically? (2 points)

ARGH! I hate cliches! The worst part: I can't change them because it's set in roleplaying stone!

Are the other characters deeply shaken by your character's death? (1 point)

Shoot!

Does the character return from death or apparent death? (5 points per "ressurrection")

This is where I'm screwed. Three times, though I have an in-canon reason for it...which I will get rid of, in time.

 

 

Negative Points Section

(Disclaimer: I'm not saying that the "perfect character" has to have all of these traits. I'm not even saying that all characters have to have one or more of these traits. I'm just saying that possessing any of these traits moves your character away from being a Sue.)

Does your character look up to and respect some other character, throughout the entire story? (-1 point)

Until said character dies. Whoops, did I say that?

Does your character ever apologize for something, and really mean it? (-1 point)

This is forthcoming. In the near future. I'm taking my points now.

Does the character ever commit some humorously stupid blunder, such as tripping over his shoelaces or attacking an "enemy tank" that everyone else knows is a boulder, in public? (-1 point)

I was possessed by Zezak once. Which is pretty humilating.

Do the other characters (ones who are not the character's rivals or eventually shown the error of his ways) laugh at him for it? (-1 point)

I'm pretty sure Zezak was laughing.

Do YOU laugh at him for it? (-2 points)

I lawled afterwards. Was pretty mad at first.

Are there any major characters in your story who don't love, despise, or otherwise feel strongly about your character, but just *don't care* about him? (-1 point)

I'm not taking points for this, because it's not my decision as a roleplayer.

Is your character ever really, seriously wrong about something? (Things that he was deliberately misled about, or things relating to any Dark Past he may possess, don't count; this is for things that the character really should have known better about, if he wasn't so blind/such an cool dude/so biased/whatever.) (-2 points)

He attacked the Kin for no reason. Yay.

Any MAJOR opinions, like about religion or politics or philosophy, that you strongly disagree with? (Only counts if he retains those opinions throughout the whole story.) (-2 points)

I would NEVER attempt suicide. Ever.

Is your character ever offstage or in the background for long periods of time, while the other characters do things that have nothing to do with him? (-2 points)

Oh yes.

Does your character ever take the time to comfort and console an emotionally distraught other character? (-1 point)

Yuki.

Does your character do this *without* making references to how he (your character, the one taking the test) has faced similar situations in the past? (-2 points)

Yes.

 

Alright. Point tally. Feel free to point out any problems. I scored 30 points, which is a lot better than I assumed. *whew*

 

Takrah is being reworked, thank God. The biggest problem is changing canon tends to be...confusing.

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Dwin

 

45 pts.

 

Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.) Yes

Do you ever, even just to yourself, refer to the character as "me" or "I"? (10 points.) Yes.

Fight Evil (1 point) Yes.

A Toa (1 point) Yes.

A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points) Yes.

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one) Yes.

Does your Toa have a traditional power? (Fire, Earth, Rock, Wind, Water, Ice) (0 points) Yes.

Hau, Miru, Akaku, Sanok, Iden, Arthron, Zatth(2 Points) Yes.

Walks? (0 Points) Yes.

Takes a Boat/Airship? (1 Point) Yes.

Has your character ever killed someone after being provoked? (Two points.) Yes.

Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch) Yes.

Does your character get away with doing things that other people would get into serious trouble for? (Like killing others, for instance. Even if it was clearly in self-defense, it would normally at least go to trial...) (Three points.) Yes.

Does he or she make authority figures look like bad guys in the process? (Two points.) Yes.

Does the character happen to be or has been a student of one or more of the major (or even minor) characters in the series? Yes.

Does said teacher/teachers respect said student, or even consider him their "successor" and/or newest "rival"? (One point (and one pint,too) per applicable teacher and quoted thingie that applies) Yes.

a friend (1 point) Yes.

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.) Yes.

The Koro/Wahi? (2 points.) Yes.

The island that he inhabits? (3 points.)Yes.

Does the character fight/oppose an army of bad guys? Yes.

Does your character die? (1 point) Yes.

Heroically? (2 points) Yes.

At the hands of the ultimate villain? (3 points) Yes.

Does your character look up to and respect some other character, throughout the entire story? (-1 point) Yes.

Does the character ever commit some humorously stupid blunder, such as tripping over his shoelaces or attacking an "enemy tank" that everyone else knows is a boulder, in public? (-1 point) Yes.

