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Ok this may be explained some where in the bionicle story line but im a little rusty on the little details after my return from the four year dark ages But where were all the Toa that lived on Metru Nui during that war where Lihkan lead like a hundred or more toa to battle , Where were they when the Visorak came to metru nui or when Makuta took over it just seems like a ancient evil and a bunch of spiders infecting the largest city in the universe would signal some of the toa in other places to be like hey maybe we should go help out there . I guess that you could say that they were busy with the damage from Mata nui crashing but at least some had to go and check on Metru nui when all this was going on .
Besides the toa Hagah .
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Ic- Ry walks in slowly and tries to prop himself up on the bar but he is clearly close to passing out again, His arms shaking he falls to the ground cringing in pain he look in his pouch to find some tools. He then coughs .
A Any body got a wrench ?
He says in a low tone from the pain .
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That is what I was meaning (I don`t know why I did not put it in the post.) I was meaning more on a symbolic level then a out right level.
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OKAY SO
I SAT DOWN AND MADE THIS VIDEO IN COMMEMORATION OF THIS DISCOVERY
This is one of the most awesome videos I have ever seen I laughed all the way through it .
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Scene 7
The elevators fall for what seems like hours when really its was only a few minutes then out of nowhere they shoot out of the tubes they are in and crash in to liquid protodermas below .
Asa- [looks around the elevators controls and finds a communication device and she holds down the button for it ] Hello Tor can you hear me ?
Tor- [over the intercom ] This is tor I can read you Asa. Golis you there?
Golis-Read you loud and clear what about the Po-Matoran any body got him on the radar.
Asa-Ry can you hear me[ There is no answer ] Tor he isn't answering !
Tor-Don`t worry Asa he will be fine I just know it some how .
Meanwhile
Ry- [is being pushed to the roof of his elevator because he didn't get to put his seat belt on like the others ] ahhh!
[The elevator crashes down like the other only much further away having come out of a different tube and a wave washes up to a shore and the elevator opens up]
Ry-[stumbles out looking sick] I am never going to ride that again .[There is a loud splash behind him and a his] No it cant be .[ He stumbles back and runs in to the woods next to this beach .]
Hebira-[slithers on to the shore] hiss oh matoran ! don`t think that you can hide from me . I will hunt you down you pathetic little peace of metal.[He sees the tracks in the dark light of where they landed and follows them seeing the ruins of a large city .] Sssso this is where you will hide well not for long.
[He keeps looking for Ry in the ruins of the city ]
Ry-[Who is running for his life trips and falls over a long dead Rackshi ] Ahh.[Hebira hears the faint scream and looks in his direction ]oh [he breaths a sigh of releaf ] you are just a old rackshi armor i have seen some of those in the museum [He stands back up] Your not dangerous at all.
Hebira-but I am [He strikes at Ry and he is knocked in to the wall and tries to run but is bitten in the leg]
Ry-gah [he uses the rifle to shoot t Hebira but this was only able to distract him for a moment just enough time for Ry to run in to a large collosium like building ]
Hebira-you will feel my poison in your vain's matoran [He chases after him ]
Ry-runs in to a side path in the large area passing a huge statue and he get stops when he sees old weapons hanging on the walls.]The rifle didn't do squat but [he picks up a old sword the blade made of protosteel and still sharp as when it was first made ] this should break through his armor.
[Ry runs out to boldly face the large snake Makuta and stands his ground]
Hebira-[Laughs ] You challenge me with a ancient sword and nothing but your strength . You are with out a doubt the stupidest matoran I have ever seen but you wont live much longer to do anything else stupid .
[Hebira strikes at him but Ry dodges out of the way and runs behind one of the 7 huge statues in the arena .]
Ry-come and get me makuta .
[Hebira strikes at him again but Ry ducks behind the statues other leg then around it again and he jumps over Hebiras body who unbeknownst to the makuta is starting to be tied in a knot from the twist Ry made and eventually the knot is tight enough to where Hebira can no longer move but his head and tail .]
Hebira-Hiss you will pay for thisss .
Ry-No but I might for this He uses the sword to cut Hebira`s sharp tail off and Hebira Roars in pain and he uses his whole body to contract and crush the legs of the statue that then starts to fall .]
Ry- Wow [He runs trying to out run the falling statue and barely dose but as it lands the shock wave knocks him to the ground and he losses consciousness for only a few seconds but when he comes to Hebira is right above him about to strike.]
