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  • Birthday 09/01/1998

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    Music, music, and... more music! No seriously, producing music is fun. But aside from my overwhelming love for music, I think I like Bionicle. I'm almost sure of it, really. Oh yes, pianos are fun too. And saxophones. And guitars. Hmm... Please stand by while I think of something more intelligent to say...

    I like music. Seriously, that's my hobby.

    Did I mention I like music? Also advertising. But nonetheless, Bionicle is cool too.

    I do write a bit, too. Currently working on 3 works (2 of which relate to Bionicle/BZP). So, yeah.

    I must think of more to write here...

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  1. Okay, well, after wrongfully assuming that the 'Comedy Discussion and Planning Topic' was the new CCC, here I am again. I'm here because I would like a review. Yes, I have been given a review in the past, as you'll see in my topic, but that was over the first five chapters. I'm requesting a review over the next five (6-10). I only recently updated this comedy, so it will seem like the first CCC review was quite recent. It was, infact, over six months ago. :3 Yeah, I've been slow. But you know how it is; you start working on something, get tired of it; then you get inspired again. [/b]http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=4468]Tahu's Tips to Survival[/url]Author: Tech WarriorStatus of your comedy: In ProgressChapters to be reviewed: 6-10 Because I want the review to be over these chapters (and since it may require knowledge of the previous ones), here is just a quick back-story to aid in the reading and reviewing of these chapters: It began as a talk show. Tahu is the main character; Helryx, Makuta, Gali, Lewa, and Vezon are the cast, each with their own distinct personalities. Their facility blew up in Episode 4 by a tornado, and they found a village in Episode 5 as a safe haven. Tahu was believed to be "cursed" by Hakann (someone who applied to be a cast member but didn't really work out), and that is where Episode 6 begins. The plot is sort of just opening (was my big error of the comedy as discussed in the first CCC review; plot is introduced somewhat late in the story). Right, forgot to ask; I am allowed to request a second review, right? Anyway, thanks, ~ TW
  2. I certaintly don't mean to interrupt a civilized discussion, but... may I request a review? As it appears, this is the new CCC? Correct me if I'm wrong, but I'm simply trying to find where I can get an updated review of my seemingly "dead" comedy, "Tahu's Tips to Survival". A while ago, near the end of 2012, was my first review on it from the CCC. Recently this week I updated it with a new chapter after roughly 6 months. I felt inspired again to continue. There is a lot of content in this comedy, regarding both humor and story, and I only wish to request a review of the whole thing as it stands currently. But, seeing as that is slightly unrealistic and foolish of me to request, I would like to request chapters 6-10. Feel free to read more or less, but these five chapters shape the focal plot of the story as it stands. [/b]http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=4468]Tahu's Tips to Survival[/url]Author: Tech WarriorStatus of your comedy: In ProgressChapters to be reviewed: 6-10 To aid in the reviewing, in the event that you may not want to (or have the time to) read the previous chapters in understanding where the story is, here's a quick back story: It began as a talk show; Tahu is the main character; Helryx, Makuta, Gali, Lewa, and Vezon are the cast, each with their own distinct personalities. Their facility blew up in Episode 4 by a tornado, and they found a village in Episode 5 as a safe haven. Tahu was believed to be "cursed" by Hakann (someone who applied to be a cast member but didn't really work out), and that is where Episode 6 begins. The plot is sort of just opening (was my big error of the comedy as discussed in the first CCC review; plot is introduced somewhat late in the story). Anyway, I apologize for my unnecessarily long post, but I tend to say whatever I have in my mind at the time. Thanks! ~ TW
  3. For those of you who have been following this story, I deeply apologize. Ugh, I only wish that I didn't fade away from this so suddenly. But, consider this a new start, since I plan on updating from here. It won't be once a day, as you may expect; it will probably be like once a week or something - maybe even more, depending on what happens. But hey, summer is here, so I plan on having free time. That's the plan, anyway... It's been a while since I last updated, so catch up on the previous chapters to understand where the story is at right now. With that, enjoy! EPISODE 14: Good Riddance Tahu: Somebody’s going to die today; I can feel it… Hewkii: Excuse me for asking, but how can you feel if someone is going to die or not? Tahu: You’re excused. Helryx: *facepalm* *everyone hears sound of footsteps* Helryx: Everyone, hide. Tahu: Don’t pee yourself… Lewa: … Tahu: See? You know I’m right. Helryx: Right about what exactly? Tahu: Peeing. Gali: The awkwardness of this entire scenario makes it that much easier to relate to. Tahu: The stupidity of that statement makes you much easier to pick out from everyone else. Helryx: The ridiculousness of your face