Is your character ever really, seriously wrong about something? (Things that he was deliberately misled about, or things relating to any Dark Past he may possess, don't count; this is for things that the character really should have known better about, if he wasn't so blind/such an cool dude/so biased/whatever.) (-2 points) Yes.

Xerius

131 pts

 

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What does he do? Does he:

Fight Evil (1 point)Yes

Own his own lab? (1 point)Yes

sit around all day for no good reason? (1 point)Yes

 

*What* is your character?

A Toa (1 point)Yes

What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points)yes

 

 

Does your character undergo any physical or metaphysical transformation in the story or backstory? (i.e., was he something else before?) (4 points) Note: MAJOR upgrades count, but most "normal" upgrades don't.

Specifically, a Toa/Matoran into a robot/cyborg/similar? (2 points)Yes

 

Does your character use some kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)

a cordak blaster (2 points)yes

a knife, stick, or a Wolverine-esque claw (1 point)yes

an Exo-Toa or similar robot (5 points)yes

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)yes

a similar deadly melee weapon (3 points)yes

 

Toa powers and you

Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)Yes

 

Choosing a Mask

Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)Malhiki

 

From here to there. How does your character move about?

Walks? (0 Points)Yes

Takes a Boat/Airship? (1 Point)Yes

That He/She owns? (1 more point)Yes

A personal hover bike ala Ussa-Nui or something similar? (1 Point)Yes..airboard/batbot

I built it from scratch. (3 Points)Yes

 

 

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point)yes...Still a plot hole...It's more or less a How do you know that you know?

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death)..Oh God...5 off the top of my head

Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch)Once..though I was noob then.

Has your character ever destroyed a fortress, Koro, or similarly major piece of real estate? (It counts even if your character didn't mean to.) (2 points)..Yes

Does he or she make authority figures look like bad guys in the process? (Two points.)Well Zyrul is evil anyway..

 

What other kinds of relationships does your character have with established characters, if any? Add the points up for each character who qualifies.

a friendly rivalry that he's winning (0 points)...Yes

a bitter rivalry over a woman (2 points)..It wasn't bitter. But yeah.

we fought once, and:

I lost (0 points)Yes

 

Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.

 

Acomplishments:

Is your character a distant relative of an existing character?Yes...(how many points, 1?)

 

Negative Points Section

(Disclaimer: I'm not saying that the "perfect character" has to have all of these traits. I'm not even saying that all characters have to have one or more of these traits. I'm just saying that possessing any of these traits moves your character away from being a Sue.)

Does your character ever apologize for something, and really mean it? (-1 point)Yes

Does the character ever commit some humorously stupid blunder, such as tripping over his shoelaces or attacking an "enemy tank" that everyone else knows is a boulder, in public? (-1 point)..That's Zezak for ya.

Do the other characters (ones who are not the character's rivals or eventually shown the error of his ways) laugh at him for it? (-1 point)..yes

Does he laugh at himself for it? (-1 point)..Yes

Do YOU laugh at him for it? (-2 points)...Yes

Are there any major characters in your story who don't love, despise, or otherwise feel strongly about your character, but just *don't care* about him? (-1 point)Yes

Is your character ever really, seriously wrong about something? (Things that he was deliberately misled about, or things relating to any Dark Past he may possess, don't count; this is for things that the character really should have known better about, if he wasn't so blind/such an cool dude/so biased/whatever.) (-2 points)..All the time

Does your character hold any opinions that are strongly different from your own? (Likes music you hate, or vice versa, for instance.) (-1 point)..I'm not a flirt...

Any MAJOR opinions, like about religion or politics or philosophy, that you strongly disagree with? (Only counts if he retains those opinions throughout the whole story.) (-2 points)I know how I know.

Is your character ever offstage or in the background for long periods of time, while the other characters do things that have nothing to do with him? (-2 points)...Yeah

Is your character ever embarrassed in front of someone he wants to impress? (Either by doing something stupid like spilling his coffee or humorously misspeaking a word, or by something like having a large and conspicuous pimple.) (-1 point)..Yes

 

34 Points for Zezak...Whoo I was worried there.

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Djekkar from AHC

 

Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.)

Does the character have a really cool name, like Hunter, Killer, or Death? Two points (Four points if the name sounds like an AOL user name or a fourteen-year-old wannabe hacker's handle.)

