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Toa of Gallifrey

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  1. Can't believe we're finally getting a real bona-fide Lego gacha game. @ me when they make a Bionicle banner.
  2. I still get the impression from the first post that he intends to crowdfund something, but the scope of whatever it is would likely be pretty limited and not bear the name "Bionicle".
  3. Wall-e wasn't just promoting Earth Day. It was a love story and a celebration of life first and foremost. The environmentalism came as a result of including the anti-consumerist theme and out of the idea of having the Earth desolate.
  4. Seconding all of these, except I think Swarm is fine and I suggest Duality for book 3, due to it being such a prominent theme. Especially seconding Fractures, Downfall and Reborn (or Rebirth).
  5. Make a 110 episode OVA series and distribute each episode through a bluray disc included with issues of Lego Club Magazine. If Bionicle gets a live-action adaptation, I will probably actively deny its existence and pretend it wasn't made, like the Tsukihime anime.
  6. I'll try and dig for it on ye olde Eurobricks thread, but it was some crummy short comics without dialogue that were traced over existing art. Edit: Here's where it begins.
  7. Very bad idea desu Bionicle is not Transformers or Hero Factory, part of the appeal is the sense of mystery born out of a total lack of human characters. I will forever be grateful to Greg for preventing the Committee from putting a human child in Mask of Light. I remember when the terrible promotional G2 comics started coming out and, apart from the blatantly traced art, there was a statue of a human head in Gali's comic (brought over from whatever it was traced over). Some people welcomed the idea of humans in Bionicle. Others sought to get out of the cursed land.
  8. It's an independent thing he's doing, not related to Lego.
  9. There's plenty of potential for a spiritual successor to stand by itself if Faber and his team can properly execute what is a very interesting and creative premise with strong themes and a good hook.
  10. Unless Lego has that name trademarked too, Faber could just title whatever his project is Biological Chronicle. Working on the assumption that it is something, it could be as simple as a Cryoshell album accompanied by art, or it could be a feature film.
  11. The only real narrative weakness the Mata have as characters is that you're essentially juggling six protagonists. Each of them has to be able to stand on their own in the prologue, and has to be able to operate as a unit for the rest of the story, which only really affords the most basic and uninteresting character drama lest the theme of unity be betrayed. A group like the Metru has a more clearly defined protagonist in Vakama, with whom conflict could be made regarding his teammates. The same goes for the Inika/Mahri, except they were written as a more Mata-esque team, barring a few exceptions. Just about the only thing Hero Factory had over Bionicle in storytelling potential is that it wasn't bound to such rules and, had the characters been well written (actually, scratch that--) had the characters been written, it could've led to interesting situations and interpersonal conflict that didn't need to be resolved in a short span of time. If Faber intends to reboot this with a similar framework as the original Bionicle, phasing out the Mata after a while would be the right choice if it intends to go for the long haul.
  12. It's better than the marketing for G2, that's for sure. I don't expect anything concrete to come of this, but I'm still more interested in its narrative.
  13. If it is something else, it will still be Bionicle in all but name. The issue here is it getting off the ground. I get the impression that he's going to crowdfund whatever this is, and I'm not too concerned about it reaching whatever goal unless it's absurdly high, but the management of Rebel Nature leaves me concerned for how focused he'll be on this. I hope that he has talented and competent people working on this with him.
  14. At this point I'd be cool with G3 being told in the revolutionary new media release format of Instagram posts.
  15. Adapt G1 as a highly profitable story-driven gacha game to run alongside a critically-acclaimed TV series adapting G2 and Faber spitballing G3 ideas on instagram alongside food pics and increasingly bizarre Rebel Nature teasers.
  16. Thanks! I made the questionable decision of front-loading the action instead of the characters. Usually one cares about the action because of the characters involved, but in this case, I wanted Stronius to be the only character actively explored since the initial fight was practically against nature itself. This caught up to me negatively with this chapter because I wanted to get to the Takanuva stuff quickly, but that meant leaving all the characterization of the surviving Skrall for next chapter. Stronius was supposed to have something of a monologue about whether what he was doing was surrender or survival, but I wanted to keep the pace quick for this one, so it's being repurposed for chapter 3. There's some Lewa stuff that was supposed to be in this one that's also gonna be in chapter 3. The only thing that would've initially been in this one that's getting fully cut is that the Seeker and Tracker fight was outlined as being longer and utilizing more of the jungle setting, but as I was writing it, it just felt unnecessarily long so I reduced it to its essentials. I wanted to have more Kanohi usage, but that'll have to wait until Lewa's back in the game. Chapter 3 is going to be very long due to fitting a lot of dialogue, character beats, setup for the climax and the actual climax itself. It's probably going to be split into two for structural reasons, but it'll come together because I'd like to have some setup that's coming directly after have its payoff accessible on the same day. If all goes well and they both drop at the same time, then I'll probably finish up the unrelated vignette a little later (though no more than a week, and ideally no more than 2 or 3 days, since it's gonna be fairly short).
