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Insurrection


Crimson Jester

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Alright, here's what's going down. I had no plans whatsoever in entering RPG Contest 13. But, as fate has it, this absolutely sweet idea popped up in my head today. So, I wrote up a (rather weak) intro, and decided to let you guys look, and be the judge. So, here it is, be sure to leave feedback!

 

Peace: the ever-sacred, yet near-impossible to attain treasure of life. It is a blessing, a gift not many experience in their lifetime. And for the inhabitants of Alleria, it could not have come sooner.

 

For thousands of years prior to Peacetime, Alleria was torn ragged by the dogs of war; the result of two self-sanctified Clans, the K’laric and the Ztun. They had been at war for six thousand years, fighting for control over the island that they each believed was rightfully theirs. Back and forth the upper hand went, until the Fall. Faced with near-suicidal odds, the K’laric made one final push, catching the Ztun by surprise, and forcing them nearly to sea. It is said, after a bloody massacre, the remaining Ztun made peace with the K’laric. And thus, the Accord was born.

 

Ten thousand years went by under the Accord; the damage done by the Great War undone, and the war itself forgotten. Technology, society, and culture advanced to levels never dreamt of before. Alleria became a haven, a utopia the world over couldn’t even fathom. All was well; at least, until the Uprising.

 

It hit the island quickly; an attack from within. Top-ranking members of government, key citizens, military personnel; it oozed out of every crack in the Accord. Within a month, the Accord was fractured, and the legion responsible for the coup, the Uprising, revealed themselves. They were unlike anything Alleria had ever seen before: organic beings, with mysterious supernatural powers. They had at their grasp powers which could not be explained, but rivaled that of the strongest Toa. They were unstoppable.

 

But the power of the Uprising had yet to be revealed. Two weeks later, strange, hideous beasts began to appear, ranging from the size of a Matoran, to towering over the island itself. The only thing that kept the Uprising from destroying the island was the very thing that protected it: The Remnant. Built on the remains of the Accord and its policing force, The Remnant’s technological power matched that of the Uprising’s supernatural. They fought back, and they fought back hard, locking the island in a stalemate.

 

This is where your story begins. Will you take up arms with the Remnant, and fight off the Uprising? Will you stand by the Uprising, wielding supernatural powers to destroy the Accord once and for all? Or will you, the citizen, fight from the inside, and save your island from destruction?

 

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No more Wasteland? :(

 

If not, I'm quite interested in this, but things need to be expanded on further, it's rather confuzzling at the moment. You also get points docked for another war RPG. However you get extra points for a unique location.

 

I realize it's only a rough concept though, so I'm not going to go indepth and pick at every little thing.

 

 

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No, I really don't feel like expanding Wasteland. Feel free to do it yourself.

 

Anyways, yeah. I just started this about an hour ago. I basically just jotted down the idea that came to mind; plus, I'm kinda in a writer's block, too. But I'll flesh it out soon.

 

Feel free to give me ideas/suggestions. ;)

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Eehhh, I would, but I have a few ideas for #13 too.

 

Anyways I'd gladly offer some suggestions and things, just give me a secto re-read it...

 

As I mentioned before though, you're gonna' need a lot more explaining and expanding.

 

EDIT: Okay so after re-reading it I managed to understand things a bit better than before. But I found myself asking: What exactly is the Accord. In one way it sounds like a faction, another it sounds like an agreement. What ever happened to the Ztun and K'laric? And are they a different species? Or are they just two groups combined of multiple already existing species but with different beliefs? Why were they at war? I assume there's a reason for this Uprising group, perhaps you could expand on this. And these 'hideous beasts' which appeared,a re they a part of The Uprising? if so make that more clear.

 

The info on The Uprising itself is sufficient, and can be expanded upon later under the Factions section.

 

 

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This is very interesting. I trust that's not going to be the entire entry, though? =P

 

Anyhow, I was completely flabbergasted when you told me about this. The RPG Contest is every three months? For Tahu's sake, I thought it was every year. I must not have read the rules and overview properly... :glare:

 

This is a fascinating scenario for an RPG, though I wish you could've given detail about the timeline and the state of the rest of the universe. But that's just the introduction, right? I hope you give more details, especially on how those Uprising look and their supernatural powers, in the whole thing.

It's really brief so there's not actually much to comment on, but I can say that I will be looking into this RPG.

 

As for a unique, cool species.. well, if it's humanoid, then you could make it like an organic-mechanic cross, with a natural metallic shell that it sheds, and also you could make it be able to use its shed crust to forge into weapons and over-armor. You should make it elementally neutral but have control over things of nature, not technically elemental. Kind of like Glatorian, except cooler. You can make it have the ability to change its colour for camouflage. Or, if it's not humanoid, to shapeshift, but it can't take a humanoid form.

 

Yeah, my ideas are useless. :/

 

-Kagha

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