Does the character's name include the name of a weapon? (Darksword, Gunbot, or just being called Scythe) (1 point)

Does the character have more than one name (i.e. a nickname or a pseudonym)? (1 point for each name)

Does the character's name have anything to do with disease? (Plague, Virus, Pox, that sort of thing.) (1 point)

Is the character's name based on an existing character's name? (Mega Tahu, that sort of thing. If the name is based on more than one character, such as "Gopaka", count the points for each character.) (2 points each)

Is the character's name based on a musical term? (1 point)

Does he have a name that sounds like an occidental trying to sound Oriental or American Indian (i.e. "Midnight Tiger")? (1 point)

Did the character choose his name himself?

Is the character a ninja at all? (3 points.) Kind of, yes.

Does he have a sidekick that meets any of these requirements?

Do you ever, even just to yourself, refer to the character as "me" or "I"? (10 points.)

3 points

 

What does he do? Does he:

Fight Evil (1 point) Usually

Own his own lab? (1 point)

sit around all day for no good reason? (1 point)

travel the world Protoman-style? (1 point)

in order to get revenge on an enemy? (2 points)

work for a BoM of OoMN? (3/4 points respectively)

A pirate? (2 Points)

A Pirates of the Carribean esque pirate who really has a heart of gold? (4 Points)

A Ninja (3 Points)

kill people for money? (3 points) (If your character is a bounty hunter, assassin, Dark Hunter, or mercenary, answer "yes.")

have an established character (i.e. Taipu) as a student/flunky? (3 points, 5 points if he happens to be a major character such as Makuta)

hang out with characters from wildly different games/cartoons/movies/TV shows?

Sonic? (7 points)

Mario? (5 points)

Megaman? (3 points)

Kingdom Hearts? (10 points)

Nauroto/Bleach/some other generic anime show (7 points)

1 point

 

*What* is your character?

A Matoran? (0 points. If he has Toa powers count him as a Toa)

A Toa (1 point)

A Rackshi (1 point)

A Bohrok (1 point)

A support unit for such a robot (0 points)

A some other species (Krekka, Vortixx, etc.) (1 point)

A toa with powers beyond the norm (2 points)

A hybrid of two or more things (2 points, hordika are exempt from this rule)

Something cosmic and/or supernatural (3 points)

1 point

 

What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)

...the usual, I guess; nothing to write home about (0 points) Never explained that part

A Matoran turned into a Toa by Toa stones (1 point)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points)

From the future (3 points)

From the past (2 points)

From another dimension (1 point, if he is from one of the universe above in the hanging out question, count those points)

...that just happens to closely resemble, or in fact be, modern-day Earth (5 points)

...where the universe he's in now is fiction (5 points)

Was an ordinary matoran/toa until Something Happened (2 points, and see below)

0 points

Does your character undergo any physical or metaphysical transformation in the story or backstory? (i.e., was he something else before?) (4 points) Note: MAJOR upgrades count, but most "normal" upgrades don't.

Specifically, a Toa/Matoran into a robot/cyborg/similar? (2 points)

If so, did they die before being "rebuilt" as a robot/cyborg/whatever? (5 points)

Do you wish you could be transformed into something like the character? (2 points)

Does the character angst and/or complain about his new form, despite it being more powerful than his old form? (1 point)

Or, conversely, does the character just cheerfully accept it and move on like nothing happened? (2 points) (There *is* a happy medium for this sort of thing, you know.)

0 points

 

Does your character use some kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)

can't fight (-1 point)

my own two fists (0 points)

a typical zamor launcher (1 point)

a cordak blaster (2 points)

a knife, stick, or a Wolverine-esque claw (1 point)

an Exo-Toa or similar robot (5 points)

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)

a similar deadly melee weapon (3 points) What does a Nunchuk count as?

a *really powerful* gun (3 points)

I don't lift a finger. I just use my INCREDIBUL POWURZ (7 points. note, Toa powers do not count as this).

4 points

Toa powers and you

Does your Toa have a traditional power? (Fire, Earth, Rock, Wind, Water, Ice) (0 points)

Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)

Does your toa control gravity? (2 points)

Does your Toa control Light/Shadow (5 points)

Count each element as a separate power. (e.g. Controlling both Gravity and Shadow would net you 7 points. 5 from Shadow and 2 from Gravity)

1 point

Choosing a Mask

Does your character use an Elda? (-1 Point)

Kaukau, Rau, Ruru, Rode(1 Points)

Hau, Miru, Akaku, Sanok, Iden, Arthron, Zatth(2 Points)

Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)

Jutlin, Avsa, Felnas, Mohtrek, Shelek, Crasy (4 Points)

Olmak, Tryna(5 Points)

Olisi, Krahkan, or Avohki? (7 Points)

Custom mask?

