Peach 00

 

 

me speaking my views is apparently wrong and exercising my right to free speech isn't allowed

 

If your views are that homosexuality or gender equality are wrong, then yes, your speaking of your views is wrong and not allowed.

 

And you don't have a right to free speech on BZPower.

 

 

...Those are not my views at all, no. Apparently you've placed me into a group of prejudice extremists as opposed to a group of rational and understanding people. I'm not necessarily on either side of the argument - I believe that everybody has a right to live their life the way they see fit, however they can in order to feel comfortable, regardless of what other people think, no matter their race or orientation or religion. Should I have a problem with their lifestyle (which I never would, but hypothetically speaking), that's my problem, not theirs.

 

The people that are the prejudice extremists don't have a right to free speech or the calm rational people don't have a right to free speech? Either way, there's a chance of discrimination, any way you slice it. I don't see how I have been prejudice in any way - you have gone out of your way to put me into the group that you believe was hateful in the blog war that occurred. Because I happen to disagree with your views, you put me into that group.

 

Truth of the matter is, I don't belong in any 'group'. I stand by myself by simply being who I am. If you think I'm mean and hateful and cruel for being me, just like the group your defending is, you think that. You know why? Because I know I'm not, and that's all that counts. I think that everybody has a right to their lifestyle, no matter what people think. Everybody has a right to live their lives the way they see fit, and somehow by believing that, I'm being prejudice?

 

If you want the honest truth, you're the one being discriminatory and prejudice, because I'm living my life the way I see fit, just like the people your defending, and by believing in equality and just about everything you're calling me out on not believing in, I'm a mean and hateful person. I will say it again: Everybody has a right to live their life the way they see fit. I don't care who you are or what your background is, because I don't judge people by their orientation or religion.

 

I'm going to leave it at this. I've argued with you in the past, DV, and I've found that we disagree on everything we've ever discussed. There's no point in trying to make amends, and I know it is obviously wrong to even attempt to argue with a staff member as it is. I know I've crossed the line one time too many, and I apologize for that, but unfortunately I don't think that is enough.

 

I think this has taught me to bite my tongue. But I simply felt that before my tongue turns black and blue that maybe I should state my final thoughts on the issue. Otherwise, case closed - you can continue to argue, but I don't care anymore. What I've found from all arguments that have ever occurred on this site is that neither side is ever willing to listen. For once, I'd like to see the people here open up their ears instead of their mouths, and unfortunately I'm an example of that.

@ Tilius: No point in arguing about it. I have my views, you have yours. Unfortunately, you and a few other hundred feel the need to state your views on a kids' site. What does that make you, some hero? Do you think you're going to get a gold star? No. Neither am I. I don't expect it, because I'm simply stating my views. Just like you are. We'll disagree constantly and we'll get no where, and that's the point. And when it gets to that point, that's where we just forget about it because we know we'll never agree.

 

Also, it's not like I'm being prejudice or anything like that in any way. I have no problem with a person's race or orientation or whatever. You can be who you are, and I really have no problem with it. It just gets to a point where, when I have no problem with that, people think that deep down I really hate them or something when I don't and decide to antagonize me for apparently being prejudice when I really am not. (...Backwards logic much? Seriously, that's how some people react to me... =/)

 

But that all aside, to me, from what I see, me speaking my views is apparently wrong and exercising my right to free speech isn't allowed. And even if it is, I just become ostracized by the staff and all the members from the site for being who I am just like everybody else is.

 

But hey, look. Tilius, I know we'll never reach an agreement. You know my views, I know yours. My thoughts? Let's move on. We shouldn't forget it, but we can just move on and learn. Perhaps you've already learned before, and it's my time to learn. It's hard to say. Anyhow, maybe we can bury the hatchet, I don't know. I wouldn't mind moving on, and I already regret bringing this back up, since it had finally settled down, so perhaps you can forgive me for that. I apologize for being rude, and I hope you can forgive me. =)

 

(Also, kids are indeed smart, depending on the age. Some are incredibly ignorant, however. Take me, for example, haha. I'm twelve, so maybe that will explain why I have no self-restraint from keeping my mouth shut. =P And, I wrote those comments at around eight this morning, just after I woke up, which probably wasn't the wisest move on my part...)

Latest war?

 

We say that this is a kid's site. It is, no matter what. There are plenty of kids here, and just because they aren't active here very often here, doesn't mean they can discuss the topic. Everybody says, "well everybody here is eighteen or older or somewhere in their teens." Just because you people hear things like this at high school and public school, doesn't, again, mean it can be discussed here.

 

What more can I say? This is a site full of mostly self-absorbed teenagers. The minority here are the kids, and maybe, just maybe, we ought to think a little bit more about the kids here. They're here, and they're not smart. They'll go and look at topics and blog posts about those subjects because they don't know any better. You'll say, "well they shouldn't look at it." My aforementioned thoughts should just about sum up my answer.

 

That all aside, it's just a pointless subject to beat to death. I'll close with this: What can you possibly prove here, of all places a kids' site, by stating your views on controversial subjects that are forbidden here?

I personally don't know.

 

Over the years, I've found that this place has a very broad dark side, making it rather unappealing in most cases. This dark side spreads to the behavior of the members, the staff - anybody. It makes me less and less eager to come back. Look at the latest war. That's an example of something that would make me less eager to come.

 

This is a kids' site, people. What do you prove by discussing those topics here, of all places? Maybe consider that the kids don't fully aware what was discussed this latest war, and I doubt that their parents would like it if their kids heard about it on a website full of self-absorbed teenagers. Some people have traditional families in which those topics aren't discussed so openly, and in families like this, those topics are explained by the parents to the children.

 

That aside (seeing as I wouldn't like to get off topic or start a whole other war entirely...), that's just one of those things that sets me off and makes me not want to come here. We don't need to discuss politics and religion or anything controversial here. It's stated very clearly in the rules. Certainly, I can't deny that I've talked about politics here in a very open mannerism but a year ago, but I couldn't help it. It's human nature. But sometimes it just can't be helped.

 

But still. The presence of my friends keeps me here. I would trade e-mails with them in a heartbeat, but I don't use e-mail that much, and I prefer instant messaging or a personal messenger like the one here. I will probably trade e-mails with them now, since I don't see contacting with them over IM. But anyhow, the only other thing that keeps me here is the Library. I love to post my writings here and share them with the people I know to get their personal opinion. But I've lost most of my reviewers. So now what do I have to keep me here?

 

Nothing. It's simply a distraction from school. Not to say that I'm leaving now. It's just that I probably won't frequent the place much, now that's been concluded. But I've dragged on for ages now to say something so simple. So again...I personally don't know.

