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Xezia-A unique short epic you can't miss.

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#1 Offline TrueshadowX01

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Posted Nov 11 2012 - 03:08 AM

Xezia (Szee-stsee-ah)It is going to be a short serious-romantic comedy-horror epic mix about a young Toa who must find his destiny and gets involved with a shadow mistress and is a cross between being loyal to his sister or to this so-called friend. It’s going to shift a lot in mood among chapters so bear with me and this is just a short introduction/chapter 1. I made this for pure fun and I will update it as much as I can, but I am in College so it may not be updated as much as I would like. I just hope I actually finish this Epic, so if you guys like it yeah for me, if you don’t oh well… I’ll write it anyway. Regardless, I’m aiming for at least 12-15 chapters. However, if it somehow a good story that at least a few people enjoy I might expand it. Also, I’m not the best at grammar, so please point out any mistakes that I know I probably did. So anyway enjoy my… “work” of art… twisted in my image. To give me your honest opinion (and I don't get offended by any criticism so you can say whatever you wish), click here for [url="[url="http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=7560"]http://www.bzpower.com/board/index.php?showtopic=7560[/url]"]review[/url] this epic.

 

A few notes before reading, I might change the first chapter some time to be more like the latest two, which is a more first person and is a lot better in general. For any new people reading it try to at least get through the first two chapters before judging it. ^_^

 

Chapter 1: Unforeseen VisitorA young toa was being trained and preparing for a war for Metra-nui. Her name was Ahja (Ah-jah), she was a toa of lightning. Her sleek form allowed her extraordinary maneuvers and tactical advantages and she wore the great mask of speed. She was being taught by an member of the Order of Mata-nui, who called himself “Ios” (Ee-ohs), he was a wolf-like rahi, but could speak and clearly intelligent. Next to Ahja was another toa, Galatius (Gah-lah-tee-oos), a toa of sonics. He was less graceful and needed much practice. He wore the great mask of underwater breathing. He was not the usual toa and many of the rumors say the was a mistake when he was summoned to the temple with Ahji, while others say he was given only left over elemental powers that Ahji didn’t need or couldn’t use.His build was slow, weak, and couldn’t swim well, though his mask helps preventing him from drowning. Though he was often ridiculed for his weakness and being saved by Ahji, but occasionally he was proven useful. Though, he was not summoned to train with the Order of Mata-nui, it was because Ahji refused to train with them unless they allowed him to train with them. Ios laughed at the thought, but in the end agreed. Nevertheless, the two were being trained by Ios, but as time went on Ahji improved with great skill, but Galatius failed to advanced. Frustrated he took off to hide in a small cave. There he sat alone in the dark, contemplating on his destiny, his thoughts weighed great doubts about his future or purpose.Among the cave a shadow figure appeared before him. Galatius felt a shiver down his spine. To deep red eyes glared at his presence with a terrible grin. Galatius readied his sonic boomerang, but the slender dark being laugh and mocked him, the shadow being’s voice sounded female and soft, “And to what end may that worthless weapon bring? I come with an offer you can’t refuse… power that exceeds even your skillful and powerful sister. I desire only one thing…” Galatius desperately replied, “I’m listening…” The dark being grinned and answered, “Your assistance….” Galatius hesitated and then responded, “Uh… I don’t know….” The shadow moved more close and her voice became seductive, “Don’t you want to feel worthy the title of ‘toa’… praised by name and adored by all? Your sister finally respecting you?” then changed her tone to mockery, “…or forever mocked as weak fool who should be fighting?” Her laugh was cruel and sinister, but sounded beautiful and soft.She stood there quite for a few seconds and then laughed again and revealed her true form from the shadows. His eyes met hers and he felt an instant longing to love her though he knew her not. Her body was slender and beautiful and whose built was that of a toa but wore small plates of armor colored as dark steel; she also wore a strange gentle mask, but unknown to him it was a great mask of beauty, a rare mask with the power to distract or influence enemies by causing those who look into her eyes a few seconds of hesitation or insecurity, just enough to give her an unfair advantage in influence or fighting, it caused a glitch in most biomechanical beings emotions, but wears off after a few minutes as long as they don’t dwell on her beauty. However, it was only effective among those of the opposite gender, for it is ineffective with mechnoids, some form of rahi, or those who are blind. She moved slowly towards him touch gently his shoulder gradually and grinned.The dark mistress leant over and kissed Galatius’ lips and for several seconds of feeling her soft lips upon his was breathtaking. He was thrown off guard by such maneuver that he dropped his sonic boomerang. He never felt feelings like this before, but responded, “Who are you and why are you doing this?” She laughed again ignoring his questions, and lifted her hand and placed it on the side of his face, and then channeled energy to him. He felt power surge through him, and his build was no longer weak, for his elemental powers never flowed through him so easily. She disappeared before his eyes laughing until her voice faded into the darkness. Galatius without knowing it was fading and then fainted, lying before her feet in a dark cave. “I’ve been watching you for quite some time now, my dear Galatuis… my sweet love. So gentle and kind I shall rescue you from your ungrateful sister… and then we shall be together forever.” Said the mysterious shadow mistress.