  17. Guessing he's gonna try to kickstarter a movie/TV show/book? What happened to Rebel Nature?
  18. It took significantly longer than I'd hoped for to get this out, but here is chapter 2. Chapter 3 and the gaiden should take less time, but again, not setting any specific time. Very sorry to have kept you waiting, thank you for your patience. Chapter 2: The Forest The battered company pressed on through the forest. Stronius did a quick rollcall before leaving the desert. The survivors of their weeklong trek in the desert after the dragons’ onslaught were himself, Rai, Kirida, Arita, Vilun and Shirem. The last two had not spoken much since the incident. They were the first two he found after his time wandering. Despite their seniority in the company, they were inexperienced and reclusive. One of them wore green training armor, still. Back in the encampment, Vilun had begun spending time with Arita, probably due to her also being a recruit. Despite Shiren being distant, he was indispensable as a warrior, even if he wasn’t as good as Rai or Kirida. Rai was a loyal follower, he stepped up as Stronius’ assistant since joining the group and only made himself more valuable as time went on. Kirida had less of a mind for organization and more destructive power. He almost killed Arita by accident when they found him in the middle of the Black Quartz Mountains. Stronius’ thoughts drifted to Arita, who had spoken with him on a few occasions. Even then, Stronius felt as though he knew less about Arita than he did about the more reserved pair. Stronius’ ruminations were interrupted by Rai notifying him that up ahead there was a clearing. He had scouted on as the more beat up Skrall caught some rest amidst the thick jungle. They pressed on and reached the clearing, but something was off. It was clearly artificial, something some Agori or Glatorian had carved up as a sort of resting area, but it was completely vacant. It had been used recently, there wasn’t enough overgrowth and the ground was clearly disturbed. Before Stronius could begin to think about what could be nearby, he heard footsteps scuttling all around. Something very was running around them. It couldn’t even be made out; it was just a growling blur. Whatever it was had no intelligence, it had to be feral. “Keep guard!” The Skrall entered circle formation. The creature halted, making itself visible. It was green and sort-of looked like a Glatorian. Its face morphed from having round eyes and four prongs to being dome-shaped and having a mechanical-looking right eye. The green creature lunged forward at a tremendous, if slower, speed. “Evade!” All the Skrall ducked out of the way. Their would-be assailant dove into the jungle. Sounds of a struggle could be heard. It wasn’t aiming at them, but at something it saw through the trees. Stronius and company began to run away when a massive beam of light shot out from the trees. The feral creature was knocked back into the clearing, unconscious and with his armor steaming hot. Whoever did this to him could be heard stepping forward. It was a gold-armored being… one of the Toa. The Skrall observed from within the trees as the golden being approached the unconscious green one. He planted his twin staffs into the ground and knelt over next to the fallen one… possibly another Toa. The gold Toa turned his armor silver and removed the green Toa’s mask. He observed his hands, which were rugged and coarse, presumably from crawling and climbing trees. “Those of you hiding in the trees; run. I will not ask that you drop your weapons, simply that you leave us.” He spoke at the Skrall. “We are wounded. We seek only refuge. May we establish a truce?” Stronius tossed his launcher into the clearing as a sign of peace. Surrender went against the Skrall’s teachings, but this was survival. “Very well. Everyone in your company must leave their weapons in the jungle before stepping forward.” Stronius nodded and all the Skrall followed suit. They all stepped forward. “I cannot abide you staying here.” “What do you mean?” “I am protecting a nearby village of Agori. I happened across them when I set off to find this Toa, Lewa, over two months ago.” “I request that you take us to their encampment. From what it sounds like, you are alone. I will help you defend them if you give my men a place to rest.” “I cannot put them at risk, I am sorry.” Stronius considered his options. His thornax launcher was within range for him to grab and open fire. If he was fast enough, he could fight. No… Stronius decided against it. He was not going to drag the Skrall into another battle in the state they were in. It would not be wise to pick a fight with a Toa. Even if they came across the village, taking it would be difficult. Crestfallen, they picked up their weapons and began their march back through the jungle. “Mask of Light…” a loud droning sound echoed among the trees. The sound of metal clashing and the flash of a beam of light shot off in the opposite direction to the Skrall. “This is our chance. Those who can fight, come!” Stronius roused his followers to action, all yelling and unholstering their weapons, no matter how hurt they were. “I am Takanuva, Toa of Light! I declare again that I will not surrender my mask unto you!” The Toa let go of his disguise and donned his resplendent golden colors once more. He raised his staves in the air and created long curved blades of light to launch at his assailant. The makeshift light boomerangs hit their large, four-legged target on the mark, knocking it off balance and damaging its armor. Takanuva readied his stance to charge in when he fell over. A monstrous bull rammed into him and knocked him. “I got him, Seeker. You’ll get his entire head when I’m done with’m.” Stronius and the Skrall charged in at the being who they recognized as Tracker, one of the Dark Hunters. It seems he and Seeker were still alive after