Hebira-Thissss iss for my tail [ He raises up and go to strike but a large bladed staff blocks the strike this staff being held by a large three legged being with yellow , silver and black armor with read eyes.
Being-Well well well it has been some time since I have seen a Matoran stand up to such a large threat , But where I normally would love to see how this ends , I must say this is a rather one sided fight so it is not interesting to me but what is interesting to me is the chance for me to fight a race of being that hasn't been seen for thousands of years .
Hebira- who do you think that you are creture you are between a Zodiac Makuta and his pray .
Being- I am the shadowed one leader of the dark hunters and one of the few powerful beings left in this forgotten land [The shadowed one hits hebira back with his spear and then he walks over and picks the makuta up] could it be that over the years the makuta have grown weak flee to your master snake and leave my lands .[he drops Hebira who then hisses at him and slithers off]
Ry-[is stunned from fear of the two beings duel]
TSO- I must admit Matoran you showed great battle prowess for one so small but I would suggest you follow me or some slithering beast may find you alone.
Ry-y your the shadowed one
TSO-Yes I have said that now follow me or I will feed you to that snake for making me lose my patience [Ry follows him]
Scene 8
[The other Matoran landed on a far off beach from Ry and have started looking in the city for him]
Golis-I`m sorry miss but I don`t think we have properly been introduced I am Golis Onu-Matoran and leader of the New metru guard .
Asa-[still worried about Ry her focus isn`t on Golis but she still remains nice] H hi I`m Asa a tour guide .
Golis-Nice to meet you .
Tor-Asa we will find Ry he has to be in this city some where.
Asa-This city Where is this city and if its night time where are all the stars I don't see any all I see are a few ancient light stones that still are active .
Golis-I`m not sure where we are but I know when we are on the surface or under ground but some how I feel like this is both.
Tor-Your both letting this place get to you its just a old city its nothing to worry about.
Asa-Just a old city Tor we came here on some old weird elevator things that only went down then we got launched in to a sea how do you explain that .
Tor-I cant but [ He hears the sound of wind moving and he hasn't heard that sound down here before so it alerts him to danger] Shuss get your weapons ready I think we have company
[Just then on one of the roof tops something about the size of a Matoran lands and it closes its wings and stairs down at them with green eyes as if sizing the matoran up.
To Be continued .
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Well the hype train is going to be going full speed after this haha . This is amazing news while I shall still remain slightly skeptical this new information is almost ike a hit to the face by a bohrok I mean come on this does everything but out right say its confirmed.
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I say the Makuta are the demons of the bionicle universe because of a few reasons .
1- There are multiple parallels between Teridax and Lucifer including trying to over throw Mata nui who in this story is basically God .
2-The makuta where originally good they where created to make rahi in the MU but then turnedon Mata nui like Lucifer and his angels who then became demons.
3-They have no physical form. Both the makuta and demons are stuck to having to posses something to have a physical form the makuta just need a robot body or armor that can contain the antidermis.
4-In the end they always lose. No mater what they are akuta or demon in teh end they will lose because as we all know Good will always prevail over evil in the end .
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Ic- Ry [Coast line to the Tidepool inn]
He latter washes ashore and wakes up . He then looks around seeing Ga-Koro off in the distance he tries to get there Aching from his crash he eventually finds his way to the tide pool in and he stumbles in trying to find help.
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OOC- This is my first post so if this is wrong you can delete it mods.
IC- A tattered Po-Matoran named Ry floats along the sea with shards of wood and metal stuck in his armor as if from a boat crash and his almost dead body bumps in to the side of the boat .
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Name- Ry
Species- Po-Matoran
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
gender- Male
Weapons- Ry owns a Bow forged from Protosteel making it have a extremely strong draw strength and when used with different arrows that he has can puncture different things like armor flesh or even walls .He also carries a protosteel knife for close up combat .
Weaknesses- Besides the normal weaknesses of being a Matoren Ry also has a wound on his right shoulder that acts up from time to time and causes him severe pain if hit by anything even if armor is protecting it . Ry can be rather dense at times and dose not know when to quit this some times making him end up on the losing end of a fight.
Alignment - Good
History- Ry Washed up on the shores of Ga-Wahi most likely after a boating incident off shore but during the ordeal he some how lost his memory and no longer remembers where he came from but he does remember his skills .
Personality and traits- Ry is very loyal to his friends and will do his best to protect them when ever possible .He is brilliant with machinery and can fix most things that are broken if he has the parts and the tools . He is a tactical fighter and will look for a weakness in a enemy before he attacks .
