It's been long coming, and it's not technically finished. But I kinda get the feeling I'll never get around to finishing it, so here it is.
Some notes before we begin. First, the title is a little bit deceptive. Yes, this is a Mary Sue test, but it's also a cliche test. You will be gain points for being cliche. Now how this test works. The test proposes a simple yes or no question. If you answer yes, you take the designated point count. If you answer no, you go onto the next question. Some questions do not have a designated point value. That's because you should just take that as a sign that you've most likely failed. Also, the orginization and spelling aren't exactly top notch. I apologize.
So without further ado, let's get started.
First of all: Does the character have, and retain throughout the comic, full and complete Author powers? If so, skip this test. What you've got there is an Author character, which isn't what this test is for. Now you just have to decide (and ask the forumers) whether you should use an Author character in your comic... my advice would be no.
Does the character share the Author's/Player's name? (This can be their first name, middle name, or the name they go by in chat or an online forum.) 10 points. Yes, 10 points. This is actually pretty mild; most Mary Sue litmus tests will automatically flunk a character for this. I admit I'm tempted to do the same.)
Does the character have a really cool name, like Hunter, Killer, or Death? Two points (Four points if the name sounds like an AOL user name or a fourteen-year-old wannabe hacker's handle.)
Does the character's name include the name of a weapon? (Darksword, Gunbot, or just being called Scythe) (1 point)
Does the character have more than one name (i.e. a nickname or a pseudonym)? (1 point for each name)
Does the character's name have anything to do with disease? (Plague, Virus, Pox, that sort of thing.) (1 point)
Is the character's name based on an existing character's name? (Mega Tahu, that sort of thing. If the name is based on more than one character, such as "Gopaka", count the points for each character.) (2 points each)
Is the character's name based on a musical term? (1 point)
Does he have a name that sounds like an occidental trying to sound Oriental or American Indian (i.e. "Midnight Tiger")? (1 point)
Did the character choose his name himself?
Does he have a sidekick that meets any of these requirements?
Do you ever, even just to yourself, refer to the character as "me" or "I"? (10 points.)
What does he do? Does he:
Fight Evil (1 point)
Own his own lab? (1 point)
sit around all day for no good reason? (1 point)
travel the world Protoman-style? (1 point)
in order to get revenge on an enemy? (2 points)
work for a BoM of OoMN? (3/4 points respectively)
A pirate? (2 Points)
A Pirates of the Carribean esque pirate who really has a heart of gold? (4 Points)
A Ninja (3 Points)
kill people for money? (3 points) (If your character is a bounty hunter, assassin, Dark Hunter, or mercenary, answer "yes.")
have an established character (i.e. Taipu) as a student/flunky? (3 points, 5 points if he happens to be a major character such as Makuta)
hang out with characters from wildly different games/cartoons/movies/TV shows?
Sonic? (7 points)
Mario? (5 points)
Megaman? (3 points)
Kingdom Hearts? (10 points)
Nauroto/Bleach/some other generic anime show (7 points)
*What* is your character?
A Matoran? (0 points. If he has Toa powers count him as a Toa)
A Toa (1 point)
A Rackshi (1 point)
A Bohrok (1 point)
A support unit (rahi or something similar)? (0 points)
A some other species (Krekka, Vortixx, etc.) (1 point)
A toa with powers beyond the norm (2 points)
A hybrid of two or more things (2 points, hordika are exempt from this rule)
Something cosmic and/or supernatural (3 points)
What's your character's origin? (Choose all that apply.)
...the usual, I guess; nothing to write home about (0 points)
A Matoran turned into a Toa by Toa stones (1 point)
A Matoran turned into a Toa by some other means? (2 points)
From the future (3 points)
From the past (2 points)
From another dimension (1 point, if he is from one of the universe above in the hanging out question, count those points)
...that just happens to closely resemble, or in fact be, modern-day Earth (5 points)
...where the universe he's in now is fiction (5 points)
Was an ordinary matoran/toa until Something Happened (2 points, and see below)
Does your character undergo any physical or metaphysical transformation in the story or backstory? (i.e., was he something else before?) (4 points) Note: MAJOR upgrades count, but most "normal" upgrades don't.
