Strength And Spirit
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You know you want to read it right away.
My Short Story #4 Contest Entry: Strength and Spirit.
Yeah, yeah, it uses Takua, and he's down in the Le-Koro jungle, and he even plays in an Amaja circle. But I tried to write this as one of my action stories, with a couple of short battles where the Matoran use more than just muscle and elemental energy. I also experimented with a few new weapons in this batch, namely Jaller's sword from the MOL movie, and Kongu's new slingshot. (I like giving Kongu alot of interesting weapons). The story is lacking in description in a few areas that I could expand upon, but since I'm aiming for a short story, I thought some of it could be held back. Plus, we got character development with Takua based on some morals laid out by Vakama, and a cool friendship formed between Nuparu and Kopeke. Nee hee hee, I have too much fun with this stuff. It's been a while since I've written a good Matoran battle, and this one turned out nicely. I just hope it's good enough. I also hope people laugh at some of the jokes I've put in there... there was never anything saying this had to be a completely serious story, after all. 
Kongu isn't a Triki, but he leaves plenty of room for comedy. I expect people to tell me which joke was their favorite.
And, although I've reread this thing quite a few times, I'm sure there's some stuff I've missed. That's why I'm relying on Takuta-Nui to give me a bunch of corrections when he replies, as he's keen on getting into everybody's stories for this contest. But other reviewers are appreciated. Although this story is a bit long, I hope it's easy enough for one to read, and that it flows so smoothly that by the person is sad by the time it's over. (Okay, maybe that's expecting a bit too much). Anyway, although it's pretty long, it is broken up into smaller sections, so one can just stop at one line of asterix (*****) and take a break if they need to. 
With that said and done, PLEASE REVIEW! I don't care how well I do in the contest as long as I get a couple of people who enjoyed my writing. That is, after all, one of my favorite parts of writing stories; entertaining others.
That is until my stories start selling like hotcakes and top the New York Times Best Seller's List... but that might take a while / in my dreams.
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