Happy birthday! Though it's a little late, I hope you don't mind. ^^

The Henessey Venom is a beautiful car. I remember reading an article on it - it was a joke that was passed around between the designers, since one of them said, "Wouldn't it be funny to put a Lotus body with one of our engines?" Weeks later, it became a reality. I must say, the result is fantastic, and I saw a roadster/convertible version of it.

 

The Lamborghini Aventador is perhaps my second favorite car. Aggresion and beauty have met, and they've found that they are a perfect match when Lamborghini introduces them to one another. =P

 

And I'm surprised nobody has mentioned this car: The McLaren MP4-12C. (I believe that is the proper way it is written, if not, forgive me.) It's sleek design is an exotic beauty unmatched by the 458 Italia. It's one of the few car companies, like Lamborghini, that can pull off orange paint on a car.

 

Perhaps I'm getting a little overdescriptive, but cars such as these have a passionate, elegant look to them. I get a little carried away when I begin to describe them...

Granted, but you end up eating too many cookies to the point that you become overweight (yep, had to use the politically correct term before somebody got on my case) and are unable to manuever towards the cookie jar that spawns your infinite cookie supply.

 

I wish I could play the old Nintendo SNES games.

Lady Kopaka. I must say, those were two awesome days. ^^

1000 block high structures? Awesome. Why did I never see that modification before?As for saddles, you can find them as uncommon loot in chests in dungeons, abandoned mineshafts, strongholds and blacksmiths in villages.Dunno if the Xbox is as up to date as the PC version but you can ride and control pigs with saddles and carrots on sticks (fishing rod + carrot). Carrots are used to breed pigs and are found in villages or as rare drops from zombies.If its not as updated as the pc version, wheat is used to breed pigs.Also, one of the servers I visit, when an admin teleported me miles away all my animals despawned so he spawned some more, but he got a biiit carried away with the chickens... Its like an ocean...

 

Thanks for the update. There are no carrots on the 360, or at least not yet. I think they planned on updating again soon, though. And I am also unfamiliar with dungeons, although very familiar with strongholds and mineshafts. I am also unfamiliar with blacksmiths in villages...? I haven't been playing the game that long, so this is probably me just being ignorant. =P

 

FYI, the Xbox is updated to having sprinting capabilities, rotten flesh, food bar, et cetera. I am not sure what specific update this is, but that's what it has.

 

Also, regarding chickens: I've had it worse. A friend of mine and I were throwing eggs at each other, so we decided that we ought to build a huge pen and put some chickens in there (or at least I did, she continued to throw eggs at me). I now have maybe 50+ chickens in there, and they are continuously trying to escape and fly around, lol. I'm afraid to see the coagulation of eggs that have been hatched there by the chickens... o_o

 

And speaking of tall structures and whatnot, I ended building my own nightclub with an underground floor and a huge upper floor with glass walls and ceiling. I also have a dance floor made up of diamond blocks, lapis lazuli, and all forms of colored wool, including a disco ball above. So awesome. =D

This game is incredibly addictive. I played five hours straight just to make a Nether portal and get an achievement on Xbox. I might have died ten times, and lost the majority of my tools several times, but I got it. =P Also, anybody know where you can find a saddle? I know you can't make them, but I was curious to know if you can obtain them by any means in the tutorial on Xbox.

So many great ones...I also love these other ones:"We're making popcorn with lasers," Already has been mentioned, but it deserves a second mention just because of the way Tory says it. (Also, can never remember...is his name spelled with an i or a y?)"High explosives and electricity, woohoo!" - Kari"Listen to that baby BURN!" - Grant"Holy aircannons, Grantman!" - Tory"The Hyneman is currently looking for the dung of an elephant, a favorite hobby of the fairly reclusive Hyneman..." - Adam. Not sure if that's exactly it, but it's always awesome to hear when he does that. =P

Since when has this topic existed? This show is amazing. Anybody have any favorite Mythbusters quotes? =P"I reject your reality and substitute my own!"

Happy birthday, you LEGO lover, you! =D

Episode 3: Business As Usual

Sponsored by the Brotherhood of Makuta, a group of villains who have been terrorizing the Matoran Universe for the past twelve years. Thanks Brotherhood of Makuta!

Narrator: To refresh your memory, last episode, the Toa Nuva were duped into buying a house that was a lot cheaper than the owner was selling it for, unbeknownst to them. To remind you, Lewa created a leak in the Matoran Universe, where humans can stumble into their world, and the BIONICLEs can enter your world, something they plan to fix. If you happen to find a Toa or Matoran in your bedroom, the number for local attorneys-at-law is 1-800-LAWYERS. Just keep in mind we aren’t liable – Lewa is.(At the Rent-A-Cabin…)Kopaka: So, we have to tell the owner here that we bought a house, right?Tahu: Correct.Kopaka: And not only do we have to tell him that, we also have to pay him for four months rent. Right?Tahu: Wrong.Kopaka: Since when? I’m never wrong!Tahu: Sorry to break it to you, Kopaka, but that’s just a fantasy of yours.(Kopaka shoots Tahu a look of aggravation)Kopaka: …Anyway, how do you plan to avoid paying him the four months rent?Tahu: Well, instead of burning it down like we do on a regular basis to other Rent-A-Cabins, I thought we could instead just lock him in the basement of the cabin and make a run for it.Kopaka: I guess it’s less violent than our last few plans of getting away from these people.Tahu: Are you agreeing with me?Kopaka: If that’s true, then let’s forget this conversation ever happened.Tahu: Fine by me.(Enter Pohatu, Lewa, and Onua)Lewa: So what’s the plan-scheme?Tahu: We’re locking the owner in the basement of the cabin.Lewa: Sound’s good-fine to me.Onua: It isn’t the most practical of solutions, but as long as it gets the job done.(Enter Takanuva)Takanuva: Must we continue to cheat these owners out of their money? It is rather unfair…Tahu: You know, maybe we ought to lock Takanuva in the basement as well, and that would solve all our problems.Onua: Strange question, but where’s Gali?Tahu: Last time I saw her, she went to the grocery store. Should we wait for her?(Brief pause)All (except for Pohatu): Nah.Narrator: So, travelling a whopping sixty feet to get to the owner’s location, they headed to the front office to talk to him. The cabin owner, Mr. Whatyoudomakowsky – surprisingly Lewa pronounced this right – was a busy Matoran, although was able to make room for the six in the cramped office.Mr. Whatyoudomakowsky: Alright, what do you guys want?Tahu: Well, the electricity isn’t working in the basement. Maybe you could come and fix it for us?Mr. Whatyoudomakowsky: Whatever. I’ll come.Narrator: While this was going on, Gali had just returned from her grocery shopping, and upon returning, she decided to make herself a quick lunch. She turned on the stove when preparing to boil some soup, but neglected to put a pot with soup on the stove. She also neglected to remove the paper bag filled with groceries from the vicinity of the stove. Seeing as the bag did not have very good balance, it fell onto the fire on the stove, and began to burn rather hotly in the wooden cabin. Gali also had just walked outside of the cabin to go and investigate where the rest of the Toa Nuva went, therefore not even noticing the fire.Narrator: Meanwhile, the Toa Nuva had just exited the office of Mr. Whatyoudomakowsky, just in time to see the Rent-A-Cabin burning.Lewa: Tahu, did you start-ignite that?Tahu: I swear, I wasn’t anywhere near the house.(Gali approaches the Toa Nuva)Gali: Hey guys, what’s up?Tahu: Gali, did you happen to start that fire?Gali: What?(Gali looks behind her)Gali: I don’t think so.Mr. Whatyoudomakowsky: You people are the ones that burn down the Rent-A-Cabins, aren’t you? You are not getting away with this, you hear me? That’s it, you group of no-good corruptive – Narrator: The following scenes contain violence which may not be appropriate for children. Therefore, we will just give you a short description of the following events. Mr. Whatyoudomakowsky tried to be rather violent towards Tahu and the other Toa, so naturally, Tahu and Lewa created a fire tornado to ward him off. The rest ran for their lives to their new home, and prepared for the next week. To them, they were happy because they didn’t need to move.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Episode End