Specifically, a Toa/Matoran into a robot/cyborg/similar? (2 points)
If so, did they die before being "rebuilt" as a robot/cyborg/whatever? (5 points)
Do you wish you could be transformed into something like the character? (2 points)
Does the character angst and/or complain about his new form, despite it being more powerful than his old form? (1 point)
Or, conversely, does the character just cheerfully accept it and move on like nothing happened? (2 points) (There *is* a happy medium for this sort of thing, you know.)
Does your character use some kind of weapon to fight? (Multiple weapons are cumulative.)
can't fight (-1 point)
my own two fists (0 points)
a typical zamor launcher (1 point)
a cordak blaster (2 points)
a knife, stick, or a Wolverine-esque claw (1 point)
an Exo-Toa or similar robot (5 points)
a sword (3 points; 4 if it's a really big one)
a similar deadly melee weapon (3 points)
a *really powerful* gun (4 points)
I don't lift a finger. I just use my INCREDIBUL POWURZ (7 points. note, Toa powers do not count as this).
Toa powers and you
Does your Toa have a traditional power? (Fire, Earth, Rock, Wind, Water, Ice) (0 points)
Does your toa have an unorthodox power? (Electricity, Plants etc.) (1 point)
Does your toa control gravity? (2 points)
Does your Toa control Light/Shadow (5 points)
Count each element as a separate power. (e.g. Controlling both Gravity and Shadow would net you 7 points. 5 from Shadow and 2 from Gravity)
Choosing a Mask
Does your character use an Elda? (-1 Point)
Kaukau, Rau, Ruru, Rode(1 Points)
Hau, Miru, Akaku, Sanok, Iden, Arthron, Zatth(2 Points)
Kakama, Paraki, Mahiki, Komau, Calix, Kandin, Huna, Volitak, Kulasi(3 Points)
Jutlin, Avsa, Felnas, Mohtrek, Shelek, Crasy (4 Points)
Olmak, Tryna(5 Points)
Olisi, Krahkan, or Avohki? (7 Points)
From here to there. How does your character move about?
Walks? (0 Points)
Ride a Kikalano or something similar? (1 Point)
Takes a Boat/Airship? (1 Point)
That He/She owns? (1 more point)
A personal hover bike ala Ussa-Nui or something similar? (1 Point)
Just how customized is this thing?
Nope. No bells or whistles or this thing. It's got default settings. (0 Points)
I payed a little bit more for a few little doodads. Nothing spectacular. (1 Point)
I bought a regular bike and then tooled it to fit my own style. (2 Points)
I built it from scratch. (3 Points)
Does the character keep Makuta/The Shadowed One on a leash at home, untying them only to use them as training dummies? Do said training dummies enjoy it? (5 points)
Does your character's normal moves look like an ordinary game character's super moves?
Does the character magically learn an opponent's moves (and/or how to counter them) just by looking at them being used? (One point for each one that applies.)
Does the character dodge everything that gets thrown at him, just 'cause?
Does the character have really impressive sounding move names,such as "Blazing Super High-Speed Whirlwind Kick of Sudden Death?" (1 point.) And does he/she shout them out in full during battle? (2 points. Double points if movenames/shouts are in Japanese and your character's not Japanese. Points added at others' discretion if it's really poor, welfare, gutter Japanese that you learned from too much subtitled anime.)
Does your character have a "dark past"? (1 point)
Does the character feel guilty about something from the past? (Not just forgetting to send a family member a Christmas card, but guilt over major events) (1 point)
Despite the fact that it wasn't really the character's fault? (2 points)
Does the character have amnesia at any point in the story? (1 point)
Is the amnesia because of something in the character's past? (1 point)
Is the character cured of amnesia sometime during the storyline? (1 point)
Does the character wish that he hadn't been cured? (-1 point)
Have people close to the character died? (1 point per death. By close I mean something like a good friend, not an aquantence)
Is the character primarily motivated by revenge for one or more of these deaths? (2 points)
Despite having had an active, strenuous lifestyle that would cause most lifeforms or machines to break down? (2 points)
Is your character easily provoked to anger and/or violence? (One point.)
Especially after "being made fun of?" (One point.)
Has your character ever killed someone after being provoked? (Two points.)
Does your character kill or destroy anyone/thing he pleases? (3 points.)
Does your character ever switch from good to evil, or from evil to good, without major introspection and self-doubt? (1 point per switch)
Has your character ever destroyed a fortress, Koro, or similarly major piece of real estate? (It counts even if your character didn't mean to.) (2 points)
Is your character a 21st-century Earth citizen transported to the Bionicle world? (Three points.)
