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That is actually pretty cool! And HUUUGE! I hope it doesn't break when you pick it up...

Oh, memories... Crying face. I loved LEGO Universe as well. I still remember my Space Marauder during Beta...Whatever. Let's get serious again. Well, nice job here. Though the in-game sword was more detailed, this one is still a great thing. I however have the same fear Phovos has...I don't know how you could improve this, maybe do a thinner blade?

Hi all;Well, I'm really sad to see the lack of system-based creations. Come on people, you can build!But anyways, I've just gotten around to taking photos of a few creations, and this one I wanted to share with you; A life-size replica of Duke Exeter's sword!! :biggrin:The pictures can be found here; http://universe.lego.com/en-us/community/creationlab/displaycreation.aspx?id=a0500eea-81b4-4c72-872f-3d9d47b04e5a&memberId=3d2ad497-075f-49e4-8743-f8ade81c8f29Enjoy! Feedback and comments would be greatly appreciated!

On the third question then, did Kongu say: "Not you, most definitely. I have plans of my own."? Did he make the multi-traited mech?That could have been more clear.

Yep, he did. The mech was a combination of all of their strengths; he's pretty much giving them a taste of their own medicine.Yeah, it definitely could have been. Sorry for the unclear parts.

Then this

Luckily, Stratere saw this coming. She gave Minara and Insetus the secret order, and they leapt. In an instant, Kongu was bound and sitting on the ground. "Who’s the mighty one now, Kongu?" Stratere said, with a smirk. "Not you, most definitely. I have plans of my own." He said, raising his hand, as a huge, whirling mass began to form.

could be better as

Luckily, Stratere saw this coming. She gave Minara and Insetus the secret order, and they leapt. In an instant, Kongu was bound and sitting on the ground. "Who’s the mighty one now, Kongu?" Stratere said, with a smirk."Not you, most definitely. I have plans of my own." he said, raising his hand, as a huge, whirling mass began to form.

The paragraphing makes it clear that Stratere isn't saying that line and raising his hand. It is a fairly good guess that "he" is Kongu, because you have established that her and Kongu are interacting.Just try to keep in mind that you need a new paragraph every time you switch paragraphs, and you should avoid this problem in future stories.

On the third question then, did Kongu say: "Not you, most definitely. I have plans of my own."? Did he make the multi-traited mech?That could have been more clear.

This story appears to be somewhat scattered...you seem to have started with a good idea and got bogged in the details...

But a fourth appeared and spoke, "Well, what might you all be doing here?"

Is this Kongu? It would appear to be, but I'm not certain and it could really be more clear (Seeing as Kongu appears later in the story...).

The three Explorers looked back, and there was Kongu. He casually strolled towards them, and picked up a rock. Admiring it, he said to them, "Do you see this? I'd love to have these back on my home planet. I can just use this imagination to bring it all home, and sculpt the planet to my wishes." "What are you doing here, Kongu? You shouldn't be alive." Stratere said, in a cold tone. "Oh that? Does it look like I'm dead?" laughed Kongu. Luckily, Stratere saw this coming. She gave Minara and Insetus the secret order, and they leapt. In an instant, Kongu was bound and sitting on the ground. "Who's the mighty one now, Kongu?" Stratere said, with a smirk. "Not you, most definitely. I have plans of my own." He said, raising his hand, as a huge, whirling mass began to form. The three Explorers stepped back in horror; it was turning into a mech, one with all of their traits. A huge power crystal lay in the back, massive turrets on each shoulder, and an artificial strategist mind in the pilot area. The three knew what he was doing; he was using the imagination! They quickly grabbed Kongu and ran, tearing out of the clearing that the mech had created. Shots were ripping the ground behind them, and trees toppled. The Explorers ran for their lives, and finally reached a clearing. They dropped Kongu and circled back to the imagination. The mech was nowhere in sight…

Every time you switch the person who is speaking, you need a new paragraph. Should be like this:

The three Explorers looked back, and there was Kongu. He casually strolled towards them, and picked up a rock. Admiring it, he said to them, "Do you see this? I'd love to have these back on my home planet. I can just use this imagination to bring it all home, and sculpt the planet to my wishes.""What are you doing here, Kongu? You shouldn't be alive." Stratere said, in a cold tone."Oh that? Does it look like I'm dead?" laughed Kongu.Luckily, Stratere saw this coming. She gave Minara and Insetus the secret order, and they leapt. In an instant, Kongu was bound and sitting on the ground. "Who's the mighty one now, Kongu?" Stratere said, with a smirk. "Not you, most definitely. I have plans of my own." He said, raising his hand, as a huge, whirling mass began to form.The three Explorers stepped back in horror; it was turning into a mech, one with all of their traits. A huge power crystal lay in the back, massive turrets on each shoulder, and an artificial strategist mind in the pilot area. The three knew what he was doing; he was using the imagination! They quickly grabbed Kongu and ran, tearing out of the clearing that the mech had created. Shots were ripping the ground behind them, and trees toppled. The Explorers ran for their lives, and finally reached a clearing. They dropped Kongu and circled back to the imagination. The mech was nowhere in sight…

I'm assuming "He" is Stratere. Although you identified him as "She" earlier...might want to fix that. (This is especially why you need the paragraphing as it will leave the reader less confused.)Also, not sure why I need the backstory in the middle, as it doesn't serve much purpose unless you want to do something more with this. Do you really need to identify the fourth explorer as Kongu? I think it would have been slightly better if you had transitioned straight from "Well, what might you all be doing here?" to the scene I just quoted above. A little more mysterious.And why do the other "Explorers" get on the ship with Kongu if they are his enemies? That could be better explained.You started with a good idea, just need to work on it a bit more.

