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  1. Thanks for the comments, you guys! Sorry for a shorter response, I'm just going to summarize what I had previously written in more of a brief way, since I lost it due to my computer's stupidity. =PJV, I agree, I would have liked to have created a scene here, but it's one of those things I'm not that skilled at. I am, however, writing a short story to accompany this and will be posted soon. It will have a scene and whatnot, obviously, including some characters - I hope you will have an interest in it. :)SkyLandOceAnna, thanks for your comments! I like the idea of associating more things with the season, but it was something that was hard for me to interject into it. I always notice the beautiful colors and the cold in autumn, so I couldn't help but focus on those changes.And the line " found beneath the silver trees" wasn't exactly the best line, but I thought it fit. Any other words used as adjectives, such as brown or grey, don't necessarily work because they are single-syllable words. Silver, having two syllables, seems to work better with the rhythm and whatnot, but maybe that's just me, and probably is. =PThanks for the comments, and I hope you guys check out my other stories and poetry! =)

  2. So, this is my first take on comedy, so forgive me if my own personal writing style tends to interrupt with any comedic points. =P Anyhow, this isn't going to be a long series, maybe just ten episodes. I'm writng this to get back into writing again, since I still have an unfinished epic to write and other stories I had planned, but I haven't really had an interest in writing them lately. Well, anyway, I'll shut up now so you can get on with reading the comedy. =P

    Unity, Duty, Stupidity

    Episode 1: Morning At The Nuva Cabin

    Sponsored by Avohkii Cereal, the #1 cereal of Mata-Nui, that sandbar in the ocean that nobody remembers anymore. Thanks Avohkii Cereal!