From here to there. How does your character move about?

Walks? (0 Points)

Ride a Kikalano or something similar? (1 Point)

Takes a Boat/Airship? (1 Point)

That He/She owns? (1 more point)

A personal hover bike ala Ussa-Nui or something similar? (1 Point)

Just how customized is this thing?

Nope. No bells or whistles or this thing. It's got default settings. (0 Points)

I payed a little bit more for a few little doodads. Nothing spectacular. (1 Point)

I bought a regular bike and then tooled it to fit my own style. (2 Points)

I built it from scratch. (3 Points)

Teleports?

 

Does the character keep Makuta/The Shadowed One on a leash at home, untying them only to use them as training dummies? Do said training dummies enjoy it? (5 points)

Does your character's normal moves look like an ordinary game character's super moves?

Does the character magically learn an opponent's moves (and/or how to counter them) just by looking at them being used? (One point for each one that applies.)

Does the character dodge everything that gets thrown at him, just 'cause?

Does the character have really impressive sounding move names,such as "Blazing Super High-Speed Whirlwind Kick of Sudden Death?" (1 point.) And does he/she shout them out in full during battle? (2 points. Double points if movenames/shouts are in Japanese and your character's not Japanese. Points added at others' discretion if it's really poor, welfare, gutter Japanese that you learned from too much subtitled anime.)

You came close to getting me here.

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

Does the character feel guilty about something from the past? (Not just forgetting to send a family member a Christmas card, but guilt over major events) (1 point)

Despite the fact that it wasn't really the character's fault? (2 points)

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point)

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death) How many people died in AHC again?

Is the character primarily motivated by revenge for one or more of these deaths? (2 points)

Despite having had an active, strenuous lifestyle that would cause most lifeforms or machines to break down? (2 points)

Is your character easily provoked to anger and/or violence? (One point.)

Especially after "being made fun of?" (One point.)

Has your character ever killed someone after being provoked? (Two points.)

Does your character kill or destroy anyone/thing he pleases? (3 points.)

Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch)

Has your character ever destroyed a fortress, Koro, or similarly major piece of real estate? (It counts even if your character didn't mean to.) (2 points)

Is your character a 21st-century Earth citizen transported to the Bionicle world? (One point.)

Must they stay in that world? (Two points.)

Is your character's history remarkably like the history of a canon character? (Two points.)

Is your character the sole survivor of anything? (1 point)

Does your character get away with doing things that other people would get into serious trouble for? (Like killing others, for instance. Even if it was clearly in self-defense, it would normally at least go to trial...) (Three points.)

Does he or she make authority figures look like bad guys in the process? (Two points.)

Is your character undeservingly despised by the majority? (One point.)

Is your character adored by the majority, undeservingly or otherwise? (Two points.)

9 points :S

Does the character happen to be or has been a student of one or more of the major (or even minor) characters in the series?

If your character has an established character as a mentor, are you deliberately mischaracterizing the mentor to account for her tutelage? (One point per teacher; three points if this includes the character actually having to not be dead.)

Does said teacher/teachers respect said student, or even consider him their "successor" and/or newest "rival"? (One point (and one pint,too) per applicable teacher and quoted thingie that applies)

What other kinds of relationships does your character have with established characters, if any? Add the points up for each character who qualifies.

I don't know him (0 points)

I saw him once (0 points)

an acquaintance (0 points)

a good acquaintance, not quite a friend (0 points)

a friend (1 point)

a good friend (2 points)

a childhood friend (2 points)

I'd take a bullet for him (2 points)

he'd take a bullet for me (3 points)

he *has* taken a bullet for me (4 points)

a friendly rivalry (1 point)

a friendly rivalry that he's winning (0 points)

a friendly rivalry that I'm winning (2 points)

a bitter rivalry over a woman (2 points)

a bitter rivalry that will only end in one of our deaths (4 points)

look, the rivalry's bitter, okay? Don't ask why (4 points)

I...will...have...REVENNNNNNGGGGGGEEEEEEE!!! (5 points)

he respects my incredible skillz (6 points)

we fought once, and:

I lost (0 points)

I won (1 point)

I lost, but it was a long time ago (1 point)

I lost very badly (0 points)

I lost very badly, just now (-1 point)

I won, just now (2 points)

I won, easily, and my opponent nearly died (3 points)

I killed him (4 points)

Triple all points for this section if your character is a newly created Toa

2 points

Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.)

