Here's what I thought as I read the latest chapter:Ooh, weapons, I hope I get something snazzy or awesome.Ooh, snazzy katana is snazzy and awesome.Ooh, ominous followy person is ominous.Oh snap, Vance is still alive.Ohsnap, Vance now has a personal vendetta against me.Ohsnap, Vance got stronger.O.O!CLIFFHANGER!!!!All in all, not a bad chapter. Again. I reccomend pre reading your chapters out loud, to make them sound more natural, but a new tip would be to describe things more. I'm sure you have an epic picture in your head of all of these events taking place with all rots of amazing details, but if you don't describe it to us, we don't get to see it in its full potential. Describe things like the sun glinting off of Vance's armor as he stepped out of the alley. Tell us exactly how the black market looked and smelled, and what the weapons dealer looked like. Do that and I can garuntee that your writing will improve tenfold.