all, though not for long. Arita and Vilun stayed back and fired a volley of thornax, hitting the bull unconscious and knocking Tracker’s claws clean off. Shiren, Kirida and Rai went after Seeker, who had gotten back on his feet. The four-legged creature plunged his seismic staff into the ground and created a quake. Everyone was put off balance. In the distraction, he impaled Shiren with his staff and rammed the other two, knocking them off their feet. Shiren’s face contorted in rage. He tore hit the staff with his buzzsaw shield and cut it. In a quick motion, he fired a thornax at the enemy at point-blank range, launching the two away. Shiren laid in the brush, satisfied to see that Seeker would not get back up. He slid out of consciousness as he saw Rai and Kirida running to him. Stronius witnessed the whole thing, furious that he could do nothing. Takanuva got back on his feet and slashed at Tracker. The Dark Hunter recoiled and fell next to his unconscious bull. “You… You’re betraying the Dark Hunters?” Tracker roused his bull back to consciousness with a treat, but the bull ran when it saw Stronius approaching. “My loyalties are to the Skrall, not to any of the Hunters. This is for those of us who fell in service of your leader!” Stronius let himself loose and clubbed Tracker. “Stop!” Takanuva fired a thin bolt of light at Stronius’ hand, making him drop his club, but Tracker was not for this world anymore. “This is why I cannot let your people come. I appreciate the aid, but that was unnecessary.” “I came to your aid and lost one of my men, you don’t get to question my methods.” Arita rushed in. “Stronius, stop! Shiren is alive. Toa, we apologize for our brutality. We ask to appeal to your mercy. He will die if he is not treated. Please let us come unarmed.” Takanuva did not hesitate. “Very well, I will let you come in, but Stronius stays outside with me.” “I accept your terms.” Stronius was grateful that one of his own might yet be saved. “We are close to the village. Leave all your weapons here. Stronius, I expect you will not mind me taking an extra precaution.” The Skrall all dropped their weapons. Arita and Rai carried the unconscious Shiren. Stronius stayed next to Takanuva, his wrist bound with a ring of light that would constrict and burn his hand off his arm if he did anything wrong. The Skrall, looking worse for wear but higher in spirits than they’ve been in a long time, trudged through the forest behind the Toa of Light, their beacon of hope. His light was so alluring that they failed to notice the black swarm-like cloud emanating from a star in the sky, about to descend onto the planet.
  19. I don't have time to make this meme rn but someone else can steal it (Using the freaked out cat template) americans when the trees speak vietnamese russians when the snow starts speaking finnish toa when the stars speak makuta
  20. Just wanted to drop by and notify that I haven't died, but it has felt as such because holy Gadunka classes have been unrelenting. I haven't had time to keep working on this yet, all my time on word processors has been spent writing up lab reports and taking notes. I have had some time to myself, but I've been too exhausted to think creatively. I don't have a timetable, but I am making getting this finished a top priority for whenever there isn't pressing work. This week I should be able to sit down Tuesday and get a good chunk of work done on the next two chapters, but if Monday sees me getting a new assignment (which is a real possibility), I'll have to tackle that first and it'll likely eat up my time till Wednesday. I have hope that at least by next Saturday I should have enough time and a low enough amount of stress to get the next chapter finalized and posted. I am very sorry for the wait, I really didn't want this to extend past February, but all I can say is that it has not been forgotten and it'll be out as soon as the circumstances permit it.
  21. I really liked it! I have class in two hours, so the fact that it was a quick read was very welcome. I really like how Kwaaser was fleshed out in such a short amount of text. Seemingly longing for a return to innocence, being enveloped by pride and eventually wracked with anger, perhaps bitter anger stemmed from regret, and acceptance. I fully expected him to have an unceremonious end in the Archives, it was a pleasant surprise to see Jerbraz and Botar. Absolutely love the characterization for Jerbraz, he was just the smug anime protagonist I always pictured him as. I had some awful first drafts myself, so I can empathize. Again, the length is perfect, and even if I wanted something longer, I'll always take quality over quantity. Thank you very much for writing this, I'll definitely be revisiting it!
  22. Glad you enjoyed it! At first I used green as a generic term for inexperience, but then I remembered what Stars Skrall looked like and added it there as a bit of a joke/pun/worldbuilding (jokes are the deepest lore, as Nasuverse fans always say). I was a little worried about it ruining the tone, but I'm glad it went over well. I was also worried about the fight being too visceral, but I really liked the idea once I was running with it, and I really wanted to drive home how dangerous the desert is (plus give some screentime to a completely random namdropped creature). Once all the chapters are out, I'll talk a little more about some inspirations for specific elements (since if you're familiar with them, it might give you an idea of where the story's going that's not entirely accurate but that I definitely took some cues from). No new chapter with this post; I finally have some time to get on with it tonight, though, so hopefully it'll be out soon (though I still maintain that the 17th could well be the release date for it, hopefully it won't be stretched out so far).
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