The Koro/Wahi? (2 points.)

The island that he inhabits? (3 points.)

The world? (4 points)

At the last minute? (+1 point.)

Using a newly-developed move which "takes a lot out of them?"

Does he then proceed to pick himself up and repeat the move several times, taking less and less time to recover every time?

Is said move capable of seriously damaging a robot with one hit (i.e. would do 50% damage or more if it was actually in real life)?

Was that "newly-developed move" literally thought of in the last couple of seconds?

Does said move kill your character?

2 points

Acomplishments:

Is the character the son/daughter/creation of a standard character? (2 points)

Is your character a distant relative of an existing character?

Does the character fight/oppose an army of bad guys?

And whoop them all with one hand?

This time, is it personal?

Does the character rehabilitate a villain?

Any BoM/DH members? (1 point)

Roodaka, Lariska, any of the Barraki members?(3 points)

A Makuta? (8 points)

Does your character accomplish something singlehandadly that others have not been able to accomplish, or have been able to accomplish only at great cost? (Such as eliminating a Makuta, for instance.) (5 points)

Does your character die? (1 point)

Heroically? (2 points)

At the hands of the ultimate villain? (3 points)

Are the other characters deeply shaken by your character's death? (1 point)

Even though they're professional fighters, knew this sort of thing was going to happen sooner or later, and have probably lost comrades in battle before? (2 points)

Does the character return from death or apparent death? (5 points per "ressurrection")

With more power than before? (+3 points)

 

Negative Points Section

(Disclaimer: I'm not saying that the "perfect character" has to have all of these traits. I'm not even saying that all characters have to have one or more of these traits. I'm just saying that possessing any of these traits moves your character away from being a Sue.)

Does your character look up to and respect some other character, throughout the entire story? (-1 point)

Does your character ever apologize for something, and really mean it? (-1 point)

Does the character ever commit some humorously stupid blunder, such as tripping over his shoelaces or attacking an "enemy tank" that everyone else knows is a boulder, in public? (-1 point)

Do the other characters (ones who are not the character's rivals or eventually shown the error of his ways) laugh at him for it? (-1 point)

Does he laugh at himself for it? (-1 point)

Do YOU laugh at him for it? (-2 points)

Are there any major characters in your story who don't love, despise, or otherwise feel strongly about your character, but just *don't care* about him? (-1 point)

Is your character ever really, seriously wrong about something? (Things that he was deliberately misled about, or things relating to any Dark Past he may possess, don't count; this is for things that the character really should have known better about, if he wasn't so blind/such an cool dude/so biased/whatever.) (-2 points)

Does your character hold any opinions that are strongly different from your own? (Likes music you hate, or vice versa, for instance.) (-1 point)

Any MAJOR opinions, like about religion or politics or philosophy, that you strongly disagree with? (Only counts if he retains those opinions throughout the whole story.) (-2 points)

Is your character ever offstage or in the background for long periods of time, while the other characters do things that have nothing to do with him? (-2 points)

Is your character a pacifist who actually refuses to fight because of this? (If the character ends up fighting anyway disregard this.) (-1 point)

Does your character ever take the time to comfort and console an emotionally distraught other character? (-1 point)

Does your character do this *without* making references to how he (your character, the one taking the test) has faced similar situations in the past? (-2 points) (Gave myself half points here)

Is the other character still upset despite your character's best efforts? (-1 point)

Does your character have a normal, loving relationship with his real family? (-1 point)

Is your character ever embarrassed in front of someone he wants to impress? (Either by doing something stupid like spilling his coffee or humorously misspeaking a word, or by something like having a large and conspicuous pimple.) (-1 point)

-10 points

 

So, 12 points :D

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Test has been admended. The negative points have been removed. Amnesia section has been expanded. Ninja was listed twice and was removed. The qualifications for a sue have been cranked down a ton. This isn't something that you should be easy to get a passable score on.

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A Matoran? - Yes

 

What's your character's origin? - None of those listed...

 

Kaukau, Rau, Ruru, Rode(1 Points) - Yes (What's wrong with a powerless Noble Ruru, anyways? He has to wear something...)

 

Ride a Kikalano or something similar? (1 Point) - Would an ussal count?

 

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point) - Every Metruan does...

 

Krahiki is between 1 and 3.

Beat that.