Name- Asa
Species- Ga-Matoran
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
gender- Female
Weapons-Asa is not much of a fighter but when she does fight she relies on a form of martial arts that she learned from a Ta-Matoran friend of hers .
Weaknesses- Like all Matoran Asa is not very powerful physically but she also has a tendency to rely on othersand there for is not used to situations where she is depended on . She also is very trusting in people some times to trusting .
Alignment-Good
History- Asa is a rather normal Ga-matoran nothing to much to say but she is a amazing doctor having many ways to heal people whether it be herbs, medicine or surgery she knows what to do . She is best friends with Ry and met him when he saved her from a rahi attack in the desert . She now makes rounds of Mata-Nui doing what she can to help people . at the moment she is in Po-Koro doing some studies of the native rahi .
Personality- Asa is a very curious Matoran and is all ways looking for ways to improve medical services on the island including studying plants Rahi and even stones mined from Onu-Koro to use as new medicines . She is trusting of most of the people she meets unless they are out right evil and even then she believes that there is good in everyone if you look deep enough .
Name-Otana
Species- Le-Matoran
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Gender-Male
Weapons- Otana only has two main weapons and they are blades attached to his arms that he uses for hit and run tactics when in conjunction with his other tool.his wingpack is a glider built by Ry to allow him to glide for short times if he jumps off of a tall building he also could fly if a toa of air was able to use their powers to keep him up .The wing pack only really allows him to fall with stile it is not true flight unless powered by a outside force .
Weaknesses- Otana is very vulnerable in flight due to having no brakes. Otana is aso very reckless and will charge in to a fight with out thinking it though that added to him being a matoran makes him rather weak .
Alignment-Good
History- Otana is one of Ry`s older friends and would help him test small stuff he would make a long time ago . He now spends his free time flying through Le-Koro with his wing pack and climbing the trees with the blades on his arms . When not flying he is in his hut practicing music on his flute .
Personality- Otana is a quick thinker and some times thinks before he speaks he has a tendency to make people mad from what he says but he really dosnt mean it and is a loyal friend till the end. He speaks the tree-speech dialect like most Le-Matoran .
Name-Tor
Species - Ta-Matoran
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Gender-Male
weapons- Tor has a few weapons he forged two swords a few throwing knives and along with the hammer he uses to make weapon. He also is a trained fighter and can out match some toa in fighting skill .
Weaknesses- Even with Tor`s skills he is still a matoran and there for very weak when it comes to strength so to make up for that he usually relies on quick and evasive movements . He also can not swim so he tries his best to stay away from water .
Alignment-Good
History-Tor is a professional blacksmith and can make numeras types of weapons he built a forge that can quickly be picked up and moved from place to place .He met Ry and Asa in Po-Koro and they formed a small team to fight a deranged kini-ra. After that they parted ways and Tor moved his forge back to Ta-Koro where he now takes orders for fixing weapons as well as making new ones .
Personality - Tor is a born leader but can have a hot head at times . He would rather be at his forge making a new sword but if he is needed for a battle he will not hold back . He hates water and has only been in Ga-koro once or twice because of that fact.
Name-Kedamor
Species-Toa of sonics.
Kedamor by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Gender-Male
Appearance-While Kedamor may look very machenical He only looks this way because he uses spare parts of machines he finds and attaches them to his armor . He has one blue Eye and one Yellow eye no one not even Kedamor himself knows exactly why.
Kanohi Mask- Kedemore wears the Kanohi Tryna in a custom shape he made .
Powers- Kedamor Is a master of the Element of Sound if he has had the time to study materiel he can learn the exact frequency at witch to make a sound that could shatter it but this ability normally takes years or even decaded to properly learn a materiels make up for such a use. He can use most of the powers of other toa of Sonics and has learned to tone some sounds completely out except the voices in his head , He cant do anything about them .
Weapons- Kedamore Mainly uses a Blade on his left arm that he has in place of his hand that he lost long ago . The blade is razor sharp and can be used like other toa tools to focus his elemental energy.
Weaknesses- Due to the way his armor is designed He is extremely valnurable to Magnetic attacks . He is also like all Toa of sonic weak to loud noises due to his heightened since of hearing .
Alignment-Depends on how he is feeling that day.
History-No one knows hi exact history Every time he is asked his story changes but his most recent history is that he was discovered in a abandoned mine shaft blocked off from Onu-Wahi in a strange Container berried in the wall.