I wrote this as a story set in the future of LEGO Universe's plot line. First time I've tried to write something like this, so any comments/feedback would be greatly appreciated! The names were all random, so don't even ask where they came from XD. Except Kongu, that's pretty obvious! The three Explorers finally arrived at the ravine. Down below, they could see the quintessence of the untapped Imagination. Bluish in glow, it mystified them all. It was possible to create anything in it; the possibilities were endless! Cities sprawling with turrets and cloaked stealth ships, is what the first imagined. The second imagined a huge underground machine, one that could sustain them till the end of time. The last imagined an army, one unparalleled to any that they had ever seen. One to bring peace to the galaxy… Or so they thought. But a fourth appeared and spoke, “Well, what might you all be doing here?” Insetus, the first Explorer, was from the huge city of Insectropolis, located in deep space. He was an Insectoid, and not fully aware of why war wasn’t good. Often, he made weapons of mass destruction, and enough ships to capture enemy cities. It was normal for Insectoids to do this, however, so no one saw it as unusual. But strange things arose on the first few days of the new year. A shady looking Citizen had come up to him and asked about the Nex Nebula. One had only heard stories of it, so unimaginably important it seemed like fairy tales. The Nebula was said to hold a planet, known as Nex, that contained a huge deposit of Imagination. Imagination powered everything, everywhere. If one could use this energy, Insetus thought, they could be infinitely powerful and rule over all. But this is not what it was made for. The stories had told of what wonders it could do; bring peace to them once and forever. His nature told him otherwise, so he decided he would use it to bring down all of the other warring factions, and take the rest of the factions over after. The Citizen, whose name was Kongu, said he was leading an expedition to find it, and asked if Insetus was interested. Instantly, he signed up and prepared his belongings. The second Explorer, Minara, was living in the mines of Crux when he was approached by Kongu. He had been mining the precious ores from the planet’s chunks when a spaceship landed near him. This surprised him, as no one was scheduled to come that day. The miners had a weekly chart telling them when the minerals were due and when others would arrive, and this was not listed. Minara had to go, because the others were too scared. He, on the other hand, was more curious then scared. So he ran to the ship and saw Kongu approach, and was greeted politely. Kongu then asked if he’d like to come on an expedition to the fabled Nex Nebula. Certainly, he answered, and Kongu told him to pack his bags to get ready. Minara brought nothing with him, because this trip would either lead to his death or his greatest success. The third and final Explorer, Stratere, was born in the Fright Knights colony of Oakwood. She had been the best military strategist they had; stealth attacks that led to worldly powers falling, she certainly proved herself. Her military record was 250:0, and the enemies she had surrendered in fear before she even spoke their name. The Fright Knights had gained more power than ever under her guidance, and she grew incredibly prosperous. She saw no need of the money, and gave it to the poor and neglected in her cities and colonies. Kongu had approached her as a businessman in the streets of Battania, the newest colony they had. He told her about the kind of military strategist that they’d need to capture the Nex Nebula, and she signed up. She brought only what she needed, and left with Kongu. Once all of the Explorers and Kongu were on the ship, they departed to find the traces of the Nex Nebula. While on the journey, many of them conversed about their pasts. Minara spoke of the great Maelstrom wars that once raged on Crux, but had subsided after a wave of recent retaliations from the Nexus Force. Stratere spoke of how she once planned a strike that, in the first five minutes of it being started, had the leader tied to a chair and a captured capital city. Insetus spoke of the many wonderful machines and inventions they had made, innovating their armies and inflicting more pain. Kongu, however, was silent for the trip, but you could often tell he was lost in thoughts. Kongu had been thinking about his past, one that was scarred and ruined. Insetus’ weapons had killed all he knew, combined with Stratere’s planning, and Minara’s crystals that powered the vehicles and their artillery. All three had gotten everything he held precious in the world to disappear. He would show them, once and for all, who held the power. His deep thinking had paid off; a plan formed in his mind…. The three Explorers looked back, and there was Kongu. He casually strolled towards them, and picked up a rock. Admiring it, he said to them, “Do you see this? I’d love to have these back on my home planet. I can just use this imagination to bring it all home, and sculpt the planet to my wishes.” “What are you doing here, Kongu? You shouldn’t be alive.” Stratere said, in a cold tone. “Oh that? Does it look like I’m dead?” laughed Kongu. Luckily, Stratere saw this coming. She gave Minara and Insetus the secret order, and they leapt. In an instant, Kongu was bound and sitting on the ground. “Who’s the mighty one now, Kongu?” Stratere said, with a smirk. “Not you, most definitely. I have plans of my own.” He said, raising his hand, as a huge, whirling mass began to form. The three Explorers stepped back in horror; it was turning into a mech, one with all of their traits. A huge power crystal lay in the back, massive turrets on each shoulder, and an artificial strategist mind in the pilot area. The three knew what he was doing; he was using the imagination! They quickly grabbed Kongu and ran, tearing out of the clearing that the mech had created. Shots were ripping the ground behind them, and trees toppled. The Explorers ran for their lives, and finally reached a clearing. They dropped Kongu and circled back to the imagination. The mech was nowhere in sight… Kongu was laying in the field, trying to get free, but his efforts were in vain. The bonds were too tight for him to break. Just as he thought it was all over, the mech appeared. It got ready to fire, and Kongu had closed his eyes, so he would not watch himself die, but then, seconds past, and he wasn’t dead. He opened his eyes to check, and the mech was instead just staring at him. “Awaiting orders, Kongu.” Said the mech, in a metallic voice. Kongu smiled. He liked this mech, and it was starting to fascinate him at all the other possibilities that are out there… The Explorers reached the ravine where the imagination was. It was a long fall if one were to jump down, so they instead looked for other possible alternatives. Finally Minara spotted rocks that could be used as a path, and they scaled the rock wall until they were finally at the base of the imagination core. The soft patter of rain began, and there was barely any light hitting the bottom of the ravine. A storm was approaching, signaling a greater darkness. One could relate this to the incident that happened many, many years ago on planet Crux….