Word Count: 741 words~:~Word count might be off a little bit. Dunno, my math might have been wrong, but anyway, thanks for reading! There should be another chapter up soon, and by the way, I am now accepting guest stars. Remember, always PM me if you care to guest star in the next episode. I will have two to three roles per episode for people wanting to be in the comedy - nothing says you can't guest star twice in a row, too! You tell me how you want your character to act, and I will protray as best as I can. When I am finished, I will send you a draft of the episode for your approval. Thank you! ^^

 

 

It has been decided that I will most likely be cancelling the story, due to lack of reviewers, lack of interest, and lack of time, most importantly. If I am going to be writing at all, I will probably not be writing in the comedies forum, and will barely be writing in the other writing forums as it is. Life has gotten too busy for me to continue this, so I hereby declare this cancelled. I will write one last chapter, and I will end the series there. Thank you for your kind reviews, everyone, and I am sad to see it end this way.

Anything from Arrested Development. Which indicates the following:"You have a mustache! I mean, you have milk on your mustache! ...I mean, you have a milk mustache!"- GOB"Way to plant, Ann!""George Michael, why don't you and Plant wait in the car?"- Michael Bluth, George Michael Bluth"Watch out for hop-ons. You'll definitely get hop-ons."- Michael Bluth(variation...)"Watch out for live-ins. You'll definitely get live-ins."- Michael Bluth"Apparently, mood altering medications lead to street drugs. That's what a handsome doctor said on The Today Show.""That was Tom Cruise the actor.""Really? They said he was some kind of scientist..."- Lucille Bluth, Michael BluthAll I could think of at the moment, there are soooooo many more to add.