and the words that evolve from it show just how much you don’t like puppies. Tahu: The rudeness of your rudeness identifies the propaganda of society’s weaknesses. Helryx: The rudeness of your rudeness’s rudeness analyzes how porcupines drive tarantulas within intelligent life forms to promote healthy living for the universe here and beyond, that which physically resembles a seafood shop in Monte Carlo that’s almost bankrupt. Gali: It amazes me how distracted you get. Tahu: Who are you talking to? Gali: All of you. *continues to hear sound of footsteps, but closer* Helryx: Ya’ll need to hide, now! *music gets louder* (and louder) (and louder) (and louder) Helryx: Shut up! Gali: Nobody was speaking… Vezon: How do you know? Tahu: She’s cursed. Lewa: Bionicle-it-is, perhaps? Hewkii: Now where have I heard that before? Helryx: I remember my mom mentioning it to me once before, but IDK what kind of drugs she was on at the time. Tahu: …Excuse me? Gali: You’re excused. Tahu: First of all, Gali, I do what I want. Secondly, I was asking. Thirdly, I don’t appreciate your sarcasm. And fourthly, I’m hungry. Lewa: Make yourself a sandwich, perhaps? Tahu: That’s Gali’s job. Gali: Excuse me? Look red head, keep in mind that I have the technical power to kill you… Tahu: The same could be said for you. Helryx: 2v1 Tahu: … Lewa: Peeps, come tell me if this flashing red light means anything. Helryx: Let’s ask YOU if you think it means anything, moron… Lewa: Does it mean that it’s time to dance? Jaller: …The heck? Tahu: *does the tango* Hewkii: Dude that’s not tango. Let me show you tango. *dances with Lewa* Lewa: Dang girl, you the swag master! Helryx: Oh save it. Lewa: Save what? Gali: Just shut up. Lewa: Shut what up? Helryx: Can I kill him? Tahu: I don’t know. CAN you? Helryx: Ugh! Gali: Can you waltz? Tahu: I can. *does the waltz* *bumps into a giant red button* Helryx: My question is: How do you bump into something doing the waltz? Lewa: Oh come on. It can’t be that bad. Gali: It’s a giant red button and now an alarm has gone off! Do you not understand the concept behind giant red buttons? Lewa: Red is the color of love! Helryx: It’s also the color of death. Tahu: *cough* What does that make me? Lewa: Love! Helryx: Death. Jaller: I’m with you Tahu. I understand what it’s like to be the solution and the problem. Tahu: No, you don’t… *hears the sound of rushing HF guards* Gali: Look at what you did. Hewkii: Who? Helryx: You… Hewkii: What did I do? If anything, Tahu is the one who bumped the giant red button! Lewa: The button of love! Helryx: The button of death. Tahu: It will only be a mystery for a given number of moments. Hewkii: We’re all going to die! Vezon: It’s probably for the better… Helryx: See? Even Vezon agrees with me… That just doesn’t happen in an everyday situation. Tahu: I wouldn’t classify that as agreement. I would say it’s more like twisting your words into sarcasm. Gali: It wasn’t sarcasm though. Jaller: That highly depends on your definition of sarcasm. Helryx: My definition of sarcasm is the same as my mother’s. Lewa: I can’t say that I’m surprised… Helryx: Hey shut up, granny smith apple. Lewa: You shut up, ugly blueberry. Gali: Both of you shut up, pile of rotten fruits. Helryx: Why is it always fruit? Have you ever considered something less inviting? Jaller: No… HF Guard: Stop right there! Helryx: Can you kill us now? HF Guard: That is the plan, yes. Helryx: Cool bro. Tahu: What? You INSIST on dying?? Helryx: Hey, we were destined to die anyway. Tahu: Not me; I want to die with dignity. Helryx: Tahu, let’s be honest. You lost your dignity a long time ago. Tahu: Now that isn’t so true. Gali: I’m with Tahu. Hewkii: I’m with Helryx. Lewa: Is that because your name starts with ‘H’? Hewkii: Quite frankly… Yes… Tahu: HF guards, prepare to die. Helryx: I thought that’s what we were doing! Tahu: Well yeah, but now I’m telling them to do it… Gali: They have blasters and guns. Tahu: Yeah? Well, we have wits.
  4. Just got Furno XL for Christmas! Well, time for me to go shopping online for ones I don't yet own. I'll be happy once I can snag the six 1.0 heroes, though that'll cost me a fortune.
  5. Got Furno XL for Christmas. Yeah, I think he's probably one of my favorites in Hero Factory. He's got such a uniqueness to him; it's the cape that stands out the most I think. I've got half of the first Brain Attack wave now, and I think that's enough to form an opinion on the wave thusfar. What's great about Brain Attack is the new incorporations and pieces, such as the new body armor, shoulder pieces, etc. I really like what they did with Bruizer, to an extent. I think it's great that they've decided to kind of "bring back" the functions that were in a lot of the Bionicle sets, but it does seem to hinder Bruizer's flexibility greatly. Other than that, he's great. However, I don't feel that villains like Bruizer are too incredibly unique. He kind of reminded me of Thunder when I first saw him. Scarox kind of looks like an XT4 - Thornraxx - Meltdown combination. It seems that Brain Attack is taking on a more realistic approach, as far as color scheme and look goes. The sets are getting overpowered with gunmetal gray now, so it's not the most colorful series. But I do really like it because of how different it is from the others. But all in all, I still think Breakout is my favorite Hero Factory series, and probably will remain my favorite.