    Narrator: In the time before time…Director: Alright, cut that line! It is too corny, it is overused, and it is stupid. Can’t we at least have some originality in this? Alright, rant over, continue.Narrator: *ahem* The seven Toa Nuva lived together in tranquility after the terrible reign of Makuta. Since they hated the way they looked when they were in Karda-Nui, they had a bit of a makeover and look like their old selves again. Unfortunately for Pohatu, he’s still a hunchback, so hopefully he’ll understand if we cut some of his lines since he has absolutely no sponsors to support his hunchback…ness. We still pay him money to play the bit parts, though, so if you see a couple of large, hunchbacked Matoran, then you know who they are. Onto the episode. (Also, don’t ask how Takanuva got back to his original self. Let’s just say it took a few tons of plastic explosives to blow him up and put him back together again…)Narrator: At a small Rent-A-Cabin the Toa Nuva are staying at until they find a house to live at, which they have neglected to pay rent for over the past four months…Gali: Good morning everybody! Oh, and if I don’t see you again later on today –Director: Keep the originality of this concept going, please! That’s already in a movie!Gali: Whoops. Sorry.(Enter Tahu and Kopaka.)Narrator: Tahu, who had been playing in the basement of the cabin – suspend your belief here, folks, seeing as cabins don’t have basements – on the Xbox, had purple bags under his eyes that went about halfway down his Kanohi Hau.Gali: Tahu, you look terrible!Tahu: You look beautiful, so maybe that will make up for it.Narrator: Gali fought her natural instincts to slap Tahu, and decided to simply ignore the comment.Gali: …Either of you like some pancakes? I just made some!Tahu: Sure. Narrator: Upon seeing the pancakes on the small yellow plate, he grabbed two of them, and put them on one of the plates set aside for the seven Toa Nuva. Sitting in his chair, he pointed his scarlet finger at the pancakes, and a spiral of orange flames turned the pancakes into flat, circular charcoal.Tahu: Just how I like them, heheh...Kopaka: Tahu, don’t do that again. Remember the last Rent-A-Cabin we stayed at? That you burnt down? If you recall, I literally dragged you out of the fire to keep you from getting burned. That dehydrated me for about a week, which was a bit troublesome when we didn’t have enough money to buy ice. I’m lucky I even had elemental powers for even a part of that summer.Tahu: Yeah, that was a fun time, wasn’t it? What was that? The third Rent-A-Cabin I burnt down? Thank goodness Onua and Lewa made that dirt tornado to keep that owner away. He was pretty ticked-off if I recall. And by the way, you didn't need to do that, I was doing well on my own...even though I hit my head on that two-by-four and knocked myself out.Kopaka: ...(Enter Onua and Lewa, arguing.)Lewa: I told you, those were mine!Onua: I have the receipt for them! I bought them myself!Lewa: No, I bought them, you stole them!Narrator: Kopaka, wanting a peaceful morning, quickly divided the two arguing Toa with a thin wall of ice. Lewa had unfortunately caught his hand in it – his wrist was frozen while his hand was in the face of Onua.Kopaka: Oh, be quiet, both of you! Now what is this all about?Lewa: Release my wrist and I’ll tell you, iceman.Tahu: Oh yeah, like that wasn’t a cheap shot…Lewa: Stuff a LEGO brick in it, Tahu. Narrator: Kopaka quickly removed the wall of ice, and Onua hastened to dodge Lewa’s hand before it hit him in the face.Gali: Alright, explain, please.Lewa: Onua stole my –Director: OK, before you make a big mistake here, don’t say pie. Or anything food-related. We want some originality. Then again, the idea of a director interrupting his cast twenty-four-seven isn’t that original, but hey, I wanted to be a part of the show. Continue.Narrator: Lewa shot the director a dirty look after his words, and continued on with his statement.Lewa: As I was saying…Onua stole my collection of CDs.Tahu: Depending on the CDs, we can justify Onua’s reason for stealing them or maybe wanting to listen to them. So, what were the albums?Lewa: Basically classic Pink Floyd. Dark Side of the Moon, Animals, Wish You Were Here, and my own special selection of songs from The Wall.Tahu: How dare you steal Floyd, Onua! Kopaka: Hey, just a sensible question here, how can we possibly have Pink Floyd in the Matoran Universe when that’s something the outside world has? Unless we have a leak in our universe and some guy sold the albums to you, then yeah, there’s no sense here.Lewa: No, I created the leak and stole them from some kid in the outside world. Luckily he had an action figure of me, so it was pretty easy to convince the kid it was only a dream.Gali: Oh, wonderful…that isn’t one of those things we’re going to have to fix, like, right away or anything is it?Kopaka: Wait, you said you had the receipt…?Lewa: No, not until a few chapters from now. And that was a ploy to get them back from Onua. Anyway, I would like them back.Onua: You’ll have to fight me for them!Tahu: I’m surprised the Director didn’t call you out on that for not being original.Gali: Alright, let’s just get on with breakfast. Eat your pancakes, and then I’ll give you a list of the places we need to stop by later on today.Tahu: We’re actually going to places? I thought we just stay at one of these cabins for the next year and keep on scamming the owners! That makes it no fun that way! (Enter Pohatu and Takanuva)Takanuva: Come, come, Tahu, we must stop cheating these owners out of money. Eventually we’ll have to pay them back, and be at least honest about what we have done the past few months.Tahu: Could somebody stick a LEGO brick in his mouth? Mr. Nobility needs to realize that we don’t have any money. Also, Pohatu, what is that on your back? Oh, it’s just you. Narrator: Pohatu, who still was a hunchback, was constantly made an object of teasing by Tahu and others.Pohatu: Do we still have some of those plastic explosives from when Takanuva was blown up? Maybe I can rebuild myself from scratch…Gali: Pohatu, stop being so superficial. There’s nothing wrong with you being a hunchback. Then again, it’s kind of hard to get in through doors sometimes…Pohatu: Whatever...Gali: Well, eat, everybody, just for the sake of getting rid of these pancakes. I make three dozen, and they just sit here on a plate all morning!Kopaka: Kiss those pancakes goodbye, Gali. Remember, Onua has that many for breakfast alone.Narrator: Gali, unfortunately, did not take that into consideration immediately, and within a minute, Onua hastily ate the 3 dozen pancakes sitting on the plate. It was a rather disgusting, Rahi-like showcase of the Toa of Earth’s instincts.Lewa: Well, I guess I wasn’t really in the mood for pancakes anyway. Instead, I’ll have Avohkii Cereal, the leading brand in cereal and the #1 breakfast on Mata-Nui!Tahu: Talk about product placement… Director: Can we just end the episode here, please?

    THE END

    Director: NOT THE END OF THE SHOW, YOU MORON! THE END OF THE EPISODE! YOU ARE FIRED…WHOEVER YOU ARE!

    Episode End

    ~:~Word Count: 1,274Alright, it seems kind of slow, but hey, this is my first time working with this. Comments are, as always, appreciated, and I would love for this to catch on. Thanks for reading! ^^

  3. 1. When was your favourite point during your stay on BZP?Hmm...probably when my stories got noticed. It was nice for people to actually notice me and like something I had created. I had never really received any thoughts on any of my writing before that, and it was great to get somebody's opinion.2. How long have you been a member of BZP?Three years.3. Should that previous question have been the first question?Almost definitely.4. Have you had any long disapperances from BZP? If so, why?Yes, just recently as a matter of fact. I had to concentrate on school - BZP was taking to much time away from my actual life.5. Are you as interested in BZP as you used to be?Not really. The only thing I came on here for ever was to post my writings, and talk to my friends.6. Do you feel that BZP is slowly losing its members, or that BZP generally has less activity?Yes.7. If Bionicle had not been replaced, do you think that BZP would always remain strong as long as Bionicle was ‘updated‘‘ on a regular basis?No. People grow up - they can't live in the past forever. Most of the people here are now in their late teens, and that means eventually they have to move on. Whether BIONICLE had lived on or not, people would have left eventually.8. Have I asked enough questions yet?You tell me.9. Do you want a hug? Please?