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Oh, it's so beautiful! Congrats and job well done :)Also; XD

Oh, thank you so much! You have no idea how much I've poured my heart and soul into creating this game for the past two day- uh, years!

Oh, it's so beautiful! Congrats and job well done :)Also; XD

This is nicely done! I like the design of the head and legs. I also really like how well the silver and red goes. My only complaint is that those blade things at the top of the legs look a bit out of place but other than that, great job on this!

This is pretty cool. I really like how the hands/blasters are designed and the legs are great. My only complaint is that those Bohrok leg pieces on the legs don't look good if they just stick out like that. Maybe there could be a few more pieces attached to them. Other than that, nice job on this!

Even though it's annoying to find tampered packages, let alone to buy one by mistake, I always feel lucky when I find some LEGO pieces on the floor of a store.

That looks awesome! Best part is one of the stores is opening near me, so that means I can go and get one for myself!

It would be cool to have a building function in the game, like LEGO Universe's building functions.

You had to wait 1 hour to upgrade your gun?! wow!-The Bane

Well, I recently contacted Customer Support [As my codes did not work when entered] and they sent me new codes!! It's pretty awesome now, except the fact that it will take 1 hour to upgrade my gun lol.

I got an email back from lego. It said to restart my lego account (log off, log on) and it would work, unfortunately, I don't have the time to try it. If anyone is having problems, try that and tell me how it goes.-The BaneP.S. Bio-Media project has a cheat for game points, go see them for game points

@nealy: yes, I sent a message too,and I'm still waiting for an answer. Something tells me that you and I are not the first, thought. Just a small request: for all ot you with a working game, can you tell me what internet browser and windows program(Google chrome, etc.) you use? any help for me and the rest of those who error in the game is welcome.-The Bane!Edit: wow, this is a hot topic! wasn't expecting that on my second topic

I beat the level for Rocka, Surge, Furno, and Evo. Wicked fun, just entering the codes doesn't work for me. it says to contact LEGO Consumer Support. Sent an email, will post what I get back if anyone needs it.

I played and beat the first level, but then it froze and deleted my progress. Now to try again...

I'm currently working to record all the main missions of LEGO Universe, as well as all the flags, binoculars, bricks, etc, in 720p video with Fraps before the end of the game. I then plan to upload it to a certain site, so if this works out we should have most, if not all, of the game documented. Only Crux Prime, Ninjago, The Battle of Nimbus Station, and the WBL worlds left, as well as some assorted missions in Forbidden Valley and Gnarled Forest. Everything else is recorded! I should be able to have this done easily by January 31. I've had some issues with running out of hard drive space (I tend to record about 70 GB of video in a single session), so I've been compressing the videos as I go (don't worry, I'm not loosing any quality in the process). I should hopefully be able to get an external hard drive soon, too, so that will help.

It's strange that I didn't get my beta test achievement, and I was a beta tester too

I figure I'll ask this quick. If anyone has a Game Card they aren't going to use, could you send the code to me via PM? There aren't any cards at the local Walmart and I wanted to play the full game in the final months. If nobody has any, that's cool. So ends my journey in LEGO Universe. I wish it had definitely lasted longer then it did.