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Thirty-Eight

FFFC Rebirth

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#1 Offline Baltarc

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Posted Apr 08 2013 - 07:41 PM

Thirty-Eight

 

The man ruffled through the pages of the progress report before him with a sigh. They were getting somewhere, sure, but they weren’t doing it quickly enough. How long could this keep up before the funding was cut? His investors had sunk millions, billions of dollars into this project. How much more would it take?

 

One of the pages came into focus. A summary of the past several tests, it seemed.

 

Subject Thirty: No repair whatsoever. Unidentified cause.

 

Subject Thirty-One: Repairs mostly successful but incomplete. Unable to continue.

 

Subject Thirty-Two: Subject rejected completed repairs.

 

Subject Thirty-Three: Uncontrolled growth far beyond intended scope of repairs. Unidentified cause.

 

Subject Thirty-Four: Repairs completed and accepted. Synchronization of mind unsuccessful.

 

Subject Thirty-Five: Repairs completed and accepted. Mind synchronized momentarily and desynchronized again. Further efforts unsuccessful.

 

Subject Thirty-Six: Repairs completed and accepted. Synchronization of mind unsuccessful.

 

Subject Thirty-Seven: Repairs completed and accepted. Synchronization of mind unsuccessful.

 

Unsuccessful, unsuccessful, unsuccessful. Always unsuccessful. Perhaps what they were trying to do was impossible, then. Perhaps Subject Thirty-Five’s synchronization was simply an anomaly, just a glitch in the computers that never really happened. Perhaps no one really ever could–

 

A sharp rap on the door interrupted his thoughts. He called the visitor in. One of the scientists. One with little authority, sent as a courier.

 

“Sir, we’re beginning testing on Subject Thirty-Eight. Would you like to–”

 

“No,” he interrupted. He sighed. “Sorry, I don’t mean to be…” He shook his head. “Just go on without me.”

 

The scientist nodded and was gone.

 

The man sat in silence for a few moments before his curiosity overtook his discouragement. With a tap of the spacebar he brought his computer to life and a few clicks later was remotely observing the laboratory three floors below.

 

Subject Thirty-Eight lay unmoving on a table at the center of the room. A tangled mass of tubes and cords seemed to cover every inch of his skin, each connected to one of two dozen machines of various purposes. An ugly, gaping red hole adorned the man’s chest. Dead.

 

Researchers swarmed the room, checking and re-checking each machine, each dial, each screen and interface for any possible errors. So it continued for a several minutes until suddenly, slightly to the man’s surprise, the movement halted completely. One of the head researches had spoken: the time for preparation was finished. He strode to a computer in the corner of the room and typed a command. All eyes were fixed intently on Subject Thirty-Eight’s lifeless form.

 

The man pressed a button on his computer and a window appeared displaying the contents of the screen in the laboratory. Not much of interest; just a flashing string of commands flying across the screen far too quickly for the eye to follow. The man’s eyes flitted back to the image of Subject Thirty-Eight.

 

A remarkable transformation was underway. As he watched, the exposed organs within Subject Thirty-Eight’s chest began to repair themselves, knitted back together by some unseen hand. His muscles and skin then did the same, inch by inch reforming and closing the wound. His complexion began to change, color returning to his pallid face as artificial life coursed through his veins.

 

And then nothing. He sighed. This was where the others had stopped, too, ever since Thirty-Four. He pressed the Alt key and aimed his finger for F4. But for the briefest of moments, he hesitated, his eyes dropping back to Subject Thirty-Eight.

 

A fist clenched.

 

Unclenched.

 

Clenched.

 

Unclenched.

 

And then a pair of eyes snapped open, darting around the room. Arms reached back, pushing what should have been a corpse into a seated position.

 

Subject Thirty-Eight was alive.


Edited by Baltarc, Apr 08 2013 - 07:44 PM.

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#2 Offline Kragghle

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Posted Apr 13 2013 - 11:52 AM

:kaukau: [color=#0000ff;]Billions of dollars, hm?  Alright, that caught my interest...Then you include an excellent status report of the different experiments.  That was easily the best part of the story, albeit how early on it was.  Then again, it was a short story, so it was also fairly close to the end.  But the reason why I liked all of those test results was because they sparked my curiosity, and provided me with a sort of puzzle for me to piece together as I anticipated everything that was coming up next.  I was under the impression, as I was reading that, that there was something to do with turning people into cyborgs.  That wasn't really confirmed by the end of the story.  In any case, I liked seeing the results, the sense of context that they gave, and how they feed to my innate desire for detail.[/color]

 

[color=#0000ff;]The rest of the story is okay.  I chuckled when you mentioned Alt+F4, and the description of the healing wounds was interesting.  It turned out that your interpretation of rebirth was quite literal.  In any case, I was still wondering what exactly "synchonization" meant by the end.  It must have had soething to do with the computer commands, but it still doesn't make sense.  The one thing I didn't like was the last line, which was too blunt, and unfortunately too many of the entries for this FFFC ended that way.  Basically several people all have a one-liner last paragraph that says something to the extent of "He was reborn."  Which just hits people like a brick.  I don't think it works, but at least for this particular story that much didn't stand out until my second read-through, so I guess you're safe.  If you're aiming for perfection, though, I would think of a fresher ending.[/color]

 

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