I saw the artwork for this in your folder. I liked it a lot.

I don't know, not being an expert on poetry, exactly how poetic this piece is. I won't say it's good or poor. But I think it would read better if the first line were, "I stand on the shore of oceans." Leave the word "alone" until the end. Just a suggestion. Also, the poem would be clearer if it made some more direct reference to the speaker's loss. Outside the context of your novel, the poem is ambiguous.

I don't know if you were looking for criticism, but that's what you get this time.

-BC

It's meant to be a bit ambiguous, I thought it sounded better that way. I like your idea about the first line though, it gives the last line more impact.

Seranikai

But she managed to touch the stars... shouldn't that mean she's not completely alone? And the moon guides her too... I don't think it's that depressing after all. Though I had to read it a few times to get that.

But anyways, even if I got the feeling she wasn't all alone, it was very beautiful.

I'm glad you like it, bngi. The idea was that she can't quite come to terms with her loss, although she is getting there gradually, so she isn't completely alone. When I read it in context, at the end of the novel, it was just...so moving.

Seranikai

When I read it in context, at the end of the novel, it was just...so moving.