Personality- Kedamor suffers from split personality disorder and seems to also have a extreme case of post traumatic stress and has on occasion stated that he hears voices .This makes him a rather unstable Toa to be around and on many occasions has turned from helping a group to being the most dangerous person around . It is best to try not to tick him off.
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Hebira is The Zodiac Makuta of the Snake When he was freed from his gem like prison he possessed the body of a near by snake rahi and turned it in to his new form .
Personality - Hebira is a calculating and sneaky Makuta that will chase his pray down to the darkest depths . If he sets his mind on something it will take death to stop him . He is commanly pared the his brother Zodiac Makuta shura mostly as a joke from the other Makuta on how snakes eat rats .
He has a large dent in his face armor due to a blast from the Matoran Golis`s bazooka weapon .
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
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Scene 6
[ Just then a creature burst from the shadows this time it is a large rat looing rahi and it snarles at them ]
Asa- [ she screams and shoots at the rahi but the plasma bolts just bounce off ]
Ry-[Runs over and grabs a old broom]
Rat-[ Looks at the broom] Really matoaran I know you are week but a broom really .
Ry-Huh?
Rat-You face The makuta Shura with a broom your either brave or stupid one of the two .
Ry- your a Makuta?
Shura-Not just any Makuta I am the Zodiac Makuta of the Rat my name is Shura and you my little matoran will make a great test subject for me and my brothers.
Ry-uh I don`t think so [ he takes the broom and rams the stick end of it in to the Rat Makuta`s eye and it roars in pain this distraction allows them to be able to get away in time before it recovers ]
[ As they are running back from where they came they run in to Tor and the Onu matoren]
Ry-Tor we need to leave there is a makuta down here with us I thin we passed another route on the way down here but we need to go .
Tor-Agreed there is also a huge snake rahi down here So we cant go that way by the way this is Golis he is a ember of my old special task force .
Ry-no time for greetings right now lets get out of here .
[The run down the path they first came in and with Asa`s light they see a path they missed when they urn down it they come to a chamber with six tubes that look like elevator in the room .]
Asa-Dead end.
Ry-I wish you didn`t say that .
Golis-Hmm these look like elevators could they be a way out ?
Tor- [he inspects them] this is the top of the chute they only go down but htese things are so old who knows how long they have been here or if they still .
[They hear a loud crashing and hissing]
Asa- We don`t have time to decide .
Ry-Fine its worth a shot everyone get in one of the elevators ill start the activation process .
Asa-But you wont be able to activate the final elevator , you will be stuck.
Ry-I`ll figure out a way to get back to you I promise .
Asa-You better !
Ry-[smiles ] Now get in quick they are getting closer !
[The two creatures can be heard only a few yards away and Asa , Tor and Golis get in the elevators ]
Tor-Ry here take this you will need it .[ He tosses the plasma rifle and a few ammo clips to Ry and he catches it ]
Ry-Thanks Tor you watch out for Asa for me alright .
Tor-Will do .
Ry- ok hang on this could get bumpy [he whispers to him self] Please work .
[Ry activated the control console and the systems in the elevators activate and then the doors close but as they do Asa sees the snake rahi and the Rat Makuta come around the corner]
Asa-[Just as the door closes] Ry look out !
[The doors close and the elevators shoot strait down like rockets leaving Ry alone with the two huge creatures.]
Shura-[He sneaks up to Ry who is now aiming the Rifle at the two] well brother look at that the little fellow has a weapon how cute.
Snake-Better not get to close brother You don`t want to lose your other eye .
Shura-[growls at the snake ]
Ry-So your both Makuta ?
Snake-Yes matoren You did more then just free a single Makuta you freed 13 of us you and your little friend Idure .
Shura-Your being rude brother it is not right to kill something with out it first knowing your name .
Snake-Ah yesssss you are correct brother well matoren I am Hebira Zodiak Makuta of the snake .
Ry-I don`t really care but I got to be going so bye .
Hebira- Your not going anywhere .[He go`s to strike Ry but Ry jumps pout of the way and he runs in to one of the open elevators and uses the rifle to shoot the lever that activates them in doing so the door to his elevator Closes and he is launched down in to the tube .
Shura-You let him get away Iduran will not be pleased .
Hebira-Silence Shura or shall I remind you which of us is higher on the food chain .
Shura-We must go and tell Iduran.
Hebira-You go and tell him I`m going to follow those matoran .