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#2 Offline TrueshadowX01

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Posted Nov 14 2012 - 03:15 PM

Chapter 2: First Impressions

I woke up, still unsure what happened previously. “Who was that? Did that happen or was I just dozing off again?” I asked myself. When I stood up I felt great and stretched my arms. I then walked out of the cave to join up with Ahji. When I finally did, Ahji looked at me surprised. “What’s wrong?” I asked her. Ahji looked at me as if she never seen me before. “Ahji why are you so silent?” Ahji finally spoke, though rather oddly hesitantly, “Galatius is that you? What happened to you, you look different? Look at your reflection.” I raised a brow and responded, “What!” I panicked a little, and quickly looked at a reflection from my sonic boomerang.I had a light tannish skin that was covered in bits of my silver armor, though still similar to what I normally wore. My jaw and mouth were exposed as organic with little to no mechanical enhancements was incorporated in my flesh and only was covered in armor. I wore mechanical helmet that mimicked a part of my skull with a strap around my jaw that held up my mask. I could feel and see organic dark brown hair on my head and my eyebrows, my eyes were completely organic and my iris was revealed as a deep purple and no longer glowed. I had a nose and through the transparent mask of breathing underwater, revealed a gentle and handsome face, all completely organic.“How did this happen to me? What am I now?” I cried out. A laugh broke out behind everyone, and there stood behind us was that mistress, only she was transformed into a similar form as I was, only her armor revealed more of her peach colored skin of her arms and legs and her mask was white instead of black and was transformed slightly to look more like a small crown with a glass visor to reveal her beautiful fair face. Her eyes were the color of a pinkish crimson and she had long flowing red hair blew in the wind, as she red lips drew a sinister smiled.“You witch! What have you done to my brother?” Ahji cried out to the mistress.The mistress replied, “How rude of you I have a name, my name is princess Xezia. I made him more then you’re ever be, not only his powers are far beyond yours, he is now truly independent. Free from the trap of bionics. I’ve have truly out done myself.”“Turn him back or else!” barked Ahji.“…or else what? You might use your little elemental powers on me? I don’t think I approve of such rudeness….” said the Xezia.I then stepped in between, and spoke, “Wait, I’m a little confused here, princess Xezia why have you done, how did you did this, what do you possibly thin your gain from all of this?”Xezia laughed and placed her gentle hand on my face behind his mask and said to me, “You ask way too many questions, all in due time. Oh by the way I love the new look for you. Your eyes are so cute.”Ahji pushed Xezia’s hand away angrily and took out her Lightning gauntlet for her left hand and it supercharged her fists with lighting flowing around her and her eyes. She then shouted out to Xezia, “Enough of your ramblings and turn my brother back!”Xezia just smirked and responded by leaping backwards in a swift grace and two wings appeared behind her, her right wing was white in the appearance of a feathered bird while the other was black and her left wing emerged as bat-like, both fully organic and sustained her position in the air.As Xezia hovered above us a few feet, two forms emerged out of the energy that generated from her being and out of pure light she held a shield in her left hand and in her right a sword from empty darkness. She laughed and then spoke out to Ahji, “You naïve Toa, you have no idea who I am or what I can do… so back down and I’ll pretend you weren’t so rude a moment ago.”“No not until you restore his true form!” shouted Ahji angrily and shot out bursts of lighting at Xezia, but she was protected with her shield of light.After several strikes at the shield, it became unstable and faded from existence. Xezia face looked fearful for a moment and then lunged at Ahji with her sword of darkness and was met with Ahji’s Lighting Gauntlets and sparks of energy flew.Both were engaged at each other and then a powerful shockwave hit both of them to separate them from engaging each other. It came from my Sonic Boomerang that I threw between their feet, though it was a lot more powerful than I thought I would be.Xezia and Ahji were both laid on the ground, one on top of each other. Ahji blushed and quickly pushed Xezia off of her and stood clinging to her ear receptors. Ahji spoke harshly to me and said, “Galatius what in Mata-Nui’s name were you thinking! Are you trying to deafen me, I was in a middle of beating some sense into that witch!” I responded, “You two need to calm down, and talk calmly what little Miss Princess over there.”Ahji shook her head at me, still clinging to her left ear receptor, “Curse you to Karzahni… Since when did you suddenly able to speak up to anyone? Clearly this witch has corrupted more than just your appearance and for that she must be brought to justice.”Xezia stood listening and spoke as she brushed dirt off of herself, “As much as I enjoy listening to you two argue, I feel we have wasted enough time getting to know each other, a little too ‘close’ for my comfort.” She giggled and then continued, “Admit it, Toa of Quick-to-anger, your just jealous of me and Galatius falling in love and my superior beauty in comparison to your ugly artificial appearance.” This enraged Ahji and she spat out, “Ugly am I! I’m going to enjoy beating some sense into your think organic skull. Then ‘We’ shall see how your bruised up face looks once I’m done with it.”I once again tried to step in between them to whisper Ahji and say, “Look you need to calm down and maybe we’ll get to the bottom of this. She’s not going to talk if you keep threating to beat her senselessly. I don’t think she means any harm, I want my body back too, if the one thing I had always exceeded you was thinking things through… even if I never got any of the credit for it.” Ahji whispered back to me, “Look I’m sorry, but this witch is pure evil, I don’t trust her for a minute and since when were you the peaceful negotiator type?”Xezia snuck close to both us as we were whispering and then cried out loud, “Hey you are we done with your little sister’s ‘attitude’ problem, or are you going to help me? Because I have a tight schedule for my... ‘master’ plan, but it requires only you, Galatuis… so say good bye to your dear poorly tempered sister.” It may seem I was at that moment unable to look away from her beautiful crimson eyes. I heard Ahji speaking behind me, but wasn’t able to comprehend what she said and then… all went blank.To be continued…


