Timelady Gallade

Alright, I'm afraid this epic is of utmost unprofessional quality. But that can easily be fixed. First of all, the chapter is extremely, extremely being emphasized, short. This really needs to be fixed. I'm not asking for a huge chapter that takes quite a bit of time to read, but at least a page's worth would suffice. It's important that you both interest your readers and give them descriptive paragraphs, as well as giving them a lot more detail and information per chapter than a paragraph's worth.Secondly, the grammar is--I apologize if this sounds harsh--atrocious. There is a lot of room for improvement in this area; a lot. But it will all come with time and experience. Here are some grammatical suggestions:

1. Gali was practicing her axe-throwing in the Keongtu jungle she had just calculated the angle she needed and she throwed when suddenly, a shadow toa jumped up to attack her when suddenly the axes hit her arms.2. 'Eeoow! Wat-da tht fro?' she screamed. The shadow toa talked in slang.3. Gali ran up to her because even though she was a shadow toa.4. She quickly calmed down the shadow toa.5. 'Tell me your name,Shadow toa.' Gali asked. 'No.Free me and i shall tell you.'

1. A: The first part of the sentence should be as follows: Gali was practicing her axe-throwing in the Keongtu jungle. A period is needed here; otherwise, the clause would be considered a run-on sentence.B: The second part of the sentence should be: She calculated the angle required to hit her target and threw the axe. There is no need to say "She had just" in this sentence. There seems to be a bit of a verb case issue because of this. Also, "Throwed" is technically not a word, and even if it were, the correct form to use in past tense would be "Threw". I also added "required to hit her target" because "the angle she needed" sounds a bit vague, in my opinion.C: The third part should be: But suddenly a Shadow Toa jumped up, attempted to attack her, but failed when Gali's axe hit her arm. This sentence also suffers from some verb tense issues. "Jumped up to attack her" and "the axes hit her arm" are inconsistent with each other. The first clause is in the past tense, and the latter in present tense. I easily fixed the tenses though so you could see the difference. I also cancelled out the second use of "Suddenly" because it's very repetitive to use the same word twice in a sentence, or even a paragraph. Checking for synonyms of specific words in a thesaurus can sometimes be helpful. This also makes a sentence more interesting.2. This should be: "Eeoww! What-da heck was that for?" the Shadow Toa screamed in slang. First off, when writing direct quotations, you have to use Quotation marks (") rather than Single Quotation marks ('), also known as apostrophes. Secondly, the slang that the Shadow Toa used made little sense and was in horrible grammar. I edited that to something more plausible. Lastly, there is no need to have to separate sentences saying "she screamed" and "she said this in slang". It's much easier, and more efficient, to just join the two clauses together like I wrote it.3. I'm not quite sure what you meant by this, but I'm pretty sure this is what you intended to write: Gali ran up to her even though she was a Shadow Toa.4. To be honest, this sentence isn't really necessary. I would just leave it out. It really doesn't add that much detail to the paragraph.5. This should be: "Tell me your name, Shadow Toa," Gali commanded. "Not unless you free me!" replied the Shadow Toa. Again, incorrect usage of single quotation marks. I would say "Gali commanded" rather than "Gali asked" as she is not really asking the Shadow Toa her name, but, instead, commanding her to. I would also say "Not unless you free me!" rather than "No, free me and I shall tell you." Overall, it just works better and it sounds pretty good. I also added in "replied the Shadow Toa" after the quotation so that the reader acknowledges that the Shadow Toa is speaking.I don't really understand the plot or what you're going to be doing in this epic, for that matter. But all in all, you did a pretty good job for your, I'm assuming, first epic chapter. You have a lot of potential, and also a lot a work to do. But with help, I can see you getting pretty good. Good job and keep up the good work! -Rez

Ye tilyt says ye all! The only one i noctied was that in the Mzeka review, the moderator forgot to put the final inka pad on for the seat! *Giggle*

the one in MNOG with the birds getting ready to fight the nui-rama!

I've found quite a few Hero Factory bootlegs-are these okay here? (Ignore the watermarks.)Here's a bootleg Bulk and VaporBreezStormerFire VillainsGreshSkrallFurnoVon Nebula1.0 series line-up1.0 boxes sideWitch Doctor

Good point. But would love a teal kaukau! that would be preety.