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Okay, for the improved test, I'll use Lepidran, my Wasteland character

 

First of all: Does the character have, and retain throughout the comic, full and complete Author powers? If so, skip this test. What you've got there is an Author character, which isn't what this test is for. Now you just have to decide (and ask the forumers) whether you should use an Author character in your comic... my advice would be no.

Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.)

Does the character have a really cool name, like Hunter, Killer, or Death? Two points (Four points if the name sounds like an AOL user name or a fourteen-year-old wannabe hacker's handle.)

Does the character's name include the name of a weapon? (Darksword, Gunbot, or just being called Scythe) (1 point)

Does the character have more than one name (i.e. a nickname or a pseudonym)? (1 point for each name)

Does the character's name have anything to do with disease? (Plague, Virus, Pox, that sort of thing.) (1 point)

Is the character's name based on an existing character's name? (Mega Tahu, that sort of thing. If the name is based on more than one character, such as "Gopaka", count the points for each character.) (2 points each)

Is the character's name based on a musical term? (1 point)

Does he have a name that sounds like an occidental trying to sound Oriental or American Indian (i.e. "Midnight Tiger")? (1 point)

Did the character choose his name himself?

Does he have a sidekick that meets any of these requirements?

Do you ever, even just to yourself, refer to the character as "me" or "I"? (10 points.)

No points

 

What does he do? Does he:

Fight Evil (1 point)

Own his own lab? (1 point)

sit around all day for no good reason? (1 point)

travel the world Protoman-style? (1 point)

in order to get revenge on an enemy? (2 points)

work for a BoM of OoMN? (3/4 points respectively)

A pirate? (2 Points)

A Pirates of the Carribean esque pirate who really has a heart of gold? (4 Points)

A Ninja (3 Points)

kill people for money? (3 points) (If your character is a bounty hunter, assassin, Dark Hunter, or mercenary, answer "yes.")

have an established character (i.e. Taipu) as a student/flunky? (3 points, 5 points if he happens to be a major character such as Makuta)

hang out with characters from wildly different games/cartoons/movies/TV shows?

Sonic? (7 points)

Mario? (5 points)

Megaman? (3 points)

Kingdom Hearts? (10 points)

Nauroto/Bleach/some other generic anime show (7 points)

He survives. So no points

 

*What* is your character?

A Matoran? (0 points. If he has Toa powers count him as a Toa)

A Toa (1 point)

A Rackshi (1 point)

A Bohrok (1 point)

A support unit (rahi or something similar)? (0 points)

A some other species (Krekka, Vortixx, etc.) (1 point)

A toa with powers beyond the norm (2 points)

A hybrid of two or more things (2 points, hordika are exempt from this rule)

Something cosmic and/or supernatural (3 points)

Yes, he is powerless

 

What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)

...the usual, I guess; nothing to write home about (0 points)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by Toa stones (1 point)

A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points)

From the future (3 points)

From the past (2 points)

From another dimension (1 point, if he is from one of the universe above in the hanging out question, count those points)

...that just happens to closely resemble, or in fact be, modern-day Earth (5 points)

...where the universe he's in now is fiction (5 points)

Was an ordinary matoran/toa until Something Happened (2 points, and see below)

No points

 

Does your character undergo any physical or metaphysical transformation in the story or backstory? (i.e., was he something else before?) (4 points) Note: MAJOR upgrades count, but most "normal" upgrades don't.

Specifically, a Toa/Matoran into a robot/cyborg/similar? (2 points)

If so, did they die before being "rebuilt" as a robot/cyborg/whatever? (5 points)

Do you wish you could be transformed into something like the character? (2 points)

Does the character angst and/or complain about his new form, despite it being more powerful than his old form? (1 point)

Or, conversely, does the character just cheerfully accept it and move on like nothing happened? (2 points) (There *is* a happy medium for this sort of thing, you know.)

No points

 

Does your character use some kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)

can't fight (-1 point)

my own two fists (0 points)

a typical zamor launcher (1 point)

a cordak blaster (2 points)

a knife, stick, or a Wolverine-esque claw (1 point)

an Exo-Toa or similar robot (5 points)

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)

a similar deadly melee weapon (3 points)

a *really powerful* gun (4 points)

I don't lift a finger. I just use my INCREDIBUL POWURZ (7 points. note, Toa powers do not count as this).