20:00 minutes left…She couldn’t believe the appearance of the bomb here. It seemed so remarkable…it was apparent to her it did not belong to the Rohan military or the Elite Stealth Division. The ESD created very sophisticated equipment, while this had a unique yet crudely made design. The ticker was set in the center of the explosives, and was strapped to the bombs by thick black straps. There were four sticks of dynamite, two below and two above the timer, while there were, at maximum, several pounds of plastic explosives set inside and around the dynamite. Several thin, black wires, tied intricately together by small straps, came from the dynamite and plastic explosives to connect with a small detonator. This detonator had a timer that was synced with the timer on the bomb – when both timers hit zero, the ship would be gone.Sylin shook her head in amazement. It was so cleverly orchestrated…but who was responsible? She looked at the watch on her wrist. She set a timer on her watch for nineteen minutes and twenty seconds just as the seconds hit twenty on the bomb timer. She rushed out into the hallway, wall-jumping from the cabin wall to the railing, and up onto the steel roof above the passageway. As she crawled her way upwards, she felt the grueling pain of a high-heeled foot digging into her right hand.“I thought the last of you had surrendered to our side,” the cool, seductive female voice sneered. Lariska took one of her knives out and a small silk piece of cloth out from the pack on her belt. She tied the cloth tightly around Sylin’s wrist, and dug the knife into the cloth and steel roofing. Sylin groaned for a second, feeling the stinging pain as Lariska lifted her heel from Sylin’s right hand.“We didn’t lose, and you were far from winning,” Sylin replied, irritable. “Also, this isn’t that effective.”18:00 minutes left…Sylin quickly reached for one of the swords on her back – being ambidextrous, she used her left hand to grab the sword and swing upward at Lariska. The female Dark Hunter was taken aback by this surprise attack, while Sylin cut the cloth speedily with the sword. She took the dagger in her right hand as she maintained balance on the angled rooftop.Sylin climbed rapidly up onto the stable, flat rooftop. Lariska hissed at her prey – she knew this was not going to be an easy battle, but she would succeed. Lariska threw five daggers in rapid succession at Sylin, while Sylin lithely dodged each one by doing a varying range of somersaults and jumps. Sylin, naturally fed up with this battle already, flipped her cloaking device on with the simple press of a button, and disappeared entirely.Invisible to her foe, Sylin carefully snuck up behind Lariska, and brutally kicked her with her heel in the back. She watched as Lariska fell to the ground – delivering another grueling kick to Lariska, she watched further as Lariska rolled closer and closer to the edge, where she would eventually roll off the roofing and fall to her death.Unbeknownst to Sylin, however, Lariska had stolen the transportation device used by the ESD – she disappeared in a flash of blue light, heading in a direction far from Rohan. It seemed she was heading in the direction of the Dark Hunters’ fortress, and Sylin knew there was absolutely no point in following her. She was gone for good.No matter, I have extras, Sylin thought. Now, to focus on what matters. She sighed for a moment, and hurried to the edge of the rooftop. Down below was the center of the ship, and there was a small staircase, clearly leading to Uzian’s chambers. She eyed her watch timer for a moment, and felt herself become tense and uncomfortable. I’m running out of time…16:00 minutes left…Nagii, crouched uncomfortably behind Uzian’s throne, listened carefully to the conversation at hand. The Shadowed One deceived Uzian completely, and Uzian was too trusting of him to notice. She laughed mentally to herself – the Shadowed One’s plan was certainly successful. Not only had he made sure that the self-proclaimed Lord of Shadows lost the battle with the Toa Rohan, he gained money, did not lose any of his best Dark Hunters, and also made Uzian lose the majority of his mercenaries. It seemed like revenge towards Uzian for leaving the Dark Hunters in the first place, and he was successful at actually committing the crime.I hate to admit it, but you have to respect that, Nagii thought. She closed her eyes, breathing silently, and glimpsed to the right. There was a tapestry on the wall, embroidered with golden thread, and colored the deepest scarlet. It seemed strange to simply gaze at it so…but the tapestry itself was not what she was noticing. It was what was behind the tapestry that she saw – the tapestry was obviously not moving due to a sudden draft circulating in the room.Sylin is definitely out of practice, isn’t she? Nagii thought, smirking. It was pathetic to make fun of her best friend now. It was such a crucial point in this battle…this was no laughing matter. She watched as the tapestry moved slightly, fortunately unnoticed by Uzian and the Shadowed One. Although it was a dangerous move in this deadly game, Nagii knew that she had to communicate with Sylin.Sylin, this is Nagii. I’m behind Uzian’s throne, and I know you are behind the tapestry. Just stay still behind it, and we should be fine. I have an idea – we need to create a distraction. Somehow we need to get the Shadowed One off the ship. He isn’t important anymore, since he was just trying to get money out of Uzian, and now that he’s gotten his money, we can get rid of him. Uzian is who is important right now…you deal with the Shadowed One, and I’ll deal with Uzian. Deal?14:00 minutes left…Nagii, it is me, Sylin. I have bad news – there is a bomb on board the airship. We have thirty minutes to dismantle the bomb or get off the ship with Uzian still on it when the bomb blows up. I’m fine with that arrangement, but getting the Shadowed One off is harder than it sounds. Deal.Sylin crouched behind the tapestry, and carefully activated her cloaking device. She quietly made her way down behind Uzian’s wide throne, unnoticed by her adversaries. She sat for a moment beside Nagii – she smirked, seeing as how Nagii did not notice Sylin’s movement towards the throne.Nagii, I’m next to you, Sylin telepathically communicated to Nagii. She heard Nagii give a slight sound of surprise, and then she sighed afterward. She crossed her arms, irritated.I knew that, Nagii responded, obviously too proud to admit that she was surprised. Alright, I want you to sneak around behind the Shadowed One, maybe you can try to choke him. Uzian won’t warn him – he doesn’t care about him. Hurry up and do it – quickly, but quietly.Sylin sighed. Here it goes, she thought. She stood up, throwing herself against the wall, and silently sidled along it. She made her way to the corner, and slowly sidled along the other wall. She was now but five feet from the Shadowed One – she rapidly made her way alongside the wall, and then she was just two feet away from him. As she carefully slowed her pace and crept up towards him, she thought about this attack for a moment. She took her knife out, and held it steadily.12:00 minutes left…She rushed upward, and wrapped her hand around the neck of the Shadowed One. The knife was just barely scrapping against his neck – the slightest movement could kill him. She deactivated the cloaking device, and she watched as Uzian stood up swiftly. Nagii revealed herself from behind the throne, and had a sleek, silver pistol pointed straight at Uzian’s head.“Well, well, well,” Uzian said coolly. “This is not a surprise. I see you have come back to finish me off once and for all. You do not seem to care much for the idea of reinforcements, do you, Nagii?” Nagii grunted – in fairness, he was right. She always neglected to send for allies, seeing as she felt that she would risk their lives more than she would her own.