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Here is where you can comment and criticize constructively on The Bionicle Comics Narration.

 

To start things off, I realized that Kopaka never told Matoro his name, so I just worked it into the part where Matoro is telling Kopaka about the Toa.

 

I kept wanting to go into first-person present-tense. I kept it third-person past-tense, though. Do you think I should switch?

 

Looking forward to hearing what you all say!

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