Dane-gerous Posted February 2, 2019 Share Posted February 2, 2019 (edited) This is the review topic for my story Nuparu's Folly. Sorry if this is kinda not what you wanted but I really did like the idea of writing about Krahka so here we are. Tell me what you like and dislike. New entries should be in every week, if not, the week after. Edited February 2, 2019 by Dane. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Valendale Posted March 24, 2019 Share Posted March 24, 2019 I'm liking this so far. I'm wondering if our mech operator is one of the top dwellers with the fractured minds or perhaps someone or something deeper. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted March 29, 2019 Author Share Posted March 29, 2019 (edited) I'm not spoiling anything, but the next chapter might reveal a few more clues. Thank you for the review, by the way. Edited March 29, 2019 by Dane. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xccj Posted April 10, 2019 Share Posted April 10, 2019 This is an interesting setting... I'm guessing Matau's appearance means it's not set in the official canon. (I was thinking at first Krahka was wandering around the MU after Makuta had been defeated.) But you're building a cool narrative; I'm especially intrigued by the mech operator, and am expecting a cool reveal since you're doing so much to hide his identity. My main complaint are that the chapters are so short that the read's over quickly and now I have to wait to see what happens next. 1 Quote My BZPower Stories Dark Core--Kulagi's Kanoka--A Shadow's Contrivance--Mystery on Keli-Nui--BZ-Koro: To Bring Back Bionicle Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dane-gerous Posted April 18, 2019 Author Share Posted April 18, 2019 Yeah, length's something I tend to struggle with, with these types of stories. I'm hoping this next chapter can make up for it (it is still coming, for those who are still waiting) Thank you for the criticism. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alia of AGL Posted December 12, 2020 Share Posted December 12, 2020 Oh, hi, I'm the user that used to go by AceGreenLegend. Sorry, I haven't spent much time on the forums in years, and I only found your fic today-- gosh, that's a long while- As it has been quite a while since the exchange event, I really had no expectations going into the story, but it's quite an interesting mystery about a post-apocalyptic Metru Nui. It's cool to make a designated Vahki into an individual character, so Ahurei is a welcome OC for the story! Quote - Bionicle Fan since 2002 - Former Lego Universe Alpha/Beta Tester - Owner of The AGL Group Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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