Feel free to review my story "Pitch White" here!
Posted Jan 10 2013 - 11:54 PM
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Posted Jan 11 2013 - 08:37 AM
Cool, is it going to be really long?
Nice start, certainly makes me curious about the rest of the story!
Oh and there's a small problem you should fix: First it says he hears the doorbell, but then he goes to see 'who knocked'.
I turned out to be exactly the grown-up I wanted to be.
A child - but with a credit card.
Kanohi upside down = epic beard.
We've all tried it, don't deny it.
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