“Not really, no,” Nagii replied icily. “You obviously stake everything on them, though…that backfires rather easily, though, doesn’t it?” Uzian was confused by her remarks. She had seemed to finally stump him. Sylin glanced over at her comrade, and was thoroughly confused herself. Nagii then continued, “You see, Uzian, you lost some of your best people today. First, you lost Tikiani…I received a telepathic message from Talin, and she told me that Tikiani plans to return to the Toa Rohan.”So she did feel remorse! Sylin thought excitedly. I don’t believe it…she hasn’t been with the team for more than ten years…“Then, you lost Fuzan,” Nagii continued loftily. “He was caught by our new leader, and finally, you lost Civyl. Who knows where your other best mercenary went…personally, I don’t know, and I don’t care.” Uzian began to laugh maniacally; Nagii was not aware of Silio’s position on Rohan. Her eyebrow rose instinctively, and she added, “What are you laughing at?”10:00 minutes left…“My dear, dear, Nagii,” Uzian began, grinning. “Silio is on the island…and positioned but ten feet away from the crystal you hold in such high regard. Just one touch of a finger and the countdown begins. I do not think you should count on winning this battle so soon.” She stood extremely still, frozen to her spot.But…how? was the only thought running through Nagii’s mind. She could not believe it. It didn’t seem right…but what was done was done. All she could do now was eliminate Uzian from the picture, and most of the power would be gone in that case. It wasn’t going to be an easy task, but it was all that she could do. She stood for a moment, and thought. But as she was thinking, Uzian lunged forward with lightning-fast speed and knocked the pistol from Nagii’s hand, and Nagii reacted quickly to this by shuffling to her left.She took out her own copy of the Sword of Zeya, and the blow that should have killed the Lord of Shadows was met with a broadsword, triple the size of Nagii’s sword. She thrust her sword to his right, to his left, and very close to his neck, but none of the blows hit home. Uzian’s reactions were quicker than her own, and were also stronger defensive movements. Then she realized that was her problem – she was playing on the offensive, not the defensive.As this was happening, Sylin felt a small weight lifted from her belt, and she did not realize that the Shadowed One had lifted her transportation device. In that familiar flash of blue light, the Shadowed One disappeared in the blink of an eye, following Lariska’s same path. Sylin felt herself fall to the ground, and the knife slipped from her hand. It spun as it slid across the flooring and grazed Uzian’s foot. Uzian groaned in pain at the accidental attack, and Sylin smiled slyly.Yes! she thought frivolously. 8:00 minutes left…Uzian felt a sharp, stinging pain hit part of his left foot as the knife abraded his heel. He did not falter from the battle at hand, and simply repressed the horrid pain in his foot. He continued to fight his opponent with all speed, watching as Nagii at points would back off. He noticed her more defensive movements, and he realized it was he, not her, that began to play the offense. Not necessarily happy with this arrangement, he backed away, until the sound of swords was no longer heard.Sylin leapt into the battle with her own sword, swinging the sword wildly at Uzian like a madwoman. Her sword skills were not necessarily the best, but her most effective attack was her spinning sword maneuver, fondly known to her as the Propeller. She used this attack against him, and Uzian, having no room, wall jumped above Sylin, therefore dodging her attack completely. “Get out of here!” Nagii yelled violently, and Sylin smiled sadly at her old friend. Nagii was under immense strain, and Sylin knew that. She was about to use the transportation device she had, but she realized it was gone. The Shadowed One had stolen her last one – all she could do was run and jump off the airship.“Good luck, old friend,” Sylin said, and she rushed off up the staircase. Within a few seconds, Sylin had jumped off the ship, whilst Uzian and Nagii were left alone now to fight in the comforts of Uzian’s chambers.Uzian glared at his adversary. Nagii simply stared back, as the iciness of her blue eyes met with the ferocious anger of his scarlet eyes. She smiled for a moment at her enemy. In Nagii’s mind, never had she been so close to somebody whom she pledged to hate for eternity.6:00 minutes left…“You feel hatred towards me, don’t you, Nagii?” Uzian asked, smiling for a moment. “It is a strong hatred…that icy type of hatred that you are known for. I know it well, as do all those who have known you for no more than five seconds.”Nagii grunted. She clashed her sword with Uzian’s, and then said, “I have hatred for many. I never regretted that hatred. I simply strengthened it.” She thrust her sword towards the Lord of Shadows, and watched as he simply swung the sword around with one hand. Her wrist became twisted, and she knew immediately he had caused her to sprain her wrist. Her right hand now useless, the only weapons that she could use with her left hand would be a mace, a pistol, or knives. The pistol was far from her reach, and although carrying a mace with her, it would take too long to take out.She instead grabbed the knife on the floor in front of her, and tossed it towards Uzian. It was just inches from his Kanohi, and it hit with a hard thud into the wall. Seeing as Uzian was detained in dodging the knife, she quickly took the mace and chain in hand and swung the spiked ball maddeningly towards her foe.Uzian began to back away steadily as Nagii hastily approached him with the mace. The spiked ball came closer and closer…despite this obvious setback for Uzian, Nagii was still at a disadvantage. Unlike Sylin, she was more attuned to using her right hand, not both her left and right hands. She held the mace with a shaky left hand, while her wretched right hand hung limp at her side – she was approaching Uzian until he was but four feet away.4:00 minutes left…Silio smiled. It was there in front of him…he knew he had probably savored this moment long enough. As he was about to touch it, he heard a telepathic message from his master, the Lord of Shadows.Do not touch it…not yet, Uzian said mentally. I shall give you the order to do so. Wait patiently for the orders, and when you hear my command, do not hesitate to proceed. The opportunity is coming…alright, now!Silio lunged forward, as his hand grasped the crystal. Within seconds he watched as the most marvelous of events unfolded before him – each colored shard leapt from its position inside the crystal, and went easily through solid structure to its destination far away from Rohan. The disintegration of the Crystal of Life happened within the blink of an eye. Light obstructed his view, and he became blinded, while all the elements released a small bit of their power in front of them.He felt the fire, the cool water, the soft breeze, the icy mist, the dirt beneath his feet, and the rocks of the cave beginning to collapse around him. Lightning was striking, while light blinded him yet shadow shrouded him in darkness. It was a completely insane display of the elements around him, and yet he believed every second. Suddenly, there was an unexpected rumble. A shockwave was released from the crystal in one last farewell to Rohan, and it exploded, each disparaging shard crying its last cry and disappearing to their rightful environment. Silio grinned, and he disappeared with the use of the transportation device to Odus, the base of the Dark Ones. Mission accomplished, my lord, he communicated to the Lord of Shadows.2:00 minutes left…The shock wave released from the Crystal of Life’s disintegration process made the airship rumble, even slightly losing its balance and tilting it in one direction. Nagii felt herself slip as the airship slanted beneath her feet, and the rapid inclination of the airship caused her to fall. Most of the objects in the room slid to the far right wall, while Nagii felt herself slide with the objects. Uzian held his ground by using the knife buried in the wall as a hanging tool. He dangled from it rather helplessly, while his Matoran of Lightning nemesis hit the wall hard. He noted her dropping her transportation device, and he hastily swiped it from the ground.“Dear, dear, Nagii,” he said, smiling. “Let us finish the battle that we have begun. And although some might consider it the coward’s way out, I consider it the smart way out.”He was fully aware of the bomb on board the ship. And he had used this knowledge to his advantage by using the detonator supplied to him by the Shadowed One, a little something he had acquired or stolen from his once ally. Should the timer on the detonator not work, the Shadowed One kept it as a spare detonator. Fortunately for Uzian, it was perfect for him to steal. Uzian released himself from the knife, and slid downward, until he teleported just before he made contact with the wall.From the comforts of his home on Odus, Uzian clicked the detonator with no remorse.0:00 minutes left…Sylin felt the exhilaration of free-falling to the ice cold ocean water below her. As she was a few hundred feet away from her final destination in the water, she heard the ear-shattering sound of an explosion. Just as she heard this, she felt herself hit the water. She swam hastily to the surface, and the Ga-Matoran looked above to see a fireball of smoke and orange flames produce from the once undamaged airship.The airship split completely in two, and she watched as it fell faster than she had to the ocean waters. The blinding flash from the bomb seemed to sear her eyes, and she could feel the heat from the explosion. She defended herself hurriedly by swimming as fast as she could towards Rohan, going underneath the surface. She felt the stinging pain of a cold, lonely world…but she did not feel this because of the dense ocean waters. It was the death of her dear friend Nagii – somehow, Sylin knew that there was no possible way that Nagii survived the explosion. Despite Nagii’s already cold mannerism, Nagii added her own warmth to Rohan, warmth beloved by all of the Toa Rohan and people of Rohan.Rest in peace, Nagii. You shall be dearly missed, Sylin thought, and as she touched the surface, it was not the water of the ocean she felt on her face. They were tears.