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Posted Dec 01 2012 - 11:29 PM

Chapter 3: Lost History

 

I woke up… again. The last thing I remembered was something notched me out in the middle of some argument between some princess and my sister. I stood up from a bed of leaves and looked around to find myself inside a hidden cave behind a waterfall. My head hurt and felt a little dizzy not sure what happened.

 

I shouted out, “Hello is anyone here? Hello, please respond!” I then heard someone yawning behind me and I turn around and saw Ajhi lying on the other side of the pile leaves getting up. I blushed and stepped back. Instantly I noticed she had changed like me as well. Only, her eyes were a beautiful emerald and she had short cherry blond hair. Her skin was fair and her face young and gentle. She wore small bits of armor that loosely resembled her original armor.  

 

She looked up at me with a curious face and asked me, “What just happened? Where are we? Why do I feel so strange?” I shook my head and responded, “I don’t know I was knocked and last I remember was you were saying something to me and then all was blank. But look at yourself you have changed like I have.” Ajhi reddened and looked down and then quickly covered self with her arms as much as possible and screamed. “Ahhhh!!! What happened to me? Most of my armor is gone and all of this skin and flesh…?  I feel so exposed! STOP LOOKING AT ME!”

 

I quickly looked away and covered my eyes with my hands and said, “I’m sorry! I didn’t mean to stare at you. What happened, how did we get here?” Ahji, then started to speak out, “It had to be that witch! Send her to Karzahni! How dare so do this to me! This is so embarrassing! When I get my hands on her I’m going to kill her! I don’t care about the Toa Code any more, she is dead when I get to her!”

 

Then we heard a familiar laughter behind them both, and there stood Xezia right next to Ahji. Ahji was startled by this and stumbled up and then fell on me. I opened my eyes and saw Ahji looking down at me blushing for a second. Ahji then slapped me and stood up still trying to cover herself. I shook my head and then shouted, “What did you do that for?” Xezia laughed at what just happened, and she spoke, “Well, well, well… looks like you two finally woke up. Since I had no choice, it may seem your sister must come with us after all. After all, she did break my little gem that removed the bionics from your flesh and replace it with the flesh that was lacking. When she foolishly crushed it in her hands, due to her out of control anger she released the energy and it resulted in her passing out and it removed her bionics. It turned her into an organic like you. Oh yeah and she also hit your precise head because you were too busy looking into my eyes.”

 

Then Ahji barked out, “I was trying to make him snap out of your evil hypnotic powers, you bloody witch, it’s not my fault his current form you turned him into is weaker, maybe removing and replacing all bionics is as pointless as your fairy tales and ideas! I demand you to turn us both back!” Xezia smirked and responded, “I would if I could but you already destroyed the gem that could. I’m afraid you’re both stuck like this… unless we seek out my father and have you back, but Galatius shall remain in this form. Then Ahji can leave and let me and Galatuis continue my own plan. Isn’t that right Galatius?”