  6. Rotor is awesome; Witch Doctor is awesome; I also like Core Hunter and Thornraxx, plux Breakout Furno and Breez... particularly. Choosing just one is impossible. I really do believe that the new Furno XL will change my mind, once I get my hands on it. He looks epic. They all do.
  7. I've seen some of these new sets at Legoland Florida - picked up three of them. ...But it almost makes me wonder; is there going to be a "boxed/titan" set for this wave? Like a supervillain? I've been anticipating that... xD
  8. Here is my update: (1.0) Rise of the Rookies - Von Nebula, Rotor, Xplode, Meltdown, Corroder, Thunder, Furno Bike, Drop Ship (2.0) Ordeal of Fire - Furno 2.0, Breez 2.0, Evo 2.0, Nex 2.0, Nitroblast, Drilldozer, Jetbug, Fire Lord (3.0) Savage Planet - Furno 3.0, Rocka 3.0, Stormer 3.0, Stringer 3.0, Nex 3.0, Bulk 3.0, Waspix, Raw-Jaw, Fangz, Scorpio, Rocka XL, Witch Doctor (COMPLETE) (4) Breakout - Furno, Breez, Rocka, Evo, Surge, Nex, Bulk, Toxic Reapa, Splitface, Jawblade, Thornraxx, XT4, Core Hunter, Voltix, Stormer XL, Speeda Demon (Missing only Black Phantom and Stringer) (5) Brain Attack - Bulk, Pyrox, Bruizer (Managed to get my hands on these at Legoland on Friday)
  9. Holograms can’t be pinned. But this made me chuckle; the illogical joke fits with the grim and sarcastic atmosphere.I’m noticing that Helryx is trying to kill Tahu…but she actually doesn’t. This fact drags down your comedy considerably in terms of plot here. If Helryx doesn’t kill Tahu, there has to be a reason for it. Is Tahu fighting back? Is something else preventing her from doing it? The plot really slows and bogs down as a result of this. It might have been slightly better to have Helryx and Tahu trading blows during this first round of dialogue, and Tahu actually facing real threats to his survival instead of easily pinnable Skrall (holograms?). That would punctuate his tips and make them even funnier.Chapter 2:And you could have done that…except for the fact that the Helryx/Tahu action scene you shoved off-screen: And yet, this is a really good joke. What are flames to a being of fire? [nitpick]That would be Tip #8…[/nitpick] Also very good quote there.So far you seem to be doing very well with the jokes, but the plot is lagging badly. You’ve taken two chapters to introduce the cast and get to the point. That should take two lines. The only thing I’ve seen so far is that Helryx wants to kill Tahu, but nothing has really happened on it except for Tahu being chased by Helryx with a flamethrower, and that wasn’t emphasized enough.Chapter 3: A capstone on a turn for the better.Chapter 4:By this point, the plot has picked up some. One thing that might have helped you was to slightly foreshadow the booby-trapped building thing...that might have been even better. :)Chapter 5: I like how you did the facility escape...it reminds me of the Destruction of the Mata Nui Robot and Migration to Spherus Magna. Not sure if that was what you were going for there, but it worked.I read ahead slightly, and it appears that your plot structure improves as the comedy goes on. But you got off to a rocky start here on this one. In the future, should you decide to write another comedy, try to get to the point quickly. It’s nice to have humorous dialogue, and you’ve done a good job with that here, but tying it into the plot of the story better will do better (but I notice you have done that with the latter chapters, so not a big deal).The other thing I suggest is to keep writing, because your writing is improving with each new chapter. :)Given all that, and based on the five chapters I read, I’m going to give you an 8/10 for now. This comedy is good, and while it could use a little work, the author appears to be doing that work. Keep it up! Thank you for the review! Points taken with consideration. Hmm... Perhaps the plot is the bigger error of the comedy, because you see, Helryx killing Tahu is not actually the plot; it's only thrown in there for humorous purposes. But yes, the actual plot becomes more revealed as time goes on. I'll try to get down to the point next time. :PThanks again! And there's more to come!~ TW
  10. Well, currently I'm waiting on a review from the CCC. But in the meantime, here's the thirteenth chapter. You should be afraid - very afraid. EPISODE 13: Green Tea With a Hint of Sour Tahu: Y’all need to get moving! The guards are after us!Helryx: Oh calm down! It’s not like they’re strong enough to kill us or anything of the sort…Tahu: Wait, something’s not right here…Gali: What’s that, Tahu?Tahu: Where the heck is Makuta?Helryx: He’s in the lilac field, counting the bunny rabbits.Gali: Sounds like him alright…Tahu: I’m serious!Helryx: Oh are you now? Well, to answer your question lightly, he’s in the lilac field, counting bunny rabbits, as stated above.Tahu: Gah! Forget it then…Helryx: And that, Gali, is how you win an argument.Gali: …By sarcasm?Halryx: No, but by reverse psychology! See, when I told Tahu that