Shura- Good luck brother[He leaves as Hebira slithers down one of the open tubes ] -
Shura is the Zodiac Makuta of the rat after being freed from his gem like prison his spirit inhabited the body of a nearby rat rahi and mutated it in to a form worthy for him.
Personality
Shura is a makuta with a dark and twisted wit as well as a very aggresive side when provoked . He is curious of new things and will study them violently if the need be and he is one of the most creative of the Zodiac Makuta.
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on FlickrShura is one of the main villains in the Epic named The Return of The Toa.
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Eh-hehhehheh.
Not quite - though an interesting take on it.
Interesting so your not going that rout well congratulations you have now peeked my interest since it isn't going that way .
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The story is great so far I found it cool how you described the feeling of being turned in to a toa . I find all these fanfictions amazing some take place in the past and some like yours and mind take place in the future of bionicle but where as mine is in the future of the stranded story and has no toa in it , your is the opposite and seems to be in a world where teridax won and there is a over flow of new toa .
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It just go`s to show you how powerful of a impact Bionicle had on people that this site could stay this long even after its original subject matter stopped . I for one was one here long ago with a different user name that has been lost to me but I came back from what you could say was my dark ages and I`m happy that This site is still here . You could say like Sumiki said about this being a persons home town , Well I have come home like the story of the prodigal son in the bible . And I hope to see this site continue to live on i mean after all to make new adventures and create new legends is the way of the Bionicle .
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Scene 5
[The three Matoren stumble through the catacombs searching for a way to safety but can`t hardly see to walk much less to get out ]
Tor-What made you head this way Ry we cant even see down here.
Ry- I don`t know maybe because the only other way would be to go WHERE THE MAKUTA IS.
Asa-Ry are you alright ?
Ry-[He looks down ] I`m sorry Tor I`m just a little on edge with all that`s going on . [He looks to Asa and she is clearly the most shaken of the group ] Asa we will get out of here safe I know.
Asa-I`m not worried about us its the other matoren and Igori . The city was empty like something took them all but who could do that ?
Ry-I don`t know but we didn't see any bodies Asa so that means that they are still alive .
Asa-Yea I guess your right hey I think I have something to help us .
[she looks in her bag and pulls out a flash stone and turns it on allowing them to see in the catacombs]
Ry-Great Asa remind me never to make fun of you caring everything in the bag of yours.
Asa-Oh I will remind you . [she smiles for the first time since all this started ]
Ry-There is that smile that I love to see . Lets keep going .
[They keep walking and eventually come to a cross roads ]
Asa- Where do we go now ?
Ry-hmm [ he reads the signs showing where each path leads . One says food storage the other says weapons storage]
Tor- We should head to the weapons storage , I cant be the only one fighting here and besides I only have a plasma pistol .
Ry- I think we should get some food who knows how long it will be before we can get some food again.
Tor- Will food stop a Makuta no.
Ry-nether will a matoren using a gun a makuta can only be beat by a toa.
Tor- Fine then we let Asa decide where we go.
Asa-Well we need both but it would be dangerous for us to split up.
Tor-No it wont be here [he hands Asa the plasma pistol] I`ll go get some more weapons you go get the food.
Ry-But with out the gun you cant defend your self.
Tor- I`m trained in more combat ways then just a plasma pistol I`ll be fine you two need it more then I do .
Asa-Be careful .
Tor-That isn't really my stile [ He runs down the path to the weapons chamber .]
Ry-Sure is confident isn't he.
Asa-yea but he sure is nice.
Ry-[Feeling a little jealous from her saying that] he's reckless is what he is but lets go .
[They head off to the food storage ]
Asa-Ry how is your shoulder ?
Ry-Its fine it jut hurts every now and then .
Asa- Let me see it . [she stops him and takes the bandage off and the wound is still bleeding slightly ] Sit down I`m going to try and heal you .
Ry-We don`t have the time.
Asa-You will pass out if I don`t do something so sit down or I will sit you down .
Ry-Fine[ He sits down]
Asa-Good now I`m going to have to take some of your armor off .
Ry-What?
Asa-Oh don`t worry its not like I haven't seen a shirtless matoren before .
Ry-Fine [he removes his chest and shoulder armor so she can start to heal him]
Asa-here go's it may sting at first . [she pulls a few things out of her bag and rubs them on his wound and the bleeding stops she then stitches up the wound ] How's that .
