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Tahu: Spirit of the Mist

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  1. Very nice...If I may, a few grammatical suggestions. You wrote, "He could just imagine what Iruini might say about this particular mistake of his, if he lived long life to see Iruini again." I believe you meant, "...if he lived long enough." And then over here, "...but all he managed to do was make the Vohtarak fire a Rhotuka at him." Maybe you should take out the "at him"? I say this only because you already wrote "at him" in the previous sentence, and it appears—IMHO at least—slightly redundant; plus, the meaning of the second sentence should be clear without it anyways.
  2. "And for once, that thought didn't make him comfortable." That line was just brilliant. lol.
  3. Hey, Tahu. Glad to see you again . How've you been? Regarding your suggestion, that makes a lot of sense. I'll edit it in. Also, this is indeed the right place to post this. Not sure why it wouldn't be, to be honest, seeing as short stories don't have review topics or anything. Thanks for the comment. -TNTOS- Yes, well, it's been so long since I've posted here that I have forgotten the protocol.
  4. Would you allow me to make one grammatical suggestion, perhaps? You say, "The wave shocked him, indeed caused him to stagger". For grammatical prettiness, could you perhaps say, "The wave shocked him—indeed, it caused him to stagger—"? Otherwise, kudos. I like it. Also, my apologies if this was the wrong place to post this. If there's another page, please link me to it.
  5. This was a great chapter, my friend. Kudos to you . --Tahu
  6. The highest of my congratulations to you, Greg. --Tahu
  7. So, I thought of something. If you're telling us to read the chapter, why do you give us basically all the plot points? --Tahu
  8. My friend got BIONICLE: The Game for the PS2, but gave it to me. I couldn't say I was impressed. The graphics were awful, even in 2003, it could get absurdly frustrating in parts, the voice acting was subpar, and it had very little connection to the canon story. And actually, I didn't like BIONICLE Heroes (for the home consoles only; DS version ROCKED) that much either. If you have to get a LEGO game, I say go with LEGO Star Wars or LEGO Indy or one of those. But hey, my opinion. --Tahu
  9. Happy belated birthday. Hope it was good.

    --Tahu

  10. I don't like Wii's. I'm a traditional double-analog stick controller gamer myself. But I agree, New Super Mario Bros Wii is definitely good. Oh, and nice punny title. --Tahu
  11. I have a question: how is it that you're a premier member, yet you only have 15 posts?

    --Tahu

  12. And you also share my love of Star Wars games.

  13. And Sylux was amazing as well. How did you get all the minute details in so well?

  14. Dark Samus was especially good.

  15. Thanks for sharing my Love of Metroid Prime. Saw your Brickshelf MOCs. They were great.

    --Tahu

  16. Sounds neat. I'm excited now. Oh great. Isarot sounds like "Ishtaros", who is a Greater Fiend from the Ninja Gaiden series of video games. --Tahu
  17. I say you should go ahead and post it now, cause I really wanna read it, so...yeah. --Tahu
  18. Don't worry, I'm not complaining, but didn't you tell me once it would be posted around late April? --Tahu
  19. Can't believe I spelled his name wrong...sheesh.

  20. I couldn't agree more. --Tahu
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