Must they stay in that world? (Two points.)
Is your character's history remarkably like the history of a canon character? (Two points.)
Is your character the sole survivor of anything? (Three Points point)
Does your character get away with doing things that other people would get into serious trouble for? (Like killing others, for instance. Even if it was clearly in self-defense, it would normally at least go to trial...) (Three points.)
Does he or she make authority figures look like bad guys in the process? (Two points.)
Is your character undeservingly despised by the majority? (One point.)
Is your character adored by the majority, undeservingly or otherwise? (Two points.)
Does the character happen to be or has been a student of one or more of the major (or even minor) characters in the series?
If your character has an established character as a mentor, are you deliberately mischaracterizing the mentor to account for her tutelage? (One point per teacher; three points if this includes the character actually having to not be dead.)
Does said teacher/teachers respect said student, or even consider him their "successor" and/or newest "rival"? (One point (and one pint,too) per applicable teacher and quoted thingie that applies)
What other kinds of relationships does your character have with established characters, if any? Add the points up for each character who qualifies.
I don't know him (0 points)
I saw him once (0 points)
an acquaintance (0 points)
a good acquaintance, not quite a friend (0 points)
a friend (1 point)
a good friend (2 points)
a childhood friend (2 points)
I'd take a bullet for him (2 points)
he'd take a bullet for me (3 points)
he *has* taken a bullet for me (4 points)
a friendly rivalry (1 point)
a friendly rivalry that he's winning (0 points)
a friendly rivalry that I'm winning (2 points)
a bitter rivalry over a woman (2 points)
a bitter rivalry that will only end in one of our deaths (4 points)
look, the rivalry's bitter, okay? Don't ask why (4 points)
I...will...have...REVENNNNNNGGGGGGEEEEEEE!!! (5 points)
he respects my incredible skillz (6 points)
we fought once, and:
I lost (0 points)
I won (1 point)
I lost, but it was a long time ago (1 point)
I lost very badly (0 points)
I lost very badly, just now (-1 point)
I won, just now (2 points)
I won, easily, and my opponent nearly died (3 points)
I killed him (4 points)
Triple all points for this section if your character is a newly created Toa
Take half points if you're a Role Player for this next section.
Does the character save another characters? (1 point.)
The Koro/Wahi? (2 points.)
The island that he inhabits? (3 points.)
The world? (4 points)
At the last minute? (+1 point.)
Using a newly-developed move which "takes a lot out of them?"
Does he then proceed to pick himself up and repeat the move several times, taking less and less time to recover every time?
Is said move capable of seriously damaging a robot with one hit (i.e. would do 50% damage or more if it was actually in real life)?
Was that "newly-developed move" literally thought of in the last couple of seconds?
Does said move kill your character?
Is the character the son/daughter/creation of a standard character? (2 points)
Is your character a distant relative of an existing character?
Does the character fight/oppose an army of bad guys?
And whoop them all with one hand?
This time, is it personal?
Does the character rehabilitate a villain?
Any BoM/DH members? (1 point)
Roodaka, Lariska, any of the Barraki members?(3 points)
A Makuta? (8 points)
Does your character accomplish something singlehandadly that others have not been able to accomplish, or have been able to accomplish only at great cost? (Such as eliminating a Makuta, for instance.) (5 points)
Does your character die? (1 point)
Heroically? (2 points)
At the hands of the ultimate villain? (3 points)
Are the other characters deeply shaken by your character's death? (1 point)
Even though they're professional fighters, knew this sort of thing was going to happen sooner or later, and have probably lost comrades in battle before? (2 points)
Does the character return from death or apparent death? (5 points per "ressurrection")
With more power than before? (+3 points)
Most likely Not-Sue. Characters at this level could probably take a little spicing up without hurting them any.
A character can go either way at this point, so Authors should pay attention to ensure that their characters aren't getting too Sue-ish. For an RPG or original fiction character, however, you're probably perfectly fine.
Fanfiction authors beware - Mary's on the loose. There's still a chance you can save this character with some TLC, though. Role-players, you should also strongly consider giving your character a workover.
Fanfiction authors, you might just want to start over. Role-players and original fiction authors, at this point your characters are likely to provoke eye-rolling and exclaimations of "yeah, right!" from your readers. (Well, at least from me.) Immediate workover is probably in order.
Kill it dead. Or make sure you read the instructions properly (some people don't do this, which causes freakishly high scores) and take the test again.