I think I gave him a knife or dagger but I'm not sure. So I'll cont it anyway just in case

 

Toa powers and you

Does your Toa have a traditional power? (Fire, Earth, Rock, Wind, Water, Ice) (0 points)

Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)

Does your toa control gravity? (2 points)

Does your Toa control Light/Shadow (5 points)

Count each element as a separate power. (e.g. Controlling both Gravity and Shadow would net you 7 points. 5 from Shadow and 2 from Gravity)

He doesn't have any Toa powers. No points

 

Choosing a Mask

Does your character use an Elda? (-1 Point)

Kaukau, Rau, Ruru, Rode(1 Points)

Hau, Miru, Akaku, Sanok, Iden, Arthron, Zatth(2 Points)

Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)

Jutlin, Avsa, Felnas, Mohtrek, Shelek, Crasy (4 Points)

Olmak, Tryna(5 Points)

Olisi, Krahkan, or Avohki? (7 Points)

Yeah, it's technically a powerles Akaku, but he's got lasers built into the lenses, so it still counts

 

From here to there. How does your character move about?

Walks? (0 Points)

Ride a Kikalano or something similar? (1 Point)

Takes a Boat/Airship? (1 Point)

That He/She owns? (1 more point)

A personal hover bike ala Ussa-Nui or something similar? (1 Point)

Just how customized is this thing?

Nope. No bells or whistles or this thing. It's got default settings. (0 Points)

I payed a little bit more for a few little doodads. Nothing spectacular. (1 Point)

I bought a regular bike and then tooled it to fit my own style. (2 Points)

I built it from scratch. (3 Points)

No points

 

Does the character keep Makuta/The Shadowed One on a leash at home, untying them only to use them as training dummies? Do said training dummies enjoy it? (5 points)

Does your character's normal moves look like an ordinary game character's super moves?

Does the character magically learn an opponent's moves (and/or how to counter them) just by looking at them being used? (One point for each one that applies.)

Does the character dodge everything that gets thrown at him, just 'cause?

Does the character have really impressive sounding move names,such as "Blazing Super High-Speed Whirlwind Kick of Sudden Death?" (1 point.) And does he/she shout them out in full during battle? (2 points. Double points if movenames/shouts are in Japanese and your character's not Japanese. Points added at others' discretion if it's really poor, welfare, gutter Japanese that you learned from too much subtitled anime.)

No points

 

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

Does the character feel guilty about something from the past? (Not just forgetting to send a family member a Christmas card, but guilt over major events) (1 point)

Despite the fact that it wasn't really the character's fault? (2 points)

Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point)

Is the amnesia because of something in the character's past? (1 point)

Is the character cured of amnesia sometime during the storyline? (1 point)

Does the character wish that he hadn't been cured? (-1 point)

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death. By close I mean something like a good friend, not an aquantence)

Is the character primarily motivated by revenge for one or more of these deaths? (2 points)

Despite having had an active, strenuous lifestyle that would cause most lifeforms or machines to break down? (2 points)

Is your character easily provoked to anger and/or violence? (One point.)

Especially after "being made fun of?" (One point.)

Has your character ever killed someone after being provoked? (Two points.)

Does your character kill or destroy anyone/thing he pleases? (3 points.)

Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch)

Has your character ever destroyed a fortress, Koro, or similarly major piece of real estate? (It counts even if your character didn't mean to.) (2 points)

Is your character a 21st-century Earth citizen transported to the Bionicle world? (Three points.)

Must they stay in that world? (Two points.)

Is your character's history remarkably like the history of a canon character? (Two points.)

Is your character the sole survivor of anything? (Three Points point)

Does your character get away with doing things that other people would get into serious trouble for? (Like killing others, for instance. Even if it was clearly in self-defense, it would normally at least go to trial...) (Three points.)

Does he or she make authority figures look like bad guys in the process? (Two points.)

Is your character undeservingly despised by the majority? (One point.)

Is your character adored by the majority, undeservingly or otherwise? (Two points.)

He used to be in Karzahni, so that first one definitely counts

 

Does the character happen to be or has been a student of one or more of the major (or even minor) characters in the series?

If your character has an established character as a mentor, are you deliberately mischaracterizing the mentor to account for her tutelage? (One point per teacher; three points if this includes the character actually having to not be dead.)

Does said teacher/teachers respect said student, or even consider him their "successor" and/or newest "rival"? (One point (and one pint,too) per applicable teacher and quoted thingie that applies)

What other kinds of relationships does your character have with established characters, if any? Add the points up for each character who qualifies.

