I was reading a member's past stories when I found this terrible piece of writing. Be warned, it is awful.

Vahki 759476 ran. He knew he couldn't outrun his attackers but he ran anyway. His gears sparked, one of his weopons was gone, and his companions melted by viles of silver liqiud thrown at them by the matoran.

The ones chasing him caught up and hit him with the viles.His body started to melt then solidify into a new form.He leaped onto the closest building and ran to the nearest repair shed.

When he got there he saw his squad leader talking to the hive captain.

''Turaga Dume says to find and destroy the Toa'' the hive captian said.

''Why?What have Toa ever done to us?''asked Vahki 759476.

The squad leader and the hive captian both look to see him clad in armor that glowed with energy.''What has happend to you?''asked the squad captain.

''whatever happened you are now deformed and must be destroyed.''said the hive captian.

''Never!''shouted the squad leader as he smashed into the hive captain.they sparked as they fought until both were destroyed and only scap parts remained.

''My squad leader sacrifised himself to save me.I must honer him by wielding his shield in battle.I am now Vahki Nuva!''he said.

Vahki Nuva ran to the coliseum.When he arrived he saw three Toa being pulled into a pit and three others under attack by Vahki.The red one shot two disks both hitting a statue of Toa Lihkan.He saw the disks would not be enough to fall the statue, so he rammed into it from behind,tumbling the statue,and sending him flying into the pit.

When he got back up he was in the tunnel to Turaga Dume's chamber.He knew it was an imposter for the real Turaga Dume would never hurt Toa.Then he saw a strange sphere,cracking it open he saw the real Turaga Dume.

Now the other Vahki had surrounded him.Weopons ready, he smashed through the other Vahki destroying them.

After an hour of so he reached Dume's chamber and smashed the door down.He saw Fake Dume floating in the air with a giant hand grabbing some figures he could not identify.Then the hand reached for the power plant,if it grabbed that it would be unstopable.He had to stop it,so he shot his disk,hitting the imposter,and solidefied him.The beast flew into the air and to the great barrier.

''As long as villans like that exist i will fight them!''he shouted.

And untill the matoran returned,he did.

Yes, I wrote that a few years ago. Anyone think I should rewrite it now that I've gotten a lot better at writing?