Ry-Its better thanks [he puts his armor back on and they continue on their way.]
Meanwhile
[Tor arrives in the weapons wall]
Tor-oh yes here we are [He feels around for a light switch and finds one for that area ] please let the power work here. [He turns it on and there are loads of weapons hanging on walls and laying on tables along with ammo and a old exo toa armor that is rusted and broken in the back] that's what I`m talking about .
[He walks over to a table and picks up a plasma rifle ] yep this will be of use to us [ he puts its strap around his back and then grabs a few more pistols with ammo for each gun and a few holsters. Then he grabs a few grenades ] There that should do .
[Just then in another room something falls ]
Tor-[Gets his rifle ready and walks over to the room but just as he gets to the door way a huge snake Rahi burst out of it slamming him against a wall it then wraps around him.
Tor-Ok I didn't see that coming [he tries to pull out one of the guns but the snake knocks it away ]
Snake-Foolish matoren your puny weapons will not destroy me or my 12 brothers .
[a voice calls out from behind the snake]
Voice-No but they sure will leave a dent [ The snake turns around and just as he does a large blast of energy hits it right in the face knocking it out and it unwraps Tor.]
Tor-What the heck was that .
[A Onu-Matoran Runs to him and helps him up after he puts his bazooka back on his back]
Onu-Matoran-That was a close one I say we get moving before he decides to wake back up .
Tor-I`m all for that idea.
[The two Matoren run out]
Meanwhile
[Ry and Asa Arives at the Food storage ]
Asa-I`ll get the Drinks you get the food.
Ry-yea [He heads over to the food side and starts getting provisions for the journey to where ever it is that they are going] Do you like Dikapi wings and Kena-Ra meat ?
Asa- Sure you can get them but be sure to get some green foods to . [she grabs the water for the trip but when she removes one of the bottles She screams because two red Eyes are staring back at her then Ry runs over to help her as a New Rahi burst out from the storage unit .]
To be continued .
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Its a very interesting story so far I like the fact of it being through the eyes of a matoren from what i can guess is at the moment in the story line where the Toa Metru are going around collecting the kanohi disk . Interesting to note your story takes place in the past of bionicle where as mine takes place in the far future of the story , I just though that was a cool counter partish thing . great job I cant wait to see more .
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Hello everyone this thread is to show off mocs for my epic The Return of the toa .
After reading over the rules I noticed a no unofficial contest so forget the whole contest part of this thread sorry about that .
Ry
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on FlickrAsa
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on FlickrTor
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on FlickrIdure
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
Return of the Toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on FlickrSo there they are fill free to tell me what you Think and if you want you could say how I could improve them .
here is new character yet to be named .
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
return of the toa mocs by The MegazordMan, on Flickr
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What Really annoys me is the fact that Even when we have female characters they don`t really look female ( Roodaka Excluded for obvious reasons ) Toa wise I think Nokama metru looked the most female compared to the other toa in her team due to her mask it was smooth and feminine looking(well as much as it could being a kanohi mask ) but figures like gali mystika good grief at first i though it was a male toa of some other element because it dose not look like a female at all .
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Scene 3
Asa- [she helps Ry up ] Idure Why are you doing this ?
Idure- [his red eyes turn to her ] I am no longer just Idure .
Ry-Then what are you .
Idure- [his voice changes into more of a growl ] I am Makuta Iduran
Ry- M M Makuta ?
Iduran- Good bye Ry [ he raises his hand and a energy orb forms in it , but just as He is about to unleash the attack he is shot 4 times once in the chest once in the shoulder once in the leg and once right in the center of his mask breaking his kanohi showing a mutated face underneath and he just turns to the shooter who is a Ta-Matoren named Tor] You will pay for that matoren
Ry- Tor look out .
[Just then Iduran shoots a blast of energy at Tor but he dodges it by doing a barrel roll out of the way and he shoots Iduran again this time using a charge shot he was able to knock him back]
Tor- Asa get Ry out of here ill hold him off till your safe .
Ry- No Tor your in danger to we all are he is a Makuta
Tor- Stop joking around and get out of here .
Asa-You better be right behind us !
Tor- will do now go ! [ Asa runs out with Ry and as soon as they are out they hear a explosion ]
Ry- Tor no !
Tor- [ rolls out of the room slamming in to the wall ] That is going to leave a mark [ he stands up dodging a energy blast and runs to them ] Its time to leave now !