Makuta was in the lilac field, that gave Tahu the impression that Makuta was, in fact, NOT in the lilac field, which then prompted me to remind Tahu again that Makuta WAS, in fact, in the lilac field, which then screwed up Tahu’s brain since he had experienced extreme déjà vu and psychosis, which led him to believe that what I said was correct, that Makuta was, in fact, in the lilac field, which then made Tahu silent due to the fact that he knows that I’m right. Got that?Gali: …Helryx: See? You know I’m right, so you can’t say anything.Tahu: No, Helryx. When I go silent, it’s not because I know you’re right; but it’s because what you said was filled with so much ignorance that there was no point in even talking with you further.Helryx: It’s weird because a lot of people tell me that…Tahu: Maybe you should open them big ol’ ears of yours!Helryx: I don’t have ears…Gali: Bunny rabbits do.Hewkii: Most bunny rabbits though cannot understand biomechanical being-ish speech, and are therefore incomprehensive to such.Helryx: Oh stop trying to sound intelligent. It just makes you sound dumber…Tahu: *thinks of about a million ways to misinterpret Helryx’s statement and then think of a witty comeback and throw it back at her*Helryx: Oh stop trying to sound dumber. It just makes you sound more intelligent. Wait…Tahu: And that, Gali, is how you win a silent argument.Helryx: *thinks of about a billion ways to misinterpret Tahu’s statement and then think of a witty comeback and throw it back at him*Tahu: Oh stop trying to sound better than me. It only makes you sound lower than me, suffice to say.Helryx: *thinks of about a trillion ways to misinterpret Tahu’s statement-Jaller: Both of you need to just shut up!Tahu: *thinks of about a quadrillion ways to-Helryx: Go kill yourself, now.Tahu: Get out of my house!Helryx: *thinks of about a quintillion-Gali: Both of you knock it off and have some tea!Tahu: *thinks of about a sextillion-Helryx: *septillion-Tahu: *OCTILLION-Helryx: *NONILLION-Tahu: *FREAKING DECILLION-Helryx: GOOGOL! !!!Lewa: …What the ###### just happened here?Gali: Well, ever thought about silent arguments?Tahu: *cough, googolplex-Helryx: Eat my fish.Tahu: You’ve bumped the number up to googolplex to the power of ten to the power of ten to the power of ten to the power of 3.14159265-Helryx: Oh for Pete’s sake…Tahu: Who’s Pete?Gali: My uncle’s grand-daughter’s sister’s daughter’s husband’s brother’s friend’s mother-in-law’s half-sister’s son’s nephew’s step-father’s pet aardvark.Tahu: Everybody, silent! Do you see that?Helryx: Is that a zit?Tahu: *facepalm* What? No! That, over there…Helryx: Oh, the big door that’s armed and looks like something we should stay far away from…Tahu: Yes, that! I think we should go in.Helryx: I think we should throw you in and see what happens, record our observations, and then form a conclusion.Jaller: I kind of concur with Helryx here.Tahu: Oh shut up.*all walk toward the door*Helryx: Go ahead! Open it.Tahu: *inches closer, trembling uncontrollably*Helryx: Let’s see what you got, big man!Vezon: I am bigger than you.Tahu: Technically speaking, size depends on the inner soul, not the outer physical size…Helryx: No it doesn’t. Shut up, and open the freaking door, now.Tahu: *opens the door* Oh. What a fail…Helryx: You fail.Tahu: Gerbils fail.Helryx: Failing wins.Tahu: Winning fails.Helryx: Never win.Tahu: Always fail.Helryx: Everyone wins… Wait…Tahu: And that, everyone, is how you… get Helryx do something productive.Helryx: What the ###### just happened here?Tahu: You got lost in your own ignorance.Helryx: …Tahu: See? You can’t even speak.Helryx: Well, technically speaking, I can, but I make the conscious decision not to, as I don’t want to offend anyone.Gali: Yeah right…Hewkii: Agreed.Jaller: Agreed.Helryx: Oh shut up you intellectual moronic twits!Gali: Point taken.Hewkii: I think we need to focus on what’s at hand here.Helryx: Point taken.Tahu: This, my friends (and arch), is a room.Gali: *facepalm*Lewa: What else could it be?Helryx: Oh, you’d be surprised…Lewa: Would I?Tahu: Hmm… This looks like… Ah!Helryx: Oh spit it out already!Tahu: *spits*Jaller: What… color is that?Helryx: Looks like a lavender-like mahogany, mixed with some cerulean and fuchsia, with just a hint of chartreuse!Gali: Looks white to me…Tahu: *sighs* *facepalm* *etc.* Grow up.Helryx: *grows up*Tahu: O_OGali: Look at this board over here!Tahu: That, Gali, looks like their plan…Lewa: Is that a freaking black hole?Helryx: No, moron. It’s a picture of a black hole.Tahu: This must be what they need me for… They can’t open it themselves, so they need a source of elemental power to do it!Helryx: Yeah, but you’re cursed, remember?Tahu: They just say that to convince me. I’m not convinced btw. It’s there, but I just don’t believe that it is.Helryx: That was inexplicably paradoxical.Tahu: …No?Helryx: I’m lying.Lewa: *coughs*Gali: Well, clearly Tahu has had schizophrenia once before.Helryx: Ugh… Have some tea!
