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#1 Offline Phovos

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Posted Sep 21 2012 - 08:07 AM

The smell of sweet, freshly cooked sponge cake was insulting his nostrils. It wasn't fair. He wanted cake. And he wanted it now.
 
Nuhvok-Kal didn't understand much these days. It felt like years since he had fought the Toa Nuva and been sucked into a black hole created by his own, out-of-control powers. He had no idea what had happened to his siblings. He didn't even know if the nest or the Bahrag or anything still existed. He could have been completely alone. Except he wasn't.
 
The smell was taunting him through the gaps of the old, rusty 'oven'. Not even Mata Nui knew how old that oven was. Nuhvok originally thought that it must have been millions of years old, compared to the rust he'd seen on the oldest Matoran, but he was later told that wasn't the case. He was also asked what a Matoran was.
 
"Can I have some please?" Nuhvok asked, his eyes lighting up.
 
The human didn't reply. He didn't even look at Nuhvok. He was looking at the door. Someone was knocking on it. Nuhvok sighed, then headed to the low cupboard by the 'refrigerator'. He climbed in and pulled the door shut, just as the other door opened.
 
"Zhe cake iz not ready yet..."
 
"I'm noot loooking for cake, laddie boy! I'm lookin' for me whiskey!"
 
There was an audible sigh from both sides of the conversation as a cupboard near Nuhvok's location opened and quickly slammed shut again.
 
"Ahh, cheers, mate!"
 
"Zhe coast is clear, little one..." Nuhvok waited for a few seconds, for the other human to let him out, then climbed out, careful not to knock the door off its hinges again. With a grunt, Nuhvok climbed up one of the chairs, then continued to watch the cake being made. This human was an odd one. It spoke with a lot of Zs and Vs and such. Apparently, he was a 'doctor', but he wasn't like any doctor he'd seen back on Mata Nui. The Matoran doctors and healers used magic and elemental powers. This human used specialised technology. And he still hadn't told Nuhvok his name. With another grunt, Nuhvok watched as the 'doctor' took the cake out of the 'oven' and turned it off, the flame disappearing with a quiet fizzle. The smell was even better now that there wasn't rust and fire in the way. It was like... Well, Nuhvok didn't really know.
 
"Have you had cake before?" Someone asked out of the blue, grabbing Nuhvok's attention.
 
"No, I have not." Nuhvok replied. "But my enhanced sense of smell is struggling to cope with the scents I am inhaling..."
 
The doctor grinned, then opened a draw and pulled out a large, wooden cylinder. He then opened another cupboard and pulled out several different packets, all of which were white. After that, he rummaged around for a small, blue bottle, and put that on the worktop along with the other ingredients. "Cannot have a cake without zhe icing..."
 
"Icing?" Nuhvok asked. "Does that have to do with ice?"
 
"Nein!" the doctor replied cheerfully, before pouring a bag of something called 'flour' on the worktop. He then opened another packet and dumped that on the side too. But this other thing came out as a solid square. He then carefully opened the small, blue bottle and placed a drop of that on the solid square, which he then started to knead and push about with the wooden cylinder. "Ach, I could not be bozhered vith making it myself..."
 
Before long, the solid white block was now a flat, round shape of pale blue. The doctor grinned, then placed the pale blue 'icing' on top of the cake, trimming the edges away. The doctor held a piece of icing up, just as there was another knock on the door. Nuhvok scurried away back to his cupboard and slammed it shut.
 
"Who is it?"
 
"Doc, is that darn ol'cake ready? The boys are gettin' anxious out there! Not t'mention tha' they're gettin' obnoxious!"
 
"Ja, it's ready. Let me get zhe candles. Tell zhe... Zhing to get itz lighter so ve can light zhem..." Nuhvok could hear the sound of rummaging in draws and the rustling of paper, before everything disappeared. Several rooms away, there was a loud cheer and what sounded like songs, which soon faded back into normal chatter.
 
Nuhvok sat alone in his little cupboard, unsure whether he could leave or not. The problem was, only the doctor knew about him. He'd never told the other humans. Nuhvok had seen the other humans before, he'd peered at them through the gaps in his little hiding places, but he knew that they wouldn't accept them. Well, not all of them. Some of the humans were quite scary or quite vicious. They had a funny job. They were 'Mercenaries' as the doctor had explained, but the idea of killing for a prize made very little sense to the Bohrok. Even their emotions and thoughts were a mess to a being who's own emotions were so mechanical...
 
Time passed. It must have been about fifteen minutes, but Nuhvok wasn't sure. Either way, the room was empty. The only difference was that the cake was gone, and there was some paper on the work top. Wait, where did the paper come from? With a hint of curiosity in his giant, yellow eyes, Nuhvok climbed onto the work top and looked at the paper. There was a note on it. He sniffed, then followed his nose over to the edge of the worktop, where something was hidden in a small, wooden box.
 
Nuhvok grinned as he took a bite out of the little, blue sponge cake."Thank you, Medic..."

Edited by Phovos, Sep 23 2014 - 11:56 AM.

