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Hey, everybody. last week I posted the final chapters of my epic, Dimension Hoppers, and its supplemental story, The Other Tale. Not too many people have commented on them so far, but today I am posting a "What Could Have Been" blog entry, detailing old ideas that I was originally going to use in DiH or TOT but for various reasons that will be stated below did not. WARNING: MAJOR SPOILERS for Dimension Hoppers and The Other Tale. I recommend you first read those epics BEFORE you read this, unless you don't mind having major plot points completely and irrevocably spoiled for you. So anyway, let's go onto the first "What Could Have Been": -Kiriah was actually a later addition to DiH, despite her importance in the story. Isarot was supposed to be the only main character. However, I felt that Isarot was a boring character by himself, so I added Kiriah into the story, which I think was one of the best choices I ever made for this fic -Speaking of Kiriah, her character was originally supposed to be very different. She would have been the sole Toa of Tanjo Nui, a loner, but a loner who secretly desired to be a member of a Toa team. She would have stayed behind on Tanjo Nui while Isarot went after the thief, but I decided it made more sense for her to be a Time Stone guardian, so she ended up coming along with Isarot -The thief was also supposed to be different. My original idea for the thief was an alternate universe version of Isarot who had stolen the Time Stone to use its powers to save his own universe. I eventually decided that Toa Darranas worked better as the thief and main antagonist, although I admit that an AU Isarot would have made the story a bit more gray -The backstory for the AU Isarot was that the Time Stone in his universe broke, which destroyed many domes within the MU, causing AU Isarot to steal the Shikaverse's Time Stone to save his universe. He and normal Isarot would have gone to the partially-destroyed Karda Nui, where they would have used the Time Stone to repair AU Isarot's universe -Other characters from the Shika Trilogy appeared in early drafts but ultimately did not make the cut. Barilo appeared in the first draft, and the second draft featured Nastan and Akuna. Icetraz also would have appeared as the warden of a prison in which Isarot was kept. So would Julok, a minor Dark Hunter who would have been a fellow prisoner with Isarot in the jail I mentioned in the last sentence. But in the end, the only character from the Shika Trilogy to make an appearance in DiH was Makuta Hajax, the main antagonist from the Shika Trilogy -Hajax's role in the first draft was different from his role in the final draft. Hajax would have been the demented overlord of the partially-destroyed Karda Nui, who would attempt to stop Isarot and AU Isarot from using the Time Stone to save the universe (don't ask me why). Hajax would have had a talking Rahkshi servant named Kavi, but as anyone who has read my epic An Unlikely Alliance knows, the name Kavi went to a Matoran character instead and no talking Rahkshi have appeared in any of my epics or short stories (yet) -The first draft was in third person. The second draft was also in third person, alternating between Isarot and Kiriah's point of views. But ultimately I believe double first person worked out, for it made DiH more unique and original, giving the reader an intimate look into both their minds -Other alternate universes that Isarot and Kiriah visited in early drafts include: -One where the Barraki still ruled (this was used in the final draft) -One where the Time Stone destroyed the universe (as mentioned above) -One where the Skrall had shadow powers -One where the Piraka never left Zakaz -One where the Agori had been killed off by poisoned water -One where the Brotherhood of Makuta, the Order of Mata Nui, and the Dark Hunters formed an alliance to create peace throughout the universe -The Barraki universe originally took place on Metru Nui (I think) and Pridak was the main Barraki featured. Isarot would have been captured by the Anicans and forced to fight Barilo in an arena, but they both managed to escape by working together. Isarot and Barilo would then have broken into Pridak's castle to retrieve the Olmak, which would have caused them to fight Pridak. Pridak would have killed Barilo, but Isarot would have killed Pridak in return and then leave that dimension -Syala originally did not appear in Dimension Hoppers. A being named Horic would have been the captain of the Anicans, but I decided to put Syala in because she appeared at the end of AUA, which gave some of my readers the impression that she would be important in DiH -The Other Tale was written because I thought the readers needed to know what Nasis was doing during DiH. I originally planned on integrating it into DiH itself, but I decided that it would be easier and quicker to simply write a new epic, for I came up with the idea of TOT after I had written DiH and I did not feel like integrating scenes from Nasis's or Raider's POV (see two paragraphs below) into DiH after I had already written it -Speaking of Nasis, I originally planned to make him an emotionless