  4. 1. What are the little things you do around BZP? Do you make MOCs? Write Stories? Are you an all-rounder? What?I write.2. What are the little things you like about BZP? Everything.3. What are the little things that annoy you slightly about BZP?Everything.4. If you could change one thing about BZP, what would it be?Everything.5. Are there little things you do in your posts? Like using a specific colour, various emoticons or generally typing in a horrific font and a scary colour?Nope.6. Have I asked enough questions yet?Maybe. I'll let you figure that out for yourself. :P

  5. 1. What country are you from?United States of America.2. What languages do you speak? I don't speak any specific languages with the exception of English obviously, but I can speak some French, German, and Spanish. I'm going to be taking Latin in high school, though I wish I could speak Italian - I know a little bit more French than the rest of the languages, though, and I can say "I love you" in German and Spanish. Unless I'm in a corny romantic movie, I don't think it will help me much. :P3. Can you easily buy Lego products in your country?If I go down to my local Wal-Mart, then yes, I can easily buy LEGO products.4. Can you still find Bionicle/older Hero Factory sets in your shops?Nope.5. How long does it take for the latest Lego sets to reach stores?Not long.6. Do you buy Lego products in shops or online? Which is easier?Either works, I buy in store more often, though.7. Would you like to see more Lego products available in your country?Not really.9. Why do you think I missed out the number 8?...You bypassed mathematics in your school studies?10. Am I wasting my time, and does anyone remember me? Nope, and yeah I remember you.

  6. Autumnby Peach 00Summer’s leavesFallenTurned to orange and yellowFound beneath the silver treesThe colors in a swirlThe brown and greenCoursing with the yellowAll in an autumn whirlThe sky still cradlesThe pearly clouds aboveThe sun still shinesOn the faded green pinesColder weatherO, don’t we love?The breezes flowPast the trees aboveThe leaves begin to fallRepresenting the beginningOf the beautiful season—Autumn~:~Inspiration from some recent weather I have been experiencing around me. C&C is appreciated, thanks for reading. :)

  7. Anybody remember SPIRIT's Time Capsule video? Most hilarious thing I've ever seen - not to mention the Barbie Prank. Favorite prank so far, not just because it's Barbie but because that's something I could have fun with, not just the staff. =P My main problem was the fact that members actually took it seriously. It ruined the fun, unfortunately. =/

  8. All the PM's Wort Wort Wort has ever sent me. I have no idea what he means...
    Almost any PM I receive from Phinto. He never really makes any sense and has sent weird and pointless things to me.
    Alright, I'll be honest, the incessant talk about PMs you've received from the specifically named members who have sent you PMs that are, apparently to you, weird, irritates me. What if they read this topic? They'd feel like they are just some weird person that nobody likes because they send spam messages to people. It's not my place to judge if they are strange in any way or not, but it's just wrong to name them out. Don't name names - it's not right, not polite, and certainly offensive to the members who sent the messages. There's a reason it's called a private message, implying it's between you and the member who sent it to you. [/rantover]Anyhow, I can't recall any PM that's weird that's been sent to me, although any that have referred to my signature confuse me.
  9. Thanks, Taka! =D Indeed, dancing does mean a lot to me, despite the short amount of time I've actually done it - the reason why I wrote this. I really wanted to get that feeling into the words of the story, and it's good to know that message got across.Thanks again for the comments, Taka, I'm happy you enjoyed it. =)

  10. I think I remember that part, i saw it when I was playing one of the MGS games with my cousin a whole back. Those games have a lot of really funny things to do in them. =PAnd the award for best use of a banana in a video game goes to Kingdom Hearts: 358/2 Days. You can get a massive banana as a weapon, and what's more fun than smashing enemies with a massive banana?
    Lol, yeah. MGS4 had some interesting things as well, specifically the barrels and crates, but I think those were in all the games to hide in. But I did notice that, should you skip all the gameplay, it's basically just a large movie, considering the cut scenes are about 30 to 40 minutes in length.And whoa, a massive banana to smash people with? xD Wow...I mean, I thought using a banana to stick up people or even a carrot that launched bullets in the Bugs Bunny cartoons was insane, but that's just crazy.
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