"How hard can it be?"-- Jeremy Clarkson, Top Gear"Of all the gin joints and cities of the world, she had to walk into mine."-- Casablanca(I still need to watch this movie...)"You, sir, are no gentleman!""And you, my dear, are no lady."-- Scarlett O'Hara and Rhett Butler, Gone With the Wind"What do they call you up north, Virgil?""They call me Mr. Tibbs!" -- Sargent Gillespie, Virgil Tibbs, In the Heat of the Night"This is happy hour. Angry hour starts at ten."-- Colonel Sherman Potter, M*A*S*HI'd post more, but can't think of any, lol.

New chapter is up! =D It is probably the shortest chapter yet, but I thought I'd give you an interesting finish and something to look forward to in the next chapter. Thought it would give an interesting twist. ^^@HH: Quite a bit of mistakes there...first, I'd like to say thank you for reviewing my epic again. And secondly, this won't be a long response, so don't be insulted if this seems like I'm kind of ignoring most of what you said. That isn't the case, and I noticed just about everything you said. =PUnfortunately, I have a tendency to be overly descriptive sometimes, so forgive me for that one. Most of the problems you noted are things I've noticed for awhile but have been too lazy to fix. I can never decide which word to use, so I end up using both or all three (sometimes four, but that's rare, lol).Regarding the military code: That was kind of the point. I wanted the group, BIONICLE or not, to function as a military squadron. I do realize those are military code words, and originally I was going to use some of the older code words (Bravo used to be Baker, Alpha used to be Able, et cetera.), but I thought the newer ones would fit better. Since the technology and other things here are advanced, the outdated terms wouldn't fit very well.Answer to question 1: No, they aren't. In a way, I guess you could say that Nagii is taller than most Matoran, but she's supposed to be shorter than most. It's a bit of a story glitch, and I'm still trying to think of ways to fix it. =PQuestion 2: I hadn't really thought about that at first. It is, despite some serious differences when it comes to the way the canon story functions in comparison to Rohan and the other islands I created. I wouldn't be able to pin-point exactly where the islands are in relation to places such as Voya-Nui and other places, but they do exist in the canon universe.Thanks for the review, and I hope you'll keep reading! ^^

She viewed the area very carefully. Around her was a brick-walled chamber, not necessarily well-furnished, although that was the taste of the occupant in question. Near the iron chamber doors, in the left corner, was an antique cherry-wood desk, polished and shiny in the light. A wooden chair with brass button-like notches accompanied it, old books piled up on both chair and desk. From what the Matoran of Lightning could see, there was a bed the size of Krikua in the right corner for him to sleep in, a curtain drawn around it. A set of chairs and two or three tables including a miniature kitchen were the surroundings of the room, not to mention the grand yet rusty-colored throne opposite of the chamber doors.Her only ally in this whole situation.Nagii was crouched behind Lord Uzian’s throne, listening intently to the conversation being shared between two of the most influential leaders of mercenaries in the universe – Uzian himself, and the Shadowed One. The discussion at hand was as interesting as Karzhani, as both were making plans for the future. Typical of these lords, Nagii thought bitterly. They haven’t even won the battle and they are already imagining what they will do after their so-called ‘vigorous performance on the battlefield’. For Mata-Nui’s sake, one of them ran away and two have been taken prisoner!“Will you stay a faithful ally to me?” Uzian asked rather carefully. “I do need some of your assistance. These people will be pests to me, no doubt, you know.” The Shadowed One nodded. He was not fickle or stupid – in trade for his services in helping the Lord of Shadows; he would receive a hefty sum of money. Every second his Dark Hunters assisted Uzian and his self-proclaimed Dark Ones in battle, he would be gaining money slowly but surely.“You have been a good friend for a long time,” he said, his bold-faced lie unseen to his unsuspecting, dimwitted companion. The Shadowed One was simply receiving cash without losing anything; he was not stupid enough to risk losing his best fighters. Certainly, Lariska was his only valuable Dark Hunter he brought along, but she stayed aboard the airship. The rest of the ‘Dark Hunters’ he recruited for this mission were warriors on the island of Toskaniala, of which he did not care about at all. A small bribe kept their mouths shut as he lied through his teeth when saying they were Dark Hunters to Uzian.Nagii couldn’t help but mentally laugh. The Shadowed One has something behind all of this, she thought quickly. Something Uzian for some reason isn’t sensing – he is too trusting of the Dark Hunter leader. I don’t know what he has behind all of this, but that will be on the list to figure out. For the meantime, it’s my job to take out Uzian if I can.She looked from side to side for a moment. Where was Sylin? Nagii had seen her disappear in blue light, shooting up towards the airship. She had to be in this room, unless she was searching for something else. If she wasn’t here, she was obviously sidetracked by something else, but what could it be?

Sylin quickly dove into a room as she heard footsteps going down the corridor. She was not familiar with the surroundings, but she pinned herself against the wall next to the door. The person walked by, but Sylin had the eerie feeling that this person was simply toying with her. Then, an eerier feeling came over her – there was a noise. She was unsure of what it was, but it was a slight ticking sound. As she looked up, she was face to face with an unusually large bomb, ticking away. There was but twenty minutes left to save the ship, and at least a fraction of the people on it.Oh, Mata-Nui… she thought.

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Great to see some more reviews! Thanks for the comments, guys! ^^@TNTOS: Hopefully, yes. Still working on it...the chapter is in the early stages, but it should come before Christmas, with any luck. =P And I love that, too. The second episode was a lot more fun to write, since it wasn't getting things started, but simply adding on. Thanks for your review! =)@Taka Nuvia: That's totally okay! Just you reviewing is good enough! Lol, those are great. It's a pain thinking of products, people, places, et cetera. Avohkii Cereal was an easy one, since it's kind of a product mentioned in most of the comedies here, but otherwise, thinking of other stuff is hard. >_< Thanks for reviewing, Taka! =D@fishers64: Thanks! I thought it was a bit risky using such overused characters, but I thought it would also be a challenge, to see if I could make them funny and give them a sense of originality, instead of adding to the heap of comedies that have already tried to make them funny. And that's a good idea! Now that you mention it, I'll probably end up adding "whoever you are" to the show more, and end up showing them sooner or later. Thanks for the idea! ^^And riiiiiighhht...I never explained that concept fully. Possible reasoning for it would be that they were saving money for the house they were going to buy, but because they ended up losing more money, they just started scamming the owners of the Rent-A-Cabins so they'd save more money and keep on their daily budget. (which, by the way, is about the price of the house they bought, lol) I'll probably explain it in a later chapter.And thanks for the advice! I hope you keep on reading - thanks for the review. ^^Just an update, by the way: I will not be able to update the comedy for another week or two, because I'll be away from Thursday to Tuesday of next week. I might be able to bring along a laptop and write on that and also post the chapter using that, but we will see. If I'm online between those days, then you know I was able to bring it along. =P Thanks for your patience!