  11. Been working on this for a bit now; I think it's time to request a civilized review...[/b]http://www.bzpower.c...?showtopic=4468]Tahu's Tips to Survival[/url]Author: Tech WarriorStatus of your Comedy: In progressChapters to be reviewed: 1-5 (assuming that's the limit)It's nothing too incredibly serious, but there is a devious plot behind it... Chapters 1-5 give a good introduction to the story, I feel; the later chapters further the plot. I'd like a review on the beginning five chapters for now, though, since that's where most of the humor lies.Thanks!~ TW
  12. You should be used to my timing by now. EPISODE 12: Behind Bars *closes gates in the villain storage unit*Hewkii: HOW did this happen?!Lewa: Well, first we were taken by guards, threatened, harassed, put to death, etc. and eventually hypnotized; so, yeah.Hewkii: *facepalm*Helryx: Well, it’s not like we’ll be in here forever.Gali: Well, yeah. I mean, eventually we’ll die, and go somewhere else for the rest of eternity…Helryx: Ugh, not what I meant.Lewa: What like, seriously?Helryx: Think about it guys. HOW did all of this happen? I mean, look at everything that’s happened to us within the past few days. Our entire facility blew up, we found a village, lost Tahu to the HF who happened to be a villainous betrayal mugging company, then we lost Makuta… What is up?Gali: Perhaps this is just a way to make the story more intense.Helryx: Right, because there’s such an easy way to fix this!Hewkii: Um, no, there’s not…Helryx: Ever heard of the word ‘sarcasm’?Jaller: …Hewkii: Yes.*sound of banging*Lewa: Holy ######.Hewkii: IKR?*more sounds of banging; all villains/captives looking around*Helryx: Oh dear; what is that sound?Lewa: Something tells me that we won’t be in here for much longer…Helryx: Is that so?Gali: Interesting…____________________________*BACK AT STORMER’S LAIR*Stormer: The plan itself is not going so well, sir. Tahu is somewhere in this building, since we have the safe shield up. He can’t go anywhere. But I have a feeling there’s something else odd that’s going on here…***: I am your eyes, Stormer. I can see all that happens within the Hero Factory. That said, I can tell you that Tahu is indeed hiding, but I know not where.Stormer: You just said you were all eyes and ears.***: Stop correcting me, minion.Stormer: Why the heck won’t you reveal your identity anyway?***: If I were to do that, then the entire plan would fail. My identity is the most crucial part of the plan, so it must remain secret.Stormer: Well screw that; get me some coffee.***: You have not coffee, but instead some good ol’ Hi-C.Stormer: Ugh…***: Stop stalling. Finish the plan, Stormer.Stormer: But I can’t! I don’t know the next step now that we’ve lost Tahu.***: Perform the X-Operation I told you about yesterday.Stormer: Uh uh, no. That’s for emergencies only. Since we know that Tahu is hidden somewhere in the building, there’s no need to do something as a drastic as the X-O. Besides, the fact is we know he’s here somewhere…***: You must also factor in the fact that Tahu could potentially be doing some spying, hacking, or whatever else within the HF HQ without our knowledge. You’re truly a dumb moron.Stormer: Yeah, I AM pretty dumb at being a moron.***: *facepalm* Oh wait, you can’t see me.Stormer: …What?***: Never mind. We need to talk about the plan and finish the task at hand. It’s the only way we will ever open up that blackhole…______________________________*BACK AT THE VILLAIN STORAGE UNIT**continued sound of banging*Lewa: I think I see something!Helryx: What is it, Lewa?!Gali: Oh this is going to be good!Lewa: I see STARS!Halryx: *facepalm*Vezon: Screw you.Gali: You had us all hyped for… nothing.Hewkii: Uh… It may not be nothing…Lewa: *passes out**continued banging*Helryx: Well kiss my mamma! It’s Tahu!Lewa: I’ve not seen your mother… I don’t really want to either.Helryx: Yeah, most people tell me that…Gali: >_<Lewa: Yo