 

Xezia looked at me, I responded, “What are you talking about? You’re insane, we never discussed anything… so far you haven’t explained to what your so-called-plan is? Now that you accidentally turned Ahji into an organic, why do you want to turn her back and why do you need me?” Xezia answered, “Well, I need you to help me gain access to an ancient device made by one of my… relatives… it is in a secret island that is currently occupied by the Dark Hunters. I need someone to come with me, if it doesn’t work was going to turn you back, I swear… but now that my gem is destroyed, by your brutal sister, I am forced to take her with me, to at least my father’s Palace. Only there she can be turned back. Though, she might like it being beautiful for once, with none of that hideous metal face you Toa tend to have.”

 

Ahji could not contain herself and then burst out crying, “What is wrong with me, why is this form making me feel so emotional and weak! You evil witch! Send you to Karzahni!” She then continued to curse all sorts of blasphemes. I then rushed to her and placed my hands on her soft shoulders to calm her down and said to her, “It is okay, look I know I didn’t expect or wanted this, you didn’t expect this, and everything is going to fine. We are going to find a way out of this we just have to trust this princess, I don’t she really means any harm, and she just wants our help. Ahji pushed me away, her eyes full of tears and shouted at me, “It is not okay! Why do keep siding with that witch! She turned you… eh… us into ‘this’,” when she emphasized ‘this’ she pointed at her gentle face that wore a slightly changed mask of speed that looked and felt organic as well.

 

When she realized it was organic she pulled her mask off and screamed, “It alive somehow!” I didn’t notice it until now, but my mask was organic as well and felt alive. Xezia laughed as she usually did and said, “You two are rather slow learners, your masks turn organic as well, and similar to the masks of old when they were created organic so the user didn’t have to learn mental discipline to use them. However, they took too much energy and time to create them so forged masks became more practical. There are few organic masks left in this universe unfortunately. You should be proud, organic masks bear potential that under the… ‘right conditions’ and bring into being a new Matoran. However, there is no longer does this old system of breeding among the Matoran exist.

 

The creating of organic masks to create new Matoran has devolved into artificial creation of Matoran, which is being built rather than breed through the old rite of marriage of the two genders, and now little emotions of love is left in the programming of Matoran. Theoretically, Toa as well once possessed to ability to bear children, much like their subspecies Matoran, only their Matoran children would grow up to be a naturally greater in strength and potential to be destined to become Toa as well. That is why some of the first Toa were created wore organic masks, but not all were created like this, many were made like the Toa are today, built or evolved from built Matoran destined to be upgraded. Little does anyone know of the origins of these ‘organic masks’, for many of them remains dormant and appear like any other masks, or what they can become into being. Removing freedom and erasing their memories of ever living in such a world. Their heritage was meant to be passed on to through their children to be Toa, but now certain Matoran just need to be upgraded by certain energy sources, like a Toa Stone.

 

However, the ancient ruler, Artakha then changed his mind at some point and decided to make and rebuild all of the organics by so-called-enhancing them with bionics to be like the first Matoran, the Av-matoran, which reverted back to what it is like today, almost completely artificial and built like robots with engineered DNA mixed with different parent qualities of personality. All gender in Matoran remained less important. No longer did Matoran were concerned with relationships, deeper sense of love, and the old lost rite of marriage, just so they could focus more on their primary purpose, ‘to work as efficient as possible’… how cruel. This short period of history was forgotten and practically erased from Matoran history.

 

I don’t know why decided Artakha reversed it and called this short hundreds of years a ‘failed and inefficient experiment’, at least according to his records that I stole. In it he wrote about how he turned all of these more organic Toa and Matoran back into being built and not created through the lost rite of marriage and love, but left little bits of these feels which were rarely explored and were shunned or banned if one were to go too far in expressing these feelings.”

 

After hearing all of this, I was shocked to learn all this, and then I responded, “That is all very interesting… and perhaps overwhelming, but you still failed to explain to us you actions of changing our forms to organic? Are you trying to undermine Arkinke’s authority of how the Matoran race is to be sustained and to turn everything back somehow? What is your motivation with me? Who are you really and how do you know of such lost knowledge?” Xezia smiled, “You shall find out soon enough, I feel that I have said too much, but regardless you two must come with me to seek my father’s palace. There I shall explain my plan to you as soon as I fix the problem your sister has caused.” With that she began to walk toward the water fall to exit and turned, “Come on now, stop looking at me and lets go.” I looked to my sister her still trying to hide herself and with her eyes still wet with tears.

To be continued…


Edited by TrueshadowX01, Dec 01 2012 - 11:34 PM.

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