Grant, you've pulled off once again the ability to touch the reader in so many ways. I forgot how much I missed reading your stories...now I just remembered how much I love your writing style, and how much that your stories can connect with me deep down.I swear, I almost cried reading this. The beauty created here...it is unlike any other. You gave these characters, these biomechanical beings...you gave them life and feeling, the ability to love with their heart and soul. That love is different than the love protrayed in other stories. It is a love that all of us can relate to when a loved one is in trouble, or close to death. Although life and feeling is in all BIONICLE characters, you added something to them that was different. I can't identify with what it is, but it added so much more to the story. I applaud your ability to, as you always do, connect with your audience.The wife's care for her husband's health is realistic. She takes care of him, despite her duties. She tries as hard as she can to make his life comfortable in the end, to make it something less painful than it already is. It is a basic responsibility in a marriage to take care of your spouse, but you made the wife more willing to spend every moment with her husband. You definitely wrote that feeling well without making it too corny, if that is possibly the right word.I like the idea you used of a human-BIONICLE sort of setting. I have always wanted to experiment in that type of setting, but I've never attempted to try that. And although the idea of marriage and cookies don't exist in BIONICLE whatsoever, I enjoyed that concept. It was nice to introduce those concepts to such a strange thing as BIONICLE, for it gave it a warm touch.On the concept of the Red Star: It being the main focus in a way, I must say you definitely captured the idea of the Red Star. It's representation of an 'afterlife' can be considered weak, but you made it strong in this case, to both the reader and the character. To me, in any situation, you can make any interpretation of the Red Star, which I've always found irritating. But here, you can't help but know that it represents the wife's late husband - nothing else but that.Grammar and spelling wise, I did not find anything wrong beside one mistake:

“Would you mind grabbing me something…”

There should be a question mark at the end of the periods. It's kind of a nitpick/suggestion more than an actual problem with the writing, but I just think that since it's a question or request, it'd make sense to put a question mark here. =)For the most part, Grant, this is a wonderfully tender, sweet, and touching story. Your descriptions are remarkable (as always), your overall writing style pleasant, and your plot and characters are excellent. Thank you for the enthralling, terrific read - keep up the good work, I will be looking forward to your next story. =]

I'll take that as you like. =P Thank you, I hope you keep reading!

Narrator: Last time we saw the Toa Nuva, Onua and Lewa were arguing about the fact that Onua may or may not have stolen Lewa’s collection of classic Pink Floyd albums. We also figured out Lewa may or may not have created a leak in the Matoran Universe that connects our world with theirs. In this way he obtained his Pink Floyd CDs. We also figured out that Pohatu might want to blow himself up again so he can get through doorways, Onua can eat three dozen pancakes for breakfast, and Takanuva actually has a nickname, much to the surprise of our network. Next up, the gang is heading out to find a house for the magnificent seven. (At the Rent-A-Cabin…)Lewa: First, we’re heading-going to…how is this pronounced?Kopaka: Ah-ah.Lewa: Haha?Tahu: No, it’s baba.Onua: I thought it was lala?Kopaka: It’s pronounced ah-ah! AH. AH. Actually, let’s just call it Alpha. Who would name a street Aa?Tahu: There is a type of lava named aa, so I guess why not name a street Aa?Kopaka: …Tahu: Don’t look at me – you’re supposed to be the smart one.Lewa: Well, anyhow, we head-go to Aa first, then Le-Koro Avenue, Ga-Wahi Drive, Ta-Wahi Street, Hinceralpitowsky Street, and then…how is this pronounced-said?Kopaka: Oh, not this again…Narrator: After a few more minutes of trying to figure out how their last destination’s name was pronounced, they eventually found out it was pronounced Get Heron Dot Drive, a name which confused them thoroughly. It also confused them how Lewa could possibly mispronounce the name. They got on their way and first went to Aa, or Alpha, and viewed the house.(At Aa…)Tahu: Well, looks okay.Kopaka: Are you nuts?Tahu: As a matter of fact, yes.Kopaka: …Anyway, look at this place. The paint is all worn off, the porch is ripped up…it’s like a cannon went off inside the place, considering all the furniture is wrecked.Narrator: Indeed, Kopaka was actually right. For a change. Anyhow, a cannon did go off in the house, since it last belonged to a group of Matoran. These Matoran, unfortunately for them, still lived here – they just didn’t see them when they walked in. Until…(Enter Ta-Matoran falling on Tahu)Tahu: WHAT THE –Director: Due to some of the content and sound provided by Tahu, we’ll have to cut the filming and play smooth jazz for a little while. Be patient! Yeah, riiiiiiiiight…(Activation of smooth jazz)Director: Back to the film!Tahu: WHY YOU LITTLE –Director: Well, apparently we aren’t prepared for that yet. Back to smooth jazz!(Activation of smooth jazz)Director: NOW CUT THAT OUT OR I’LL HAVE YOU FIRED, YOU HOT-TEMPERED –(All eyes on the Director, including the audience.)Director:I’ll have you for this, you little…Narrator: Don’t do that or I’ll…ugh, now I’m doing it. Forget it. Well, to update you after that unfortunate little outburst – *glares at Tahu and the Director* – a Ta-Matoran jumped on Tahu’s back from the ceiling. Don’t ask…just…don’t.Tahu: Why in Mata-Nui’s name did you just jump on my back, you little – Kopaka: Don’t go down that road again.Tahu: Oh, yeah, sorry. Well, anyway, why did you do that?Ta-Matoran: You’re invading our home! Why do you just walk in here acting like you own the place?Tahu: Surprisingly, we were thinking of buying it, so if I’m going to be walking in here, then yes, I’m going to be acting like I own the place.Ta-Matoran: Unfortunately for us, that actually makes sense.(Enter two other Ta-Matoran)Tahu: So what are your names?Ta-Matoran 2: You tell us yours first.Tahu: This is an outrage! We are the Toa Nuva, how could you possibly not know us?Ta-Matoran 2: I’ve never heard of them. Have you?Ta-Matoran 3: Nope.Tahu: …Lewa: I’m Lewa, he’s Tahu, she’s Gali – Director: He’s Sneezy, he’s Bashful, and he’s Dopey! Get on with it!(Lewa cuts the Director a dirty look)Lewa: That’s Onua, Kopaka, and Pohatu.Ta-Matoran 2: Hey, I know that guy! I saw him get stuck in one of the automatic doors at the super market!Pohatu: …Kopaka: Can we just move on? It’s obvious we’re not getting this house, so let’s keep on checking out the places we had on our list.Gali: Works for me!Tahu: Why must she be so optimistic…?Narrator: So, the Toa Nuva continued to the next destination. As they went Hinceralpitowsky Street, they saw it as too small – or, at least too small for one of the Toa Nuva…(Pohatu is stuck in the entrance to the house)Pohatu: Hold on! I can get out of this myself!Tahu: You obviously can’t, because if you were smart enough, you wouldn’t have gotten yourself into this in the first place!Pohatu: Put a LEGO brick in it, Tahu!Kopaka: This goes against every fiber of my being when I say this, but he is actually right, Pohatu.Narrator: Sorry about this. Let’s just say that wasn’t planned. They passed Le-Koro Avenue, for there was a bit of an argument. There were seven bedrooms at the large house – a thing of the imagination, obviously – and a rather violent argument ensued between all of them, since there was a large bedroom unlike the others. After our technical staff helped rebuild some of the Toa Nuva, they headed next to Get Heron Dot Drive. Although none of them really understood the name, and some of them found it suspicious, they headed there with hope that they would finally find a house.(Upon arrival…)Tahu: I think living in Karzhani for the rest of our lives would be more pleasant than living here for even a few minutes.Narrator: To elaborate, the house is a mess. The wood on the outside is old and rotten, and the entire house looks like it will fall apart if one person steps even within a hundred feet of the house.Kopaka: I hate to say this, but I agree. What does everybody think about this?Lewa: There’s no way I’m living-staying in this rattrap. I’d think even the rats-mice would have gotten sick-tired of this after awhile.Onua: I know earth is my element and all, but sometimes a person can get sick of being with their element, and I know I would if I stayed here.Gali: I usually don’t like to be critical of things, but this place is horrible.Kopaka: Pohatu, do you have any thoughts?Pohatu: …Director: We only allowed him two lines maximum this episode. Until we get him more sponsors – which, personally I don’t see happening within the next century – he’ll only have at least two to five lines maximum in any episode. Sometimes he doesn’t even get more than two…Kopaka: …OK, then fine. Takanuva, do you have any thoughts?Takanuva: Let’s take it.Tahu: You know, I always thought you were a little eccentric, but now I know you’re just insane.Lewa: You’re nuts!Onua: Who in his right mind would want this?Tahu: Unfortunately for us, Takanuva.Takanuva: Now, hold on, I think it would be kind of us to repair this house to its former…something. It was obviously nicer-looking at some point. Anyhow, I think we should take it!Tahu: Somewhere, I believe several thousand cockroaches currently fear that they’re going to have some unfriendly neighbors…Kopaka: Let’s just think about it. Otherwise, let’s head to the last two places. Ga-Wahi first, then we head to Ta-Wahi last. Let’s get moving…Narrator: As they headed to Ga-Wahi Drive, they were disappointed to see the house was smaller than the Rent-A-Cabin they already inhabited. When they went to Ta-Wahi Street, however, they were pleased to see a decent-sized house. It contained four bedrooms, which they were pleased with.Kopaka: Thoughts?Gali: Let’s get it.Onua: No place would be better than this!Lewa: I like it.Tahu: Since it isn’t a rat-infested, cockroach-inhabited wooden remake of Karzhani with the strong smell of stale linen, then yeah, I’m fine with it.Pohatu: …Takanuva: I don’t like it.Tahu: Six-sevenths of the vote says we get it, so objection overruled.Kopaka: Let’s head inside. The owner should be there.Narrator: They headed inside, and thankfully for them, the owner was willing to sell. Matoran: First off, what are your names?Tahu: We’re the Toa Nuva. Matoran: Sorry…?Onua: Well, at least we’re not like the Toa Inika, that Toa team nobody really recognizes and everybody hates…Matoran: You guys know the Toa Inika? I always thought they were cool!Kopaka: This just keeps on getting worse…Tahu: What’s your name?Matoran: Niruk. How much are you looking to buy this house for?Kopaka: No more than a few thousand widgets.Niruk: Maybe six thousand?Lewa: Sounds reasonable-right.Tahu: How about five thousand?Niruk: You’re nuts!Tahu: You think I am? You should have heard our comrade at the rattrap we visited earlier. He wanted that over this house – that’s the definition of nuts.Niruk: Five thousand-five hundred, that’s my final offer.Tahu: Fine, we’ll take it.Niruk: Deal!Narrator: So, they bought the house. Each rather irritated at the fact it had taken them so long to find a house, they went to the Rent-A-Cabin and slept, not looking forward to the strenuous next week or two of moving. Not to mention confronting the owner of their Rent-A-Cabin…