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#2 Offline ZOMBI3S

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Posted Sep 22 2012 - 05:32 PM

Haha its team fortress 2, I like it. I guess the cake really isn't a lie...
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Posted Sep 24 2012 - 06:19 AM

The cake was only a lie in Portal. TF2's world is very, very different. And so is said world where Nuhvok-Kal now resides.Anyway, thoughts?
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Posted Sep 24 2012 - 07:23 PM

I like this a lot. Wonderful work!You kept me guessing as to who the "Doctor" was... you did that expertly. And the other humans... the good ol' Demoman... forgive me, but I can't quite place my finger on the second. Engineer? Scout? Soldier?And the subtle reference to the Pyro... I had to read it a couple times to get it.Studying German as I do, I enjoyed the accent and small German words used. At least, before I knew who the Doctor was. *Shudder*The Bohrok-Kal are some of my favorite characters, especially Nuhvok Kal (because of the Gravity). Having him show up and being cared for (surprisingly kindly, for the Medic) in the TF2 universe... well, it brought smiles, chuckles and tears. Thank you. Almost made the Medic seem like a kindly old man... :rolleyes: :lol:Thank you again, and great job!
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Posted Sep 25 2012 - 12:31 AM

I'm glad you enjoyed it!The third voice other than Demoman and Medic was Engineer, who happens to be my second favourite character. Really, it's not canon in either a Bionicle or a TF2 sense, since Medic is actually a rather evil man, and Nuhvok-Kal, I have always assumed that he would not like humans, but his gravity powers gave me an excuse to put the pair together.Maybe I ought to expand on this...
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Posted Sep 25 2012 - 07:06 AM

I'm glad you enjoyed it!The third voice other than Demoman and Medic was Engineer, who happens to be my second favourite character. Really, it's not canon in either a Bionicle or a TF2 sense, since Medic is actually a rather evil man, and Nuhvok-Kal, I have always assumed that he would not like humans, but his gravity powers gave me an excuse to put the pair together.Maybe I ought to expand on this...

Well, of course it's not canon! The Medic is a twisted evil nasty guy from Stuttgart, Germany, and Nuhvok-Kal is one of the most powerful and aesome characters in the Bionicle universe (I can't hlep it, I like the Kal!). Putting them together makes no sense. No sense at all. Realistically, they'd probably fight to the death (and I daresay I'd put my money on Nuhvok-Kal). No, this is a very unrealistic story.But that's the point!It's so much more fun this way! Very few people here write canon stories, and yet their stories get the praise they deserve. It's much more fun and easier on the suthor to write a non-canon story. You shouldn't feel bad about it, you did a wonderful job. :yes:And as for expanding on it... well, I'm sure there are others who would like to see that. As for me, personally, I think it is fine as is. I was never one for long expansions or epics... but just do what is fun and workable for you as the author. It would be nice to see something happen with Lehvak-Kal, he's just floating in space. http://www.bzpower.c...tyle_emoticons/default/tounge2.gif

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Posted Sep 25 2012 - 07:24 AM

Well, obviously, in Medic VS Nuhvok-Kal, the smart money is definitely on Nuhvok-Kal. Nuhvok-Kal VS Heavy Weapons Guy, Soldier, Demoman or possibly Sniper might turn out differently, but you never know...Actually, I wrote a story about Lehvak-Kal and cake AAAAAAGES ago. I've actually written loads of stories about Lehvak-Kal, they're just mostly unfinished. I have a whole epic which I never finished in which Lehvak fell out of space and proceeded to affect the entire 2006-2010 storyline by accident. I have loads of Lehvak-Kal material. Heck, I'm planning on writing a blog about Lehvak-Kal's adventures.Also, I just kinda expanded this in Muffins.
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Posted Sep 25 2012 - 11:17 AM

I think it would all depend on if Nuhvok knew that his opponent was there. If Heavy or Sniper managed to surprise him, then maybe they could pull it off...Wow. You really know that territory. :yes:Expanded it where? What is Muffins? (I feel like Nuhvok in his strange new world...Lol.)
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Posted Sep 25 2012 - 02:09 PM

Muffins is the story I posted earlier in this very short stories section.I‘m not entirely sure if Heavy could beat Nuhvok if caught by surprise. Yes, minigun, but minigun is very loud and Heavy is very slow. Nuhvok is supposed to be quite slow as well but when you can control gravity, tht means nothing. Sniper does have the distance advantage though.I doubt sappers work on Bohrok.
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Posted Sep 26 2012 - 06:11 AM

Oh, I see.Actually, you're probably right about that. I just figured that Heavy might be able to tear Nuhvok apart in the few seconds that he would have. It all depends on how resistant its armor was to bullets.That also applies to Sniper.Bye bye Demoman. Oh, they're going to have to glue you back together... http://www.bzpower.c...tyle_emoticons/default/tounge2.gifIncidentally, would you mind if I wrote similar stories about the Bohrok-Kal? I don't think i would publish them at this point, but if I did, I wouldn't want to look like I was directly ripping off your idea. I'm not, by the way, I just had a little burst of inspiration after reading this and your other stories...

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Posted Sep 26 2012 - 08:59 AM

I wouldn't mind. I'm just glad someone enjoys this.
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