[ They run out of the now evacuated laboratory and Iduran burst out of the building in the sky]
Iduren- Let This city know that THE MAKUTA HAS RETURNED [ He Fly`s off out of the city ]
Tor-Asa can you heal Ry?
Asa-[ is shaking from the whole ordeal ] No not in the condition I am in I cant focus .
Ry- we need to tell the Turaga council .
Tor- Yea and they will be able to heal you lets get going (he tears a peace of cloth off of Ry`s lab coat and makes a bandage for him and they head to the center of the city, not noticing twelve different Rahi tracks leading from the lab .]
Scene 4
Tor-Ry what the heck was that back there ?
Ry-I`m not sure Idure let the generator explode and then the Energy stone we found did this crazy light show and he merged it with his heart stone turning him in to that thing.
Asa-Why would Idure do that he was so nice.
Ry- I`m not sure but it seems to have had something to do with that stone because ever since he found it on that dig he changed.
Tor-What do you mean ?
Ry- He started to stay at the lab longer working on the generator or studying the stone , He became more distant and his temper got crazier .
Asa-yea I think I remember him screaming at one of the other tour guides one time for interrupting his work.
Ry-It`s like the stone was getting inside his head or something .
Tor- He said that the Makuta has returned can that be true ?
Asa- It can`t be true the makuta is a myth he just found some kind of ancient energy source and took on the persona of a Makuta for shock value .
Ry-who knows at the moment we don`t know enough to even guess at what Idure has done but what we do know is that it isn't good .
Tor- [ Looks around ] uh is it just me or is it rather dead out here ?
[ They look around and the city is empty.]
Asa- Guys do you feel that ? [The ground shakes and then from around a building corner a Huge dragon Rahi comes around and roars when it sees them.]
Ry-Wow big boy .
Dragon-The Matoren shall be consumed .
Tor-Did that Rahi just talk? [ The dragon charges at them .]
Ry-We can try to figure that out latter run [ They run off and the dragon starts to chase them until they run in to the council building that is just as deserted as the other buildings ] This is not good .
[They walk in to the council chamber and see Iduran holding up one of the Turaga by his throat and ]
Asa- No [ Ry puts his hand over her mouth ]
Ry-We cant let him hear us or we would be dead .
Iduran- you fool Turaga you are no toa any more how did you hope to fight me .
Turaga- You will not win Makuta the Toa will return to defeat you.
Iduran-fool with you dies the legacy of the Toa .[ he uses his dark powers to make a pulse of dark energy go through the turaga , shattering its heart stone . He then tosses the body aside .] Come out Matoren I know you are there .
Ry- [Whispers] Don`t say anything .
Iduran- Fine then I shall burry you in the ruins of this building . [ He fly`s out and the building gets pelted with energy blast from multiple locations and it starts to crumble .]
Tor-we need to get out of here the city isn`t safe .
Ry- yea but where do we go . [Just then he hears a voice in his head .]
Voice-catacombs .
Ry-I think we need to go to the catacombs its safe from the destruction and its a great hiding spot.
Asa- Lead the way . [ They head to the catacombs. ]
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I think it's a nice story, I´m sure you'll reveal more of what happened in the last act in future chapters so there is still much to discover, I do recommend you to develop a little more your character Idure, you should show a bit more of his motivation towards what he has decided to do so that we can understand him better.
I will most certainly do so mostly in flash backs but also with conversations between him and other characters .
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Hello everyone this is my first epic The Return of the Toa.
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This may be a little different from most epics due to my writing style . It will be Written mainly in a script format so when you read it each character`s name will be on the left side like this.
Character 1 - Hello.
Character 2- Oh hello there .
If something is written with in these [] it means that it is a action done by the stated character . Anyway now that the rules for the series are over here is the series prolog .
Prolog.
Narrator-wellcome my friends we gather again to hear the legends of the Toa . Long ago a mighty battle was fought here on SpheresMagna between the evil makuta and the mighty Mata Nui . Their battle was a hard one and many died in the battle but eventually with the Help of the Toa tahu and the other Toa of the world were able to weaken the makuta where Mata nui could destroy is body and burry it beneath the world . That was many thousands of years ago and since then the Toa eventually completed their destinies and became Turaga . before long the Toa had all but died out and eventually there legend slipped in to myth . The Turaga tried to keep the legends of the toa alive but they could not eventually the matoren of spheresmagna just thought of them as stories meant for a nice night by the fire , But soon three matoren would soon find that the legends where true .