Toa who was secretly creating fake Time Stones for some evil purpose. I dropped that because it simply didn’t make any sense for Nasis's character, however interesting it may have been -The Dark Hunter Raider was supposed to be a viewpoint character in DiH, basically showing us what was going on in Tanjo Nui while Kiriah and Isarot were hunting down the Time Stone. He would have also discovered Nasis’s plot to create fake Time Stones (see above), but I never ended up using him because I couldn’t find a way to seamlessly integrate Raider’s POV with Isarot’s and Kiriah’s (although he did, of course, appear in TOT) -Toa Kicho was originally supposed to be the Toa who would go with Nasis to Stelt, but I realized it made no sense to have both the leader and deputy leader leave, for who would be left to lead the team in their absence? Hence why I chose Ahova instead -The scene where the Almighty Ones show Kiriah their past was done a bit differently. Specifically, the part where two Agori are shown mining exsidian, the dialogue was quoted word for word from All Our Sins Remembered, for that was the scene the Almighty Ones were showing Kiriah. However, I realized that was plagiarism, so I instead change all of the dialogue to my own original words. Better safe than sorry, I always say -The second draft of DiH ended with a cliffhanger as Isarot and Kiriah returned from their dimension-hopping trip to discover Tanjo Nui under attack by a new mysterious enemy, which would have lead into a sequel. I decided against this in the third draft, however, because I wanted DiH to be a standalone (not counting TOT, which is a supplement and not a sequel), for I had already done a trilogy and wanted to try out a standalone epic for once -Originally, Kiriah would have died and Isarot would have lived. But I was writing the scene from Kiriah’s POV and I really didn’t want her to just lie there thinking about how painful death is while Isarot fights Darranas. So instead I changed it to Isarot dying instead, which I think worked better in the long run than Kiriah’s death -Darranas originally wore a Mask of Shape-Shifting, rather than a Mask of Charisma. This was because I had him shape-shift into Isarot during the second draft, but then decided it didn’t really work and so gave him a Mask of Charisma instead. The Mask of Charisma fits his personality much better than the Mask of Shape-Shifting (which, I might add, is not a canon mask, either) -Isarot would have befriended a group of Tahtorak in the first draft, when he went to the dimension where the Piraka never left Zakaz. The leader of the Tahtorak was Zakaza, which is the most original and creative name in the multiverse and something that you needed to know -Originally, Isarot was the sole guardian of the Time Stone, yet for some reason the island was still mostly Matoran populated and ruled by Turaga Klio. I decided this didn’t make a lick of sense, so I added Kiriah as the Matorans’ Time Stone guardian, Kolora as the leader of the Tagiki (who shared leadership of the island with Klio), and even gave the Tagiki their own “Toa” (AKA the Chofier). This created an interesting interspecies tension that gave DiH and TOT a richer atmosphere, IMO -Speaking of the Chofier, they were a very late addition to DiH and TOT. I added them in because it simply made sense for the Tagiki to have their own heroes, just as the Matoran have the Toa. I gave them four Chofier instead of six because I didn’t want them to be exactly like the Toa Tanjo. Tajah was just supposed to be Kolora's right hand man, but I gave him the title of leader of the Chofier because the Chofier needed one and I didn't want to create an entirely new character who I would probably never really use -Tagiki would have also had the ability to use Kanohi masks; however, I felt that made them too powerful, considering they can use two elements, and so decided to take away their mask powers and make their elemental powers only half as strong as a Toa. Tagiki are still physically stronger than Toa, however, and can definitely hold their own in a fight -Bluespace energy – the important and mysterious energy in the Expanded Multiverse project - played a major role in early drafts of DiH. It would have explained why Darranas went insane (he was exposed to too much bluespace energy), how the Olmak could detect the Time Stone (they both use bluespace energy), and how Darranas gained the ability to dimension-hop without an Olmak (he would have absorbed bluespace energy). But then I realized that would put my fanfics in the same universe as the Expanded Multiverse, which I didn’t really want. Plus I wasn’t sure if bluespace energy existed 100,000 years ago, for bluespace energy is one of those mysteries that the Cipher Chronicles writers want to answer. I just felt it would be too much of a hassle to ask, so I decided against it -Toa Laomos, a member of the Toa Tanjo, would have been a Toa of Earth and a member of the Toa resistance that had arisen against the Barraki in an alternate universe. I decided he worked better as a Toa of Gravity who loved epic poetry and art instead -The Almighty Ones were a fairly late idea I introduced. They were not present in any of the earlier drafts. I added them in because I liked the idea of a group of god-like entities whose individual selves had merged into one being that still referred to itself as ‘we’. I think they're interesting, personally -In the first draft, Klio had a Ta-Matoran secretary whose name I have forgotten. This Ta-Matoran would also have been Isarot's friend, but the Ta-Matoran did not make it into the final drafts (although that doesn't necessarily mean he will never appear in any of my future stories) That's all for now. I may edit this blog entry if I can think of any other old ideas that I forgot. So see ya, -TNTOS-
