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I went with the sheer simplicity of Jazbay in the end, it's so twee.

Am I the only person who didn't vote for their own entry? Terror bird is really brilliant, but I'm just feeling the MNOG nostalgia of that Kahu. Nostalgia beats even my own desire to win.

A large number of people just found that nauseating.

I would've expected it to be one of the founding members after Helryx, and Axonn was recruited to it, rather than helping to lead. Also the order were quite happy to station him on a permanent basis on Voya Nui. I don't think they'd allow there second most senior member to be stranded on an island for over a thousand years.

I've still seen problems on this board, but its never got particularly out of hand. I've heard plenty of stuff about how it used to be on the old board, but I don't remember from experience or anything, I wasn't the most well traveled member back then.

Don't know if you'd ever come on to read your birthday topic, but happy birthday all the same.

Bs01 doesn't list any ranks other than Helryx being the leader. I find it hard to believe they wouldn't have a second in command, and I'd also think whoever it is is sufficiently important for them to have been mentioned at some point. Therefore, it's probably one of Tobduk, Trinuma, Botar. Jerbraz, Johmak or Hydraxon. Some of them have obviously died already, but recently enough in storyline that the ranks won't have been updated. If I were to guess, I'd say Trinuma.

This thing takes the prize for aggression, its certainly the scariest looking entry I've seen so far. I've been staring at this for 5 minutes wondering if there's actually anything helpful I can say, and I spotted the glatorian head in the legs. So some unusual parts usage going on, but it obviously blends in well, or I wouldn't have taken so long to spot it. Good luck with the contest, I'd expect to at least see this in the finals, and it could be a winner.

IC: Tayis He was glad of the conversation as they tramped through the snow, it distracted from the cold, with which his cloak seemed to be helping with very little. He cast back in his memory to the conversation he had overheard in Onu-koro. Yes, a Vex had been mentioned, in fact he had been there. He still wasn't sure whether he should be helping Zieta or not though. She was on a path to destruction. "I think I might have heard of him, yes," he said, suppressing a shiver.

I feel outside of the Koros MNOG was perfect. In the Koros, I've felt neither game was really big enough. MNOG in particular did not have enough huts to accommodate all the matoran you see. MNOG 2 looked bigger, but at the same time there seemed less matoran, because everybody was named, there were no background characters at all.

IC: Tayis Tayis grimaced at Zieta, but had no intention of giving up his cloak in the name of chivalry. In any case, Zieta appeared to have lost any moral compass she had. He put his hood up and stepped outside, bracing himself against the cold wind.

Custom masks and tools are cool, because they're just single aesthetic things. When you start cutting parts to make things fit together better though, its not really what Lego is about.

This did make the front page a couple of weeks ago. There are two topics on it in the news forum, the announcement topic and Lewalew's memories topic.

Staff of light piece ended up being pretty overused, and I can't say its even that brilliant a piece. Lewa Nuva's Air Katana are also used quite a lot, but they are awesome.

It looks high quality in terms of animation, but really awfully cheesy. I'm kind of on the fence at the moment. I agree with previous people that there should be a small Bionicle bit. I mean Bionicle is a huge part of Lego's history.

You asked for a review, so I'm going super in-depth. Or super in-depth for me anyway. (Assuming you did this in MS word), I advise you do find and replace for 'Kerpin' to 'Keprin', as I spotted it a few times. Nice name though. I'm no English student, but I still find time to be pedantic about punctuation. There should be a full stop after 'rock head', and a capital for 'she'. The word 'get' here is also unnecessary. Possibly a new line as well, but like I said, I'm no English student. should be 'and it wasn't'. I assume this all meant to be reminiscent of the Hewkii/Macku relationship? I like it, as someone who never took the whole non-canon romance thing. Unphased isn't hyphenated. 'No' needs a comma or full stop. Also 'her' voice, not 'he'. 'he' should be 'her' again. Easy typo to make, I know. I'm gonna get super geeky here. Firstly Po-matoran have a built in aversion to water. Obviously you get characters who don't match the usual element format, but it would be very unlikely to find a Po-matoran 100% comfortable unless they'd had swimming lessons. Much like Macku gave Hewkii I guess. Perhaps a reference to learning to swim or something? I know you have a word restriction though. Onto physics geeky now, 'the heavy tank dragging them down'. A tank full of air would float, unless it was made of ridiculously dense metal. Dense enough to make the average overall density of the tank, including the air inside, higher than that of water. Seemed a tad anticlimactic, perhaps a little more build up would be good, rather than 'Oh, suddenly there is a fish biting me.' An endearing end to an endearing story, good characterisation for a small word limit, and the plot isn't bad either.

Some great use of pieces here, I like the dragon head used as the back. The colours all blend together beautifully, except the yellow claws which seem to clash a little with the gold to my eyes. Best of luck with the contest.

[1] [2] [3] [4] [5] [6] [7] [8] [9] [10] [Gallery] Nyyra is a Ga-matoran warrior. I did not think long about that back story, nor did I think about the fact its more of a male build than a female build. So yeah, don't really judge this on canon gender rules, because I forgot them when making this. Anyway, I had posability prioritised for this, and that's why I tried a slightly more unusual arm design. I'd be interested to see what people think of the arms, as I haven't really made up my mind about them.

IC: Tayis "It may be becoming a thing of the past," he said. "But most Toa still have morals, and will try to avoid killing. Certainly, going out with intent to kill is...not at all heroic." He gazed towards the cave entrance, the cold wind whistling again the walls. "I guess if we're going to Ta-koro," he continued. "We best just get moving." He put up his hood, pulled his cloak tighter around himself and headed outside.

IC: Ranama "That's all very well," he said. "But I want no more part in this. And I want to know where Tepi is, dead or alive!" IC: Eidolon He was surprised to hear that the Vortixx had in fact attacked the Onu-matoran, and the Le-matoran had apparently just been bystander. That didn't explain the hastily cut trail covered in blood through the jungle. Not the actions of someone trying to discretely dispose of a corpse.

IC: Tayis "How about 'following the Toa code' for my suggestion?" he asked half heartedly. He didn't know any of the members of Sixhand, other than this 'Vex' Zieta kept mentioning. Valuki might know of course, but he'd rather not enlighten Zieta to the matoran's knowledge.

IC: Ranama "I only tried to persuade Tepi to leave," he said. "I neither owned, nor threw the knife that killed him. I wonder who did, Zahkon?"

IC: Tayis Tayis knew perfectly well that Ta-koro was exactly the right place to go, but frankly he'd rather they followed a cold trail. Zieta was apparently suicidal, and leading her into the centre of things wouldn't do anything good. However, he didn't want to directly mislead her. "You're the one who's been investigating," he said, scratching the back of his head. "Do you think this Vex guy is in Ta-koro then?"

IC: Tayis "I guess...maybe...we should get going then," he said, sighing. "Where were you planning on going?"

IC: Ranama "Where is Tepi, Zahkon?" Ranama asked coldly. "Did you bury him in the jungle? Or just throw him in a lake?"