ACT 1
SCENE 1
[Ry a po-Matoren walks out of his condo in New Metru Nui and watches the ships fly past and then sits down on his patio sighing as a Ga-Matoren named Asa walks out to meet him ]
Asa- Ry are you alright ? You never come out here and just sit unless something is wrong .
Ry- I`m fine Asa , I have just been thinking what it would have been like back in the days of the great war .
Asa -you mean that old fairy tell we learned when we were younger ? Come on would you really want to live in a time of terror like that I mean if the story is true at all.
Ry- You don`t believe it?
Asa- I think a big war did happen long ago but I doubt it had a bunch of giant robots fighting around , and come on a ancient all knowing being that used his last ounce of power to bring life back to this planet that's a little far fetched don`t you think?
Ry- You may be right but wouldn't it be fun to be a Toa , you know running around saving the day and all that .
Asa- I am fine where I am you have always been the more adventures type . Now hurry up and get ready to go or we will be late for work .
Ry- Oh yea I almost forgot thanks for reminding me .
[ The two matoren get ready to go and they head to the Kardi Labs ]
Scene 2
[Ry and Asa walk in the doors of the facility .]
Ry-I got to head to the lab we are getting really close to a break through in a new energy source .
Asa- Great well while you are creating that I`m stuck on tour duty so see you around .
Ry- Bye.
[ They separate and head there own ways , Ry walking to his laboratory where there is a ko- Matoren sitting at a desk studying a strange green ad glowing stone ]
Ry- Any news on the rock Idure?
Idure- Its still emitting the energy and once we get the last few parts in place on the generator we can see if it is possible to control the energy .
Ry-good I`ll go get to work on that .
[ Ry picks up some tools and heads to a room with a large machine in it and he starts to work on the machine ]
Idure-[under his breath as he picks up the green glowing stone ] you will grant untold power I know it but I cant let that glorified mechanic use you for his plan no you will be mine .
Mean while
Asa- Hello I am Asa I`ll be your tour guide today [points to a glass wall that has matoren and Igori scientist testing and cataloging 12 different Rahi breeds ] Here at Kardi Labs we do many different test from breeding new rahi to new forms of energy and even the occasional mech suits . [ One of the young Igori in the tour group holds up his hand] Yes?
Igori- do you have any of the old bohrok A friend of mine said that you have a bunch in your basement .
Asa-[laughs slightly] no we do not the bohrok are old robots that no longer serve any use but that's a history lesson not for here . Any more Questions ?
Meanwhile
[Ry completes the machine ]
Ry-There done ok bring the stone everything is ready .
Idure-[brings the stone in and places it in the center of the machine and it activates as Ry sits down at a control panel ] Is it working?
Ry- All systems are operational I just need to activate the barrier or the energy may be released all at once and who knows that could happen if it does that .
Idure-[ Pulls out a plasma gun and aims it at Ry] You will do no such thing I know what will happen and I want it to happen .
Ry- Idure are you insane it could cause a massive explosion .
Idure-Maybe I am [ Idure shoots Ry in the shoulder and it knocks him away from the controls where he cant activate the barrier . The machine then starts to shake ]
Ry- Idure don`t do this .
Idure-Its to late now the power will be mine .
[ Just then the Machine explodes ]
Meanwhile
Asa- And that is why we don`t allow vorox to work here .[ She hears the explosion and knows its from Ry`s lab.] Ry !! everyone please evacuate the lab for the moment do not worry it was most likely just a bad energy cell but its better safe then sorry .[ The tour group runs off as Asa Runs to the lab .] Ry ! Ry ! Are you in here ?
Ry-Asa I`m in here. [she runs to him and picks him up]
Asa- Oh my gosh you have been shot .
Ry-That's not the worst of it look [Points at the machine and Asa looks over to see Idure in front of the stone ]
Idure-Yes I feel it coming The power of the stone is free and its mine !
[ Just then twelve green beams of black energy shoot out of the stone and fly around the room as if they are alive and they fly in to the vents ]
Ry-That can`t be good.
Asa-That looks worse, look!
[ Idure picks up the stone as a 13th beam of energy fly`s out and grabs his heart stone and Idure merges the stone with his heart stone and turns around his Eyes having turned red and black Crack like line forming on his mask and body .]
Ry-I think we have a major problem .
To be continued .
Where were the other Toa of Metru Nui.
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Ah well it just seemed to me that Lhikan would have gotten back up from some of the toa with free time when his team started to dwindle but I do see your point .