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The end is finally here. As of this morning, I posted the final chapter of Dimension Hoppers and the epilogue of Dimension Hoppers: The Other Tale. Here are the last two summaries for DiH and TOT: In the final chapter of Dimension Hoppers, the time has come for Kiriah to make an important decision regarding her future. What she chooses will determine her path in the future, but it will hopefully be a wise choice. And In the epilogue of Dimension Hoppers: The Other Tale, Toa Nasis encounters Kafor, the Skakdi who had helped him earlier, who gives him a warning of the future. And now these stories are finally, truly over. Expect to see a "What Could Have Been" for DiH and TOT very soon. -TNTOS-
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First Friday of the New Year, which means it's time for another new chapter of "Dimension Hoppers," and its supplement, "The Other Tale." In "Dimension Hoppers," most of the epic's biggest mysteries are revealed in a conversation between Kiriah and the beings who started it all, ending with Kiriah making a promise that she will one day keep. And in "The Other Tale," Toa Nasis and the Chofier Tajah are recovering from their fight with the Dark Hunter Raider, which gives Nasis some time to think about the relationship between the Tanjo Nuians and the Dark Hunters. Next week will be Chapter 20 of DiH and the Epilogue of TOT, which means the end is nearly here. So see ya, -TNTOS-
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So another Friday, another DiH and TOT update: In "Dimension Hoppers," as the story draws nearer to its climax and conclusion, the thief reveals his ultimate plan to Isarot and Kiriah . . . and they may be too late to stop it. And In "The Other Tale," Toa Nasis and Chofier Tajah are attacked by Raider, who proves to be a powerful and merciless foe. Will they survive their fight against him or are they doomed to death? DiH has three chapters left, while TOT has one chapter plus the epilogue. The end is near. -TNTOS-
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As you can see, from now on I am going to be dating the entry titles whenever I post updates for my stories. This is to help distinguish the entries easier. Anyway, today is a double feature with a new chapter for both DiH and TOT, so here's the summaries: In Dimension Hoppers, Isarot and Kiriah narrowly escape the army of skeletons and finally catch up with the thief. But when the thief unleashes a dangerous new ability, will Isarot and Kiriah survive or are they doomed to die? And In The Other Tale, the Toa Tanjo and the Chofier, the heroes of the Tagiki, work together to set up an ambush in the Temple of Time in order to catch the Dark Hunter that is coming. The plan begins to fall apart when the Dark Hunter ambushes Toa Nasis and Chofier Tajah, who are forced to fight for their lives from the Hunter's ferocious attack. That's all for this week. Dih has only five chapters left, while TOT has two chapters plus the epilogue. The end is near. See ya, -TNTOS-
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Today is Friday . . . which is something you really needed to know. Anyway, today I updated both DiH and TOT, so here's the summaries for the recent chapters: In "Dimension Hoppers," Ehlek's ship finally docks at World's End, where Isarot and Kiriah are forced to help the crew unload the ship. But it is only when Ehlek calls them for a secret meeting that they learn the Barraki's true plans for them. And In "Dimension Hoppers: The Other Tale," a Nui-Rama with information about the Dark Hunters finally reaches Tanjo Nui. But Toa Nasis, Ahova, and Kijaka are not prepared for the warning the Skakdi Kafor sent them, although they are determined to do something about it anyway. That's all for this week. See ya, -TNTOS-
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Just posted the first new chapters of "Dimension Hoppers" and "The Other Tale" today. So why are you reading this blog entry instead of those chapters? As there are two chapters, I will post summaries for both: In DiH, after a miraculous event, Isarot and Kiriah head deeper into the Hall of Unity to find their Olmak and the Time Stone. But will they succeed? Or will they be stuck in this universe forever? And in TOT, the Dark Hunter Vanisher reports to the Shadowed One about the theft of the Time Stone. The Shadowed One makes a decision regarding what to do about the theft and sends Vanisher away after making this decision. That's all for now. See you next week. -TNTOS-