My theory about the OP's are that they are actually MISPRINTS! I edit this post when im home from skool. (###### school....)

Unfortunately, I will be surprised if this film doesn't land on the list of "worst movies ever." Sorry, LEGO, this just doesn't sound profitable - in fact, it sounds terrible.I really hope the movie's at least half-decent, as it'd be a shame for LEGO to have invested so much in one thing and have it flop.

This is Lego, any of their movies are bound to be less-than-decent.

Makes me wonder how they got ahold of the molds? Unless they made their own from the actual sets?

I think they broke into one of the factories and stole em!

Unlikely. I think the people at Billund are pretty good at security, and if there was a Lego mold heist, we would probably hear about it, and we haven't.

Hindu.I think its becuz there prohpet os Nana Guru. Or something like that. No offence.

Makes me wonder how they got ahold of the molds? Unless they made their own from the actual sets?

How do you make signatures? It needs to be super clear. K?

Thnx. Heres chapter 1. : Chapter one: Identity the Toa.'I'll only free you if you agree one thing. You let me scream as loud as I can so you can be cured both ways. Cured of Shadow and have your arms healed. Deal?' Gali said. 'FINE. Go ahead.'

Nope.TPBM has a colletion of promotionals.

Lhikan. 'Nuff said.

That pool of EP would curse anyone who touched it to sing Gangham style!

I recall seeing some Knight's Kingdom bootlegs in some store a few years back - does that count?

Israphel approves this topic. I asked him. Not really. :PNow if you excuse me, I gonna watch SoI and go on Yourepeat and put on take a chance.

The title says it all.

Hmm, apparently Final Fighter was produced. A quick Google search resulted in this, and a lot of football stuff. I wonder where I can get a hold of those masks...EDIT: Actually that Brickshelf gallery posted by Sybre shows ebay links, and that same picture. I need some!!I just hope this topic doesn't turn into a big flame war like the last one.And I do kind of like those Bohrok, those pieces would be awesome in those colors.

Hey, anyone seen these bad ripoffs? They may be called "Max Warrior" on the packaging, but these are clear bootlegs of the BIONICLE 2005 Titans which spinner-launching action just like the originals!Also, this video on Vimeo reveals bootlegged versions of Kazi and a black Fikou.And, Garnira, I see your space soldier pics and I give you this review of a Space Soldier (I can't believe that Darth Vader head is real. Apparently, the heads are very tiny.) and this other one.Someone on Brickshelf named Brickor also revealed a few bootlegs including a boxed full-green Kongu Inika.Also, the "Max Warriors" return here. Apparently, the MWs were bootlegged as well!Last of all, JINZONINGEN73 from Brickshelf reveals Asian bootlegs here.How do you like me now?

Do the laungers work on real ones?

Hordika and Visorak were AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!

So this is the Daniel Yount topic! The spot to talk about his songs! Well music really... So uhhh yeah. PS: Im listening to Dwarfen Halls.

Hey, anyone seen these bad ripoffs? They may be called "Max Warrior" on the packaging, but these are clear bootlegs of the BIONICLE 2005 Titans which spinner-launching action just like the originals!Also, this video on Vimeo reveals bootlegged versions of Kazi and a black Fikou.And, Garnira, I see your space soldier pics and I give you this review of a Space Soldier (I can't believe that Darth Vader head is real. Apparently, the heads are very tiny.) and this other one.Someone on Brickshelf named Brickor also revealed a few bootlegs including a boxed full-green Kongu Inika.Also, the "Max Warriors" return here. Apparently, the MWs were bootlegged as well!Last of all, JINZONINGEN73 from Brickshelf reveals Asian bootlegs here.How do you like me now?

Gali was practicing her axe-throwing in the Keongtu jungle she had just calculated the angle she needed and she throwed when suddenly, a shadow toa jumped up to attack her when suddenly the axes hit her arms. 'Eeoow! Wat-da tht fro?' she screamed. The shadow toa talked in slang. Gali ran up to her because even though she was a shadow toa. She quickly calmed down the shadow toa. 'Tell me your name,Shadow toa.' Gali asked. 'No.Free me and i shall tell you.'Review Topic

Wilsontech1. Hes funny.

And one of my sliver bohrok feet is about to brake to.