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Thanks for dropping by and reading this, Velox! I feel the same way about comedies, but for some reason I still felt I wanted to make a contribution to the sub-forum and see if anybody liked this. It felt odd posting here at first, but I did it anyhow. =PThanks for talking about the format I used. Surprisingly, I had been reading some of The Tradgedy of Macbeth by Shakespeare, and although not necessarily the most humorous of plays, I still noted the format, and tried to stick to something along those lines. I preferred that style as opposed to the common style used by the people here in the comedies forum. I liked it, so I used it. I'm glad to see somebody noticed. ^^You mentioned the use of emoticons - I wasn't a big fan of them myself, but I used them anyway. Since you mentioned it, I removed them, since I thought it made this too mainstream. I want this to be different, and using a little bit more wit and making this more like sitcoms like Frasier and whatnot. Although this is supposed to be a reality TV show in which the Toa Nuva play in, I want to use situational comedy throughout.You also mentioned the astericks. I removed those as well, and just had the narrator sort of describe in a humorous way what the character did in action as a response to what another character said. I'm happier with that to be honest, so I'm glad you mentioned that. =)Most of the 'nitpicks' you made (trust me, they weren't, in my opinion ) I edited. I neglected some unfortunately, but most of them have been changed. By the way, it's great to hear I made you laugh. I didn't think this would have that effect, but I'm glad that it made you chuckle at times - to me, that's probably the greatest compliment I can receive. =)I must agree. I've always felt that characterization is vital, and I didn't really think about that up until now. With characters like these that are used constantly, it is tricky to give somebody like Tahu a distinct personality, but it'll be a challenge for me. I suppose that's what every story always needs, and it's something that's hard for a writer to master. I personally think I can do it, not to be overconfident, but I just think every writer can achieve it, and I want to with these characters. Thank you very much for mentioning it, I will focus more on that and try to give that distinct style to each character.Otherwise, I'd like to thank you a lot for giving me such an in-depth review, and for giving this a chance. I was afraid it'd be too much like other comedies here, but I'm glad to hear it's not like others - to hear that it stands out is great. Thanks again for the review, Velox, and I hope you'll keep reading. =)

Word filter, unable to talk about religion/politics and world problems, and a lot of other things. It gets irritating - politically speaking, I can't just say I support so-and-so and be done with that. I have to state some sort of reasoning as to why before somebody just gets on my case because I support that candidate. It makes me - a bit - irritable, but I guess you can't change that. =/