Tahu! DaWg!Helryx: SHHH! Do you want to get us all killed?!Lewa: We were all going to die anyway! *is pushed by Helryx*Tech Warrior:Helryx: Oh not now!Tech Warrior: Well, fine! Come up with your own narrations then!Helryx: It wasn’t long until Tahu had inevitably hacked into the source unit of the sacred masks of eternity. Helryx and Lewa continued to argue under the gates of iron, while Hewkii and Jaller watched while drinking tea. We’re not quite sure as to what kind of tea it was – it could either be Green or Sweet (I’m allergic to both either way, so IDC).Gali: Oh shut up.Helryx: That’s rude!Hewkii: Touché.Helryx: Oh shut up!Lewa: *while banging on the bars* GUARDS! PLEASE! Kill us! I can’t take anymore of this madness! Put me out of my misery!Helryx: But, we’re just getting into our misery…Gali: Well state the obvious, why don’t you?!Helryx: I was bored.Tahu: Clearly…Helryx: IKR? Like, this one time… Wait a minute… TAHU!Tahu: Like it would kill you to put on some reading glasses every once in a while!Helryx: It would, actually...Gali: Oh shut up.Lewa: Just get us out of here, now.Tahu: Don’t tell me what to do, #####.Lewa: Break a leg!Tahu: Rupture your spleen!Lewa: *cough* you watch WAY too much television!Tahu: At least I’m not green in the face because of it.*silence*Tahu: *opens gate* Now get out. All of you – leave. Go to that room over there.Helryx: Don’t tell me what to…Tahu: GO!____________________________*BACK AT STORMER’S LAIR*Stormer: Wait… sir! I see them!***: Well what are you waiting for? Kill them!Stormer: What do you think I’m trying to ATM?***: Sip your tea – green tea, to be exact.Stormer: Yeah, like, ever notice how manufacturers focus too much on the decorations of the cup? Like, I can’t even get it up to my face. It looks like Medusa…
  13. Don't ever expect an update this fast again. EPISODE 11: Change of Plans *IN THE WAITING ROOM*Hewkii: I think I see someone!*HF Guard walks by and then leaves*Makuta: Good eye Hewkii! *sighs*Hewkii: Thank you!Helryx: Ever heard of the word ‘sarcasm’?Hewkii: “Sarcasm” - 1: a cutting or contemptuous remark, 2: ironic criticism or reproachGali: *facepalm*Helryx: Plagiarism!Jaller: Yeah, from the Webster’s dictionary! So it’s okay.Makuta: If I say ‘Helryx’, is that considered plagiarism? No. So then why should repeating a definition be considered plagiarizing?Helryx: Ugh! *storms out* *storms back in*Makuta: That’s what I thought.Gali: I was thinking the same thing!Jaller: …Hewkii: Clearly Jaller was not.Gali: How was that so clear?Helryx: Has anybody else noticed that we’ve been encountering quite a bit of déjà vu lately?Makuta: Only a moron would notice that…Jaller: But sir, didn’t you claim to have déjà vu from episode 4?Makuta: …Jaller: ANSWER ME!Makuta: No!Jaller: Fair enough…Helryx: That wasn’t fair at all. Jaller deserves to be killed for that!Hewkii: Why?Makuta: He didn’t fully embrace my answer. It was instead an emotionless ‘fair enough’ with no careful thought whatsoever. Just for that, I’ll have to throw you into the fiery furnace.Jaller: Where’s that at?!Makuta: Oh, it’s about 300 miles from here. Don’t worry; I’ll throw you in it after we save Tahu.Helryx: THAT’S what we’re doing?!Gali: What did you think we were doing?Helryx: Infiltrating…Makuta: …Jaller: Wait a minute, Makuta, did you forget that I’m a Toa of fire?Makuta: No…?Helryx: What relevance did that have to anything?Jaller: A fiery furnace won’t do anything to me.Hewkii: It sure will! It’ll make you 300 times more powerful!Makuta: Did I mention that it comes with a nice cold glass of water?Jaller: As a matter of fact, no!Hewkii: I feel like you’ve said that before…Helryx: Something weird is going on here…Makuta: What’s that, Helryx?Gali: Too much déjà vu, I think.Helryx: No, not that. I just now remembered that I forgot to put out that forest fire in my backyard.Makuta: …You’re kidding, right?Helryx: As a matter of fact, no!Lewa: Ugh…Gali: I’m sure you’ll pay for that when we get back.Makuta: It’s no big deal, really. Forest fires happen all the time at my place.Helryx: …You’re kidding, right?Makuta: As a matter of fact, no!Hewkii: Guys, over here! I found a control center!Makuta: How in the name of Makuta did you find that?Helryx: It probably had to do with your constant bickering.Makuta: *cough* isn’t THAT ironic?Jaller: As a matter of fact, no!Helryx: WOULD YOU STOP SAYING THAT?!Makuta: As a matter of fact, no!Helryx: Why I ought to-Makuta: *slaps*Helryx: That was a womanly slap. THIS is a manly slap. *slaps*Makuta: *cough* But you’re female.Helryx: What, so I can’t be tough?Jaller: *whispering to Makuta* She is kind of hot if you ask me…Makuta: Nobody asked you! *punches into wall*Helryx: What’s your freaking problem?!Makuta: I told you I don’t have one. Now, accept the answer or die!Helryx: *stands up* Whoa whoa. Back up. Are you THREATENING me?Makuta: As a matter of fact-Helryx: Go ahead! Finish it!Makuta: You know what?!Helryx: What?!Makuta: I’ve had to sit in that room back at the facility and listen to your constant bickering. All you do is bark out orders, and you don’t respect other people’s feelings OR opinions. Well I’m sick of it. You think I want to sit around here and be constantly mocked about my appearance? You think I want to be yelled at constantly about how bad of a job I do? Do you honestly think that I always want to be the bad guy?!Jaller: Not to intrude, but you’ve kinda made that clear to all of us…Vezon: *kind ofHelryx: What? Now you’re asking me about being the bad guy?! This is not about you, remember that. If you don’t want to be the bad guy, then why do you constantly portray it that way? Why do you constantly inflict pain on everyone else? Why can’t you just be like Mata Nui?Makuta: STOP COMPARING ME TO MATA NUI! He has NEVER done anything for me, and all he does is tell everyone else around him that I’m at fault for everything bad that happens around here.Hewkii: Well, you ARE the devil…Lewa: Read my mind!Hewkii: IKR?Helryx: This has nothing to do with Mata Nui! If you don’t want to be looked at as the bad guy, then stop being like one! Why haven’t you ever at least TRIED to be like Mata Nui then?Makuta: BECAUSE MAYBE I DON’T WANT TO BE LIKE MATA NUI!*brief silence*Lewa: Tech Warrior, this really isn’t the time to intrude with your stupid narrations.Tech Warrior: Yes, it is.Lewa: …Helryx: Why though?! He is your brother, right?*silence*Helryx: …Right?Makuta: He’s not my brother! *brief pause* At least, he doesn’t deserve to be… *walks out*Helryx: WHERE are you going?!Makuta: Away from here. I’ve had enough of this!Helryx: But what about Tahu?Makuta: Save him yourself! You should know how anyway!!*brief silence*Hewkii: That was lovely.Gali: No it wasn’t…Hewkii: Ever heard of the word ‘sarcasm’?Gali: “Sarcasm” - 1: a cutting or contemptuous remark, 2: ironic criticism or reproachHelryx: Enough with that!! There’s too much to think about right now.Hewkii: Well we’ll need to think fast, since we’ve still got Tahu somewhere in there…Jaller: Can’t we do that on a different episode? *whines*Helryx: Makuta just needs time to calm down. He’ll be back…Jaller: How do you know?Helryx: I just do.Hewkii: Right, since YOU know everything!Helryx: Hewkii, just, don’t do that.Jaller: Uhh, Helryx.Helryx: What?Jaller: Behind you!Helryx: Huh? *turns around to a bunch of HF Guards with blasters*Gali: Oh come on!Helryx: We’ve already lost two; perhaps this is our destiny!Jaller: I don’t know about that…HF Guard: Stand down now! You are under immediate arrest!Lewa: When you say ‘stand down’, do you mean like…HF Guard: Shut up.Lewa: Right…Helryx: Please don’t arrest us. Just kill us, please.HF Guard: I’m afraid we won’t do that yet.Hewkii: This isn’t very good.Helryx: Really? I had no idea as I was paying too much attention to the BLASTERS AND GUARDS! HELLO!Lewa: Here we go…
