This is the Official SSCC review of Death By Pride by Toa Smoke Monster (Review by Proud Stigma). I had no problems with flow or any noticeable spelling errors, not that this is my forte, though I did have one part that I would change. This "...insulting in the incinerating of his body." To either "...incinerating his body." or "...the makuta insulting the matoran as he was incinerating his body." Depending on what you were going for here, but that is just me. As for the story itself, not bad, and I was fairly surprised when I found that a makuta was there ( I was expecting something more of a lost in the woods, or another ending where they just strait up kill each other. I did, however, expect it to go wrong like it did, but either way pretty good. Though there is something you may want to clarify as to whether this was intentional or not. Earlier the other two matoran consider knocking out Dyson and stealing his map, in an area we are very aware is hazardous. Yet when faced against the Makuta, Bapuz said that they were friends (if I remember right). However, unless I am mistaken, they only seem united in their quest for the stones and little else beyond that as they don't act like friends, and there is not anything mentioned in the text about whether he is lying or if this is an overlook. If the friends claim is true though then why was Dyson so quick to kill Aro? The text does not mention anything about Dyson suspecting Aro being mind controlled or what have you. Though I am curious if these are genuine overlooks or if some details were lost. Anyway, good story and thank you for choosing the SSCC.