I don't know him (0 points)

I saw him once (0 points)

an acquaintance (0 points)

a good acquaintance, not quite a friend (0 points)

a friend (1 point)

a good friend (2 points)

a childhood friend (2 points)

I'd take a bullet for him (2 points)

he'd take a bullet for me (3 points)

he *has* taken a bullet for me (4 points)

a friendly rivalry (1 point)

a friendly rivalry that he's winning (0 points)

a friendly rivalry that I'm winning (2 points)

a bitter rivalry over a woman (2 points)

a bitter rivalry that will only end in one of our deaths (4 points)

look, the rivalry's bitter, okay? Don't ask why (4 points)

I...will...have...REVENNNNNNGGGGGGEEEEEEE!!! (5 points)

he respects my incredible skillz (6 points)

we fought once, and:

I lost (0 points)

I won (1 point)

I lost, but it was a long time ago (1 point)

I lost very badly (0 points)

I lost very badly, just now (-1 point)

I won, just now (2 points)

I won, easily, and my opponent nearly died (3 points)

I killed him (4 points)

Triple all points for this section if your character is a newly created Toa

No points

 

Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.

Does the character save another characters? (1 point.)

The Koro/Wahi? (2 points.)

The island that he inhabits? (3 points.)

The world? (4 points)

At the last minute? (+1 point.)

Using a newly-developed move which "takes a lot out of them?"

Does he then proceed to pick himself up and repeat the move several times, taking less and less time to recover every time?

Is said move capable of seriously damaging a robot with one hit (i.e. would do 50% damage or more if it was actually in real life)?

Was that "newly-developed move" literally thought of in the last couple of seconds?

Does said move kill your character?

No points

 

Acomplishments:

Is the character the son/daughter/creation of a standard character? (2 points)

Is your character a distant relative of an existing character?

Does the character fight/oppose an army of bad guys?

And whoop them all with one hand?

This time, is it personal?

Does the character rehabilitate a villain?

Any BoM/DH members? (1 point)

Roodaka, Lariska, any of the Barraki members?(3 points)

A Makuta? (8 points)

Does your character accomplish something singlehandadly that others have not been able to accomplish, or have been able to accomplish only at great cost? (Such as eliminating a Makuta, for instance.) (5 points)

Does your character die? (1 point)

Heroically? (2 points)

At the hands of the ultimate villain? (3 points)

Are the other characters deeply shaken by your character's death? (1 point)

Even though they're professional fighters, knew this sort of thing was going to happen sooner or later, and have probably lost comrades in battle before? (2 points)

Does the character return from death or apparent death? (5 points per "ressurrection")

With more power than before? (+3 points)

No points

 

 

So, that's four points. Although to be fair he is a new character, I haven't had the chance to do anything godmoddy with him :P

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It means that he's as boring as watching paint dry, like you.

If I were that boring you wouldn't have spent the time reading at least the last sentence of my post and then coming up with a reply. Nor would you have tracked down the picture of me. So clearly I fascinate you, you weirdo

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Just for the lulz, I decided to run Nezka through. I merely rated her based on what I did with her, and not what the Cap'n did with her, mainly because I don't know. =P This is what I got.

 

 

Fight Evil (1 point)

A Toa (1 point)

Was an ordinary matoran/toa until Something Happened (2 points, and see below)

a sword (Six points)

Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)

Kulasi (3 points

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

Is your character easily provoked to anger and/or violence? (One point.)

I...will...have...REVENNNNNNGGGGGGEEEEEEE!!! (5 points. Granted, she hates the brotherhood rather than a singular person, but I went ahead and took this one anyway.)

22 Points

 

So she's almost borderline, but not quite. I actually thought she was going to worse, so I'm happy. =P

 

Also, I should probably update the section for villan stuff. Like instead of saving the Koro, I could give you points for wanting to blow it up or control the island or something like that.

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Outta boredom, I volunteered Ultan. Yeah, Capn's TG charrie.

 

Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.)

Ultamategamemaster. I'd say so.

Fight Evil (1 point)

Nauroto/Bleach/some other generic anime show (7 points)

Greed and other gatees.

A Toa (1 point)

Something cosmic and/or supernatural (3 points)

Was an ordinary matoran/toa until Something Happened (2 points, and see below)

Or, conversely, does the character just cheerfully accept it and move on like nothing happened? (2 points)

Hybridized and liked it.

a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)

Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)

Energy. I'd say that it would be something on gravity...

Forgot mask, dunno how he moves about. SO zero there.

Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)

Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death. By close I mean something like a good friend, not an aquantence)

Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch)

Went hybrid, went bad.

 

Too bored to continue.

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