  14. Thank you man774! It's nice to know you like it. There's more to come!
  15. My apologies; I've been on a bit of a hiatus lately, preparing for some music-related stuff, and a marathon. But no worries, even while my updates may not be the fastest, they will come. I've put too much heart and thought into this story to let it die out, so that isn't an option.With that, here is episode 10! EPISODE 10: Furthering the Mystery *AT THE VILLAGE*Jaller: Gali! Helryx! Makuta!Helryx: Do we know you?Hewkii: As a matter of fact, no!Makuta: What do you want, strange-looking Toa? And make it fast, because I don’t think I can hold it in much longer…Jaller: Hold what in?Hewkii: Look, the television broadcast on which this reality show is on showed the Hero Factory scheming to take over the universe, and they’re using Tahu to do it!Gali: Yeah, like THEY’LL ever be able to do THAT! They’re too grouchy and self-centered.Hewkii: That’s what I said!Makuta: This reality show is much more of a reality show than I thought!Jaller: …Hewkii: Look, we don’t have all the details, but we think that we should warn the village about this.Lewa: I think Tahu may be in danger!Helryx: Thank you, Captain Obvious!Lewa: How was that so obvious?Makuta: LOL Episode 4 déjà vu.Helryx: You memorize the episodes?Jaller: Who does that?Vezon: I do.Makuta: I learn my lines quickly.Helryx: We don’t write scripts…Gali: Yes, we wing EVERYTHING.Lewa: LOL Episode 2 déjà vu.Helryx: Oh would you…Lewa: Would I what?Helryx: Ugh! *storms off*Jaller: What’s her problem?Makuta: Uhhh… She’s got a medical condition which makes her want to constantly drink excessive fluids; it has no indefinite cure but scientists are predicting that by the year 5609 there will be a pill to reduce all pains from everything so yeah. Also she has dyslexia and ADHD; Bionicle-itis is also present for sure. I 100% know this one.Hewkii: Now where have we heard that before?Jaller: I think my mom told me that once…Hewkii: The heck?Makuta: Over there *points to heck*Hewkii: That’s disturbing…Jaller: IKR?Gali: Hello? Did anyone hear what Hewkii just said?Helryx: Yeah…Makuta: She said “That’s disturbing.”Gali: *facepalm*Helryx: Who cares about Tahu?Vezon: I do!Makuta: No you don’t…Helryx: Neither do you!Makuta: Touché.Helryx: This doesn’t make any sense. Why would the Hero Factory be interested in doing anything with Tahu? He’s boring!Jaller: I’m sorry, but don’t you do a talk show with him?Helryx: That’s different. You see…Hewkii: Why?Helryx: If you’d shut up and listen, I’d tell you why.Hewkii: But I am shut up and listening.Makuta: Would you two quit fooling around and talk like mature and responsible adults?Helryx: I’m sorry, but I’m not entirely sure how to do that.Hewkii: It’s easy. First, you…Makuta: Shut up. Now, listen to me. Don’t tell the village anything. Ask yourselves this: Do we want to worry an entire village about something we’re not even clear about?Helryx: Yes, actually.Jaller: *facepalm*Hewkii: *double facepalm*Makuta: *triple facepalm*Helryx: Oh Lord…Makuta: Oh Lord what?Helryx: *facepalm*Makuta: Just shut up and let’s get moving.*AT THE GATES OF THE HERO FACTORY*Helryx: Here’s the plan. First, I’ll climb up this pipe, maneuver my way through the small crevices within the air conditioning system, then I’ll make a precise cut through that part over there, scaffold my way across the thin catwalk, and land safely inside!Makuta: …Or we could just use the front door.Helryx: You just don’t get it do you?Makuta: I think so, actually. It seems to me that you’d make a lot more noise doing all that rather than opening a door.Gali: Well, Helryx can be right in some cases. Perhaps there is a camera or something at the front gate.Makuta: Only one way to find out… *opens door and walks in*Gali: Makuta!Makuta: Relax, I’m fine.Helryx: For now…*all wait*Helryx: Oh c’mon! Where’s the part where someone all of a sudden sees Makuta?Makuta: They’re too scared of me. I mean, look at how big I am!Vezon: I am bigger than that.Makuta: *sighs*Helryx: You need to get a freaking life.Makuta: Technically speaking, I do own a life.Helryx: You take everything literally don’t you?Makuta: Technically speaking, I can’t literally take everything since I already own everything, but whatever.Hewkii: I thought that was Mata Nui… ?Makuta: No. He thinks that he does. But really it all belongs to me, period.Helryx: Ugh!Makuta: *walks further into the Hero Factory* I see something!Halryx: What is it?Makuta: Nothing.Helryx: *triple facepalm*Makuta: *sees someone coming*HF Guard: Hey, you!Makuta: ‘Sup dog?!Helryx: I just don’t understand him.HF Guard: Stand down, now! Or face fatal consequences.Makuta: When you say ‘stand down’, do you mean like a kneeling position or should I squat?HF Guard: Just stand there and let me shoot you.Makuta: Will do!HF Guard: *shoots*Makuta: *looks around*HF Guard: *shoots again*Makuta: …HF Guard: What’s going on here?Makuta: Idea! Perhaps you don’t know how to use that gun of yours.HF Guard: Hmm, you’re not from around here, are you?Makuta: As a matter of fact, I am the ruler of the universe.HF Guard: That can’t be true. Because as you can see…Makuta: *takes HF Guard and slams him into wall 20 times… in a row*Makuta: Now, everyone, hurry in! Let’s hide in that room over there! But be sure not to drop that camera!Helryx: I’ll try. *drops camera* Oops.Gali: Would you…Helryx: Would I what?Gali: Ugh! *storms off*Helryx: I hope she realizes that she’s storming off in the direction we’re going.Lewa: She does.Jaller: IDK about that!Hewkii: Why so?Lewa: Otherwise, she’d have stormed off in that direction. *points to tornado*Jaller: Gotcha!Makuta: Good, good. Now, let’s stay here for a while and observe. Then, when we get more information, we should know where Tahu is!Helryx: Yeah, we can do all that in the next episode.Makuta: You’re right.
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